Run: 2026-05-01-01KQHSEF6BZ7PZP9N7XP64EA8C

Run Details

Duration:
47.2s
Cost:
$0.008013
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden Market reeked of damp concrete and something sharper, like ozone after a lightning strike. Yellow police tape fluttered across the old entrance arch, cutting off the curious who had gathered on the street above. Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs with military precision, her worn leather watch catching the beam of her torch. At five-foot-nine, she had to duck beneath a sagging beam, her sharp jaw set in a line that brooked no nonsense. This wasn't a normal crime scene. The call had come in at 3 a.m. — anonymous tip about a body in the old tunnels. No one should have been down here. The station had been sealed since the 1980s, bricked up and forgotten. Yet here they were. Her boots splashed through shallow puddles. The air grew thicker the deeper she went, pressing against her skin. When the tunnel opened into the disused platform, floodlights revealed the horror. A man lay sprawled near the edge, chest torn open in a way that suggested claws rather than blades. His face, what remained of it, showed pure terror. No identification. No wallet. Just a small brass object clutched in his rigid fingers. "Quinn. About time." DS Patel straightened from where he'd been crouched beside the corpse. His face looked pale under the harsh lights. "Coroner's on the way, but this one's... off." Harlow crouched beside the body, careful not to disturb the scene. The wounds didn't match any knife she'd seen in eighteen years on the force. The edges were cauterised in places, blackened as if burned from within. She leaned closer. The man's eyes were open, staring at something only he could see. Between his fingers glinted that brass compass. Its face bore strange etchings — sigils that made her teeth ache when she looked too long. "What's your take?" she asked Patel, not looking up. "Some kind of ritual killing. We've found symbols on the walls further down. Looks like occult stuff. Satanists maybe. Or one of those weird cults that hang around Camden." Patel shrugged, but his voice carried uncertainty. "The market above probably draws in all sorts. This could be spillover." Harlow turned the compass over in her gloved hand. The needle spun wildly, never settling. Verdigris coated its casing, but the mechanism looked newly oiled. She slipped it into an evidence bag, noting how cold it felt even through the plastic. "Doesn't add up," she muttered. Patel shifted his weight. "What doesn't?" "Everything." She stood, scanning the platform. The floodlights cast long shadows that seemed to move when she wasn't looking directly at them. "No drag marks. No footprints leading in except ours. How did he get down here? The entrances were all sealed. We've checked." "Maybe he found another way. These old stations are full of service tunnels." Harlow walked to the wall where Patel had mentioned symbols. They weren't spray paint. The marks looked burned into the concrete — swirling patterns that hurt to focus on. One resembled the sigils on the compass. She reached out, then pulled back. Her fingers tingled. "These aren't for show," she said. "They're precise. Whoever did this knew what they were doing." Patel joined her, shining his torch across the markings. "Could be some new gang symbol. Drugs maybe. That would explain the state of the body — hallucinations, paranoia." She shot him a look. "You see burn marks like that from drug use?" He had the grace to look uncomfortable. "No. But the alternative..." "Alternative?" Patel hesitated. "Look, after what happened to Morris..." Harlow's shoulders tensed. Three years ago her partner had died in a warehouse fire that no one could explain. The official report said accelerant, but she'd seen the way the flames had moved, like they were alive. Like they were hunting. She'd lost consciousness before the end. Woken up in hospital with burns that shouldn't have healed so cleanly. The case had been closed. She'd been told to let it go. "Don't," she warned. "I'm just saying, some things don't fit in the normal boxes. This feels like that." Harlow ignored the tightness in her chest and moved further along the platform. Her torch beam caught something glinting near the tunnel mouth. She approached slowly. A small leather satchel lay half-hidden behind a collapsed bench. The kind students carried. She knelt, noting the clasp had been torn open. Inside were books — old ones with cracked leather bindings. One had fallen out. Its title, stamped in faded gold, read *Rifts and Veil Crossings: A Practical Guide*. She flipped it open. The pages were covered in handwritten notes, diagrams that matched the wall markings. The handwriting looked feminine, hurried. In the margin of one page, someone had scribbled *Eva was right. The Market moves tonight. Need bone token.* Harlow's brown eyes narrowed. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers during her years on the force — an underground black market for the sort of people who believed in magic. She'd dismissed it as urban legend. Until Morris. She tucked the book back and sealed the satchel in another evidence bag. Patel was watching her from across the platform. "Find something?" "Books," she said carefully. "Occult research. Looks like our victim wasn't alone down here." Patel walked over and peered at the satchel. "Student type. Explains the symbols maybe. Some university project gone wrong." But Harlow was already thinking beyond that. The compass in the victim's hand. The way the needle had spun. The burned symbols. None of it matched a simple murder or even a cult sacrifice. This had layers. She could feel it in her bones, the same way she'd felt it three years ago when Morris had insisted they check that warehouse alone. She stood and swept her torch across the ceiling. There — faint scratches in the concrete. Not random. They formed a pattern that led toward the far tunnel, the one that should have been blocked by rubble. "Bring the big lights over here," she told Patel. He complied, wheeling over one of the portable floods. The brighter illumination revealed what she'd missed before. The rubble wasn't solid. Someone had cleared a narrow passage through it recently. Footprints — small ones — led through the gap. Beside them, larger prints. The victim's, most likely. Harlow squeezed through first, her shoulders brushing cold stone. The air on the other side was different. Charged. Like the moments before a thunderstorm. Her skin prickled. The tunnel continued for thirty metres before opening into a wider chamber. This wasn't part of the original station. The walls were older, Victorian perhaps, but marked with the same burned sigils. In the centre of the floor lay a circle of what looked like salt mixed with something darker. Ash. Or bone. Patel whistled when he joined her. "This is proper ritual setup. We've got ourselves a live one here, Quinn." She ignored him, moving to examine the circle. At its edge lay a small white object. A token carved from bone, etched with a symbol that matched the compass face. She picked it up. It was warm. "This isn't a crime scene," she said slowly. "It's a doorway." Patel frowned. "Doorway to what?" She didn't answer immediately. Instead she pulled the evidence bag containing the compass from her pocket and held it next to the bone token. The needle stopped spinning. It pointed directly at the far wall, where the shadows seemed deeper than they should be. Harlow approached the wall. Up close, she could see the mortar between the bricks was newer in places. She pressed her palm against one brick. It gave slightly. "Help me with this." Together they worked the loose bricks free. Behind them yawned a narrow passage that definitely wasn't on any London Underground map. The compass needle swung wildly again, pointing down the new tunnel. Patel wiped sweat from his brow despite the chill. "This doesn't make sense. None of our schematics show this." "Because it's not part of the station anymore." Harlow's voice was quiet. "It's been... moved." She thought of Eva Kowalski then, though she didn't know why. The name had been in the book. Childhood friend of someone. The research assistant at the British Museum who dealt with restricted archives. Harlow had interviewed her once, two years back, about some stolen artefacts. The woman had been nervous, tucking her curly red hair behind her ear every few seconds. Knowledge in her green eyes that went beyond what she was willing to share. The satchel. The books. The handwriting. Harlow realised with a jolt that the small footprints in the dust belonged to a woman. Size five boots, perhaps. The satchel's owner. She shone her torch down the hidden passage. It sloped downward, the walls changing from brick to something smoother. Almost glassy. The air hummed now, a low vibration that set her teeth on edge. "Call it in," she told Patel. "But don't mention the tunnel. Not yet." He looked at her sharply. "Quinn, protocol—" "Something's very wrong here. The evidence doesn't add up because we're not asking the right questions." She held up the bone token. "This isn't a murder scene. It's the aftermath of something crossing over." Patel's face showed his conflict. He'd worked with her long enough to trust her instincts, even when they scared him. "Like what happened to Morris?" The name hung between them. Harlow didn't flinch this time. "Exactly like that." She stepped into the passage. The compass in her pocket grew warmer. Its needle now pointed steadily ahead, toward whatever waited in the darkness. Patel followed after a moment, his torch beam joining hers. The tunnel opened after fifty metres into what could only be described as a market. Stalls lined both sides of a vast underground chamber, lit by floating orbs that weren't electric. Creatures — no, people — of various descriptions haggled over items that shouldn't exist. A woman with too many eyes sold vials of liquid starlight. A man with shadows for hands offered maps that moved. The Veil Market. Harlow's mind reeled even as her training kicked in. She scanned faces, looking for the woman with the satchel. There — by a stall selling what looked like frozen screams in glass jars. Curly red hair. Round glasses. Freckled face. Eva Kowalski was arguing with a hooded figure, her nervous habit of tucking hair behind her left ear in full force. The compass burned in Harlow's pocket now. The needle pointed directly at Eva. Patel grabbed her arm. "We shouldn't be here. This isn't—" "Real?" Harlow finished. She shook him off but kept her voice low. "It is. And it's connected to Morris. I can feel it." Eva turned then, as if sensing their presence. Her green eyes widened