Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHS21XWFBTMRBD56C769QQZ

Run Details

Duration:
46.2s
Cost:
$0.008643
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven's Nest breathed its usual hush under the green neon glow that bled through the rain-streaked windows. Maps curled at their edges on the walls, their inked borders faded like forgotten treaties. Black-and-white photographs hung in uneven rows: men in trench coats, women with sharp smiles, all captured in moments that no longer mattered. The air smelled of spilled ale and old wood, thick enough to coat the tongue. Aurora Carter pushed open the heavy door, shaking rain from her black hair. Delivery bag slung across her shoulder, jacket soaked through at the collar. She had only meant to drop off the last order of the night, a forgotten curry from the Golden Empress that Yu-Fei had pressed into her hands with a tired nod. Instead her boots carried her inside, seeking the familiar weight of the place she called home without paying rent. Her bright blue eyes adjusted to the low light. A few regulars nursed pints at the scarred oak bar. Silas moved behind it with that measured grace of his, the slight hitch in his left leg barely noticeable unless you knew to look. His grey-streaked auburn beard caught the lamplight as he poured a measure of whiskey. The silver signet ring on his right hand flashed when he set the glass down. Then she saw him. He sat at the far end of the bar, half-turned toward the door as if the rain outside still whispered his name. The years had carved deep lines around his mouth and eyes, but the set of his shoulders remained the same. Evan. Her Evan. No, not hers. Never truly hers after the way it all ended. His hair had thinned, receded at the temples, but he kept it cropped close in the same military style he'd affected even back in Cardiff. The leather jacket across his shoulders looked expensive, new. Nothing like the threadbare denim he'd worn when they were twenty and stupid and convinced the world owed them something. Aurora froze between one step and the next. The scar on her left wrist itched beneath her sleeve, that small crescent from the night she'd tripped over his scattered textbooks and caught her arm on the radiator. She remembered the blood, his panic, the way he'd wrapped it so carefully before driving her to A&E. Remembered too the nights that followed when his hands left marks no bandage could hide. She should leave. Turn around and let the rain swallow her whole. Instead her feet carried her forward, drawn by the gravity of unfinished sentences. Evan looked up. Recognition hit him like a physical blow. His pint glass paused halfway to his lips. Those familiar brown eyes widened, then narrowed, then softened in a sequence so rapid she almost missed it. "Rory," he said. The word cracked in the middle like thin ice. " Evan." Her voice came out steady. Cool. The mask she'd perfected since London. Since Silas. Since everything that came after him. He set the glass down too hard. Amber liquid sloshed over his fingers. "Christ. I didn't... I mean, I never thought I'd see you in a place like this." Silas glanced their way, hazel eyes sharp beneath his greying brows. He wiped the same spot on the bar three times, a habit that meant he was listening. The Spymaster never missed much. Aurora gave him the smallest shake of her head. Not now. She slid onto the stool two seats away from Evan. Not close enough for comfort. Not far enough to pretend this was nothing. Her delivery bag thumped against the rung. The scent of cooling tikka masala leaked through the plastic. "London's smaller than people think," she said. "Or bigger. Depends on the day." Evan's laugh came out hollow. He rubbed at the stubble on his jaw, a gesture that transported her back to late nights in his student flat, arguing about nothing and everything while rain lashed the windows just like tonight. "You look... different," he said. His gaze traced the sharp line of her jaw, the way her shoulders sat straight instead of curled inward. "Stronger. Like you've figured out how to hold the world at arm's length." "Occupational hazard." She accepted the glass of soda water Silas placed in front of her without asking. Ice cubes clinked. "What brings you to the Nest? Last I heard you were still in Cardiff. Barrister now, following in my father's footsteps like you always planned." The words tasted bitter. Her father had approved of Evan. Steady. Ambitious. From a good family. All the things Aurora had run from when she packed one bag and took the first train to London. Evan's fingers tightened around his pint. The years had