Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHR4ZH5K4195X66M3DSCXYF

Run Details

Duration:
36.0s
Cost:
$0.008172
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn gripped the collar of her trench coat tighter against the relentless downpour. Rain hammered the Soho pavements, turning every alley into a slick trap. Her boots splashed through puddles that reflected the garish glow of neon signs. Up ahead, the suspect—a lean figure in a hooded jacket—darted between clusters of late-night revellers spilling out of pubs. Tomás Herrera. She’d clocked him leaving The Raven’s Nest twenty minutes ago, his Saint Christopher medallion catching the light as he slipped out the side door. “Stop! Police!” Quinn shouted, her voice cutting through the storm. The words dissolved into the traffic hum. Herrera didn’t glance back. He vaulted a low barrier and vanished down an alley behind a shuttered bookstore. Quinn cursed under her breath and gave chase, legs pumping with the military precision drilled into her over eighteen years on the force. The alley narrowed, brick walls closing in like jaws. Water cascaded from overflowing gutters, soaking her salt-and-pepper cropped hair. She slipped once, catching herself on a rusted drainpipe, the impact jarring her wristwatch against the metal. The leather strap held. Good. That watch had belonged to Morris. She wasn’t about to lose it chasing some off-the-books medic who patched up criminals. Herrera emerged onto Charing Cross Road, weaving through taxis that honked in protest. Quinn followed, breath burning in her lungs. The suspect’s curly dark hair plastered to his scalp, olive skin glistening under streetlights. He clutched his left forearm, the scar there probably itching in the wet. She’d read his file. Former paramedic. Lost his licence treating things that shouldn’t exist. Things that had killed her partner three years back in a warehouse that still haunted her dreams. He cut left toward Camden, boots slapping wet concrete. The streets grew seedier, graffiti-tagged shutters rattling in the wind. Quinn’s lungs protested, but she pushed harder. This wasn’t just a pursuit. Herrera linked to the clique—the loose network of supernatural operators she’d been building a case against for months. If she could flip him, the whole house of cards might tumble. Thunder cracked overhead. Lightning briefly illuminated his retreating form as he bounded down a set of concrete stairs beside a derelict newsstand. The stairs descended into what looked like a forgotten maintenance entrance for the Tube. Quinn slowed at the top, chest heaving. No uniforms in sight. Backup was minutes away at best. She radioed her location anyway, voice clipped. “Suspect heading underground near Camden High Street. Pursuing on foot.” The response crackled with static. She ignored it and descended. The rain lessened to a drip as the stairwell swallowed her. Concrete gave way to rusted iron steps that spiralled deeper. A faint green glow emanated from below, not the usual sickly yellow of emergency lighting. This was something else. Wrong. At the bottom, a heavy steel door stood ajar. Beyond it, voices murmured in languages she didn’t recognise. The air smelled of ozone and incense, undercut with something metallic. Blood, maybe. Or rust. Quinn drew her baton, leaving her firearm holstered. Too many civilians. Too many unknowns. She nudged the door wider with her boot. The hidden passage opened into a vast chamber that had once been an abandoned Tube platform. Now it pulsed with illicit life. Stalls lined the curved walls, draped in black velvet and strung with lanterns that burned without flame. Creatures—things that looked almost human but weren’t—haggled over vials of glowing liquid and artefacts that hummed with power. A woman with eyes like fractured mirrors offered what looked like a human femur carved with runes. A man whose shadow moved independently bartered a bundle of dried herbs that whispered. The Veil Market. She’d heard rumours during the Morris investigation. Whispers of a black market that shifted locations with every full moon. Entry by bone token, whatever that meant. How the hell had Herrera gotten in without one? Or had he? Quinn scanned the crowd. There—Herrera’s hooded jacket disappearing behind a stall selling caged sprites that buzzed angrily against their bars. She plunged in after him, shoulders brushing against a hooded figure who snarled something in what might have been ancient Greek. The market’s press of bodies amplified every sound: clinking glass, wet slapping of tentacles in tanks, low growls from things best left unseen. Her bearing stayed rigid, jaw sharp and set. Years of service had taught her to project control even when her pulse hammered against her ribs. This place set every instinct screaming. The air itself felt charged, like stepping into a storm cloud. She kept moving, eyes locked on the flash of olive skin and curly hair ahead. Herrera ducked under a rope barrier marked with symbols that made her eyes water. Behind it lay another tunnel, narrower, lined with more stalls. These ones dealt in darker wares: banned alchemical substances in stoppered crystal bottles, scrolls that bled when touched, information traded in whispers that could ruin lives or end them. Quinn vaulted the barrier. A vendor with too many joints in his fingers reached for her, but she flashed her warrant card. The gesture meant nothing here. The creature laughed, a sound like breaking bones. “Flatfoot. You’ll die down here.” She ignored him and pressed on. The tunnel sloped downward, the old Tube tracks