Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHQTM9PMK0XPFR2TKQX8YCW

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Duration:
1m 42s
Cost:
$0.019065
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed past the final screen of leaves and crossed between the pair of ancient oak standing stones. The Heartstone Pendant swung forward on its silver chain and settled against her sternum as she released it. Its deep crimson surface radiated steady heat that travelled through the metal links and into her collarbone. She had followed the growing warmth from the edge of Richmond Park hours earlier, the pendant tugging at her attention until the delivery run from the Golden Empress restaurant blurred into a sequence of wrong turns and narrowing trails. Now the clearing opened before her in a perfect circle, wildflowers rising ankle-high in every direction with colours that held no place in ordinary soil. Rory stopped in the first clear patch and turned in place, counting the stones that formed the boundary. Eight total. Some leaned at odd angles. Moss coated their bases in uneven layers, and the ground between them felt springy under her boots. A single rustle broke the stillness to her left near the tallest stone. The sound carried the texture of dry stems snapping, yet every wildflower within reach stayed motionless. Rory held her position and listened. The rustle came again, closer this time, but no footfalls followed. She stepped sideways toward the noise, eyes fixed on the space beside the stone. Nothing moved when she stared directly at it. The pendant's warmth sharpened into a distinct throb against her skin. She circled the boundary next, placing one boot deliberately in front of the other while keeping the pendant visible. At the fourth stone the surface felt warmer than any stone should, even after the long day. A faint vibration travelled up her fingers when she brushed the moss. She pulled her hand back and flexed her wrist, the small crescent scar there pulling tight. The rustle returned behind her. She turned fast. A low shape flickered at the far edge of the clearing where two stones stood close together. It vanished the moment her eyes locked on the spot. Rory continued the circuit without comment. The fifth stone carried a jagged ridge along its top. As she passed it a new sound joined the first: a click like two hard surfaces meeting. The click repeated three times in a tight cluster, then stopped. The pendant rotated on its own around the chain until the crimson face pointed at the jagged stone. Light flared once inside the gem, brief and red enough to stain the flowers around her boots. When the light died the click came again, now from two places at once. She paused at the centre of the ring and lifted the pendant higher. The warmth had turned into a slow pulse that matched the clicks outside. Rory scanned the gaps between stones. One gap showed the wildflowers parting as though something moved through them, yet no shadow marked the ground. She stepped toward the gap. The stems closed behind her with a soft collective whisper. She reversed direction and corrected her path toward the stone she had entered through earlier. The flowers resisted this time, their thin stalks twisting to block her boots until she forced a passage through them. The pendant's throb increased. Heat spread down her arm now, and the silver chain grew hot enough to register against her neck. She reached the boundary and set her palm flat on the stone that should have marked her way back. The surface yielded under slight pressure, the moss shifting as if the whole thing had softened. A click sounded directly above her head. Rory jerked her hand away and scanned upward. The top of the stone leaned lower than it had on her first circuit. The other stones had closed in as well, the spaces between them narrower by paces she could measure with her outstretched arms. She tried the next gap. The same resistance met her, the air thickening until it pressed against her chest. The pendant burned now, forcing her to cup it loose in her palm rather than let it rest against skin. A new scent rose from the flowers, thick and cloying like overripe fruit left in the sun too long. She breathed through her mouth and kept moving, angling toward the largest stone where the light had first flared. The flowers there had begun to curl their petals inward, edges darkening to the same deep crimson as the gem. One petal brushed her boot and left a faint smear. Rory reached the centre again and stopped. The clicks had grown into a steady pattern that circled the entire clearing without pause. One form appeared at the edge of her vision, tall and thin, slipping from behind a stone on the far side. She turned her head. It disappeared before the movement could finish. Another form appeared on her right, advancing by inches with each click. She pivoted to face it. Nothing stood there when she looked full on. The forms continued their slow inward spiral each time she glanced away. She lowered the pendant and gripped it by the chain instead, the links cool in contrast to the gem. The air had grown heavier still, pressing moisture against her face. She chose a single stone at random and walked straight for it, counting her steps aloud under her breath. At step five the ground rose slightly beneath her, and the stone she aimed for had moved sideways by a clear body-length. Rory