Run: 2026-04-27-01KQ73HZPDCQ2PVWN9MEX7N0NG

Run Details

Duration:
2m 40s
Cost:
$0.026491
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The silver chain bit into Rory's skin before the heat registered. The Heartstone hammered a frantic rhythm against her sternum, radiating a feverish warmth that crept up her neck. She stopped mid-stride, fingers instinctively curling around the crimson gem. The distortion ahead shimmered, a heat haze warping the ancient oak standing stones of the grove into melting wax. Rory's bright blue eyes narrowed, scanning the ripple in the air. The pendant burned, a physical weight pulling at her center of gravity. Isolde stepped past the boundary without a pause. Her silver boots met the earth, yet the damp mulch showed no depression, no indentation, as if the ground refused to acknowledge her weight. Pale lavender eyes fixed on the wavering air, unblinking. "The door hungers," Isolde murmured, her voice carrying the dry rustle of autumn leaves. "It does not open. It consumes those who dare to knock." Rory shook her head, pulling the Fae-forged blade from its sheath. The moonsilver metal drank the dim light, cold enough to numb her palm despite the heat blooming from her chest. The crescent scar on her left wrist itched, a phantom memory of old glass and sharper pain. She stepped through the shimmer. The air slapped against her face, heavy and thick with the scent of caramelized sugar, charred fat, and something metallic. The grove vanished. The oppressive English damp gave way to a dry, radiant warmth. Above, the sky bled a deep, bruised amber, devoid of sun yet drenched in light that seemed to emanate from the clouds themselves. Ground crunched beneath her trainers. Not leaves or gravel. Hard, glassy shells of fruit, shattered and sticky. Vines thick as pythons coiled around trunks of trees that bore no leaves, only clusters of pulsating red pods that wept clear sap. The sap pooled on the ground, swirling slowly, defying gravity as it dripped upward back toward the branches. "Richmond Park smells like rain and exhaust," Rory said, her voice sounding flat in the dense atmosphere. "This smells like a banquet gone wrong." "Worries not the guest," Isolde intoned, drifting forward. Her long silver hair floated around her shoulders, untethered by any wind. "Only the course." Nyx uncoiled from the base of a standing stone. The Shade expanded to their full six-foot-two height, a towering silhouette against the amber glow. Faint violet eyes pierced the gloom, scanning the distortion. Their voice whispered directly into Rory's mind, skipping the air entirely. *Shadows stretch long and hungry here. Not shadows of trees. Shadows of mouths.* Rory tightened her grip on the hilt. The blade hummed, a low vibration traveling up her arm. Wards. The metal sensed them before her eyes did. Invisible lines of crimson energy crisscrossed the air, forming a lattice over a low ridge of rock ahead. The blade flared with a pale luminescence, cutting a silent arc through the air as she tested the barrier. The magical resistance shivered, unable to hold against the moonsilver edge. "Wards holding back what?" Rory asked. "Indulgence," Isolde replied. She plucked a glowing blue berry from a passing tendril that snaked toward her hand. She popped it into her mouth without looking. Her expression did not change. "The path winds through the throat of the world. We must sip before we swallow." Rory brushed past the seer, stepping onto the ridge. The view opened up, and the breath hitched in her throat. Below lay a sprawl of terraced gardens and vineyards that defied geometry. Terraces stacked upon each other in impossible spirals, connected by bridges of woven gold that arched over deep ravines filled with mist. Giant structures of white stone and dark wood rose in the distance, their roofs shaped like the curved spines of beasts. Tables stretched along the terraces, long as ship hulls, groaning under the weight of roasted meats the size of carriages, fruits that pulsed with bioluminescence, and goblets overflowing with liquids that smoked in colors ranging from violet to gold. The scale crushed the perspective. Humans moved below, tiny figures scurrying like ants, carrying platters to servers who stood motionless, their faces hidden behind masks