behind her glasses when they landed on Harlow. Recognition. Fear. Something else. The hooded figure beside Eva melted into the crowd with unnatural speed. Eva clutched her now-empty satchel and started backing away. Harlow moved forward, her bearing military straight despite the impossibility surrounding her. "Miss Kowalski. We need to talk about your friend. And about what came through that rift." Eva's face paled. She tucked her hair behind her ear three times in quick succession. "You don't understand," she whispered, though somehow Harlow heard her clearly across the distance. "It wasn't supposed to take him. The token was meant to protect—" A scream cut through the market noise. Not human. Something with too many teeth emerged from behind a stall selling shadow compasses identical to the one in evidence. It fixed its gaze on Eva. Harlow drew her weapon, years of training overriding the sheer wrongness of everything. "Everybody down!" But in the Veil Market, police badges meant nothing. The creatures scattered. Eva ran toward another tunnel, the red curls bouncing. Patel cursed and followed Harlow as she gave chase. The compass was screaming now, vibrating so hard she could feel it through her coat. The needle spun faster than any mechanical device should allow. Whatever had killed the man in the station wasn't finished. It had followed the scent of the compass. Or perhaps the scent of Eva Kowalski, who knew too much about rifts and veil crossings. Harlow's sharp jaw tightened as she ran. The evidence still didn't add up. But for the first time in three years, she felt like she was finally asking the right questions. The market's floating lights flickered as something enormous moved in the shadows behind them. Patel's breathing grew ragged. "Quinn," he gasped. "What the hell are we chasing?" "The truth," she replied, not breaking stride. "About Morris. About all of it." Ahead, Eva glanced back once, her freckled face twisted with guilt and terror. She clutched something small and white in her fist. Another bone token. The tunnel swallowed them all, the mystery deepening with every step into the impossible.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said carefully [carefully]"
1"she said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.32
leniency0.64
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.08
85.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2137
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"carefully"
2"slightly"
3"sharply"
4"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2137
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"fluttered"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"could feel"
count2
5
word"charged"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"aftermath"
count1
9
word"electric"
count1
10
word"scanned"
count1
11
word"mechanical"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"fluttered"
1"weight"
2"scanning"
3"glinting"
4"could feel"
5"charged"
6"etched"
7"chill"
8"aftermath"
9"electric"
10"scanned"
11"mechanical"
12"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences214
matches
0"d with guilt"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences214
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences247
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords17
totalWords2149
ratio0.008
matches
0"Rifts and Veil Crossings: A Practical Guide"
1"Eva was right. The Market moves tonight. Need bone token."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1791
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Camden1
Market5
Harlow23
Quinn1
Patel19
Veil4
Crossings1
Practical1
Morris2
Victorian1
London1
Underground1
Eva12
Kowalski3
British1
Museum1
Ahead1
persons
0"Market"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Patel"
4"Morris"
5"Eva"
6"Kowalski"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
2"British"
globalScore0.858
windowScore0.333
41.30% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences138
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"shadows that seemed to move when she wasn't looking directly at them"
1"looked like salt mixed with something dar"
2"seemed deeper than they should be"
3"looked like frozen screams in glass jars"
4"as if sensing their presence"
5"felt like she was finally asking the ri"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2149
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences247
matches
0"glinted that brass"
1"check that warehouse"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean27.55
std20.45
cv0.742
sampleLengths
082
147
272
330
476
59
648
741
85
96
1044
1113
1245
1316
1428
1514
1611
171
188
1971
203
2115
2277
2341
2438
2521
262
2714
2819
2962
3037
319
3247
3327
3453
3519
3637
3711
385
3944
4028
414
4232
4319
4415
4576
466
4723
4834
4913
92.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences214
matches
0"been sealed"
1"been crouched"
2"were cauterised"
3"been closed"
4"been told"
5"been torn"
6"were covered"
7"been blocked"
34.88% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs323
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"were hunting"
2"was watching"
3"was already thinking"
4"was willing"
5"was arguing"
6"was screaming"
7"was finally asking"
38.75% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences247
ratio0.036
matches
0"— anonymous tip about a body in the old tunnels."