added weight to his frame, muscle gone slightly soft around the middle. Success looked heavy on him. "Conference," he said. "International law symposium at the Barbican. Boring as hell. Slipped out during the keynote on extradition treaties." He attempted a smile that didn't reach his eyes. "Needed air. Found this place instead. The neon sign reminded me of that terrible pub we used to go to in uni. Remember? The one with the broken jukebox that only played that one Oasis song." "The one where you punched that bloke for grabbing my arse." The memory surfaced unbidden. His knuckles split. Her laughter ringing off tiled walls. How safe she'd felt then, before safety became another word for cage. Silas limped past them carrying a crate of bottles. His signet ring tapped against glass. Aurora caught the subtle lift of his eyebrow. The old spy's way of asking if she needed extraction. She gave the tiniest nod toward the back. He understood. The hidden room behind the bookshelf could wait if she needed it. For now she stayed. Evan watched the exchange with open curiosity. "Friend of yours?" "Landlord." She sipped her soda. The carbonation burned her throat. "I live upstairs. Delivery work by day. Helps pay the bills while I figure out what comes next." "Delivery." He repeated the word as if tasting it. Something like pity flickered across his face before he buried it. "Your father said you'd gone to London to stay with Eva. I tried to find you. For years. Called every number. Even went to her place once but she wouldn't let me past the doorstep." The temperature between them dropped ten degrees. Aurora's bright blue eyes fixed on the row of bottles behind the bar. Absinthe. Chartreuse. Names that sounded like spells. She traced the crescent scar through her sleeve, feeling the raised tissue. "You shouldn't have bothered." "Rory, I was an idiot." His voice dropped. The bar's ambient chatter faded until it felt like they sat in their own bubble of stale regrets. "The way I got... the things I said. The way I grabbed you that last night. I see it now. Therapy. Books. Time. God, so much time. I went to anger management like you suggested. Took me two years to even admit I needed it." She turned to face him fully then. The years had changed him, yes. The boy she'd loved had shoulders that carried shame now. But the set of his mouth remained stubborn. The same mouth that once whispered promises against her skin and later spat venom when she dared disagree. "And what do you want from me, Evan? Absolution? A pat on the head for growing up?" Her words came out sharper than intended. The cool-headed mask slipped. "I have a life here. One that doesn't include looking over my shoulder anymore." He flinched. Good. "I don't expect you to forgive me," he said quietly. "But seeing you... it brings it all back. The good parts too. Before I ruined everything. You were going to be this brilliant lawyer. Top of our class. Your father had such plans. What happened to that girl who could argue circles around professors twice her age?" "That girl grew up." Aurora pushed damp hair behind her ear. The delivery bag's strap dug into her shoulder. She set it on the floor between them like a barrier. "Realized law was never my dream. It was his. And yours. I make decent curry deliveries now. Meet interesting people. Live above a bar run by a retired spy who asks no questions. It's not glamorous. But it's mine." Silas appeared at Evan's elbow with a fresh pint. The old operative's limp was more pronounced tonight, the old Prague injury acting up in the damp. He set the drink down with deliberate care, hazel eyes flicking between them. "Everything alright here?" His voice carried that quiet authority that had once made lesser men confess state secrets. The neatly trimmed beard framed a face that had seen too many lies. "Fine, Si," Aurora said. "Old friend from Cardiff." Evan studied Silas with the measuring gaze of a man who recognized another predator. "You look familiar. Have we met?" "Doubtful." Silas's smile didn't reach his eyes. "I tend to remember faces that matter." He moved away, but not far. Positioned himself at the other end of the bar where he could watch without seeming to. Evan leaned closer. The scent of his cologne hit her, expensive and woody. Different from the cheap stuff he'd worn at university. Everything about him spoke of elevation. The kind that left others behind. "I heard about your mother," he said. "I'm sorry. Cancer, wasn't it? Your father mentioned it at the firm Christmas party last year. He looks older. Broken, almost. Asks about you every time I see him." The words landed like stones in