Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHQEJ72JJ6HD9WYATCYVV2Z

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Aurora gripped the Heartstone Pendant tighter, its faint warmth pulsing against her palm like a second heartbeat. The rift had spat them out into something that definitely wasn't Richmond Park anymore. "Keep close," she whispered, scanning the amber-hued horizon. "Nyx, any idea what this place feeds on?" "Gluttony," the Shade replied, their voice a whisper carried on a dry wind that smelled of overripe fruit and roasted meat. "Dymas. Belphegor's domain. Your little trinket led us straight into the lion's gullet, Rory." Isolde glided ahead of them, her silver hair trailing like moonlight on water. Her bare feet left no prints on the strange, spongy ground. "The lion digests what it cannot name," she murmured, her pale lavender eyes fixed on a distant vineyard that stretched toward a sky the colour of molten honey. "Names have power here. Best leave yours at the threshold." The air tasted too sweet, cloying on Aurora's tongue. Every breath felt like she'd swallowed a spoonful of treacle. She adjusted the Fae-forged blade at her hip, its moonsilver chill seeping through her clothes and grounding her. The small crescent scar on her wrist itched, a childhood memory stirring unbidden, of falling from a tree and learning that some wounds never quite faded. They pressed forward. The path, if one could call the undulating trail between bursting fruit trees a path, seemed to shift beneath their feet. Grapes the size of apples hung heavy from vines that writhed like living things, their skins splitting to reveal glistening flesh that pulsed faintly. Aurora's stomach rumbled despite the unease crawling up her spine. "Hungry already?" Nyx materialised beside her, their shadowy form flickering between solid and incorporeal. In their more defined state, they towered over her, violet eyes glowing like distant stars. "Careful. The first bite here binds you tighter than any chain." "I'm not touching anything." Aurora pushed a low-hanging branch aside. Sap oozed from the break, golden and fragrant, smelling of cinnamon and smoked bacon. Her mouth watered. She swallowed hard. "How do we find the portal out? This wasn't supposed to be a sightseeing trip." Isolde paused by a cluster of standing stones, though these bore no resemblance to the ancient oaks that marked her grove. These stones gleamed like polished bone, carved with symbols that twisted when Aurora tried to focus on them. "The way forward lies through indulgence," the half-Fae said, tracing one carving with a finger that left no mark. "Or so the courts once whispered. But whispers lie when they serve the speaker." A low moan rose from deeper within the orchard, not quite human, not quite anything Aurora recognised. It vibrated through her bones, stirring something primal that made her want to run toward it and away from it at the same time. Nyx dissolved into shadow, reappearing ten paces ahead. "Company. Three hellbound souls, by the look of them. Chefs, if the cleavers mean anything." Aurora drew the Fae blade. The dagger hummed in her grip, its leaf-shaped blade catching the amber light and reflecting it back colder, sharper. She moved to join Nyx, Isolde floating silently behind. The ground grew softer here, almost fleshy, and she fought the urge to gag as her boots sank slightly with each step. The figures emerged from between two gnarled trees heavy with fruit that resembled roasted joints of meat. They wore stained aprons that might once have been white. Knives and ladles dangled from their belts, and their eyes, sunken and fever-bright, fixed on the intruders with something between hunger and terror. "Fresh ingredients," one croaked, his voice thick with phlegm and want. "The prince will reward us well for new stock." "Stock for what?" Aurora demanded, keeping the blade raised. The Heartstone Pendant burned hotter against her chest now, its crimson glow visible even through her jacket. The second chef, a woman with cheeks bloated like overfed ticks, licked her lips. "For the feast, of course. The endless feast. You look... tender. Young. The marrow will make fine stock." Nyx swirled between them, a living barrier of darkness. "Touch her and I'll peel your souls like grapes." Isolde stepped forward, her presence somehow quieting the violent tension. "We seek passage, not platters. The Veil thins here. Show us the rift and perhaps we leave your larder untouched." The third chef, younger than the others but already sporting the same distended belly, clutched his cleaver tighter. "Can't leave. Tried. The prince's table stretches forever. One