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Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHRNM3412Z140DV1ECAZK0R
Run Details
Model:
Grok 4.20
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
42.7s
Cost:
$0.009167
Provider:
xAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
92.28%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
38.25%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
71.88%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
41.75%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
59.22%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
19.46%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
93.84%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
87.2221%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Aurora pushed through the last
tangle of brambles at the edge of Richmond Park, boots sinking into damp earth that smelled too sweet for October. Moonlight barely reached here.
The trees had thickened into
a wall of black trunks, their branches knitting overhead like fingers interlocking in prayer.
She’d come because the pendant
told her to.
The Heartstone had burned against
her sternum for three straight nights, each
pulse
sharper than the last, dragging her out of her flat above Silas’ bar and across the city until the signals pointed here.
She told herself it was
research.
A lead on whatever the
hell had started following her since Evan.
A way to understand the
things she’d started seeing at the edges of her vision after the dreams began. But the moment the ancient oaks rose in front of her, arranged in their impossible circle, doubt settled cold between her shoulder blades. The standing stones weren’t stones.
They were oaks, split and
hollowed by centuries, their hearts long dead yet somehow still upright.
Their bark glistened wetly even
though no rain had fallen.
Aurora stepped between two of
them and the air changed. Thicker. Charged.
The distant hum of London
traffic vanished as if someone had thrown a switch.
Only the wind remained, whispering
through the wildflowers that shouldn’t bloom in autumn. Bluebells. Foxgloves.
Things with petals like spilled
blood.
They carpeted the ground in
impossible riot, their scent cloying and funeral-sweet.
The Heartstone flared hot against
her skin.
She hissed, fingers closing around
it through her jacket.
The crimson gem throbbed like
a second heartbeat, out of rhythm with her own. “Alright,” she muttered. “I’m here. Show me what you want.” Her voice sounded wrong. Too loud. It didn’t
echo
.
It simply stopped, swallowed by
the grove the instant it left her lips. She pulled out her phone. No signal. The screen glowed uselessly before the battery indicator
flickered
and died despite being fully
charged
an hour ago. Aurora shoved it back into her pocket. Fine. She’d done without technology before. The clearing stretched wider than it had any right to. From outside the ring of oaks it had looked small, maybe ten metres across.
Now the wildflowers rolled away
into shadow for what
felt like acres
. Mist clung low to the ground, curling around her ankles in slow, deliberate spirals.
She took another step and
the flowers brushed her jeans with wet tongues. Something rustled behind her. Aurora spun, heart slamming against her ribs. Nothing. Only the oaks standing
sentinel
, their hollow centres blacker than the night around them.
She forced her breathing to
slow. Cool head. That was her thing. Panic was for other people.
She kept moving toward the
centre of the grove where the mist
seemed thickest
. The pendant pulled her like a dowsing rod, growing warmer with every pace. The flowers parted around her boots with soft, reluctant sighs.
Their stems left dark streaks
on the leather. A twig snapped to her left. She froze. The sound had come from low to the ground, too deliberate to be wind.
She stared into the darkness
between the nearest oaks until her eyes burned. Shapes
flickered
at the edge of her vision, gone when she
tried to
focus. Just the trees.
Just her imagination working overtime
because she was alone in a strange place at night like every horror story ever written. But the certainty was growing. The feeling of eyes on her. Not hostile yet. Not quite. Simply... interested. Aurora reached up and touched the small crescent scar on her left wrist, an old habit when nerves
tried to
get the better of her. The raised tissue felt grounding. Real.
She’d survived worse than spooky
woods. She’d survived Evan. Another sound. This one closer. A wet dragging noise, like something heavy
being pulled
through the undergrowth.
Then silence again, thicker than
before.
She turned in a slow
circle. The mist had risen. It now brushed her knees, hiding the flowers
completely
. Their sickly perfume grew stronger, almost rotting at the edges. The Heartstone
pulsed
faster, a steady urgent rhythm against her breastbone. “Show yourself,” she said, louder this time. Her voice cracked on the last syllable. The oaks answered with a collective creak, wood fibres shifting deep inside their trunks. The sound travelled around the circle like a wave. When it passed the oak directly behind her, she heard something else beneath it. A breath. Not hers. Aurora’s scalp prickled. She refused to run. Running was what prey did.
