Run: 2026-04-27-01KQ73V6SR5AZXZV9VYVH4JNTS

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

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AI
The Heartstone pressed against Aurora's sternum, no longer a faint pulse but a thrumming resonance that vibrated through her ribs and into her teeth. The silver chain felt hot, searing through the fabric of her shirt, a crimson warning that mirrored the gem's frantic beat. Rory counted the throbs, her mind instinctively filing the rhythm into patterns she could manage. Thump-thump. Thump-thump. Not a heartbeat. Something older. Something hungry. She stepped forward, and the cobblestones of London's damp alleyway dissolved into a substance that felt like warm glass beneath her boots. The transition was seamless, a trick of light and physics she had no time to analyze. When her vision cleared, the gray London drizzle was gone, replaced by an amber luminescence that poured like honey from a sky devoid of sun or cloud. Rory blinked, her bright blue eyes adjusting to the heavy, saturated light. The air was thick, coating her tongue with flavors of roasting spices, overripe fruit, and iron. It smelled of a banquet that had been set and never finished, of excess stretched across eternity. Nyx stood a pace ahead, their form flickering between a humanoid silhouette and a drift of living shadow. The Shade's faintly glowing violet eyes cut through the amber gloom, scanning the horizon with an ageless wariness. "The air here clings," Nyx whispered, the voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over stone, carried on a wind that smelled of grease and prayer. "It tastes of chains disguised as silk. I remember the weight of such bindings. Aldric..." The name slipped out, a ghost of the human sorcerer trapped within the Shade, before Nyx's form solidified, shoulders tensing. "This realm eats will. It does not just feed the body; it hollows the spirit until only hunger remains." Isolde Varga drifted through the space between them, her presence a cool counterpoint to the oppressive warmth. The Half-Fae Seer's silver hair cascaded to her waist in a waterfall of moonlight that seemed to repel the amber haze, and her pale lavender eyes scanned the environment with detached precision. Where her feet touched the glassy ground, no impression marred the surface; she left no footprints, moving as if she were merely remembered rather than present. "The Feast is eternal, little mortal," Isolde murmured, her speech weaving riddles as naturally as breath. "But the table is long, and the portions shrink as the hunger grows. What you seek lies at the root of the vine, where the fruit bleeds." Rory adjusted the strap of her delivery bag, her hand drifting instinctively to the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip. The moonsilver dagger was always cold, a constant ache of chill against her thigh, and now it pulsed with a frost that made the metal groan softly. She was cool-headed by nature, the kind of person who could talk down a drunk in the back of the Golden Empress or deconstruct a lease agreement with her father's barrister precision, but this place bypassed logic and went straight for the lizard brain. The geometry was wrong. Towers of stacked porcelain crockery spiraled into the haze, wobbling without touch, held together by sheer abundance. Vines thick as pythons, draped in fruit that pulsed with internal bioluminescence, coiled around arches of wrought iron that resembled ribcages. "Dymas," Rory said, the word tasting like ash. "Gluttony. We're in Hel." She didn't panic. Panic was inefficient. She assessed. The Veil was supposed to be monitored by Wardens, the barrier weakened only during the solstices. Yet here they were, stepped through without a rupture. *The Heartstone,* she thought. *The unknown benefactor didn't just give me a trinket. They gave me a key. Or a trap.* The group moved deeper, drawn by the Heartstone's increasing intensity. The sound of the realm grew: a cacophony of clinking gold, low laughter that sounded like grinding millstones, and the wet, rhythmic tear of meat. In the distance, sprawling vineyards stretched toward the amber horizon, but the harvesters weren't workers. They were figures in tattered clothes, their movements jerky, their necks adorned with golden collars that glowed with the same hue as the sky. Helbound souls. Contracted from Earth. Rory's mind flashed to her father, Brendan, his Welsh baritone filling their flat above Silas' bar with stories of justice and binding contracts. *Contracted.