Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHRHG7EDHR0DP4T6RDS1VQY

Run Details

Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.013700
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the last rung of the service ladder into the disused Camden Tube station, her boots grinding against scattered grit that felt like it had been undisturbed for years. The air pressed in thick and sour, thick with the tang of rust and stagnant water, and her flashlight beam carved narrow tunnels through the gloom. Tiled walls rose around her in peeling layers of cream and crimson, marred by years of unauthorized tags and water stains that bloomed like bruises. The platform stretched ahead, empty save for the hum of distant electricity and the occasional drip from an overhead vent. She adjusted the leather watch on her left wrist, a habit that steadied her, and advanced with the measured stride that had carried her through eighteen years of cases, each step placed as if she still answered to formation orders from her early days. The crime tape hung uneven across the platform edge, fluttering in a breeze that had no source. Beyond it, a sheet-covered form lay centered on the concrete, arms arranged along the sides with a precision Quinn found immediately wrong. She ducked under the tape. Eva Kowalski waited beside the body, her round glasses catching the flashlight’s edge in a dull flash, curly red hair pulled back but already escaping to frame her freckled cheeks. Her worn leather satchel rested at her feet, bulging with the weight of whatever reference volumes she carried even to a scene like this. Eva’s posture held a hint of tension, one hand hovering near her ear as if she might tuck the curls back at any moment. “Quinn,” Eva said, voice low and even, the way she spoke when presenting findings from the restricted archives. “I didn’t expect you this quickly. Command got the anonymous call at dusk, but nothing shows on any open reports yet. Victim’s male, forties, no ID on him. Initial look is robbery or a personal dispute. Throat cut, but the blood’s pooled here instead of arterial hits across the tiles. Maybe the attacker moved him after.” Quinn didn’t nod. She lifted the sheet’s edge with two gloved fingers. The man beneath stared upward with clouded eyes, his shirtfront stiff with dried blood around a single deep slash that ran from one collarbone to the other. The cut itself looked surgical, edges clean without the tearing she associated with hasty street blades. But the pooling beneath him sat wrong—too circular, as if he’d been placed rather than fallen. No spray marks on the nearby wall, no smearing consistent with a fight. His hands rested palms up, fingers slightly curled, no defensive wounds on the palms or forearms. She swept the beam along his legs: shoes still tied, laces unfrayed, soles unmarked by the station’s dust except where the heels touched down. “Moved him,” Quinn said. Her eyes tracked the concrete for drag trails or scuff marks. Nothing. The dust lay uniform around the body except for the dark ring of blood. “No footprints leading away, either. If someone carried him in, there’d be signs of weight shifting the dirt. And these tiles haven’t been cleaned in a decade.” Eva adjusted her glasses and stepped closer. “Could be the attacker wiped the area after. There’s some faint smudging near the edge of the pool—looks like a shoe or fabric sweep. And these herbs were in his coat pocket.” She held up a small cloth pouch, its contents spilling a bitter green dust that smelled of cloves and something sharper, metallic. “Not standard street blend. Probably something he bought down here. Kids use these tunnels for deals since the market stalls shut down years ago.” Quinn took the pouch, rolling the dust between her fingers. It left no residue on the latex, and when she held it to her light, faint streaks glinted like ground glass rather than plant matter. She set it aside. Her gaze moved past the body to a recessed alcove where old posters clung in tatters. One poster showed a faded Underground map, but someone had overwritten the station name with a looping symbol that pulled at her memory. Three interlocking curves, like a broken compass rose. She had seen it three years ago in the file on DS Morris’s disappearance, scrawled on a warehouse wall near another disused line. The case notes had dismissed it as gang tagging. She hadn’t. She turned back to the body. The victim’s jacket pockets had been turned out, but the seams showed no tearing. Instead, a small brass object lay beneath his left elbow, half-hidden in the folds. Quinn crouched and lifted it carefully. A compact compass, its casing clouded with verdigris, the face marked with fine etched lines that weren’t the usual cardinal directions. They resolved under her light as tight spirals and angular wards, almost like the protective brackets on evidence lockboxes but more fluid. The needle inside swung once, then held steady toward the far wall beyond the platform, where the tiles met a bricked-over tunnel entrance. “What’s that?” Eva asked. She had moved closer, her nervous gesture finally playing out as she tucked a curl behind her left ear. “Looks like something from a street vendor. A lot of the rough sleepers down here carry old tools. Could be the victim’s. Maybe