Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHQFYQP21GT4YTA1GMF3RTK

Run Details

Duration:
41.8s
Cost:
$0.007642
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain hammered down on the slick pavements of Soho, turning every streetlight into a fractured halo. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted after the hooded figure, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the green neon glow of The Raven's Nest behind her. Water streamed off her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, stinging her brown eyes, but she didn't slow. Eighteen years on the force had taught her to ignore the burn in her lungs. The suspect had bolted from the bar's back alley exit two minutes ago. Quinn had spotted him the moment he slipped through the crowd—nervous glances, that telltale bulge under his jacket. Something supernatural. She could smell it on him like ozone before a storm. "Met Police! Stop!" Her voice cut through the deluge, sharp as the jawline that clenched with determination. The figure didn't break stride. Instead, he veered left onto Charing Cross Road, shoulders hunched against the downpour. Quinn's worn leather watch caught on her sleeve as she pumped her arms harder. Military precision kept her strides even despite the treacherous footing. Three years since Morris vanished in that warehouse fog, and every chase since felt like clawing at the edges of something vast and unseen. This one felt different. The way the suspect moved—too fluid, like the rain bent around him. Pedestrians scattered as they charged past, umbrellas tilting like startled birds. A taxi horn blared when the suspect darted across the road without looking. Quinn followed, her heart slamming against her ribs. The figure's hood slipped back for a split second, revealing a flash of olive skin and short curly dark hair. Tomás Herrera. The off-the-books medic. She'd seen his file. Lost his NHS license after treating patients who shouldn't exist. The clique's healer. He knew she was onto him. Good. Herrera cut down a side street toward Camden, his Saint Christopher medallion probably swinging wildly beneath his soaked shirt. Quinn's legs ached as she closed the gap slightly. The scar on his left forearm—she'd read about that knife attack in his records. Probably from one of his shady supernatural clients. The streets narrowed, Victorian buildings looming like judgmental sentinels. Rainwater gushed from gutters, flooding the gutters. Herrera's footsteps slapped ahead, echoing off brick walls. Quinn's breath came in controlled bursts. She wouldn't lose him. Not tonight. He disappeared around a corner near the old stable market. Quinn skidded after him, nearly colliding with a cluster of drenched tourists. "Out of the way!" She flashed her badge without slowing. The market's fairy lights blurred in the storm, casting oily reflections on the wet cobblestones. There—a flicker of movement near a maintenance door half-hidden behind overflowing bins. Herrera wrenched it open and vanished inside. Quinn reached it seconds later, gun drawn now, the metal cold and reassuring in her palm. The door led to a derelict stairwell, concrete steps descending into blackness. A faint glow pulsed from below, unnatural green and violet hues that made her skin crawl. She paused at the threshold. Rain lashed her back. This wasn't standard procedure. No backup. No warrant. Just her and the dark, and the certainty that Herrera was part of whatever had swallowed Morris whole. "Damn it," she muttered, voice low. The air from below carried strange scents—incense, ozone, something metallic like blood and herbs. Her hand tightened on her weapon. Follow or call it in? The sensible choice was clear. Yet the memory of Morris's last transmission—static-filled screams about shadows that moved wrong—pushed her forward. She took the first step down. Then another. The stairwell spiraled deeper, the walls transitioning from damp concrete to ancient brickwork etched with symbols that hurt to look at directly. Her military bearing kept her shoulders square even as unease coiled in her gut. The distant thrum of voices reached her, layered with sounds that weren't quite human. At the bottom, a rusted turnstile blocked the way. A handwritten sign in faded ink read: Bone Token Required. Beyond it stretched the Veil Market, an abandoned Tube platform transformed into a throbbing hive of illicit trade. Stalls crammed the platform edge where trains once stopped, their awnings stitched from what looked like living fabric that shifted colors in the torchlight. Vendors hawked glowing vials, whispering grimoires bound in scales, and artifacts that hummed with barely contained power. The air hung thick with smoke from braziers burning impossible colors. Quinn's brown eyes narrowed. She'd heard rumors of this place— the underground market that shifted locations with every full moon. Never thought she'd see it. The sheer wrongness of it set her teeth on edge. Creatures that weren't entirely human haggled in shadowed corners. A woman with eyes like fractured mirrors argued price with a hunched figure whose fingers ended in talons. Further down, a stall displayed jars of what appeared to be starlight trapped in liquid. Herrera was twenty yards ahead, weaving through the crowd with practiced ease. His curly hair dripped onto his shoulders as he glanced back. Their eyes met across the throng. Warm brown met hardened detective stare. He