Instead she crouched, fingers digging
into the earth. The soil was warm. Far too warm for this time of year. It
pulsed
faintly against her palm in time with the pendant. The dragging noise came again, from her right this time. Closer. She rose
slowly
, refusing to give whatever watched her the satisfaction of seeing her flinch. The mist swirled higher, licking at her thighs. Within it, shapes moved that had nothing to do with wind. Pale suggestions of limbs. The impression of fingers too long to be human. Her mind supplied memories she didn’t want. The dreams that had started after she’d accepted the pendant from the stranger in the alley behind Golden Empress. Dreams of a woman with her face but wrong eyes, walking through a grove just like this one. Dreams of something ancient wearing her skin like a coat. The crescent scar on her wrist
began to
itch. Aurora rubbed at it absently, eyes tracking the darkness. The itching intensified, becoming a burn. When she looked down, the scar had darkened to angry red, as if freshly cut. A single drop of blood welled up and fell into the mist. The flowers beneath her feet rustled violently. Not wind. Something beneath them surged toward the blood drop like fish to chum. She stumbled back. The dragging sound multiplied, coming from multiple directions now. The oaks groaned again, louder. Their hollow hearts
seemed to
expand, black mouths opening wider in the bark. The Heartstone flared so brightly she could see its glow through her jacket. The crimson light cut through the mist in stuttering pulses. For one impossible second she saw them clearly. Things that wore the shapes of deer but moved wrong, joints bending backward, antlers made of twisted human fingers. They crouched among the flowers, faces pressed to the earth where her blood had fallen. Their eyes reflected the red light like animals caught in headlights. Too many eyes. The vision lasted less than a breath.
Then the mist swallowed them
again. Aurora’s mouth had gone dry. She backed toward the nearest oak, using its bulk as cover. The bark felt alive beneath her shoulder blades, vibrating with something that might have been a
pulse
. She pressed harder against it anyway. Better the devil she
could feel
. A soft laugh drifted through the grove. Female. Familiar in a way that made her
stomach
clench. It sounded like her own voice but stretched, played backward. “Rory,” it whispered. Not from any particular direction. From everywhere. “You came.” The scar on her wrist split open. Not much.
Just enough to send a
thin line of blood trickling down her palm. The pain was distant, dreamlike. She stared at the wound in fascination as the blood
traced
the lines of her fate and heart. The dragging sounds converged. Flowers crushed beneath invisible
weight
. The mist boiled upward, forming columns that almost
looked like figures
. Tall. Graceful. Wrong. Aurora gripped the pendant through her clothes. Its heat bordered on painful now. “I don’t know what you are,” she said, surprised her voice stayed steady. “But I’m not your toy.” The laugh came again, closer. Right behind her. She whirled, but the oak’s hollow centre was empty.
Just blackness and the faint
suggestion of movement deep inside, like something retreating further into the wood. “You wear my face,” the voice murmured, now from the left. “You carry my heart. Did you think that was coincidence, little Laila?” The name hit her like a physical blow. Laila. The alias she’d used when she first ran from Evan. The name no one here knew. Not even Eva. The mist condensed directly in front of her. It formed the rough shape of a woman. Shoulder-length black hair.
Bright blue eyes that held
no reflection. The figure reached out a hand made of condensed fog. Where it should have had a wrist, there was only a crescent scar glowing white. Aurora’s own scar burned in answer. Blood flowed faster now, dripping steadily onto the flowers. Each drop caused the bluebells to spasm and change colour, their petals bleeding to deep crimson. She wanted to run. Every animal instinct screamed at her to bolt between the oaks and never look back. But her legs refused to move. The ground had become soft, almost spongy, as if the earth itself
was considering
swallowing her. The mist-woman tilted her head. The motion was wrong, too fluid, like a serpent deciding which way to strike. “You feel it, don’t you? The pull. The wrongness in your bones. That’s me, Rory. Calling you home.” The pendant
vibrated
so violently Aurora thought it might shatter. Its chain dug into the back of her neck. She wrapped her bleeding hand around it, feeling the gem’s heat mix with her own blood. The combination sent something
electric
racing
up her arm. The mist-woman smiled with Aurora’s own mouth. “Good. Feel me. Remember.” More shapes emerged from between the oaks. Not deer this time. These stood upright. They wore the faces of people she knew. Eva, but with flowers growing from her eye sockets. Yu-Fei Cheung with bark instead of skin. Silas from the bar downstairs, his smile splitting too wide, revealing rows of wooden teeth. All of them wrong. All of them watching her with patient hunger. The real horror wasn’t their appearance. It was how natural they looked here. Like they belonged and she was the intruder wearing borrowed flesh. Aurora’s breathing had grown shallow. The air felt thinner, as if the grove
