Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2J9XGA4V4G28N7YZXFP9FX

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2m 55s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt scraped back and Aurora pulled the door inward. Lucien Moreau leaned against the corridor wall, cane angled across his body, the dim hall light catching the ivory handle. His charcoal suit was cut with the precision of someone who considered appearance both armour and weapon. The heterochromatic eyes met hers—one amber, one black—andkept any emotion locked behind glass. "Rory." Her Her grip tightened on the doorframe. He hadn't called her that in four months. The sound of it in his French accent still landed somewhere below her ribs, uninvited. "You're9616 You're on the wrong postcode." "I assure you I'm not." A ghost of a smile touched his lips. "May I come in?" "What happened to never stepping foot in my building?" "You happened." He straightened, the cane tapping once. "Circumstances have altered." She didn't move, but her eyes tracked the minute shift of his weight. He8006 of He was05 He stood with the ease of a predator who'd already He stood with the ease of a predator who'd already calculated every exit. A curl of sandalwood reached her, something metallic underpinning it. The05 metallic underpinning it. "If05 If this is about my05 "If this is about Eva's research, you could have texted." "It's about you. And a ghost who's decided to walk back into London." He paused. "Evan." The name drained the heat from the corridor. Aurora's spine became steel. She stepped She pulled the16 the door wider and turned her back on him, walking into the flat. "Close it behind you." The flat smelled of stale tea and the curry house three doors down. A single lamp guttered on the side table, casting enough light to show the cramped kitchenette, the second-hand sofa, the stack of unopened law textbooks15 textbooks. The window vibrated with the bass from Silas' bar below. Aurora stopped at the sofa and crossed her arms. Lucien16 Lucien shut the door and leaned his cane carefully against the armchair. The wool of his sleeve whispered as he16 he unbuttoned his jacket and She watched him17 him catalogue the space. His gaze caught on something draped over the back of a kitchen chair: the hoodie he'd given her the night she'd fled Cardiff. She hadn't burned it. That mistake now sat between them like a confession. His17 His mismatched eyes18 eyes held the16 the hoodie a beat too long. Then he16 he16 he turned. "You've redecorated." "I didn't12 didn't invite you here for interior critique." "No. You invited me because hearing his name16 name made you16 you remember what it felt like to20 like to have someone watching your back." He took a step closer. "I haven't stopped watching,12 watching, for what it's worth." "That's not comforting." The flat12 flat felt smaller, the air charged. "When did he arrive?" "Three days ago. He's been staying in a12 a bedsit in12 in Peckham, using his cousin's name. He's got a new job, new friends, new12 new habits." Another step. "He also15 also has a photograph of15 of you taped to his mirror. Recent. Means15 Means he's found someone to take them." Aurora's fingers found the crescent scar on her left wrist, rubbing the pale seam. A childhood accident,15 accident, she'd told everyone. The truth sat15 sat behind her teeth: a bottle thrown in a rage, her arm thrown up in defence. She saw15 saw Lucien15 Lucien's eyes drop to the gesture. Something flared in the amber one. "I have a safe house," he said. "It's warded against human surveillance. Two bedrooms,16 bedrooms,16 bedrooms, a garden16 garden where the wards extend. You could work from there." "A cage with a view." "A view is more than you have here." "I have a16 a job. I have12 have a16 a flat above a12 a bar where16 where people12 people12 people who16 who owe me nothing12 nothing know my name. That's16 That's more than I ever had in12 in Cardiff." "Cardiff had walls you16 you could touch." He was close now, close enough12 enough that she16 she could see the faint tension cording his jaw. "This city16 city has alleys that swallow people. You know who16 who polices those alleys." A pause. "I could12 could find him. We could make16 make this go away." "We had16 had that12 that12 that conversation." "It bears repeating." "I don't want16 want repeating. I want12 want to12 to not12 not spend my life16 life running from16 from16 from bad men who16 who've decided they own me. That includes you, if you're12 you're not12 not careful." A muscle flexed in his cheek. For a heartbeat, the carefully polished surface cracked, and she glimpsed something raw beneath it. "You think16 think I'm like him." "I think you convince12 convince yourself the difference is a matter12 matter of12 of ethics. It isn't." "Tell16 Tell me the difference." "He16 "He broke things because he12 he was angry. You break16 break things because you12 you call it business." She pressed her palm against the scar, feeling the raised tissue12 tissue through her sleeve. "Either way, I'm12 I'm12 I'm the12 the one12 one who12 who bleeds." He reached out, slow enough that she could have pulled away. His fingers brushed the edge of her wrist, right over the12 the scar, and his touch was feather-light. "I never wanted you to bleed." "But you16 you did,16 did, Lucien. The night you12 you made12 made that deal in Shoreditch, when16 when you smiled at that man's desperation, I bled. I watched the16 the16 the part12 part of you12 you that can close a door on anyone, and I knew16 knew that12 that if I stayed12 stayed, you'd eventually close12 close one on me." His hand stilled. Then, instead of withdrawing, he turned her wrist over, exposing the vulnerable inside. His thumb traced the scar. "Then why did you keep the hoodie?" She had no answer that wouldn't cost her. The16 The16 The16 The silence stretched, filled16 filled only by the muffled16 muffled thrum from downstairs and the pounding of her own pulse. "I kept16 kept it because I'm an idiot," she managed. "No. You kept it because you know I would12 would burn the world12 world before I let him touch you again." His voice had dropped, lost its polished edge. "That's the part12 part you're16 you're most afraid of, isn't it? That I mean it." "Lucien..." "Let me16 me take you somewhere safe. Just for now. No12 No obligations. I'll give16 give you the16 the warding and you16 you can throw me out12 out the moment this is over." "It's never just12 just 'for now12 now' with you. You trade12 trade16 trade in favours. That's what you are." He released her wrist, but didn't step back. Instead, his hand came up to her jaw, fingertips resting