bite. That's all it takes. Then you're part of the menu or the clientele. No difference really." Aurora's gaze drifted past them. Through the twisted branches, she spotted structures in the distance, grand halls built from what looked like sugar glass and bone china. Flags bearing Belphegor's sigil, a stylised mouth devouring a star, snapped in the sweet wind. The moan sounded again, louder, and she realised it came from those halls. A sound of pleasure and pain intertwined so tightly they became the same thing. Her free hand found Nyx's solid form, the touch of living shadow both freezing and burning. "We need to move. This place... it's getting inside my head. I can taste things I haven't eaten in years. My mother's Sunday roast. The chips from that dodgy van in Cardiff." "That's how it starts," the female chef said, her voice dropping to something almost sympathetic. "Memory flavours. Then comes the craving. Then the binding." Isolde tilted her head, listening to something only she could hear. "The stones speak of a garden deeper in. Where the first tree grows. Its fruit contains seeds of escape, though the price tastes bitter on the tongue." "Everything here tastes bitter eventually," Nyx observed, their form rippling. "Even the sweet." Aurora sheathed the blade but kept her hand near it. "Lead the way then. But if anyone offers me so much as a grape, I expect you to knock it out of my hand. Understood?" The chefs watched them go, their expressions a mixture of pity and envy that made Aurora's skin crawl. She quickened her pace, following Isolde toward a break in the orchard where the trees gave way to something far stranger. Here the ground rose in soft hills that breathed. Literally breathed, expanding and contracting beneath their feet like the flank of some enormous beast. Flowers grew in impossible colours, their petals opening and closing in rhythm with the hills. Each bloom released puffs of scent, individual notes in a symphony of aroma. Aurora caught whiffs of dark chocolate, fresh bread, blood, and something metallic that reminded her of Evan's breath after a particularly violent night. She shook her head hard. "Focus." Nyx glanced at her, violet eyes narrowing. "Your heart rate's climbing. The pendant's practically singing now. Whatever portal brought us here, it's close." "Close and guarded," Isolde said. She stopped at the crest of a particularly large hill, her silver hair stirring in a breeze that carried the sound of laughter and screams. "Look." Below them spread a vast garden unlike anything Aurora had seen on Earth. Trees with trunks of twisted silver grew in perfect rows, their branches heavy with fruit that shone like jewels. At the centre stood one tree larger than the rest, its bark black as midnight, its leaves the colour of fresh bruises. Golden fruits hung from its boughs, each one pulsing with inner light. "The heart of Dymas," Isolde whispered. "The tree feeds the prince's endless hunger. One taste and you never leave. But the seeds within..." "Price," Nyx finished, their whisper turning harsh. "Everything here has one." Aurora started down the slope, boots sliding on the living ground. The air grew thicker, sweeter, until she felt she could chew it. Her scar burned now, a sharp counterpoint to the pendant's warmth. Memories flooded her unbidden, her father's courtroom voice, her mother's disappointed sigh when she'd announced she was dropping out of Pre-Law, Eva's desperate call that had sent her running to London. "Stop," she gasped, clutching her head. Isolde appeared beside her instantly. "The tree knows your name, Aurora Carter. It whispers it on every breeze. Give it nothing." Nyx solidified completely, wrapping shadowy arms around her shoulders. The contact helped, the Shade's otherworldly chill cutting through the cloying sweetness. "Breathe through your mouth. Don't smell the fruits. We're nearly at the portal. I can feel the Veil tearing nearby." They reached the base of the great tree. Its roots spread across the ground like veins, and where they intersected, the air shimmered, the distortion visible even to Aurora's human eyes. The Heartstone Pendant blazed hot enough to hurt now, its crimson light cutting through the amber atmosphere like a laser. "Here," Isolde said, pressing her palm against one of the roots. Nothing happened. She frowned, an expression so rare on her ethereal features that it sent a jolt of fear through Aurora. "The tree demands tribute." "What kind?" Aurora asked, already knowing she wouldn't like the answer. "A memory. A true one. The kind that shapes who you are." Isolde's voice carried an edge of something like sorrow. "The tree will take it and in