mouthed something—she couldn't read it—but the fear in his expression was clear. He knew her face. Knew what she represented. Quinn vaulted the turnstile, ignoring the shouts that erupted from a pair of hooded sentries. One of them had skin that rippled like water. "Hey! Token!" She didn't stop. The market's chaotic energy swallowed her. Vendors cried their wares in languages that twisted in her ears. A stall to her left offered banned alchemical substances that bubbled and sang. Another displayed maps that redrew themselves based on the buyer's intent. The photographs on the walls of The Raven's Nest suddenly made more sense—many of these faces appeared there too, captured in black and white as if the bar served as both haven and lookout. Herrera ducked behind a pillar covered in moving graffiti. Quinn pushed through a cluster of buyers examining enchanted goods, her shoulder brushing against something scaled and cold. The contact sent ice down her spine. She kept her weapon low but ready, badge held high in her other hand. "Police! Move aside!" The crowd reacted with a mixture of disdain and panic. Some melted into alcoves. Others glared with eyes that glowed faintly. A vendor with a face like weathered leather spat at her feet. "Flatfoot. This ground ain't yours." She ignored him. The scar on Herrera's arm flashed in her memory again. He'd treated supernatural patients. Healed things that bled starlight or screamed in frequencies that shattered glass. If she caught him, maybe he'd talk. Maybe he'd explain what happened to Morris. The platform curved ahead. Old Tube signs had been repurposed—Mind the Gap now read Mind the Spirits in dripping red paint. Herrera broke into a run again, heading toward a tunnel entrance draped with heavy velvet curtains. Smoke billowed from within, carrying the sharp tang of herbs and something sweeter, like rotting flowers. Quinn's lungs burned as she pursued. The rain above felt distant now, replaced by the subterranean damp that clung to everything. Her salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her skull. The military precision of her movements faltered only once when a spectral hand reached from a stall, translucent fingers brushing her jacket. She shook it off, heart racing. "Tomás Herrera! Stop right there!" Her voice echoed off the curved ceiling. He didn't. Instead, he plunged through the velvet curtains into the tunnel beyond. Quinn followed without hesitation now. The decision was made. Dangerous territory or not, this lead was too hot to drop. The tunnel opened into a series of connected chambers, each more bizarre than the last. The first held rows of information brokers hunched over glowing crystals that displayed moving images of London's hidden underbelly. One broker looked up as she passed—a young man with short curly dark brown hair not unlike Herrera's. No, wait. It was him. He'd doubled back somehow, using the market's warren of passages. Their eyes locked again. This time Quinn was close enough to see the Saint Christopher medallion glinting against his olive skin, rain and sweat mixing on his throat. "Why run, Herrera?" she called, voice steady despite the adrenaline flooding her system. "What are you hiding?" He backed away, hands raised. The scar along his left forearm stood out pale against his skin. "You don't understand, Detective. This isn't your world. Go back before it swallows you too." She advanced, gun steady. "My partner disappeared because of people like you. Tell me what you know about the clique. About the supernatural shit bleeding into my city." Around them, the market's denizens watched with undisguised interest. A creature with too many joints in its limbs clicked its teeth. A woman selling black market grimoires closed her stall abruptly, eyes darting between them. Herrera's warm brown eyes held genuine regret. "Morris... he got too close. Like you. The Veil doesn't forgive curiosity." Quinn's jaw tightened, sharp angles catching the eerie light. Three years of dead ends, of cases that dissolved into mist and memory loss. Here was the thread. She wouldn't let it slip. "Talk. Or I drag you out in cuffs. Your choice." He glanced at the watching crowd, then back to her. His hand moved slowly to his medallion, fingers tracing the saint's image. For a moment, the paramedic in him seemed to war with the fugitive. Then his expression hardened. "I'm sorry, Quinn. For what it's worth." Before she could react, he smashed a small glass orb against the ground. Violet smoke exploded outward, thick and cloying. It burned her eyes, filled her lungs with the taste of lightning. She staggered, coughing, swinging her weapon in a wide arc. When the smoke cleared seconds later, Herrera was gone. But the market had noticed her now. Truly noticed her. The sentries from the entrance approached, their forms shifting between human and something with too many teeth. The information brokers whispered behind crystal screens. A stall owner nearby—a tall figure in a hooded cloak—extended a bone token toward her with long, pale fingers. "First time down here, Detective?" The voice was silk over razors. "The market always collects its due from those who enter without invitation." Quinn straightened, wiping rain and smoke from her face. Her bearing remained unbroken, military straight. The gun didn't waver. Around her, the Veil Market pulsed with dangerous life—enchanted goods shimmering, banned substances glowing, information flowing