* The legal term made her stomach turn. These weren't just spirits; they were people taken, bound to this realm of indulgence, forced to serve the excess until their souls were drained dry. The unease coiled in her gut, sharp and cold. She touched the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a grounding anchor from a childhood accident, reminding herself of a world where pain was real and finite, not a currency of eternal sin. They approached a structure that dominated the landscape: a hall constructed entirely of translucent crystal, revealing tables groaning with impossible feasts within. Roasted beasts with multiple heads sat on platters of diamond, steaming with sauces that shifted color. The scale was monstrous. But the diners were demons, tall and horned, their faces buried in the food, while the Helbound souls scurried around them, serving, cleaning, weeping silently when a plate was dropped. "The wards," Isolde stated flatly, pointing to the entrance of the crystal hall. A shimmering distortion hung in the air, a tear in reality patched over by magical sigils that pulsed with a nauseating rhythm. "A boundary of appetite. It invites one in and never lets the hunger leave. It is a trap for the desperate." Rory drew the Fae-Forged Blade. The action was smooth, practiced. The moonsilver flared with a faint luminescence that clashed violently with the amber light, the temperature dropping instantly. Frost spiderwebbed across the crystal facade as the blade hummed, reacting to the magical structure. "Isolde's gift," Rory muttered, her voice low. "It cuts through magical wards. Particularly effective against demons." "It will sever the compulsion," Isolde confirmed, her compulsion forcing the truth from her lips. "It cannot lie. But beware the guardian. The First Kitchen does not take kindly to intruders who do not carry the Prince's seal." Rory stepped toward the threshold. The heat from the Hall hit her, overwhelming and cloying, pressing against her skin like a physical weight. The Heartstone burned hot against her chest, pointing directly at a central dais visible through the crystal walls. She didn't hesitate. She swung the blade in a wide arc. There was no resistance, only the sound of tearing silk as the ward unraveled. The distortion shattered, the magical sigils dissolving into ash, revealing the true nature of the threshold. They crossed. Inside, the air was so rich it felt hard to breathe, saturated with pheromones that tugged at her instincts. A fountain in the center spouted wine so dark it looked like blood, swirling around a statue of a prince with a crown of skewered grapes. Prince Belphegor's domain. The stone's pulse synchronized with the runes etched into the fountain's base. Nyx moved to the corners, dissolving into the shadows cast by the tables. "The shadows here are full," the Shade whispered, their voice echoing from the darkness beneath the benches. "They are stuffed with the sins of the gluttons. I can hear them whispering secrets. They speak of a lock that requires a key of crimson heart." Rory's blue eyes narrowed, assessing the path. Her pre-law mind began to map the layout, looking for patterns in the chaos. The kitchen was a labyrinth of service routes and hidden caches. She saw a service hatch behind a pillar of stacked silverware, unguarded. "We don't touch the food," Rory said, her voice steady, cutting through the humid din. "And we don't stay for the main course. Isolde, Nyx, with me. We follow the stone to that pedestal, and we leave before the appetite notices us. If Nyx can distract the shadows, and Isolde can guide us past the wards, we find what the benefactor wants and we extract." Isolde offered a thin, cryptic smile, her silver hair shimmering in the wine-spattered light. "The plate is set, Rory Carter. The question is whether we are the guests, the servers, or the garnish. But your blade is sharp, and your spirit refuses to be digested." Rory checked the edge of the Fae blade, feeling the reassuring cold of the moonsilver. She adjusted her grip, her cool-headed focus narrowing to the immediate objective. They were in a realm of excess, surrounded by demons and damned souls, but she had the tools and the mind to navigate the service of hell. "We're the ones holding the fork," Rory whispered, and stepped toward the fountain, the Heartstone blazing a path through the amber dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde stated flatly [flatly]"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.579
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
96.53% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1443
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1443
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"resonance"
count1
2
word"vibrated"
count1
3
word"searing"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"silk"
count2
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"oppressive"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"scanned"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count3
13
word"porcelain"
count1
14
word"intensity"
count1
15
word"cacophony"
count1
16
word"rhythmic"
count1
17
word"stomach"
count1
18
word"structure"
count2
19
word"constructed"
count1
20
word"crystal"
count4
21
word"facade"
count1
22
word"shattered"
count1
23
word"synchronized"
count1
24
word"etched"
count1
25
word"echoing"
count1
26
word"navigate"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"resonance"
2"vibrated"
3"searing"
4"gloom"
5"scanning"
6"silk"
7"weight"
8"oppressive"
9"warmth"
10"scanned"
11"chill"
12"pulsed"
13"porcelain"
14"intensity"
15"cacophony"
16"rhythmic"
17"stomach"
18"structure"
19"constructed"
20"crystal"
21"facade"
22"shattered"
23"synchronized"
24"etched"
25"echoing"
26"navigate"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences85
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords20
totalWords1443
ratio0.014
matches
0"The Heartstone,"
1"The unknown benefactor didn't just give me a trinket. They gave me a key. Or a trap."