long since torn up and replaced with flagstones slick from seepage. Rain still found its way in, dripping from cracks in the ceiling far above. Her boots squelched. The green neon sign from The Raven’s Nest above ground seemed a world away now. That dimly lit bar with its old maps and black-and-white photographs felt almost safe in comparison. Herrera paused at a junction ahead. He glanced back for the first time. Their eyes met across twenty yards of forbidden commerce. His warm brown gaze held no fear, only grim resignation. The Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his collar as he turned and bolted left, toward a cluster of tents that smelled of sulphur. Quinn sprinted after him. A cart overturned in her path, spilling iridescent powders that burned where they touched her skin. She hissed but didn’t slow. The powders left tiny welts on her hands. She’d deal with that later. Right now, every second counted. The market’s atmosphere thickened. Conversations died as patrons noticed the detective in their midst. Some faded into shadows. Others watched with predatory interest. A stallholder with scales instead of skin offered her a bone token on a chain, grinning with too many teeth. “Lost, copper? Market’s no place for your kind.” She shoved past, baton ready. The tunnel opened into a larger cavern where the old platform had been widened. Here the真正 dangerous deals happened. Figures in deep hoods exchanged envelopes that shimmered. A creature that might once have been human lay sprawled on a table while Tomás Herrera—because of course it was him—worked on a wound that wept black ichor instead of blood. Quinn skidded to a halt at the edge of the space. Lantern light played across Herrera’s concentrated face. His scarred left forearm flexed as he stitched with thread that glowed silver. The patient’s breathing rattled like dry leaves. Around them, armed guards—hulking things with horns—eyed her with open hostility. “Tomás Herrera,” she called, voice steady despite the adrenaline surge. “Metropolitan Police. You’re under arrest on suspicion of aiding and abetting criminal enterprises. Put your hands where I can see them.” Herrera didn’t look up immediately. He tied off the suture with practised care, then wiped his hands on a cloth that promptly dissolved into smoke. Only then did he turn. The medallion caught the light again, a small defiance against the dark. “Detective Quinn.” His accent carried traces of Seville, softened by years in London. “You shouldn’t be here. This place doesn’t play by your rules.” She took a measured step forward. The crowd had formed a loose circle now. No escape for either of them. Rain drummed harder somewhere above, sending fresh rivulets down the walls. The sound echoed like distant gunfire. “My rules apply everywhere,” she said. “You ran from a police officer. That alone gives me cause. Add in what I’ve seen tonight...” She gestured at the market with her free hand. “We both know this goes deeper. Your little sideline treating things that killed my partner. DS Morris. Remember that name?” Something flickered across Herrera’s face. Regret? Recognition? His warm brown eyes dropped to the scar on his forearm, then lifted again. “Morris wasn’t supposed to die. None of them were. But you’re hunting the wrong people, Detective. The clique isn’t what you think.” Quinn’s grip tightened on the baton. The weight of three years of dead ends, of nightmares where her partner dissolved into shadow and screams, pressed against her chest. This market, with its bone tokens and whispering herbs, held answers. She could feel it in the unnatural air. Behind Herrera, the wounded creature on the table stirred. Its eyes—vertical slits—fixed on her. A low hiss escaped its lipless mouth. One guard shifted, hand moving toward a curved blade at his belt. She had seconds. Follow him deeper into this rabbit hole, risk whatever dangers lurked in these tunnels where the Market moved with the moon’s phases, or try to drag him out by force through a growing mob that clearly wanted her gone. Permanently. The detective’s sharp jaw clenched. Water dripped from her closely cropped hair onto her collar. Her worn leather watch ticked steadily against her pulse. Morris’s watch. “Last chance, Herrera. Come quietly. Or I swear I’ll bring this entire place down around us.” He smiled then, small and sad. “You don’t understand what you’re threatening. But fine. Chase me if you must.” With that, he snatched a handful of powder from a nearby vendor’s tray and hurled it at her feet. It exploded into brilliant green smoke that stung her eyes and burned her throat. Quinn staggered, coughing. When the cloud cleared, Herrera had vanished into a side passage marked with runes that pulsed like living veins. The market’s denizens closed in. Growls rose. Tentacles slithered across stone. Quinn coughed once more, eyes watering, but her military posture never wavered. She wiped her face with a wet sleeve and stared into the dark tunnel where the suspect had fled. Unfamiliar territory. Potentially fatal. The kind of place where detectives disappeared and cases went cold forever. She thought of Morris. Of the unexplained circumstances that had left her partner broken on a warehouse floor while something ancient laughed in the rafters. Then she thought of the months spent building her case against the clique. All roads led here, to this underground bazaar of the damned. Quinn rolled her shoulders once, baton held high, and stepped into the passage. The green glow swallowed her. Behind her, the Veil Market continued its illicit trade, indifferent