halted and looked back the way she had come. The path of crushed flowers she expected had closed over, leaves knitting together as though the growth had never been disturbed. A layered whisper rose from the circle. Multiple voices spoke the same word at once, stretching syllables into something that approximated her name without quite reaching it. The sound came from no single direction. The pendant flared brighter in response, throwing red light across the forward edges of the approaching forms. They resolved for an instant into long limbs and narrow torsos that bent at wrong angles, then dissolved back into shadow when the glow faded. The clicks quickened. Rory backed away from the advancing edges until her heels struck the raised ground at the centre. The flowers there had begun to open and close in time with the pulse from the pendant. She turned once more, marking the position of each stone. All eight had shifted inward, the ring now tight enough that an outstretched hand would touch stone on both sides. The air tasted sweet and wrong. A single pale shape emerged from the seam of the nearest stone, fingers unfolding from the rock like roots seeking soil. The digits bent backward at each joint as the hand extended toward the pendant.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
91.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"throb"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"scanned"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count2
7
word"resolved"
count1
8
word"quickened"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"perfect"
2"throb"
3"flickered"
4"pulse"
5"scanned"
6"whisper"
7"resolved"
8"quickened"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions0
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount1122
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.8
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory9
One3
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1122
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
4.59% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs12
mean93.5
std15.53
cv0.166
sampleLengths
053
1106
279
399
493
5100
6108
7107
891
9102
1079
11105
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"been disturbed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs172
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences82
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1124
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.029359430604982206
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0035587188612099642
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean13.68
std6.44
cv0.471
sampleLengths
018
118
217
339
425
518
62
75
817
913
1016
116
1211
1314
148
1511
1619
1717
1812
1916
205
213
2217
2310
246
2510
2617
2711
2818
2917
3014
3113
3213
336
3418
355
3610
3715
3820
394
4018
4119
4216
437
448
4514
4622
475
4814
4920
43.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.25609756097560976
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners21
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences81
matches
0"Its deep crimson surface radiated"
1"She had followed the growing"
2"She stepped sideways toward the"
3"She circled the boundary next,"
4"She pulled her hand back"
5"She turned fast."
6"It vanished the moment her"
7"She paused at the centre"
8"She stepped toward the gap."
9"She reversed direction and corrected"
10"She reached the boundary and"
11"She tried the next gap."
12"She breathed through her mouth"
13"She turned her head."
14"It disappeared before the movement"
15"She pivoted to face it."
16"She lowered the pendant and"
17"She chose a single stone"
18"They resolved for an instant"
19"She turned once more, marking"
ratio0.247
21.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences81
matches
0"Rory pushed past the final"
1"The Heartstone Pendant swung forward"
2"Its deep crimson surface radiated"
3"She had followed the growing"
4"Rory stopped in the first"
5"Some leaned at odd angles."
6"Moss coated their bases in"
7"A single rustle broke the"
8"The sound carried the texture"
9"Rory held her position and"
10"The rustle came again, closer"
11"She stepped sideways toward the"
12"Nothing moved when she stared"
13"The pendant's warmth sharpened into"
14"She circled the boundary next,"
15"A faint vibration travelled up"
16"She pulled her hand back"
17"The rustle returned behind her."
18"She turned fast."
19"A low shape flickered at"
ratio0.877
61.73% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"Now the clearing opened before"
ratio0.012
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Its deep crimson surface radiated steady heat that travelled through the metal links and into her collarbone."
1"Now the clearing opened before her in a perfect circle, wildflowers rising ankle-high in every direction with colours that held no place in ordinary soil."
2"She reached the boundary and set her palm flat on the stone that should have marked her way back."
3"The surface yielded under slight pressure, the moss shifting as if the whole thing had softened."
4"The path of crushed flowers she expected had closed over, leaves knitting together as though the growth had never been disturbed."
5"Multiple voices spoke the same word at once, stretching syllables into something that approximated her name without quite reaching it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
84.2540%