was using
it up. Her vision tunnelled until only the crimson glow of the pendant and the blue of the not-Aurora’s eyes remained. The scar on her wrist had stopped bleeding. Instead it wept something thicker. Clear. Viscous. The smell of it mixed with the flowers until she gagged. “You ran from Evan,” the voice that was and wasn’t hers continued. “But you can’t run from what you are. What we are. The grove remembers, Malphora. It always remembers.” The name hit deeper than Laila had. Malphora. It
echoed
in her skull like a second heartbeat. Ancient. Powerful. Hungry. One of the flower-faced things that wore Eva’s body took a step closer. Its movements were jerky, like a puppet with half its strings cut. The flowers in its eye sockets bobbed with each step, releasing clouds of pollen that glowed faintly in the mist. Aurora pressed her back harder against the oak. The bark gave
slightly
, sucking at her jacket like a mouth. She twisted away, stumbling toward the centre of the clearing. The ground there had sunk into a
perfect
circle, flowers growing thicker and darker at its edges. The Heartstone pulled her toward it. She fought the urge, but her feet moved anyway. Each step sent fresh waves of wrongness through her. The certainty that she had been here before. That she had stood in this exact spot and done something terrible. The mist-woman followed. Not walking. Gliding. Her lower half remained fused with the fog, trailing behind her like a wedding dress made of nightmares. “Look down, Rory,” she whispered. “Look at what you buried.” Against every screaming instinct, Aurora looked. The flowers in the centre had arranged themselves into a pattern. A
perfect
outline of a human body. Her height. Her build. Where the heart would be, the Heartstone’s exact shape had
been pressed
into the earth, glowing with the same inner light as the pendant around her neck. She dropped to her knees. The soil there was loose. Freshly turned. Her hands moved without her permission, digging into the warm dirt. Each handful came away slick with the same clear fluid that leaked from her scar. Deeper. She had to go deeper. The things wearing her friends’ faces closed in. Their breathing
sounded like wind through dead leaves
. The dragging noise returned, louder, coming from beneath her now. Something in the earth
was trying
to reach up. Aurora’s fingers struck something solid. Metal. She scrabbled frantically,
uncaring that her
nails split. The object came free with a wet sucking sound. A second pendant. Identical to the one she wore, but its chain was broken. The gem inside was dark. Dead. When she touched it, the one around her neck flared so brightly it lit the entire grove. Every flower turned toward her at once. Their heads moved with
mechanical
precision. The mist-woman’s smile widened until it split her face from ear to ear. “Two hearts,” she breathed. “One for the girl who ran. One for the woman who remembers. Welcome back, Aurora Carter. Welcome home.” The ground beneath Aurora heaved. Roots burst upward, wrapping around her wrists with surprising gentleness. They didn’t hurt. They felt like coming home after a long absence. The scar on her wrist stopped weeping.
Instead it began to knit
closed around one of the roots, incorporating it into her flesh. She should have
been terrified
.
Instead a strange calm settled
over her. The pieces
were sliding
together. The dreams. The pendant. The way London had never quite felt right since she’d arrived. The way her own reflection sometimes smiled at her a second too late. The things that wore her friends’ faces
began to
sing. Not with voices. With the rustling of leaves and the creaking of ancient wood. The song had
no words but
she understood it
perfectly
. It was a welcome. It was a warning. It was a beginning. Aurora lifted the dead pendant. The living one around her neck
pulsed
once, hard enough to bruise. Something passed between them. A spark. The dead stone
flickered
, then caught. Crimson light bloomed inside it to match its twin. The mist-woman reached for her. This time Aurora didn’t pull away. She met the hand with her own. Where they touched, the mist solidified into flesh. Cool. Familiar. The fingers that closed around hers had the same crescent scar. For the first time since entering the grove, Aurora smiled. The oaks
began to
close in. Their roots crawled across the ground like snakes. The flowers sang with new voices. The dragging sound
resolved
into
footsteps
. Many
footsteps
. All approaching. She was not alone. She had never been alone. And whatever came next, whatever wore her face in the dreams and whispered her secret names, it
was finished
waiting. Aurora Carter closed her eyes as the grove folded around her like a lover who had been patient for centuries. The last thing she felt was the twin pendants burning against her chest in
perfect
, terrible harmony. The mist swallowed the scream that followed. Or perhaps it wasn’t a scream at all. Perhaps it was laughter. The sound of someone remembering who they had always been beneath the borrowed life. The wildflowers closed over the spot where she had knelt. By morning, no one passing through Richmond Park would ever know a clearing had existed there at all. Only the oaks would remember. The oaks, and whatever now walked wearing Aurora’s smile, carrying two hearts that beat as one.