to the hunter now stalking its depths. Rain continued to fall on the city streets far above, washing away footprints and evidence alike. But down here, in the places between, evidence took different forms. Dangerous ones. The tunnel branched. She chose the left fork where faint footprints in the seepage still showed. Herrera’s stride. She quickened her pace, the sounds of the market fading behind her into a dull roar. Her breath came steady. Focus narrowed to the pursuit. A faint Spanish curse echoed ahead. She smiled without humour. Got you. The chase continued deeper into the unknown, where the line between hunter and hunted blurred with every dripping step. Quinn’s brown eyes gleamed with determination in the unnatural light. Whatever waited at the end of this tunnel—answers about Morris, proof against the clique, or something far worse—she would face it. The market’s schedule meant it would move again soon. She had until the next full moon to drag the truth into the light. Or die trying in the dark. Her watch ticked on. Morris’s watch. A reminder and a warning both. She rounded another bend. The passage widened into a chamber filled with stacked crates stamped with symbols that hurt to look at directly. Herrera stood at the far end, breathing hard, medallion clutched in one fist. No more running, his posture said. The scar on his forearm stood out livid against his olive skin. “You followed,” he said simply. No surprise in his voice. Quinn advanced slowly, baton lowered but ready. “End of the line, Tommy. Start talking. About the clique. About what really happened to my partner. About all of this.” She indicated the crates, the runes, the entire forbidden world she’d stumbled into. Herrera’s warm brown eyes met hers. For a long moment, only the drip of water and distant market noise filled the space between them. Then he spoke, words careful and heavy with the weight of secrets long kept. “You want the truth, Detective Quinn? Be careful. Some truths bite back.” The rain above intensified, a distant roar filtering through layers of earth and stone. Quinn took another step forward. The thriller of the chase had led her here, to this decisive moment in the belly of the supernatural beast. Whatever came next, she would not back down. Not with Morris’s watch heavy on her wrist and justice burning in her veins. The underground market held its breath around them. The decision to follow had been made. Now the real danger began.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said simply [simply]"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.118
93.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2231
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"angrily"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"angrily"
1"slowly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2231
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"pumping"
count1
1
word"glistening"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"fractured"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"charged"
count1
8
word"crystal"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"hulking"
count1
11
word"measured"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count2
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"weight"
count2
15
word"could feel"
count1
16
word"jaw clenched"
count1
17
word"wavered"
count1
18
word"depths"
count1
19
word"quickened"
count1
20
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"pumping"
1"glistening"
2"pulsed"
3"velvet"
4"fractured"
5"scanned"
6"pulse"
7"charged"
8"crystal"
9"shimmered"
10"hulking"
11"measured"
12"echoed"
13"flickered"
14"weight"
15"could feel"
16"jaw clenched"
17"wavered"
18"depths"
19"quickened"
20"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences208
matches
0"d with determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences208
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences218
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0.005
matches
0"Here the真正 dangerous deals happened."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2218
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount2030
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn18
Soho1
Herrera17
Raven2
Nest2
Saint2
Christopher2
Morris7
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Camden1
Tube3
Veil2
Market3
Greek1
Tomás2
Seville1
London1
Spanish1
Rain4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Tube"
8"Market"
9"Tomás"
10"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"Charing"
2"Cross"
3"Road"
4"Camden"
5"Seville"
6"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences143
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a forgotten maintenance entra"
1"looked like a human femur carved with run"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2218
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences218
matches(empty)
98.95% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean41.85
std20.77
cv0.496
sampleLengths
085
158
261
378
461
560
610
751
847
996
1041
1164
1257
1353
1435
155
1673
1756
1843
1943
208
2163
2249
2331
2442
2524
2637
2752
2821
2922
3047
3133
3243
3326
3416
3519
3655
3742
3816
3949
4064
4143
4212
4350
4429
4512
4654
4710
4841
4938
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences208
matches
0"been widened"
1"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs357
matches(empty)
38.01% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences218
ratio0.037
matches
0"Up ahead, the suspect—a lean figure in a hooded jacket—darted between clusters of late-night revellers spilling out of pubs."