1"Its face bore strange etchings — sigils that made her teeth ache when she looked too long."
2"The marks looked burned into the concrete — swirling patterns that hurt to focus on."
3"Inside were books — old ones with cracked leather bindings."
4"She'd heard whispers during her years on the force — an underground black market for the sort of people who believed in magic."
5"There — faint scratches in the concrete."
6"Footprints — small ones — led through the gap."
7"Creatures — no, people — of various descriptions haggled over items that shouldn't exist."
8"There — by a stall selling what looked like frozen screams in glass jars."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1784
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.03195067264573991
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.01289237668161435
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences247
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences247
mean8.7
std5.47
cv0.629
sampleLengths
020
120
221
321
46
58
610
77
812
94
106
1112
1212
1319
149
152
162
1710
1814
198
208
2111
2214
2312
243
2512
267
2717
289
2936
3012
319
326
3310
3416
355
364
372
386
3916
4022
4113
4210
434
4415
457
466
473
486
4910
54.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3603238866396761
totalSentences247
uniqueOpeners89
35.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences190
matches
0"Just a small brass object"
1"Instead she pulled the evidence"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount56
totalSentences190
matches
0"Her boots splashed through shallow"
1"His face, what remained of"
2"His face looked pale under"
3"She leaned closer."
4"Its face bore strange etchings"
5"she asked Patel, not looking"
6"She slipped it into an"
7"She stood, scanning the platform"
8"They weren't spray paint."
9"She reached out, then pulled"
10"Her fingers tingled."
11"She shot him a look."
12"He had the grace to"
13"She'd lost consciousness before the"
14"She'd been told to let"
15"Her torch beam caught something"
16"She approached slowly."
17"She knelt, noting the clasp"
18"Its title, stamped in faded"
19"She flipped it open."
ratio0.295
41.58% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount159
totalSentences190
matches
0"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
2"This wasn't a normal crime"
3"The call had come in"
4"The station had been sealed"
5"Her boots splashed through shallow"
6"The air grew thicker the"
7"A man lay sprawled near"
8"His face, what remained of"
9"DS Patel straightened from where"
10"His face looked pale under"
11"Harlow crouched beside the body,"
12"The wounds didn't match any"
13"The edges were cauterised in"
14"She leaned closer."
15"The man's eyes were open,"
16"Its face bore strange etchings"
17"she asked Patel, not looking"
18"Patel shrugged, but his voice"
19"Harlow turned the compass over"
ratio0.837
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences190
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.86% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"At five-foot-nine, she had to duck beneath a sagging beam, her sharp jaw set in a line that brooked no nonsense."
1"Its face bore strange etchings — sigils that made her teeth ache when she looked too long."
2"Knowledge in her green eyes that went beyond what she was willing to share."
3"Stalls lined both sides of a vast underground chamber, lit by floating orbs that weren't electric."
4"Creatures — no, people — of various descriptions haggled over items that shouldn't exist."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she asked, not looking up"
1"Patel shrugged, but his voice carried uncertainty"
2"she replied, not breaking stride"
70.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she warned (warn)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"he gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.44
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.16
76.7398%