of polished porcelain. The movement wasn't frantic. It was sluggish, deliberate, weighed down by an invisible heaviness. The air here felt syrupy, slowing every motion. Heat washed up from the valley, carrying the aroma of roasting garlic and spices Rory didn't know, scents that triggered a primal urge to eat, to consume, to fill the hollow space in her stomach until it burst. Her jaw clenched, fighting the sudden, sharp pang of craving. "Stay sharp," Rory bit out. She rubbed her temples, shaking off the lethargy trying to seep into her limbs. "The air's getting to you. Keep moving." Nyx flowed across the ground, dissolving into mist only to reform ten paces ahead near a stone pillar. The Shade stopped, head tilting toward the pillar. The violet glow of their eyes dimmed. *Something watches. Not with eyes. With appetite.* Rory moved to Nyx's flank, blade raised. She angled her body to block some of the radiant amber glow, casting a human shadow over the Shade. Nyx leaned into the darkness she offered, the trembling of their form ceasing. The light here had no source overhead; it came from everywhere, erasing darkness entirely. "The light burns," Nyx whispered. *It burns away the dark. I feel exposed. Flayed.* Rory nodded, her gaze tracking a movement in the distance. A massive platform floated above the central ravine, tethered by chains of living vine. Figures moved there, robed in crimson, pouring vats of gold liquid into the sky. The liquid vanished before it hit the clouds, absorbed by the atmosphere. Isolde walked ahead, unbothered by the light or the haze of desire. She paused at the edge of a terrace where a table lay abandoned. Crystal shards littered the ground, mixed with bones that glowed with a faint inner fire. A half-eaten loaf of bread sat in the center, still warm, the crust turning to ash as they watched, consumed by the very air. "Time moves fast when the feast delays," Isolde said, picking up a bone and dropping it. It dissolved into red mist before it hit the ground. "They eat until they are the meal." Rory stepped closer, boots crunching on crystal. A goblet lay on its side, the liquid inside still swirling, trying to climb back up the walls of the cup. She snatched it up. The metal was freezing, contradicting the ambient heat. She poured the contents onto the ground. The liquid hissed and sizzled, burning a hole through the stone terrace. "Acid?" Rory lowered the goblet, frowning. "Or just concentrated magic?" "Concentrated life," Nyx whispered. The Shade peered into the hole, violet eyes widening. "Fuel. This place runs on consumption. The food, the drink, the people. Everything feeds the sky." Rory looked up. The amber clouds churned slowly, veins of darker orange pulsing like arteries. The pendant against her chest beat harder, a physical thump that rattled her ribs. The warmth was becoming pain, a hot coal pressing against her heart. "We need to keep moving," Rory said, capping the goblet and tossing it aside. The crystal shattered, the shards instantly melting into slag. "Isolde, the path?" The seer pointed a slender finger toward a bridge of light connecting their terrace to a higher structure. The bridge shimmered, formed from the same amber energy as the sky. Beneath it, the ravine dropped away into infinite black, save for shapes drifting up from the depths. Massive, pale hands, each the size of a house, grasping at the roots of the terraces, fingers stained with juice and blood. "Upward," Isolde said, a faint smile touching her lips. "The Prince keeps his seat on high. One must rise to meet the gluttony. Or fall to feed it." Rory holstered the Fae blade, the cool metal pressing against her hip. She took a deep breath, the thick air tasting of wine and warning. "Nyx, stay close. Your light is a beacon up here." The Shade nodded, condensing their form, pulling the shadows of their clothes tight around their silhouette to minimize the exposure. They fell into step behind Rory. They mounted the bridge. The surface felt solid but yielded slightly underfoot, like stretched leather. The wind picked up, howling with voices, a cacophony of laughter and pleas that seemed to come from the liquid flowing through the bridges below. Rory's fingers tightened on the railing. The wood felt warm, almost alive, pulsing with a