just below her ear. The amber eye glinted in the16 the low light. "I'm also the man who slept on your sofa for six nights after you arrived in London because you were too terrified12 terrified to12 to close your eyes. I brought you tea. I read legal briefs out loud because the sound of my voice helped you sleep. I didn't ask for a single12 single favour in return." "You asked me to trust you." "Is that not12 not a favour?" She12 She swallowed. The heat of his palm was a distraction, as was the16 the16 the way12 way his12 his thumb brushed the corner of her mouth. "I can't," she breathed. "Not yet. Not with him here." The16 The16 The16 The16 The admission hovered, fragile. He studied her face as if memorising the lines of it. "Then I'll give you16 you something else. Something free." He leaned in, and his mouth stopped a whisper from hers. "He will not reach you. I swear it. And when you're ready—if you're ever ready—I will16 will be exactly where I've always been. Watching." He didn't kiss her. The distance was16 was a wound. A sharp knock splintered the silence. "Rory? I know you're in there, love." Welsh vowels, slurred and cruel. The16 The16 The voice she'd fled across a border. Lucien's12 Lucien's16 Lucien's heterochromatic eyes flickered to the door, then back to her. In the space of a breath, he16 he had his cane in hand, the ivory knob twisted to reveal an inch of Damascus steel. "Stand back," he murmured. But Aurora's own hand was already on the deadbolt. The girl who'd boarded a train with a black16 black eye and a16 a borrowed hoodie was no longer16 longer standing in this flat. "I'll handle it," she said. "Rory12 Rory—" "Lucien." She16 She turned the bolt with a definitive click. "You wanted to know what I want? I want to look him in the face and not flinch. And I want you to12 to see it." She pulled the door open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.377
leniency0.754
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1471
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.01% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1471
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"predator"
count2
2
word"calculated"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"comforting"
count1
5
word"charged"
count1
6
word"tension"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"pounding"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"predator"
2"calculated"
3"vibrated"
4"comforting"
5"charged"
6"tension"
7"traced"
8"silence"
9"pounding"
10"pulse"
11"whisper"
12"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences70
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences70
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1467
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount929
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.86
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Aurora5
Moreau1
French1
Lucien8
Cardiff1
Peckham1
Means2
Two1
You4
Damascus1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
3"You"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Damascus"
globalScore1
windowScore1
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like to20 like to have someone wat"
1"as if memorising the lines of it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1467
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean21.9
std16.22
cv0.741
sampleLengths
010
150
21
31
429
56
617
79
811
927
1027
116
1210
1316
1414
1520
1649
1735
1843
1920
209
2139
2215
2351
2440
2516
2628
275
288
2939
3054
317
323
3337
3421
356
3617
375
3846
3929
406
4160
4228
4331
4410
4544
461
4733
4819
4931
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences105
ratio0.01
matches
0"The heterochromatic eyes met hers—one amber, one black—andkept any emotion locked behind glass."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount740
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.031081081081081083
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0013513513513513514
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean13.97
std13
cv0.931
sampleLengths
010
120
217
313
41
57
68
715
86
913
104
119
128
133
1413
1527
1610
174
186
1910
203
2113
2234
2349
2478
2520
269
271
2838
2915
303
3114
3225
331
348
3540
3616
3712
3811
395
405
418
425
4324
4410
4533
4614
477
487
493
61.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4095238095238095
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences63
matches
0"Then, instead of withdrawing, he"
1"Instead, his hand came up"
ratio0.032
54.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences63
matches
0"His charcoal suit was cut"
1"Her Her grip tightened on"
2"He hadn't called her that"
3"He straightened, the cane tapping"
4"She didn't move, but her"
5"You invited me because hearing"
6"He's been staying in a12"
7"He's got a new job,"
8"She saw15 saw Lucien15 Lucien's"
9"You could work from"
10"I have12 have a16 a"
11"He was close now, close"
12"You know who16 who polices"
13"We could make16 make this"
14"I want12 want to12 to"
15"He reached out, slow enough"
16"His fingers brushed the edge"
17"His hand stilled."
18"His thumb traced the scar."
19"She had no answer that"
ratio0.413
15.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences63
matches
0"The deadbolt scraped back and"
1"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
2"His charcoal suit was cut"
3"The heterochromatic eyes met hers—one"
4"Her Her grip tightened on"
5"He hadn't called her that"
6"The sound of it in"
7"A ghost of a smile"
8"He straightened, the cane tapping"
9"She didn't move, but her"
10"He8006 of He was05 He"
11"A curl of sandalwood reached"
12"The05 metallic underpinning it."
13"The name drained the heat"
14"The flat smelled of stale"
15"Aurora stopped at the sofa"
16"His17 His mismatched eyes18 eyes"
17"You invited me because hearing"
18"The flat12 flat felt smaller,"
19"He's been staying in a12"
ratio0.889
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"His charcoal suit was cut with the precision of someone who considered appearance both armour and weapon."
1"I have12 have a16 a flat above a12 a bar where16 where people12 people12 people who16 who owe me nothing12 nothing know my name."
2"I want12 want to12 to not12 not spend my life16 life running from16 from16 from bad men who16 who've decided they own me."
3"He studied her face as if memorising the lines of it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He straightened, the cane tapping once"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"Welsh vowels slurred (slur)"
2"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.082
leniency0.164
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.098
85.5446%