Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHRY0700EX3KHET307F9F7F

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1m 28s
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$0.020285
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Rory’s fingers dug into the edge of the bar as the glass slid from her grip. It hit the floorboards and exploded. Silas turned at the sound, that slight limp carrying him forward before his mind seemed to catch up. His hazel eyes widened a fraction, then settled into something harder. “Rory.” She stared at the grey streaks in his auburn hair, the neat beard that hadn’t been there before. The man who once filled her father’s study with cigarette smoke and coded warnings now wore an apron stained with tonight’s specials. Seven years had sharpened the lines around his mouth and dulled the bright certainty she remembered. “You own this place.” She kept her voice level even as her pulse hammered against her scar. “All this time.” He crouched with obvious effort, collecting shards of glass into a dustpan. The silver signet ring flashed under the green neon glow that bled through from the sign outside. “Had to do something after Prague. Knees don’t lie about your age like the rest of you tries to.” He straightened, tipped the fragments into a bin. “Didn’t expect you’d walk through my door. Eva said you’d gone quiet.” “Eva talks too much.” Rory slid onto a stool. The worn leather creaked under her. Around them the usual Soho crowd nursed their drinks and minded their own business, exactly as Silas would want. Old maps papered the walls, their creases deep as scars. Black-and-white photographs showed faces that probably once held secrets worth dying for. She recognised the style. His style. He poured two measures of whiskey without asking, pushed one across the counter. “You’ve cut your hair.” “Practical for the bike.” “Delivery work.” He said it flat, tasting the words. “Your father spent a fortune on that pre-law degree. Brendan Carter’s daughter ferrying chow mein across Camden.” “My father spent a fortune on a lot of things that didn’t work out.” She took the glass, let the burn anchor her. The whiskey tasted of peat and bad decisions. “Evan liked the idea of a lawyer wife. Gave him status. Until he didn’t.” Silas’s knuckles whitened around his own glass. He didn’t speak for a long moment. When he did the spymaster slipped through, cool and precise. “Evan’s been quiet since you left Cardiff. Too quiet. Men like that don’t simply stop.” “You checked.” “Old habits.” He shrugged one shoulder, the movement pulling at the limp again. “You stopped answering letters. Then the flat above the bar came up. Seemed the sensible thing.” “So you’ve been waiting for me to show up for how long exactly?” “Three years.” He met her eyes directly. “Give or take.” The number landed between them like another shattered glass. Rory traced the rim of her drink with one finger. The bar’s low hum wrapped around them, clink of bottles, murmur of deals being made in corners, the constant drip from a faulty tap behind the counter. Everything felt suddenly too loud and not loud enough. “I thought about coming sooner,” she said. “After the first time I slept above this place without knowing it was yours. Kept seeing your stupid maps in my dreams. The ones you used to spread across Dad’s dining table when Mum thought you were just an old colleague.” “You were fifteen then. Eyes too big for the lies I fed you.” A faint smile touched his mouth, gone before it could settle. “Told you the world needed fixing. Forgot to mention it usually breaks you first.” She laughed once, short and sharp. “I fixed myself. Got out. Changed my name on the lease twice before I settled on Carter again. Laila lasted six months. Malphora was a joke that stopped being funny when the landlord started asking questions.” “Malphora.” He rolled the alias around his tongue like he was testing it for weaknesses. “You always did have a flair for the dramatic. Remember when you stole my passport and tried to convince customs you were my daughter?” “I was ten. Everything seemed possible.” Silence stretched. Silas wiped the counter in slow circles, the cloth moving like it had its own regrets. The photographs behind him watched them both. One showed a younger Silas, auburn hair untouched by grey, standing in front of a building she now realised was in Prague. His knee looked whole. His eyes looked immortal. “You changed,” she said quietly. “Everyone does. Some of us just have the decency to do it where people can see.” “No. It’s more than that.” Rory leaned forward. “The Si I knew would have marched into that restaurant where I worked my first month in London and dragged me out by the collar. This version waited three years.” His hand stilled on the counter. The signet ring clicked once against the wood, deliberate. “The Si you knew didn’t have a limp and a list of names he couldn’t save. Prague taught me boundaries, Rory. Even with old friends’ daughters who ring in the middle of the night from phone boxes with their wrists taped up.” The scar tingled. Childhood accident, she’d told everyone. Only Silas and Evan knew the real shape of that lie. She pulled her sleeve down anyway. “I didn’t come here for a rescue.” “Didn’t say you did.” He poured them both another measure. The bottle clinked against glass with finality. “But you walked into my bar on a Thursday night looking like someone who’s been measuring escape routes since she crossed the threshold. Old training’s hard to forget.” A group of suits near the window laughed too loudly at something that wasn’t funny. Rory watched their reflections fracture in the rows of bottles behind Silas. Time moved differently here, thick as the dust on the highest shelves. She could almost see the girl she’d been, sitting at her father’s table listening to Silas spin tales of diplomatic incidents that were never just diplomatic. That girl had believed competence could outrun fear. The woman sitting here knew better. “You never told me what really happened in Prague,” she said. “You never needed to know.” “Yet here I am. Delivering food to people who tip in coppers and never look me in the eye. Living above a bar owned by a man I thought had forgotten me. Maybe I need to know now.” Silas’s expression shifted, something ancient moving behind his eyes. He glanced toward the bookshelf at the back of the room, the one that wasn’t quite flush with the wall. His secret room. She’d always suspected it even before she knew the bar was his. “Some doors stay closed for a reason. You open them, you don’t get to choose what walks through.” “Like Evan?” The name dropped between them again, heavier this time. Silas’s jaw tightened. “Like Evan. Like the favours I