1"Herrera linked to the clique—the loose network of supernatural operators she’d been building a case against for months."
2"Creatures—things that looked almost human but weren’t—haggled over vials of glowing liquid and artefacts that hummed with power."
3"There—Herrera’s hooded jacket disappearing behind a stall selling caged sprites that buzzed angrily against their bars."
4"A creature that might once have been human lay sprawled on a table while Tomás Herrera—because of course it was him—worked on a wound that wept black ichor instead of blood."
5"Around them, armed guards—hulking things with horns—eyed her with open hostility."
6"Its eyes—vertical slits—fixed on her."
7"Whatever waited at the end of this tunnel—answers about Morris, proof against the clique, or something far worse—she would face it."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2051
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"seedier, graffiti-tagged shutters"
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.030716723549488054
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.010726474890297415
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences218
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences218
mean10.17
std6.6
cv0.649
sampleLengths
015
112
213
319
42
524
610
77
84
914
1023
119
1210
1317
144
151
166
1714
1813
197
2014
2113
224
232
248
2517
269
2710
287
295
3018
3112
323
3319
3414
357
364
376
387
3910
405
415
4211
4310
4415
454
461
479
489
4911
63.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.38990825688073394
totalSentences218
uniqueOpeners85
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences190
matches
0"Too many civilians."
1"Too many unknowns."
2"Only then did he turn."
3"Then she thought of the"
4"Then he spoke, words careful"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount47
totalSentences190
matches
0"Her boots splashed through puddles"
1"She’d clocked him leaving The"
2"He vaulted a low barrier"
3"She slipped once, catching herself"
4"She wasn’t about to lose"
5"He clutched his left forearm,"
6"She’d read his file."
7"He cut left toward Camden,"
8"She radioed her location anyway,"
9"She ignored it and descended."
10"She nudged the door wider"
11"She’d heard rumours during the"
12"She plunged in after him,"
13"Her bearing stayed rigid, jaw"
14"She kept moving, eyes locked"
15"She ignored him and pressed"
16"Her boots squelched."
17"He glanced back for the"
18"Their eyes met across twenty"
19"His warm brown gaze held"
ratio0.247
52.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount155
totalSentences190
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn gripped the"
1"Her boots splashed through puddles"
2"She’d clocked him leaving The"
3"Quinn shouted, her voice cutting"
4"The words dissolved into the"
5"Herrera didn’t glance back."
6"He vaulted a low barrier"
7"Quinn cursed under her breath"
8"The alley narrowed, brick walls"
9"Water cascaded from overflowing gutters,"
10"She slipped once, catching herself"
11"The leather strap held."
12"That watch had belonged to"
13"She wasn’t about to lose"
14"Herrera emerged onto Charing Cross"
15"Quinn followed, breath burning in"
16"The suspect’s curly dark hair"
17"He clutched his left forearm,"
18"She’d read his file."
19"Things that had killed her"
ratio0.816
78.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences190
matches
0"If she could flip him,"
1"Now it pulsed with illicit"
2"Now the real danger began."
ratio0.016
54.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences89
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Her boots splashed through puddles that reflected the garish glow of neon signs."
1"She wasn’t about to lose it chasing some off-the-books medic who patched up criminals."
2"Herrera emerged onto Charing Cross Road, weaving through taxis that honked in protest."
3"The hidden passage opened into a vast chamber that had once been an abandoned Tube platform."
4"Creatures—things that looked almost human but weren’t—haggled over vials of glowing liquid and artefacts that hummed with power."
5"There—Herrera’s hooded jacket disappearing behind a stall selling caged sprites that buzzed angrily against their bars."
6"She plunged in after him, shoulders brushing against a hooded figure who snarled something in what might have been ancient Greek."
7"Herrera ducked under a rope barrier marked with symbols that made her eyes water."
8"These ones dealt in darker wares: banned alchemical substances in stoppered crystal bottles, scrolls that bled when touched, information traded in whispers that…"
9"It exploded into brilliant green smoke that stung her eyes and burned her throat."
10"Of the unexplained circumstances that had left her partner broken on a warehouse floor while something ancient laughed in the rafters."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn shouted, her voice cutting through the storm"
1"she called, voice steady despite the adrenaline surge"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.235
leniency0.471
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.118
85.9412%