still water. Aurora's fingers tightened around her glass until her knuckles whitened. Jennifer Carter. The Welsh teacher who'd read her stories about selkies and standing up for yourself. The one person who'd understood why she needed to run. "Don't," she whispered. The single word held every unshed tear from the past three years. "I'm not trying to hurt you." Evan's hand twitched as if he wanted to reach for her. He caught himself, tucked both hands under the bar. "I just... I look at you and see everything I threw away. The life we could have had. The kids. The house in Penylan. You would have been an incredible mother, Rory. Patient. Smart. The kind who doesn't repeat the same mistakes our parents made." "Stop." She stood abruptly. The stool scraped back. Her heart hammered against her ribs in a rhythm that felt too familiar. Fight or flight. She'd chosen flight once. London. Silas. The Nest. A new name when she needed it. Laila for the quiet months. Malphora when she helped Silas with certain discreet deliveries that weren't curry. Evan rose too. The height difference still made her tilt her chin up, but she didn't feel small anymore. The years in London had taught her how to occupy space. "I have to go," she said. "Early shift tomorrow." "Rory, wait." His voice cracked again. The sophisticated barrister facade crumbled, revealing the boy who'd once cried in her arms after failing his first mock trial. "Just tell me one thing. Are you happy? Really happy? Or are you just... surviving?" The question hung between them like smoke. Aurora looked at him, really looked. The changed man before her carried the weight of his own evolution. The regret in his eyes was genuine. But it didn't erase the bruises. The nights she'd slept in Eva's bathtub because the thought of closed doors terrified her. The way her wrist still ached before storms. Silas watched from the shadows near the bookshelf that hid his secret room. His signet ring caught the light as he polished a glass that didn't need polishing. The old spy had taught her many things. How to read a room. How to disappear. How some doors, once closed, stayed that way for good reason. "Happiness is overrated," Aurora said finally. She picked up her delivery bag. The rain still pounded against the windows, green neon fracture in every drop. "I have peace. That's more than most get." Evan's shoulders slumped. The years settled heavier on him. "I miss you. The you before I broke us. The girl who laughed at my terrible jokes and dreamed about changing the world instead of running from it." She paused at the door. Hand on the rain-slick handle. The weight of time pressed down, years of what-ifs and might-have-beens threatening to crush her careful composure. This man had been her first love. Her first mistake. Her first lesson in how quickly safety could turn to prison. "Take care of yourself, Evan," she said without turning around. "And stay away from my father. Some ghosts are better left undisturbed." The door closed behind her. The green neon sign buzzed overhead as rain swallowed her figure. Inside, Evan stared at his half-empty pint. The lines around his mouth deepened. Silas approached, limp more noticeable now. He set a fresh whiskey in front of the younger man. Hazel eyes held centuries of observed heartbreak. "She's stronger than she looks," the old spymaster said. His voice carried the gravel of too many late nights and bad decisions. "Took her a while to believe it herself." Evan looked up. Something raw passed between them, two men who'd both failed the same woman in different ways. "I know," he whispered. "I just wish I'd seen it sooner." Outside, Aurora pulled her collar up against the downpour. Her shoulder-length black hair plastered to her skull. The crescent scar on her wrist throbbed with phantom pain. She walked away from the Raven's Nest, from the man who'd once held her heart in hands that didn't know their own strength. The weight of time followed her down the Soho streets, heavy as the rain, soft as unspoken regret. Some changes cut deep. Others simply carved new paths through the same old bones. She kept walking. The delivery bag bounced against her hip. Tomorrow there would be more orders. More rain. More nights above the bar where a retired spy kept watch. Behind her, the green neon sign flickered once, then held steady. The Nest kept its secrets. And Aurora Carter, who had been Rory and Laila and sometimes Malphora, carried hers into the London night. The girl from Cardiff was gone. The woman who'd replaced her knew exactly how much a person could lose before learning what couldn't be taken. She didn't look back.
