Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2JPA5TXMS05CXPZNTXZZD2

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Duration:
1m 44s
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$0.003339
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DeepSeek

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The brass compass casing bit cold into Harlow Quinn's palm. Its needle skittered left, past the shuttered fortune-teller's stall with its faded promise of *Palm Readings & Wishes*, and fixed on the mouth of the abandoned platform. Not north. Never north. The verdigris flaked under her thumbnail as she tapped the face, but the protective sigils etched into the metal seemed to swallow the bloody glow of the emergency strips. "Crime scene's this side, ma'am." DC Wallace stood by the ticket machine, his torch beam wobbling across the body slumped beneath the defunct Departures board. Male. Thirties. One tailored shoe missing. His left arm ended in a puckered, bloodless stump. "Find me the hand," Harlow said. "Priority's the weapon." "Priority's whatever's in his palm." Wallace's jaw tightened, but he turned to search the stalls. Her eyes stayed on the wound. The cut was surgical. Clean. No sign of a struggle, no spray pattern on the grimy tiles. The victim's face held no terror, only a slack-jawed surprise. She knelt. The station's damp breath, thick with the smell of old mould and older magic, clung to her coat. Three years since she'd been down here. Three years since the Market had last shifted beneath Camden, and DS Morris had walked into a tunnel and never back out. The compass needle shivered. Still pointing west, towards the platform's edge. "Nothing." Wallace's voice came from behind a stall hung with dried roots. "No weapon, no blood trail. Someone bagged his hand and walked." "He didn't fight." Harlow rolled the victim's collar aside. No ligature marks. No bruising. "He let them." "Or he was drugged." "Doesn't account for the smile." Wallace stepped closer, his torch joining hers. The dead man's lips curled at the corners, not in a grimace but in something like relief. She'd seen that expression once before, on Morris, right before he'd vanished into the darkness with a laugh on his breath. Her watch caught the light as she checked the body's pockets. The worn leather band was tight against her wrist, a habit, a grounding weight. Inside the victim's jacket, she found a folded receipt and a broken cord. "British Museum Restricted Archives." She read the receipt under her torch. "Dated two days ago. Handled by one EK." "EK?" She pocketed the paper. The answer was already forming. Eva Kowalski. Aurora's bookish little friend with the green eyes and the nervous tuck of hair behind her left ear. Research assistant. Occult expert. The sort of person who'd know what the Veil Market sold and how to buy it. The broken cord lay in her palm, its ends cleanly severed. Braided leather. Something had been pulled from around the victim's neck with enough force to snap the weave. "A bone token," she said quietly. "Come again?" "This Market requires a token to enter. Every stall, every transaction, you flash a piece of carved bone. This man came here, walked past a dozen protection charms, and lost his hand without a sound. Then someone took his token." Wallace frowned at the darkness between the stalls. "So it's robbery." "Robbers don't stage post-mortem dismemberment with surgical precision." She stood, knees popping. "They don't leave a corpse smiling into a camera-free platform. And they don't set off Veil Compasses like a fire alarm." She pulled out the brass instrument again. The needle had swung round, pointing now at the wall behind her. It held steady, humming with a vibration she felt through the casing. "Ma'am, with respect," Wallace said slowly. "You bought that off a man who sells curse removals. It's not evidence." "Everything's evidence." Harlow walked towards the wall. Her fingers traced the tiles until they found a seam that didn't match. "This isn't a dead end. It's a hallway." "What?" "Help me push." The wall gave way with a groan. Beyond it lay a narrow corridor, its floor scattered with fresh salt and something darker that caught the light like wet ink. The smell hit her next, copper and ozone, the same scent that had clung to Morris's empty car. Wallace's torch beam flickered. "What is that?" "Blood." Harlow stepped through. The corridor bent sharply, and there, propped against the bricks like a discarded puppet, sat a second body. Female. Red hair. Green eyes that had lost their focus hours ago. A worn leather satchel lay open beside her, its contents scattered across the salt: occult texts, a receipt from Camden Market, and a small brass compass identical to Harlow's. Eva Kowalski. Wallace swore behind her. "Two bodies. This is a massacre." "No." Harlow knelt again, though her body wanted to lock, to freeze, to do anything but look at the ruin of the girl's throat. "This is a message." "How? There's no connection between a banker in a suit and a museum researcher." She