slow heartbeat that matched the rhythm of the Heartstone. Halfway across, a vine thick as a tree trunk lashed out from the side of the bridge. It whipped toward Isolde, thorns extended, dripping with viscous sap. Rory moved before thought, lunging forward. The Fae blade flashed, a blur of moonlight in the amber haze. The blade bit into the vine. Sap sprayed hot against Rory's face, smelling of fermenting fruit and rot. The vine shrieked, a sound like tearing metal, and recoiled, thrashing wildly. The thorns snapped like porcelain. Rory didn't stop to watch. She vaulted over the thrashing limb, boots finding purchase on the bridge just as the vine lashed back, smashing into the empty space where she had stood. Dust and splinters rained down. "Vegetation has teeth," Rory called back, not slowing her pace. She wiped her cheek, the burn of the sap stinging her skin. "And bad aim." Isolde stepped over the severed vine as if it were a discarded scarf. "The garden prunes itself. We are merely weeds seeking the sun." Nyx emerged from the smoke of the attack, form solidifying slowly. The Shade's hand reached out, touching the severed end of the vine. The black fingers sank into the flesh of the plant, and the thrashing stopped instantly. The vine went limp, gray and dead, curling away from them. *Silence brings death,* Nyx whispered, pulling their hand back. The fingers retracted, shadow clinging to the vine's stumps. *I took its hunger. It sleeps now.* Rory nodded, eyes scanning the structure ahead. A massive archway loomed, carved from a single piece of obsidian. Figures stood beneath it, robed in crimson and gold, faces obscured by hoods. They did not move. They did not speak. They simply stared down at the bridge, a wall of silent judgment. "Warding squad," Rory muttered, thumb resting on the blade's hilt. "Or sentries." "Both," Isolde replied. She continued walking, her bare feet silent on the living bridge. "The host prepares the table. The knives await." The group closed the distance. The air grew hotter, the scent of ozone overpowering the food. The Heartstone burned so fiercely Rory could see the red glow through her shirt. The figures beneath the archway raised their heads simultaneously. Masks of porcelain slid away, revealing faces that were smooth, featureless slabs of white flesh. No eyes. No mouths. Just smooth, blinding blankness. Rory's grip tightened on the weapon. The blade screamed, a high-pitched whine of magical friction. The Veil here was paper-thin, stretched over the maw of something vast and ravenous. They had crossed the boundary, and now the stomach of the world waited to see if they could be digested.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.56% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1860
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count3
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1860
totalAiIsms40
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"shimmered"
count2
2
word"scanning"
count3
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"wavering"
count1
5
word"oppressive"
count1
6
word"radiant"
count2
7
word"shattered"
count2
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"porcelain"
count3
11
word"stomach"
count2
12
word"jaw clenched"
count1
13
word"pang"
count1
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"crystal"
count3
16
word"churned"
count1
17
word"structure"
count2
18
word"depths"
count1
19
word"beacon"
count1
20
word"cacophony"
count1
21
word"almost alive"
count1
22
word"silence"
count1
23
word"loomed"
count1
24
word"maw"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"shimmered"
2"scanning"
3"weight"
4"wavering"
5"oppressive"
6"radiant"
7"shattered"
8"gloom"
9"pulsed"
10"porcelain"
11"stomach"
12"jaw clenched"
13"pang"
14"desire"
15"crystal"
16"churned"
17"structure"
18"depths"
19"beacon"
20"cacophony"
21"almost alive"
22"silence"
23"loomed"
24"maw"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences156
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences156
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords39
totalWords1860
ratio0.021
matches
0"Shadows stretch long and hungry here. Not shadows of trees. Shadows of mouths."
1"Something watches. Not with eyes. With appetite."
2"It burns away the dark. I feel exposed. Flayed."
