Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2JW5JCNBPM974SG6TGT20R

Run Details

Model:: DeepSeek V4 Pro
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 1m 18s
Cost:: $0.010153
Provider:: Together

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
90.91%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
50.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
39.20%	Name drop frequency	(details)
100.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
46.15%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
83.33%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
52.91%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
23.49%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
79.37%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
53.57%	Technical jargon density	(details)
97.22%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
76.83%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
83.0994%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

Aurora pressed through the last tangle of bramble and froze.

The air on the other side tasted of honey and ozone. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing in defiance of winter—bluebells and foxgloves and things she had no name for, their petals shimmering with a faint inner light. Ancient oaks formed a ring around the space, their bark silvered and carved with spiraling patterns that hurt to look at too long.

"Bloody hell," Eva whispered at her shoulder.

Nyx materialized from the shadow of the nearest standing stone, their violet eyes tracking across the grove. "The Veil is thin here. Thinner than anywhere I've felt in centuries."

Aurora's pendant pulsed against her collarbone. Warm. Insistent.

Isolde had told them to come at dusk. *When the light bleeds and the stones remember*, she'd said, which was typical Isolde—cryptic to the point of uselessness until you were standing in it. The sky above the clearing didn't match the grey January gloom they'd left behind in Richmond Park. Here, it hung in a state of perpetual amber twilight, streaked with ribbons of lavender and rose.

"Time's already gone strange," Eva said, checking her watch. The digital display flickered between 4:47 PM and nonsense symbols. "We've been walking for twenty minutes. Should be half four. This says—" She turned the wrist toward Aurora. "Actually, I don't know what it says."

Aurora stepped deeper into the grove. The wildflowers swayed toward her like they were breathing. Like they recognized her.

"The standing stones mark the boundary," she said, recalling Isolde's instructions. "We don't cross them. Whatever happens, we stay inside the ring."

"No arguments here," Eva muttered.

The grass beneath their feet left no impression. Aurora noticed it first—Eva's boots should have flattened the clover, her own trainers should have left treadmarks in the soft earth. Nothing. The ground sprang back untouched, as though they weighed nothing at all.

"Nyx." She kept her voice low. "Are we    here? Physically?"

The shade drifted beside her, their form oscillating between solid and smoke. "Define *here*." A pause. "You are. The grove exists in a pocket. A fold between Earth and the Fae realm proper. Your bodies are as real as they were in the park. It is the space around you that is... provisional."

"That's not reassuring."

"It was not meant to be."

They moved deeper. Aurora catalogued the sensations—the way sound fell differently, each footstep swallowed before it could echo. The scent, which shifted as they walked: first honey and lightning, then wet stone, then something floral and unfamiliar that made the back of her throat ache. The temperature never changed, a perfect coolness that raised goosebumps but never became uncomfortable.

Eva stopped beside a cluster of mushrooms arranged in a perfect circle. Their caps gleamed like polished obsidian. "Fairy ring. Don't step in it."

"Didn't plan to."

"Just saying. Gran used to tell stories. Step in a fairy ring, dance until your feet bleed, wake up a hundred years later."

Aurora crouched to examine the mushrooms. They were cold. Not the cold of shade or winter—the cold of something that had never known warmth. A thin mist coiled around their stems, moving against the nonexistent breeze.

"The Fae don't like iron," she said, half-remembering something from a book her mother read her as a child. "Or gifts freely given. Or saying thank you."

"Or questions," Nyx added. They had stopped near one of the standing stones, their form flickering with something Aurora had learned to read as unease. "Be careful what you ask here. The wrong question can be a binding contract."

The center of the grove opened into a small pond.

Aurora nearly walked past it before she registered what was wrong. The water was perfectly still—no wind to ripple the surface, no insects skimming across—but it wasn't reflecting the sky. The amber twilight above should have painted the pond gold and rose. Instead, the water showed a field of stars, bright and unfamiliar, scattered across a blackness so deep it felt like falling.

"That's not our sky," Eva said.

The pendant burned. Aurora pressed her palm against it through her jacket, and the heat subsided to a steady warmth, like a heartbeat held against her skin.

"Look." Nyx pointed with a tendril of shadow.

On the far side of the pond, a figure sat cross-legged on a flat stone. Silver hair pooled around her like spilled moonlight.

Isolde's pale lavender eyes opened.

"You're late," she said. "Or early. Time being what it is here, I suppose both are true."

Aurora circled the pond, careful to keep her distance from the water's edge. The stars in its depths wheeled slowly, and she did not want to know what happened if she fell in. "You said dusk. It's been dusk since we arrived."

"Is it?" Isolde tilted her head. Her movements carried an odd quality—too smooth, like watching a film with frames removed. "How long have you been walking?"

"Twenty minutes," Eva said.

"Outside these stones, three hours have passed. Your friend with the shadow-soul might not notice, but you—" She fixed her gaze on Aurora. "You are still mortal enough to feel it. The pull. The hunger. The thirst you cannot quite name."

Now that she mentioned it, Aurora's throat did feel dry. Her stomach hollow. She hadn't eaten since breakfast, but that was hours ago. Wasn't it?

"Why did you bring us here?" Aurora asked.

Isolde smiled. The expression rearranged her features into something almost human, almost warm. "Because you asked for answers. Because the pendant you wear was forged in Dymas and you do not know what that means. Because the blade I gave you thirsts, and she will need to learn what it thirsts for before the solstice."

"The winter solstice already passed."

"Yes." Isolde rose. Her bare feet left no prints in the clover. "And the Veil should have strengthened. Should have sealed. Should have kept the rift points closed and the demons in their proper sphere." She drifted toward the nearest standing stone, her fingers brushing the carved spirals. "But it didn't. Someone is keeping the wounds open. Someone who knows the old ways."