touched the satchel. A book slid free, its pages marked with notations in Morris's handwriting. A book she'd last seen on his desk the night before he died. The compass in her other hand spun wildly now, the needle whipping between north, south, and somewhere else entirely. The air thickened, and somewhere in the tunnel ahead, a door clicked open. "We need to leave," Harlow said. "Wait, you can't just—" "Now." The emergency lights died. In the sudden black, she heard breathing that wasn't hers or Wallace's. The compass burned against her skin, its sigils flaring gold, and she understood finally what Morris had understood three years ago. The Market wasn't just a place. It was a thing that fed. And it had just finished its latest course. Wallace's hand found her shoulder. "Quinn—" "Run." The tunnel roared.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Wallace said slowly [slowly]"
2"Harlow knelt again [again]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.306
leniency0.611
rawRatio0.273
effectiveRatio0.167
89.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount941
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount941
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"weight"
2"traced"
3"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords4
totalWords941
ratio0.004
matches
0"Palm Readings & Wishes"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.16% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount737
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.36
worstName"Wallace"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow8
Quinn1
Readings1
Wallace10
Departures1
Market4
Camden2
Morris5
Kowalski2
Veil1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Wallace"
3"Market"
4"Morris"
5"Kowalski"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore0.822
windowScore1
96.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like relief"
93.73% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.063
wordCount941
matches
0"not in a grimace but in something like relief"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"seen that expression"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean20.91
std19.05
cv0.911
sampleLengths
070
15
235
36
43
55
643
749
811
923
1017
114
125
1345
1438
1519
161
1749
1829
196
202
2140
2211
2333
2431
2519
2628
271
283
2947
307
3163
322
3310
3428
3514
3629
3732
386
394
401
4157
426
431
443
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"been pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs122
matches
0"was already forming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences105
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount739
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay open beside her,"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.028416779431664412
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.010825439783491205
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean8.96
std7.46
cv0.833
sampleLengths
010
127
22
32
429
55
620
71
81
94
109
116
123
135
1410
156
164
171
1812
1910
202
2118
227
2322
244
257
2612
2711
289
293
302
313
324
335
347
3517
3621
3711
3814
3913
4011
418
421
434
445
452
4618
472
482
4916
86.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
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totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners59
52.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"Still pointing west, towards the"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences64
matches
0"Its needle skittered left, past"
1"His left arm ended in"
2"Her eyes stayed on the"
3"She'd seen that expression once"
4"Her watch caught the light"
5"She read the receipt under"
6"She pocketed the paper."
7"she said quietly"
8"She stood, knees popping"
9"She pulled out the brass"
10"It held steady, humming with"
11"Her fingers traced the tiles"
12"She touched the satchel."
13"It was a thing that"
ratio0.219
45.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences64
matches
0"The brass compass casing bit"
1"Its needle skittered left, past"
2"The verdigris flaked under her"
3"DC Wallace stood by the"
4"His left arm ended in"
5"Wallace's jaw tightened, but he"
6"Her eyes stayed on the"
7"The cut was surgical."
8"The victim's face held no"
9"The station's damp breath, thick"
10"The compass needle shivered."
11"Wallace's voice came from behind"
12"Harlow rolled the victim's collar"
13"Wallace stepped closer, his torch"
14"The dead man's lips curled"
15"She'd seen that expression once"
16"Her watch caught the light"
17"The worn leather band was"
18"She read the receipt under"
19"She pocketed the paper."
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Beyond it lay a narrow corridor, its floor scattered with fresh salt and something darker that caught the light like wet ink."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She stood, knees popping"
1"Harlow knelt again, though her body wanted to lock, to freeze, to do anything but look at the ruin of the girl's throat"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.2415%