he was a collector.” Quinn watched the needle. It didn’t waver with her movement, even when she rotated the compass slowly. The needle followed the same point on the wall, as if fixed on something she couldn’t see yet. The station’s usual draft should have been enough to shift any normal magnet. She slipped the compass into her coat pocket and straightened. Three long strides carried her to the bricked arch. The mortar lines looked fresh in places, but when she ran her gloved hand along the edge, her fingers caught on a faint groove—smooth, like wax rather than brick. It followed the same three-curve pattern from the poster and from Morris’s file. “Evidence doesn’t line up with your sweep theory,” Quinn said, keeping her voice flat. “If the attacker cleaned up, they’d have to be carrying water or solvent, but there’s no dilution in the blood pool. And this wound—single stroke, deep enough to sever the carotids instantly, but no hesitation marks. Street blades cause struggling. This looks done while the victim was still. Then repositioned here with the arms placed like they’re on an operating table. Someone knew how to stage.” Eva shook her head slightly, but her tone stayed measured. “I still think it’s a low-level dealer who crossed the wrong person. These tunnels attract that crowd. The herbs match samples from other overdose calls near here—users grind them for the effect, and sometimes the cuts turn bad. The lack of drag marks could mean the attacker lowered him gently after the cut. Maybe a partner who regretted it.” Quinn’s light caught a second detail as she returned to the body: a faint line of pale dust along the victim’s collar, different from the blood. She brushed it with a finger. It left a residue that felt warm for a second, then cooled. Not ash, not concrete grit. She straightened and swept the beam across the entire platform again, this time slower, cataloguing absences. No dropped weapon. No fibers snagged on the body. The only other object was a single bone fragment, thumb-sized, tucked against the rail. She lifted it. It wasn’t human bone—too porous, etched with tiny holes that formed another spiral when she tilted it. A token, perhaps for entry through some barrier she couldn’t yet map. Its presence here, separate from the body, suggested the victim had not arrived empty-handed. The compass in her pocket tugged again, a subtle pressure against her side. She brought it out once more. The needle pointed not just toward the wall but slightly upward now, at the precise height where the bricked arch met the ceiling. Quinn stepped closer to Eva, flashlight lowered so the beam didn’t blind them. “You said the smudging near the pool. Walk me through it again, exactly where you saw it.” Eva pointed with a pen from her satchel. “Two small arcs, right of the head. Like a cloth dragged outward.” Quinn knelt at the indicated spot. The blood there showed circular disruption, yes, but the edges of the disruption were feathered upward, as if pulled by suction rather than a flat wipe. Like something had drawn the blood into a vertical line before it settled. She traced a gloved finger along one arc and found the same warm residue as on the collar. When she pressed, the concrete gave a fractional give, no more than a hair’s breadth. She rose and faced the wall again. The compass needle had shifted a degree, now aimed directly at the groove she had traced. In the beam’s spill, the mortar lines shimmered for an instant with a thin iridescence, gone if she blinked. The effect matched nothing in the department manuals, but it matched the faint notations in the margin of Morris’s file—her partner’s old notes on “energy anomalies” before he vanished at a similar site. Quinn had filed those notations away as fatigue or case stress. Now the same pattern repeated in front of her. Eva’s voice pulled her back. “Quinn, you’re staring at that brick like it’s going to talk. We need to bag the body before the transport arrives. The herbs and the cut tell me this was quick, probably over a disputed sale. Nothing here points to premeditated arrangement beyond that.” A different picture assembled in Quinn’s mind, each mismatched piece slotting without force. The body had been brought through the tunnel mouth after death, then placed so that its head aligned with the groove and the compass—though the compass itself had been taken from the victim or dropped in the transfer. The herbs were not for dealing but for some transaction she didn’t have the vocabulary for yet, perhaps payment or key. The lack of struggle, the posed limbs, the precise cut without excess blood loss outside the pool—all indicated the killing had occurred elsewhere, in a space where the geometry itself differed. The symbol on the poster and the one on the bone token were the same, and both matched the pattern now visible on the hidden seam of the arch. She pocketed the bone fragment alongside the compass and turned to Eva. “Bag the herbs separately. And the brass piece stays with me for now. I want a second sweep of the tunnel mouth before we move anything else.” Eva tucked her hair again, the gesture quick and automatic, but her eyes narrowed behind the glasses. “You think there’s more?” “I think the staging was meant to keep us looking at the platform,” Quinn said. “Whoever