3"Silence brings death,"
4"I took its hunger. It sleeps now."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1688
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory27
Heartstone3
Fae-forged1
English1
Isolde10
Shade6
Nyx8
Fae3
Veil1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Shade"
4"Nyx"
places(empty)
globalScore0.7
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences118
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"pleas that seemed to come from the liquid flowing through the bridges below"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1860
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean40.43
std21.82
cv0.54
sampleLengths
081
141
225
353
457
558
624
723
844
913
1074
116
1246
1320
1494
1598
1626
1733
187
1953
2014
2150
2264
2333
2459
2510
2629
2741
2826
2969
3028
3135
3226
3364
3445
3535
3637
3725
3824
3949
4025
4151
4212
4322
4462
4549
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences156
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs316
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences171
ratio0.006
matches
0"The light here had no source overhead; it came from everywhere, erasing darkness entirely."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1695
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.024188790560471976
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.00943952802359882
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean10.88
std6.48
cv0.596
sampleLengths
011
118
210
319
411
512
68
724
89
914
1011
1111
1220
1317
145
1520
163
1711
1823
195
204
218
2223
2318
2417
257
268
2712
283
299
3015
319
3211
336
344
353
367
3710
381
398
4018
4119
4211
436
443
4515
468
475
4815
499
41.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats25
diversityRatio0.3391812865497076
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners58
22.99% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"Just smooth, blinding blankness."
ratio0.007
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences145
matches
0"She stopped mid-stride, fingers instinctively"
1"Her silver boots met the"
2"She stepped through the shimmer."
3"Her long silver hair floated"
4"Their voice whispered directly into"
5"She plucked a glowing blue"
6"She popped it into her"
7"Her expression did not change."
8"It was sluggish, deliberate, weighed"
9"Her jaw clenched, fighting the"
10"She rubbed her temples, shaking"
11"She angled her body to"
12"*It burns away the dark."
13"I feel exposed."
14"She paused at the edge"
15"It dissolved into red mist"
16"She snatched it up."
17"She poured the contents onto"
18"She took a deep breath,"
19"They fell into step behind"
ratio0.214
4.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount132
totalSentences145
matches
0"The silver chain bit into"
1"The Heartstone hammered a frantic"
2"She stopped mid-stride, fingers instinctively"
3"The distortion ahead shimmered, a"
4"Rory's bright blue eyes narrowed,"
5"The pendant burned, a physical"
6"Isolde stepped past the boundary"
7"Her silver boots met the"
8"Isolde murmured, her voice carrying"
9"Rory shook her head, pulling"
10"The moonsilver metal drank the"
11"The crescent scar on her"
12"She stepped through the shimmer."
13"The air slapped against her"
14"The grove vanished."
15"The oppressive English damp gave"
16"Ground crunched beneath her trainers."
17"Vines thick as pythons coiled"
18"The sap pooled on the"
19"Rory said, her voice sounding"
ratio0.91
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
ratio0
39.59% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Her silver boots met the earth, yet the damp mulch showed no depression, no indentation, as if the ground refused to acknowledge her weight."
1"Vines thick as pythons coiled around trunks of trees that bore no leaves, only clusters of pulsating red pods that wept clear sap."
2"Terraces stacked upon each other in impossible spirals, connected by bridges of woven gold that arched over deep ravines filled with mist."
3"Tables stretched along the terraces, long as ship hulls, groaning under the weight of roasted meats the size of carriages, fruits that pulsed with bioluminescen…"
4"Humans moved below, tiny figures scurrying like ants, carrying platters to servers who stood motionless, their faces hidden behind masks of polished porcelain."
5"Heat washed up from the valley, carrying the aroma of roasting garlic and spices Rory didn't know, scents that triggered a primal urge to eat, to consume, to fi…"
6"The pendant against her chest beat harder, a physical thump that rattled her ribs."
7"The Shade nodded, condensing their form, pulling the shadows of their clothes tight around their silhouette to minimize the exposure."
8"The wind picked up, howling with voices, a cacophony of laughter and pleas that seemed to come from the liquid flowing through the bridges below."
9"The wood felt warm, almost alive, pulsing with a slow heartbeat that matched the rhythm of the Heartstone."
10"Sap sprayed hot against Rory's face, smelling of fermenting fruit and rot."
11"Masks of porcelain slid away, revealing faces that were smooth, featureless slabs of white flesh."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice carrying the dry rustle of autumn leaves"
1"Rory said, her voice sounding flat in the dense atmosphere"
2"Isolde said, a faint smile touching her lips"
3"Rory called back, not slowing her pace"
4"Rory muttered, thumb resting on the blade's hilt"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
3"Rory called back (call back)"
4"Rory muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.333
74.3069%