2"Contracted."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
98.81% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1172
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone5
Aurora1
London2
Shade3
Nyx4
Isolde5
Varga1
Half-Fae1
Seer1
Rory12
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Golden1
Empress1
Veil1
Wardens1
Earth1
Brendan1
Welsh1
Helbound2
Hall1
Belphegor1
Fae4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Aurora"
2"Shade"
3"Nyx"
4"Isolde"
5"Varga"
6"Seer"
7"Rory"
8"Blade"
9"Brendan"
10"Hall"
11"Belphegor"
places
0"London"
1"Fae-Forged"
2"Earth"
3"Fae"
globalScore0.988
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like warm glass beneath her boots"
1"moonlight that seemed to repel the amber haze, and her pale lavender eyes scanned the environment with detached precision"
2"sounded like grinding millstones, and the"
3"looked like blood, swirling around a stat"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.693
wordCount1443
matches
0"no longer a faint pulse but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
89.26% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean60.13
std27.8
cv0.462
sampleLengths
069
165
245
3115
475
543
6132
712
854
979
1098
1172
1256
1343
1416
1538
1682
1762
1857
1944
2065
2145
2254
2322
88.75% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences85
matches
0"was gone"
1"was supposed"
2"were, stepped"
3"was dropped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs198
matches(empty)
51.67% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences94
ratio0.032
matches
0"\"This realm eats will. It does not just feed the body; it hollows the spirit until only hunger remains.\""
1"Where her feet touched the glassy ground, no impression marred the surface; she left no footprints, moving as if she were merely remembered rather than present."
2"These weren't just spirits; they were people taken, bound to this realm of indulgence, forced to serve the excess until their souls were drained dry."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount794
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.022670025188916875
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.011335012594458438
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean15.35
std9.87
cv0.643
sampleLengths
024
121
215
31
41
53
62
72
822
916
1027
1112
1216
1317
1418
1518
1625
1735
1819
1917
2032
2126
2216
2327
2419
2527
2644
274
2817
2921
308
314
323
333
342
3516
369
374
389
395
403
4110
4225
4315
4424
452
463
4723
488
4925
47.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3617021276595745
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners34
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences78
matches
0"She stepped forward, and the"
1"It smelled of a banquet"
2"She was cool-headed by nature,"
3"She didn't panic."
4"They gave me a key."
5"They were figures in tattered"
6"She touched the crescent-shaped scar"
7"They approached a structure that"
8"She didn't hesitate."
9"She swung the blade in"
10"Her pre-law mind began to"
11"She saw a service hatch"
12"She adjusted her grip, her"
13"They were in a realm"
ratio0.179
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences78
matches
0"The Heartstone pressed against Aurora's"
1"The silver chain felt hot,"
2"Rory counted the throbs, her"
3"She stepped forward, and the"
4"The transition was seamless, a"
5"Rory blinked, her bright blue"
6"The air was thick, coating"
7"It smelled of a banquet"
8"Nyx stood a pace ahead,"
9"The Shade's faintly glowing violet"
10"Nyx whispered, the voice sounding"
11"The name slipped out, a"
12"Isolde Varga drifted through the"
13"The Half-Fae Seer's silver hair"
14"Isolde murmured, her speech weaving"
15"Rory adjusted the strap of"
16"The moonsilver dagger was always"
17"She was cool-headed by nature,"
18"The geometry was wrong."
19"Towers of stacked porcelain crockery"
ratio0.846
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The Heartstone pressed against Aurora's sternum, no longer a faint pulse but a thrumming resonance that vibrated through her ribs and into her teeth."
1"She stepped forward, and the cobblestones of London's damp alleyway dissolved into a substance that felt like warm glass beneath her boots."
2"The Half-Fae Seer's silver hair cascaded to her waist in a waterfall of moonlight that seemed to repel the amber haze, and her pale lavender eyes scanned the en…"
3"Where her feet touched the glassy ground, no impression marred the surface; she left no footprints, moving as if she were merely remembered rather than present."
4"The moonsilver dagger was always cold, a constant ache of chill against her thigh, and now it pulsed with a frost that made the metal groan softly."
5"She was cool-headed by nature, the kind of person who could talk down a drunk in the back of the Golden Empress or deconstruct a lease agreement with her father…"
6"Vines thick as pythons, draped in fruit that pulsed with internal bioluminescence, coiled around arches of wrought iron that resembled ribcages."
7"They were figures in tattered clothes, their movements jerky, their necks adorned with golden collars that glowed with the same hue as the sky."
8"They approached a structure that dominated the landscape: a hall constructed entirely of translucent crystal, revealing tables groaning with impossible feasts w…"
9"The moonsilver flared with a faint luminescence that clashed violently with the amber light, the temperature dropping instantly."
10"Inside, the air was so rich it felt hard to breathe, saturated with pheromones that tugged at her instincts."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her speech weaving riddles as naturally as breath"
1"Rory muttered, her voice low"
2"Isolde confirmed, her compulsion forcing the truth from her lips"
3"the Shade whispered, their voice echoing from the darkness beneath the benches"
4"Rory said, her voice steady, cutting through the humid din"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Isolde stated flatly (state)"
3"Rory muttered (mutter)"
4"Isolde confirmed (confirm)"
5"the Shade whispered (whisper)"
6"Rory whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio0.778
effectiveRatio0.737
69.2043%