did this wanted the scene to read as a simple theft or argument. The evidence only fits if we assume the work happened here. It doesn’t. It fits if the work happened through there.” She nodded at the arch. “The rest is what shows after they dragged whatever they used across the seam. The blood didn’t spray because there was no air pressure on the other side for it to react to.” Eva glanced at the wall, then back. “If you’re saying some kind of hidden passage, the city plans don’t show one. These lines were sealed after the war. Anything beyond would be service tunnels, and those are mapped.” Quinn’s jaw tightened, the sharp line of it catching the light. She had stood in another station three years ago, listening to the same explanation from the same sort of specialist. Morris’s coat had been found folded on a bench with the same bone token in the pocket. No body. No resolution. The file had closed on missing persons. Now the same token lay at her feet, and the compass she carried—acquired two months ago from an evidence locker she’d never logged—pointed straight into the sealed stone. She stepped forward once more, pressing her palm flat against the mortar. The surface held, but the warmth returned, pulsing once like a slow heartbeat before fading. “Seal the area wider,” she told Eva. “I want the whole platform and the first twenty meters of tunnel closed until I finish the measurements. No one else touches the body until I’ve checked the angle of the head again.” Eva hesitated, then opened her satchel and pulled out a notebook. “All right. But the transport won’t wait forever. And command will want a preliminary by morning.” “They’ll get one,” Quinn said. She kept her eyes on the wall as Eva moved away, the satchel swinging against her leg. The needle in her pocket remained fixed. She could not yet name the mechanism that had allowed someone to carry a dead weight through solid brick and arrange it here without leaving the expected trail, but the contradictions no longer resisted her. The scene had been constructed to hide the exit point. The victim had been part of whatever passed through those bricks—dealer, buyer, or unwilling courier—and his death had been meant to look ordinary. Only the details that refused to match had betrayed the lie. Quinn retrieved her tape measure from her own kit and began marking the distance between the body’s head and the faint groove. The number came out even, exact to the millimeter. Behind her, Eva’s footsteps receded toward the ladder, but Quinn stayed with the wall. The compass tugged once more, stronger now. She pressed her ear to the stone and heard, very faintly, the echo of movement on the far side—voices, footsteps, the low creak of stalls being folded away as if the market beyond had already started its monthly migration. She stepped back, flashlight doused, and waited in the residual dark. The evidence had begun to speak, and she was the only one listening.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2328
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count3
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"slowly"
4"gently"
5"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.04% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2328
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"measured"
count2
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"standard"
count1
5
word"etched"
count2
6
word"resolved"
count1
7
word"traced"
count2
8
word"shimmered"
count1
9
word"aligned"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
11
word"constructed"
count1
12
word"footsteps"
count2
13
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"measured"
2"weight"
3"tension"
4"standard"
5"etched"
6"resolved"
7"traced"
8"shimmered"
9"aligned"
10"warmth"
11"constructed"
12"footsteps"
13"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2314
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1736
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.04
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn18
Camden1
Tube1
Kowalski1
Underground1
Morris4
Eva16
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Kowalski"
3"Morris"
4"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0.982
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like it had been undisturbed for y"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.864
wordCount2314
matches
0"not just toward the wall but slightly upward now, at the precise height"
1"not for dealing but for some transaction she didn’t have the vocabulary for yet"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
84.33% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean82.64
std36.79
cv0.445
sampleLengths
0148
1122
274
3124
457
585
6120
7106
850
9109
1080
1169
12134
1372
1420
1578
1695
1749
18132
1939
2021
2188
2238
23114
2440
2527
26108
27115
78.50% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences118
matches
0"been undisturbed"
1"been placed"
2"been turned"
3"were feathered"
4"been brought"
5"been taken"
6"been found"
7"been constructed"
8"been meant"
9"being folded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs280
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences133
ratio0.068
matches
0"But the pooling beneath him sat wrong—too circular, as if he’d been placed rather than fallen."