created_at
"2026-05-01T12:36:58.601Z"
5/1/2026, 12:36:58 PM
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182717
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streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
369
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
42664
tokens_prompt
1038
tokens_completion
4004
native_tokens_prompt
1009
native_tokens_completion
3189
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
64
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
num_fetches
(null)
web_search_engine
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"completed"
usage
0.00916655
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"3ecee37f-b217-4093-87fb-aaf0afe307af"
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"035cbd98-7302-856b-70b5-a24714aae6d0"
is_byok
false
latency
101
model_permaslug
"x-ai/grok-4.20-20260309"
provider_name
"xAI"
status
200
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"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.14.1; linux; x64))"
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api_type
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upstream_id
"035cbd98-7302-856b-70b5-a24714aae6d0"
total_cost
0.00916655
cache_discount
0.0000672
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
10
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
17
tagDensity
0.588
leniency
1
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
92.28%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2591
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"completely"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
2
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
3
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
highlights
0
"completely"
1
"slowly"
2
"slightly"
3
"perfectly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
38.25%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2591
totalAiIsms
32
found
0
word
"pulse"
count
2
1
word
"charged"
count
2
2
word
"throbbed"
count
1
3
word
"echo"
count
1
4
word
"flickered"
count
3
5
word
"sentinel"
count
1
6
word
"silence"
count
1
7
word
"pulsed"
count
3
8
word
"could feel"
count
1
9
word
"familiar"
count
2
10
word
"stomach"
count
1
11
word
"traced"
count
1
12
word
"weight"
count
1
13
word
"vibrated"
count
1
14
word
"electric"
count
1
15
word
"racing"
count
1
16
word
"echoed"
count
1
17
word
"perfect"
count
3
18
word
"mechanical"
count
1
19
word
"resolved"
count
1
20
word
"footsteps"
count
2
21
word
"the last thing"
count
1
highlights
0
"pulse"
1
"charged"
2
"throbbed"
3
"echo"
4
"flickered"
5
"sentinel"
6
"silence"
7
"pulsed"
8
"could feel"
9
"familiar"
10
"stomach"
11
"traced"
12
"weight"
13
"vibrated"
14
"electric"
15
"racing"
16
"echoed"
17
"perfect"
18
"mechanical"
19
"resolved"
20
"footsteps"
21
"the last thing"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
308
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
6
narrationSentences
308
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"tried to"
1
"began to"
2
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
317
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
35
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2591
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
13
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
48
wordCount
2459
uniqueNames
13
maxNameDensity
0.94
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond
2
Park
2
October
1
Heartstone
6
Evan
3
London
2
Golden
1
Empress
1
Eva
3
Aurora
23
Cheung
1
Laila
2
Carter
1
persons
0
"Heartstone"
1
"Evan"
2
"Eva"
3
"Aurora"
4
"Cheung"
5
"Laila"
6
"Carter"
places
0
"Richmond"
1
"Park"
2
"London"
globalScore
1
windowScore
1
71.88%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
192
glossingSentenceCount
6
matches
0
"felt like acres"
1
"seemed thickest"
2
"sounded like her own voice but stretched,"
3
"looked like figures"
4
"sounded like wind through dead leaves"
5
"felt like coming home after a long abse"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.386
wordCount
2591
matches
0
"no words but"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
317
matches
0
"uncaring that her"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
76
mean
34.09
std
17.93
cv
0.526
sampleLengths
0
91
1
60
2
70
3
20
4
30
5
10
6
22
7
38
8
63
9
4
10
39
11
45
12
6
13
67
14
18
15
40
16
23
17
40
18
14
19
41
20
43
21
58
22
54
23
9
24
42
25
21
26
30
27
79
28
13
29
45
30
27
31
12
32
45
33
23
34
31
35
34
36
23
37
28
38
51
39
31
40
41
41
37
42
44
43
11
44
65
45
24
46
36
47
26
48
30
49
20
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
308
matches
0
"being pulled"
1
"been pressed"
2
"been terrified"
3
"was finished"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
410
matches
0
"was considering"
1
"was using"
2
"was trying"
3
"were sliding"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
317
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
160
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
4
adverbRatio
0.025
lyAdverbCount
1
lyAdverbRatio
0.00625
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
317
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
317
mean
8.17
std
5.46
cv
0.668
sampleLengths
0
25
1
4
2
19
3
8
4
35
5
6
6
12
7
19
8
23
9
5
10
16
11
10
12
10
13
1
14
1
15
14
16
13
17
1
18
1
19
6
20
12
21
7
22
9
23
14
24
3
25
7
26
4
27
2
28
3
29
13
30
5
31
2
32
18
33
7
34
1
35
5
36
10
37
14
38
12
39
14
40
13
41
4
42
7
43
1
44
14
45
6
46
2
47
4
48
5
49
14
41.75%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
31
diversityRatio
0.30914826498422715
totalSentences
317
uniqueOpeners
98
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
16
totalSentences
257
matches
0
"Only the wind remained, whispering"
1
"Only the oaks standing sentinel,"
2
"Just the trees."