like poisoned wine between stalls. She had crossed the threshold. No going back now. The rain-soaked streets above felt like another universe. Here, in these abandoned tunnels beneath Camden, the rules were different. Ancient. Hungry. Her brown eyes scanned the crowd for any sign of Herrera's curly hair or the glint of his medallion. Nothing. But the scar on his arm, the fear in his voice—they lingered. He knew about Morris. Knew what had taken her partner. Quinn holstered her weapon but kept her hand near it. She faced the hooded figure with the bone token. "Tell me how this works. What do I need to pay to get answers?" The figure's hood shifted, revealing features that changed when she blinked. "Everything, Detective Quinn. The market always takes everything." She swallowed hard. The weight of her watch felt heavier on her wrist, a reminder of time slipping away. Morris had been gone three years. Three years of chasing shadows that left supernatural footprints. This time, the shadows had faces. This time, they ran from her in underground markets lit by impossible lights. She would follow them deeper if she had to. Even if it meant becoming something the Metropolitan Police wouldn't recognize. The rain continued to fall above, oblivious. Down here, in the Veil Market's twisting passages, Detective Harlow Quinn took her first deliberate step into the unknown. The crowd parted slightly, watching this new player in their dangerous game. Herrera had escaped her grasp tonight. But the market held secrets. And secrets, she knew from long experience, always left traces. She'd find his. She'd find all of theirs. Her sharp jaw set with renewed purpose as she moved deeper into the throng, the green and violet lights painting her salt-and-pepper hair in alien colors. The chase had changed venue, but not its nature. She was the hunter. They were the hunted. Even if the territory now hunted back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2061
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
2"slowly"
3"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2061
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"fractured"
count2
1
word"treacherous"
count1
2
word"charged"
count1
3
word"looming"
count1
4
word"sentinels"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count2
9
word"standard"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"practiced ease"
count1
12
word"chaotic"
count1
13
word"down her spine"
count1
14
word"shattered"
count1
15
word"velvet"
count2
16
word"spectral"
count1
17
word"racing"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
19
word"glinting"
count1
20
word"tracing"
count1
21
word"crystal"
count1
22
word"silk"
count1
23
word"scanned"
count1
24
word"glint"
count1
25
word"weight"
count1
26
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"treacherous"
2"charged"
3"looming"
4"sentinels"
5"footsteps"
6"echoing"
7"flicker"
8"pulsed"
9"standard"
10"etched"
11"practiced ease"
12"chaotic"
13"down her spine"
14"shattered"
15"velvet"
16"spectral"
17"racing"
18"echoed"
19"glinting"
20"tracing"
21"crystal"
22"silk"
23"scanned"
24"glint"
25"weight"
26"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences194
matches
0"d with determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences194
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"happened to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences206
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2044
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1906
uniqueNames28
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow2
Quinn18
Raven2
Nest2
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Morris6
Herrera14
Camden2
Saint2
Christopher2
Victorian1
Bone1
Token1
Required1
Veil3
Market3
Tube2
Mind2
Gap1
Spirits1
London1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Detective2
Three3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Morris"
5"Herrera"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Market"
9"Tube"
10"Police"
places
0"Soho"
1"Charing"
2"Cross"
3"Road"
4"Camden"
5"Veil"
6"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
79.08% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences141
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like clawing at the edges of somet"
1"quite human"
2"looked like living fabric that shifted co"
3"felt like another universe"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2044
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences206
matches(empty)
93.01% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean40.88
std19.44
cv0.476
sampleLengths
073
144
235
364
474
57
650
736
847
963
1035
1151
1258
1389
1477
1556
1626
1778
1851
1938
2043
2153
2256
2312
2433
2567
2628
2717
2832
2928
3035
3119
3232
3310
3439
357
3642
3762
3823
3940
4030
4142
4233
4319
4434
4539
4638
4729
4843
497
98.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences194
matches
0"been repurposed"
1"was made"
2"was gone"
3"been gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs354
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences206
ratio0.068
matches
0"Quinn had spotted him the moment he slipped through the crowd—nervous glances, that telltale bulge under his jacket."
1"The way the suspect moved—too fluid, like the rain bent around him."
2"The scar on his left forearm—she'd read about that knife attack in his records."
3"There—a flicker of movement near a maintenance door half-hidden behind overflowing bins."