1"The mortar lines looked fresh in places, but when she ran her gloved hand along the edge, her fingers caught on a faint groove—smooth, like wax rather than brick."
2"It wasn’t human bone—too porous, etched with tiny holes that formed another spiral when she tilted it."
3"The effect matched nothing in the department manuals, but it matched the faint notations in the margin of Morris’s file—her partner’s old notes on “energy anomalies” before he vanished at a similar site."
4"The body had been brought through the tunnel mouth after death, then placed so that its head aligned with the groove and the compass—though the compass itself had been taken from the victim or dropped in the transfer."
5"The lack of struggle, the posed limbs, the precise cut without excess blood loss outside the pool—all indicated the killing had occurred elsewhere, in a space where the geometry itself differed."
6"Now the same token lay at her feet, and the compass she carried—acquired two months ago from an evidence locker she’d never logged—pointed straight into the sealed stone."
7"The victim had been part of whatever passed through those bricks—dealer, buyer, or unwilling courier—and his death had been meant to look ordinary."
8"She pressed her ear to the stone and heard, very faintly, the echo of movement on the far side—voices, footsteps, the low creak of stalls being folded away as if the market beyond had already started its monthly migration."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1753
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.03822019395322305
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.008556759840273816
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean17.4
std12
cv0.69
sampleLengths
033
126
225
320
444
517
622
75
830
924
1024
1118
1256
133
149
1527
1616
1716
1813
1916
2024
214
2211
231
2414
2527
267
2754
2824
2910
3025
314
3216
3323
348
3523
369
372
386
3914
4014
416
4221
4322
4423
454
4619
4727
484
4913
42.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3007518796992481
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners40
60.61% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"Instead, a small brass object"
1"Only the details that refused"
ratio0.018
89.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences110
matches
0"She adjusted the leather watch"
1"She ducked under the tape."
2"Her worn leather satchel rested"
3"She lifted the sheet’s edge"
4"His hands rested palms up,"
5"She swept the beam along"
6"Her eyes tracked the concrete"
7"She held up a small"
8"It left no residue on"
9"She set it aside."
10"Her gaze moved past the"
11"She had seen it three"
12"She turned back to the"
13"They resolved under her light"
14"She had moved closer, her"
15"It didn’t waver with her"
16"She slipped the compass into"
17"It followed the same three-curve"
18"She brushed it with a"
19"It left a residue that"
ratio0.327
41.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences110
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off"
1"The air pressed in thick"
2"The platform stretched ahead, empty"
3"She adjusted the leather watch"
4"The crime tape hung uneven"
5"She ducked under the tape."
6"Eva Kowalski waited beside the"
7"Her worn leather satchel rested"
8"Eva’s posture held a hint"
9"Eva said, voice low and"
10"Quinn didn’t nod."
11"She lifted the sheet’s edge"
12"The man beneath stared upward"
13"The cut itself looked surgical,"
14"His hands rested palms up,"
15"She swept the beam along"
16"Her eyes tracked the concrete"
17"The dust lay uniform around"
18"Eva adjusted her glasses and"
19"She held up a small"
ratio0.836
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences110
matches
0"Now the same pattern repeated"
1"Now the same token lay"
ratio0.018
68.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the last rung of the service ladder into the disused Camden Tube station, her boots grinding against scattered grit that felt…"
1"The man beneath stared upward with clouded eyes, his shirtfront stiff with dried blood around a single deep slash that ran from one collarbone to the other."
2"But the pooling beneath him sat wrong—too circular, as if he’d been placed rather than fallen."
3"One poster showed a faded Underground map, but someone had overwritten the station name with a looping symbol that pulled at her memory."
4"A compact compass, its casing clouded with verdigris, the face marked with fine etched lines that weren’t the usual cardinal directions."
5"The blood there showed circular disruption, yes, but the edges of the disruption were feathered upward, as if pulled by suction rather than a flat wipe."
6"She could not yet name the mechanism that had allowed someone to carry a dead weight through solid brick and arrange it here without leaving the expected trail,…"
7"She pressed her ear to the stone and heard, very faintly, the echo of movement on the far side—voices, footsteps, the low creak of stalls being folded away as i…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
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