created_at"2026-05-01T12:43:45.984Z" 5/1/2026, 12:43:45 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"She stood abruptly [abruptly]"
2"His voice cracked again [again]"
3"Aurora said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
87.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2404
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count2
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"carefully"
2"slightly"
3"really"
4"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2404
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"familiar"
count4
1
word"weight"
count4
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"traced"
count2
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"eyebrow"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count2
7
word"predator"
count1
8
word"facade"
count1
9
word"carried the weight"
count1
10
word"throbbed"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"measured"
3"traced"
4"footsteps"
5"eyebrow"
6"flickered"
7"predator"
8"facade"
9"carried the weight"
10"throbbed"
11"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences206
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences206
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences230
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2405
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount1815
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.88
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest4
Carter3
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Evan16
Cardiff2
Cool1
London5
Silas12
Spymaster1
Ice1
Aurora13
Prague1
Positioned1
Welsh1
Eva1
Soho1
Rory1
Laila2
Malphora2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
6"Spymaster"
7"Ice"
8"Aurora"
9"Eva"
10"Rory"
11"Laila"
12"Malphora"
places
0"Golden"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Prague"
4"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
94.85% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences136
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if tasting it"
1"Something like pity flickered across his fac"
2"felt like they sat in their own bubble"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2405
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences230
matches
0"stayed that way"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean38.17
std19.83
cv0.519
sampleLengths
070
175
272
34
457
554
670
725
836
912
1022
1129
1244
1340
1413
1539
1637
1745
1835
1926
2065
2136
2259
2310
2428
2555
2639
274
2871
2949
3042
313
3257
3369
3439
3531
368
3720
3836
3934
4036
4144
4215
4371
4456
4530
469
4741
4861
4955
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences206
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs312
matches
0"was listening"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences230
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.58% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1828
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.04048140043763676
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.008205689277899343
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences230
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences230
mean10.46
std8.11
cv0.776
sampleLengths
018
115
222
315
413
512
631
719
89
910
1024
1114
1215
134
1422
1520
161
172
183
199
2025
219
2220
238
2429
2518
2615
273
289
2913
303
317
328
3318
343
359
367
371
386
392
406
417
426
4316
4411
4517
465
479
482
4910
53.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3652173913043478
totalSentences230
uniqueOpeners84
74.07% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences180
matches
0"Instead her boots carried her"
1"Then she saw him."
2"Instead her feet carried her"
3"More nights above the bar"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences180
matches
0"She had only meant to"
1"Her bright blue eyes adjusted"
2"His grey-streaked auburn beard caught"
3"He sat at the far"
4"His hair had thinned, receded"
5"She remembered the blood, his"
6"She should leave."
7"His pint glass paused halfway"
8"Her voice came out steady"
9"He set the glass down"
10"He wiped the same spot"
11"She slid onto the stool"
12"Her delivery bag thumped against"
13"He rubbed at the stubble"
14"His gaze traced the sharp"
15"She accepted the glass of"
16"Her father had approved of"
17"He attempted a smile that"
18"His knuckles split."
19"Her laughter ringing off tiled"
ratio0.278
40.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount151
totalSentences180
matches
0"The Raven's Nest breathed its"
1"Maps curled at their edges"
2"The air smelled of spilled"
3"Aurora Carter pushed open the"
4"Delivery bag slung across her"
5"She had only meant to"
6"Her bright blue eyes adjusted"
7"Silas moved behind it with"
8"His grey-streaked auburn beard caught"
9"The silver signet ring on"
10"He sat at the far"
11"The years had carved deep"
12"His hair had thinned, receded"
13"The leather jacket across his"
14"Nothing like the threadbare denim"
15"Aurora froze between one step"
16"The scar on her left"
17"She remembered the blood, his"
18"She should leave."
19"Evan looked up."
ratio0.839
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences180
matches(empty)
ratio0
55.98% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The Raven's Nest breathed its usual hush under the green neon glow that bled through the rain-streaked windows."
1"He sat at the far end of the bar, half-turned toward the door as if the rain outside still whispered his name."
2"He wiped the same spot on the bar three times, a habit that meant he was listening."
3"He rubbed at the stubble on his jaw, a gesture that transported her back to late nights in his student flat, arguing about nothing and everything while rain las…"
4"The Welsh teacher who'd read her stories about selkies and standing up for yourself."
5"The sophisticated barrister facade crumbled, revealing the boy who'd once cried in her arms after failing his first mock trial."
6"Silas watched from the shadows near the bookshelf that hid his secret room."
7"Something raw passed between them, two men who'd both failed the same woman in different ways."
8"And Aurora Carter, who had been Rory and Laila and sometimes Malphora, carried hers into the London night."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
92.31% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"He repeated (repeat)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.269
leniency0.538
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.115
87.1444%