exchange, grant passage. But what it takes, you can never truly have back." Nyx drifted closer to the shimmering rift. "I have no memories it would want. Shades don't remember being human all that clearly. I'll go first. Test the waters." Before Aurora could protest, Nyx stepped into the distortion. Their form flickered violently, violet eyes flashing bright, and then they vanished with a sound like a wet kiss. Isolde turned to Aurora. "Your turn, child of Cardiff. Choose your memory carefully. Some bites cannot be spat out." Aurora stared at the tree. One of the golden fruits had dropped to the ground near her feet. It split open of its own accord, revealing seeds that looked like tiny screaming faces. The smell hit her like a physical blow, memories of every comfort she'd ever known, every safety, every love. Her wrist scar throbbed in time with the pendant. She drew the Fae blade again, its cold weight reassuring. "I won't feed this thing my past." The tree rustled though there was no wind. A branch lowered, offering a single fruit directly in front of her face. The skin glistened invitingly. Isolde's hand touched her shoulder. "Then offer it something else. Something it craves more than memory." Aurora looked at the blade, then at the pendant. The crimson gem pulsed faster, almost eagerly. She wrapped the silver chain around her fist and pressed the Heartstone against the tree's bark. The effect was immediate. The entire garden convulsed. Fruits burst overhead, showering them in sticky sweetness. The ground bucked, nearly throwing Aurora off her feet. The rift widened with a sound like tearing silk, revealing glimpses of what might have been her flat above Silas' bar, or perhaps something far worse. Isolde's eyes widened. "Clever. The stone carries Belphegor's own essence. A debt unpaid. The tree recognises its master's mark." Something massive moved beneath the ground. The hills rose and fell more violently. In the distance, the grand halls of sugar and bone began to crack. "We've got its attention," Aurora said, gripping the blade tighter. "Time to run." They sprinted for the widened rift. Behind them, the great tree uprooted itself with a sound like a thousand throats screaming in ecstasy. Its roots lashed out, seeking, hungry. One brushed Aurora's leg and she felt a pull, a terrible yearning to stop, to taste, to stay. Isolde grabbed her wrist, right over the crescent scar, and yanked her forward. "Names have power here," the half-Fae gasped. "Speak yours. Claim it back from this place." "Aurora Carter," she shouted as they reached the rift's edge. The words tasted like freedom and terror mixed together. "Not your bloody feast!" The tree roared. Its branches whipped toward them, golden fruits exploding into sprays of juice that burned where they touched skin. Nyx reappeared in the rift, shadowy hands reaching through. "Jump!" Aurora leapt, Isolde beside her. For one impossible moment she hung between realms, Dymas's amber sky above and the cold familiarity of Earth somewhere below. The Fae blade sang in her grip. The Heartstone Pendant flared so bright it blinded her. Then the rift swallowed them whole. She landed hard on damp grass that smelled of normal rain and London pollution. Richmond Park. Real Richmond Park. The ancient oak standing stones loomed overhead, marking the boundary of Isolde's grove. Morning light, actual morning light, not that perpetual amber glow, filtered through normal leaves. Nyx coalesced beside her, looking more solid than usual. "That was entertaining. Next time perhaps we avoid following glowing rocks into Hel without a map." Isolde stood a little way off, her bare feet now leaving faint prints in the dew-kissed grass. She stared back at the spot where the rift had been, now just empty air. "It follows," she said softly. "The tree marked you, Aurora. Its hunger has your scent now." Aurora pushed herself up, brushing sticky residue from her clothes. The pendant had gone cold and dark against her chest. She touched her wrist, the scar there feeling somehow deeper, more significant. Before she could respond, the air shimmered again. A single golden fruit rolled out of nothingness and stopped at her feet. It split open slowly, seeds writhing like tiny maggots. The tree's voice, or perhaps Belphegor's, whispered on a breeze that shouldn't have existed in the grove. "More." Aurora crushed the fruit beneath her boot, its juice staining the grass an unnatural gold. Her grip tightened on the Fae-forged blade until her knuckles whitened. "Looks like we've got ourselves a dinner invitation we can't refuse," she said, meeting Nyx's glowing violet gaze. "Question is, who ends up on the menu?"