3
"Just her imagination working overtime"
4
"Then silence again, thicker than"
5
"Instead she crouched, fingers digging"
6
"Too many eyes."
7
"Then the mist swallowed them"
8
"Just enough to send a"
9
"Just blackness and the faint"
10
"Bright blue eyes that held"
11
"Instead it wept something thicker."
12
"Instead it began to knit"
13
"Instead a strange calm settled"
14
"Perhaps it was laughter."
15
"Only the oaks would remember."
ratio
0.062
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
66
totalSentences
257
matches
0
"She’d come because the pendant"
1
"She told herself it was"
2
"They were oaks, split and"
3
"Their bark glistened wetly even"
4
"They carpeted the ground in"
5
"She hissed, fingers closing around"
6
"Her voice sounded wrong."
7
"It didn’t echo."
8
"It simply stopped, swallowed by"
9
"She pulled out her phone."
10
"She’d done without technology before."
11
"She took another step and"
12
"She forced her breathing to"
13
"She kept moving toward the"
14
"Their stems left dark streaks"
15
"She stared into the darkness"
16
"She’d survived worse than spooky"
17
"She’d survived Evan."
18
"She turned in a slow"
19
"It now brushed her knees,"
ratio
0.257
59.22%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
206
totalSentences
257
matches
0
"Aurora pushed through the last"
1
"Moonlight barely reached here."
2
"The trees had thickened into"
3
"She’d come because the pendant"
4
"The Heartstone had burned against"
5
"She told herself it was"
6
"A lead on whatever the"
7
"A way to understand the"
8
"The standing stones weren’t stones."
9
"They were oaks, split and"
10
"Their bark glistened wetly even"
11
"Aurora stepped between two of"
12
"The distant hum of London"
13
"Things with petals like spilled"
14
"They carpeted the ground in"
15
"The Heartstone flared hot against"
16
"She hissed, fingers closing around"
17
"The crimson gem throbbed like"
18
"Her voice sounded wrong."
19
"It didn’t echo."
ratio
0.802
19.46%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
257
matches
0
"Now the wildflowers rolled away"
ratio
0.004
93.84%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
102
technicalSentenceCount
7
matches
0
"Aurora pushed through the last tangle of brambles at the edge of Richmond Park, boots sinking into damp earth that smelled too sweet for October."
1
"Only the wind remained, whispering through the wildflowers that shouldn’t bloom in autumn."
2
"The bark felt alive beneath her shoulder blades, vibrating with something that might have been a pulse."
3
"The ground had become soft, almost spongy, as if the earth itself was considering swallowing her."
4
"One of the flower-faced things that wore Eva’s body took a step closer."
5
"Aurora Carter closed her eyes as the grove folded around her like a lover who had been patient for centuries."
6
"The oaks, and whatever now walked wearing Aurora’s smile, carrying two hearts that beat as one."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
10
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
6
fancyTags
0
"she muttered (mutter)"
1
"it whispered (whisper)"
2
"the voice murmured (murmur)"
3
"hers continued (continue)"
4
"she whispered (whisper)"
5
"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences
17
tagDensity
0.471
leniency
0.941
rawRatio
0.75
effectiveRatio
0.706
87.2221%