called in to get you clear of him. Like the messages I stopped sending because every contact left a trail and trails get people killed.” Rory felt the whiskey settle warm in her stomach, but the warmth didn’t reach higher. She studied the man across from her, the way his shoulders had rounded slightly, the way his left leg never fully straightened. The weight of years pressed on them both, different shapes of the same stone. “I used to think you were invincible,” she admitted. “Father’s mysterious friend who always knew which questions not to answer. Then one day the letters stopped and I was just another stupid girl who chose the wrong man and ran to London with nothing but a rucksack and your old advice ringing in my ears.” “Which advice?” “Never look back. Never explain yourself to people who weren’t there.” “Sound advice.” “Lonely advice.” Their eyes met. For a moment the bar faded, the murmurs, the clinking glasses, the green neon haze. Just two people who had once meant something to each other trying to find the shape of what remained. Silas broke first. “Your mother writes sometimes. Says you don’t call.” “Mum writes to you?” “Old habits.” That half-smile again, rueful this time. “She worries the law lost another good mind. I worry the world lost another good heart.” “Heart’s still here. Just got heavier.” He nodded like he understood the exact weight. The door to the street opened. Cold air rushed in, carrying the smell of rain on concrete and something sharper underneath it. Rory’s shoulders tensed before her mind caught up. She knew that aftershave. Evan had never liked it when she changed the rules. Silas noticed. Of course he noticed. His hand moved under the counter, casual as checking stock. When it reappeared the fingers held no weapon but the posture had altered completely. The retired spy stood in the ruins of the mentor she remembered, both of them watching the man in the doorway scan the room. “Rory Carter,” the newcomer said, voice carrying across the sudden hush. “Or should I say Laila? Malphora? You never could settle on who you wanted to be.” Silas stepped between them, limp forgotten, ring tapping once against the hidden panic button beneath the bar. The green neon flickered above the entrance like it, too, had regrets.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.278
leniency0.556
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.037
86.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1526
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"really"
2"slightly"
3"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.23% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1526
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"coded"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"coded"
1"pulse"
2"shattered"
3"traced"
4"silence"
5"stomach"
6"warmth"
7"weight"
8"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences87
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1526
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount874
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Soho1
Silas13
Silence1
Prague1
Evan2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Silence"
3"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
globalScore0.756
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite flush with the wall"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.655
wordCount1526
matches
0"no weapon but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"knew that aftershave"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean25.02
std18.76
cv0.75
sampleLengths
022
129
21
356
420
529
639
74
858
917
104
1126
1245
1324
1415
152
1629
1713
1810
1955
2048
2138
2242
2339
246
2555
265
2716
2838
2915
3042
3125
327
3345
3479
3511
365
3738
3844
3918
402
4112
4231
4351
4455
452
4611
472
482
4937
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"being made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs150
matches
0"was testing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences125
ratio0
matches(empty)
92.08% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount877
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"ancient moving behind his"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.04218928164196123
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.012542759407069556
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean12.21
std8.99
cv0.737
sampleLengths
016
16
218
311
41
518
622
716
817
93
1012
1117
1227
1312
144
155
166
1719
1810
1912
204
212
2213
234
244
259
2617
2723
288
2914
307
317
3210
3315
342
3513
3616
3713
387
393
409
4110
4227
439
447
4541
4624
4714
486
4936
71.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.448
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"Only Silas and Evan knew"
1"Just two people who had"
2"Of course he noticed."
ratio0.037
71.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences81
matches
0"It hit the floorboards and"
1"His hazel eyes widened a"
2"She stared at the grey"
3"She kept her voice level"
4"He crouched with obvious effort,"
5"He straightened, tipped the fragments"
6"She recognised the style."
7"He poured two measures of"
8"He said it flat, tasting"
9"She took the glass, let"
10"He didn’t speak for a"
11"He shrugged one shoulder, the"
12"He met her eyes directly"
13"She laughed once, short and"
14"He rolled the alias around"
15"His knee looked whole."
16"His eyes looked immortal."
17"she said quietly"
18"His hand stilled on the"
19"She pulled her sleeve down"
ratio0.37
34.07% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences81
matches
0"Rory’s fingers dug into the"
1"It hit the floorboards and"
2"Silas turned at the sound,"
3"His hazel eyes widened a"
4"She stared at the grey"
5"The man who once filled"
6"She kept her voice level"
7"He crouched with obvious effort,"
8"The silver signet ring flashed"
9"He straightened, tipped the fragments"
10"Rory slid onto a stool."
11"The worn leather creaked under"
12"She recognised the style."
13"He poured two measures of"
14"He said it flat, tasting"
15"She took the glass, let"
16"The whiskey tasted of peat"
17"Silas’s knuckles whitened around his"
18"He didn’t speak for a"
19"He shrugged one shoulder, the"
ratio0.852
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The silver signet ring flashed under the green neon glow that bled through from the sign outside."
1"She could almost see the girl she’d been, sitting at her father’s table listening to Silas spin tales of diplomatic incidents that were never just diplomatic."
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He shrugged, the movement pulling at the limp again"
1"the newcomer said, voice carrying across the sudden hush"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.037
88.2868%