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.377
leniency0.754
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.033
80.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2296
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"truly"
count1
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
6
adverb"eagerly"
count1
7
adverb"softly"
count1
8
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"tightly"
3"completely"
4"truly"
5"carefully"
6"eagerly"
7"softly"
8"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.38% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2296
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count2
3
word"chill"
count2
4
word"glistening"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"symphony"
count1
12
word"perfect"
count1
13
word"otherworldly"
count1
14
word"shimmered"
count2
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"throbbed"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
18
word"silk"
count1
19
word"yearning"
count1
20
word"loomed"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"scanning"
2"whisper"
3"chill"
4"glistening"
5"pulsed"
6"stomach"
7"tracing"
8"vibrated"
9"tension"
10"quickened"
11"symphony"
12"perfect"
13"otherworldly"
14"shimmered"
15"flickered"
16"throbbed"
17"weight"
18"silk"
19"yearning"
20"loomed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences146
matches
0"a jolt of fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences146
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences185
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2296
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions96
wordCount1720
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone5
Pendant4
Richmond3
Park3
Shade2
Isolde18
Aurora27
Fae-forged2
Sap1
Fae7
Nyx14
Belphegor2
Evan1
Earth2
Pre-Law1
Eva1
London2
Dymas1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Shade"
2"Isolde"
3"Aurora"
4"Sap"
5"Fae"
6"Nyx"
7"Belphegor"
8"Evan"
9"Eva"
10"Dymas"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.715
windowScore0.667
5.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences121
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like she'd swallowed a spoonful of"
1"not quite human, not quite anything Aurora recognised"
2"not quite anything Aurora recognised"
3"something between hunger and terror"
4"looked like sugar glass and bone china"
5"something like sorrow"
6"looked like tiny screaming faces"
7"tasted like freedom and terror mixed toge"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2296
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences185
matches
0"learning that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean32.34
std17.77
cv0.549
sampleLengths
031
116
235
362
463
558
640
745
872
941
1023
1155
1250
1320
1426
1532
1618
1730
1844
1969
2048
2124
2238
2313
2435
2539
2675
276
2823
2931
3066
3123
3211
3365
346
3521
3641
3751
3836
3911
4041
4128
4228
4319
4461
4517
4625
4716
4832
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs294
matches
0"was dropping"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences185
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1398
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.03791130185979971
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.012875536480686695
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences185
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences185
mean12.41
std6.54
cv0.527
sampleLengths
017
114
28
38
421
514
613
711
828
910
109
1110
1218
1326
143
1521
1624
1710
1814
1915
2011
2110
2214
233
243
2515
2621
2718
2819
2914
3017
3124
328
3315
345
3519
369
3722
3817
3910
4023
4111
429
439
4417
4514
4618
479
489
4910
64.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.40540540540540543
totalSentences185
uniqueOpeners75
46.95% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences142
matches
0"Literally breathed, expanding and contracting"
1"Then the rift swallowed them"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences142
matches
0"she whispered, scanning the amber-hued"
1"Her bare feet left no"
2"she murmured, her pale lavender"
3"She adjusted the Fae-forged blade"
4"They pressed forward."
5"Her mouth watered."
6"She swallowed hard."
7"It vibrated through her bones,"
8"She moved to join Nyx,"
9"They wore stained aprons that"
10"Her free hand found Nyx's"
11"She quickened her pace, following"
12"She shook her head hard."
13"She stopped at the crest"
14"Her scar burned now, a"
15"she gasped, clutching her head"
16"They reached the base of"
17"Its roots spread across the"
18"She frowned, an expression so"
19"Their form flickered violently, violet"
ratio0.246
16.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount126
totalSentences142
matches
0"Aurora gripped the Heartstone Pendant"
1"The rift had spat them"
2"she whispered, scanning the amber-hued"
3"the Shade replied, their voice"
4"Isolde glided ahead of them,"
5"Her bare feet left no"
6"she murmured, her pale lavender"
7"The air tasted too sweet,"
8"Every breath felt like she'd"
9"She adjusted the Fae-forged blade"
10"The small crescent scar on"
11"They pressed forward."
12"The path, if one could"
13"Grapes the size of apples"
14"Aurora's stomach rumbled despite the"
15"Nyx materialised beside her, their"
16"Aurora pushed a low-hanging branch"
17"Sap oozed from the break,"
18"Her mouth watered."
19"She swallowed hard."
ratio0.887
70.42% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences142
matches
0"Before Aurora could protest, Nyx"
1"Before she could respond, the"
ratio0.014
77.07% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Grapes the size of apples hung heavy from vines that writhed like living things, their skins splitting to reveal glistening flesh that pulsed faintly."
1"The chefs watched them go, their expressions a mixture of pity and envy that made Aurora's skin crawl."
2"She stopped at the crest of a particularly large hill, her silver hair stirring in a breeze that carried the sound of laughter and screams."
3"Trees with trunks of twisted silver grew in perfect rows, their branches heavy with fruit that shone like jewels."
4"Memories flooded her unbidden, her father's courtroom voice, her mother's disappointed sigh when she'd announced she was dropping out of Pre-Law, Eva's desperat…"
5"It split open of its own accord, revealing seeds that looked like tiny screaming faces."
6"She landed hard on damp grass that smelled of normal rain and London pollution."
16.30% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Nyx materialised, their shadowy form flickering between solid and incorporeal"
1"one croaked, his voice thick with phlegm and want"
2"the female chef said, her voice dropping to something almost sympathetic"
3"Nyx observed, their form rippling"
4"Nyx finished, their whisper turning harsh"
2.46% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"one croaked (croak)"
3"Aurora demanded (demand)"
4"Nyx observed (observe)"
5"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
6"she gasped (gasp)"
7"the half-Fae gasped (gasp)"
8"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.295
leniency0.59
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.295
79.6561%