4"The air from below carried strange scents—incense, ozone, something metallic like blood and herbs."
5"Yet the memory of Morris's last transmission—static-filled screams about shadows that moved wrong—pushed her forward."
6"She'd heard rumors of this place— the underground market that shifted locations with every full moon."
7"He mouthed something—she couldn't read it—but the fear in his expression was clear."
8"The photographs on the walls of The Raven's Nest suddenly made more sense—many of these faces appeared there too, captured in black and white as if the bar served as both haven and lookout."
9"Old Tube signs had been repurposed—Mind the Gap now read Mind the Spirits in dripping red paint."
10"One broker looked up as she passed—a young man with short curly dark brown hair not unlike Herrera's."
11"A stall owner nearby—a tall figure in a hooded cloak—extended a bone token toward her with long, pale fingers."
12"Around her, the Veil Market pulsed with dangerous life—enchanted goods shimmering, banned substances glowing, information flowing like poisoned wine between stalls."
13"But the scar on his arm, the fear in his voice—they lingered."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1933
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair."
adverbCount56
adverbRatio0.028970512157268494
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.011381272633212623
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences206
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences206
mean9.92
std5.82
cv0.586
sampleLengths
017
125
216
315
413
518
62
711
817
95
1013
1114
1210
1324
144
1512
1611
1713
188
1920
202
213
224
2310
243
256
261
2719
289
2914
308
319
327
338
346
354
362
3710
3812
3910
4015
4112
427
4316
4412
4516
465
474
484
492
62.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.39805825242718446
totalSentences206
uniqueOpeners82
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences182
matches
0"Instead, he veered left onto"
1"Probably from one of his"
2"Just her and the dark,"
3"Further down, a stall displayed"
4"Maybe he'd explain what happened"
5"Instead, he plunged through the"
6"Then his expression hardened."
7"Truly noticed her."
ratio0.044
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount47
totalSentences182
matches
0"She could smell it on"
1"Her voice cut through the"
2"She'd seen his file."
3"He knew she was onto"
4"She wouldn't lose him."
5"He disappeared around a corner"
6"She flashed her badge without"
7"She paused at the threshold."
8"she muttered, voice low"
9"Her hand tightened on her"
10"She took the first step"
11"Her military bearing kept her"
12"She'd heard rumors of this"
13"His curly hair dripped onto"
14"Their eyes met across the"
15"He mouthed something—she couldn't read"
16"He knew her face."
17"She didn't stop."
18"She kept her weapon low"
19"She ignored him."
ratio0.258
69.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount142
totalSentences182
matches
0"The rain hammered down on"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted after"
2"Water streamed off her closely"
3"The suspect had bolted from"
4"Quinn had spotted him the"
5"She could smell it on"
6"Her voice cut through the"
7"The figure didn't break stride."
8"Quinn's worn leather watch caught"
9"Military precision kept her strides"
10"This one felt different."
11"The way the suspect moved—too"
12"Pedestrians scattered as they charged"
13"A taxi horn blared when"
14"Quinn followed, her heart slamming"
15"The figure's hood slipped back"
16"The off-the-books medic."
17"She'd seen his file."
18"The clique's healer."
19"He knew she was onto"
ratio0.78
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences182
matches
0"If she caught him, maybe"
1"Before she could react, he"
2"Even if it meant becoming"
3"Even if the territory now"
ratio0.022
64.36% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences91
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted after the hooded figure, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the green neon glow of The Raven's Nest behind her."
1"A faint glow pulsed from below, unnatural green and violet hues that made her skin crawl."
2"The stairwell spiraled deeper, the walls transitioning from damp concrete to ancient brickwork etched with symbols that hurt to look at directly."
3"Vendors hawked glowing vials, whispering grimoires bound in scales, and artifacts that hummed with barely contained power."
4"She'd heard rumors of this place— the underground market that shifted locations with every full moon."
5"Vendors cried their wares in languages that twisted in her ears."
6"The photographs on the walls of The Raven's Nest suddenly made more sense—many of these faces appeared there too, captured in black and white as if the bar serv…"
7"Quinn pushed through a cluster of buyers examining enchanted goods, her shoulder brushing against something scaled and cold."
8"The first held rows of information brokers hunched over glowing crystals that displayed moving images of London's hidden underbelly."
9"Three years of dead ends, of cases that dissolved into mist and memory loss."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she muttered, voice low"
1"she called, voice steady despite the adrenaline flooding her system"
94.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.111
85.6950%