Aurora felt the grove shift around them. The wildflowers turned their heads. The mushroom ring breathed. The pond's reflected stars spun faster.

"You've seen this," Aurora said. "In your visions."

Isolde's hand stilled on the stone. "I see many things. Most of them I cannot speak plainly—the compulsion forbids it. But I can show you." She turned, and her eyes glowed. "If you are brave enough to look."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	18
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	41
tagDensity	0.439
leniency	0.878
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

90.91%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1100

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

highlights

0	"perfectly"
1	"slowly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

50.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1100

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"gloom"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"echo"
count	1

word	"perfect"
count	2

word	"dance"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"depths"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulsed"
1	"gloom"
2	"flickered"
3	"echo"
4	"perfect"
5	"dance"
6	"warmth"
7	"depths"
8	"stomach"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	77
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"watch"

hedgeMatches

(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	98
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	42
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

1091

ratio

0.008

matches

0	"When the light bleeds and the stones remember"
1	"here"

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	19
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

39.20%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

722

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

2.22

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Nyx	3
Isolde	8
January	1
Richmond	1
Park	1
Aurora	16
Eva	7

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Aurora"
3	"Eva"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"

globalScore

0.392

windowScore

0.667

100.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"felt like falling"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1091
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	98
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

25.98

std

19.47

0.75

sampleLengths

0	10
1	59
2	7
3	29
4	8
5	67
6	44
7	19
8	22
9	5
10	42
11	10
12	53
13	3
14	6
15	59
16	24
17	3
18	23
19	36
20	27
21	39
22	10
23	63
24	6
25	27
26	8
27	23
28	5
29	17
30	42
31	26
32	4
33	41
34	25
35	8
36	55
37	5
38	63
39	22
40	8
41	38

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	77
matches	(empty)

46.15%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

130

matches

0	"were standing"
1	"were breathing"
2	"wasn't reflecting"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.071

matches

0	"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing in defiance of winter—bluebells and foxgloves and things she had no name for, their petals shimmering with a faint inner light."
1	"When the light bleeds and the stones remember, she'd said, which was typical Isolde—cryptic to the point of uselessness until you were standing in it."
2	"Aurora noticed it first—Eva's boots should have flattened the clover, her own trainers should have left treadmarks in the soft earth."
3	"Aurora catalogued the sensations—the way sound fell differently, each footstep swallowed before it could echo."
4	"Not the cold of shade or winter—the cold of something that had never known warmth."
5	"The water was perfectly still—no wind to ripple the surface, no insects skimming across—but it wasn't reflecting the sky."
6	"Her movements carried an odd quality—too smooth, like watching a film with frames removed."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	732
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	17
adverbRatio	0.023224043715846996
lyAdverbCount	4
lyAdverbRatio	0.00546448087431694

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	98
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.13

std

8.12

0.729

sampleLengths

0	10
1	11
2	25
3	23
4	7
5	17
6	12
7	6
8	1
9	1
10	8
11	25
12	17
13	17
14	9
15	10
16	18
17	7
18	6
19	9
20	4
21	11
22	11
23	5
24	8
25	21
26	1
27	12
28	6
29	4
30	12
31	4
32	37
33	3
34	6
35	3
36	15
37	27
38	14
39	12
40	6
41	6
42	3
43	23
44	6
45	3
46	15
47	12
48	19
49	8

83.33%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	5
diversityRatio	0.5306122448979592
totalSentences	98
uniqueOpeners	52

52.91%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead, the water showed a"

ratio

0.016

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She turned the wrist toward"
1	"she said, recalling Isolde's instructions"
2	"She kept her voice low"
3	"They moved deeper."
4	"Their caps gleamed like polished"
5	"They were cold."
6	"she said, half-remembering something from"
7	"They had stopped near one"
8	"Her movements carried an odd"
9	"She fixed her gaze on"
10	"Her stomach hollow."
11	"She hadn't eaten since breakfast,"
12	"Her bare feet left no"
13	"She drifted toward the nearest"
14	"She turned, and her eyes"

ratio

0.238

23.49%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Aurora pressed through the last"
1	"The air on the other"
2	"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing in"
3	"Eva whispered at her shoulder"
4	"Nyx materialized from the shadow"
5	"Aurora's pendant pulsed against her"
6	"Isolde had told them to"
7	"The sky above the clearing"
8	"Here, it hung in a"
9	"Eva said, checking her watch"
10	"The digital display flickered between"
11	"She turned the wrist toward"
12	"Aurora stepped deeper into the"
13	"The wildflowers swayed toward her"
14	"she said, recalling Isolde's instructions"
15	"The grass beneath their feet"
16	"Aurora noticed it first—Eva's boots"
17	"The ground sprang back untouched,"
18	"She kept her voice low"
19	"The shade drifted beside her,"

ratio

0.873

79.37%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Now that she mentioned it,"

ratio

0.016

53.57%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Ancient oaks formed a ring around the space, their bark silvered and carved with spiraling patterns that hurt to look at too long."
1	"The scent, which shifted as they walked: first honey and lightning, then wet stone, then something floral and unfamiliar that made the back of her throat ache."
2	"The temperature never changed, a perfect coolness that raised goosebumps but never became uncomfortable."
3	"Not the cold of shade or winter—the cold of something that had never known warmth."

97.22%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"She drifted, her fingers brushing the carved spirals"

76.83%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1	"Eva muttered (mutter)"
2	"Nyx added (add)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.268

leniency

0.537

rawRatio

0.273

effectiveRatio

0.146

83.0994%