Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8VFX6RKZ5ME08113G8QMBQ

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Grok 4.3
Duration:
21.1s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Quinn stepped over the bloodied threshold and felt the abandoned tunnel breathe against her face. A faint copper sting clung to the air, sharper than it had any right to be in this damp limestone. "Can't stand the smell, either," called DS Patel from deeper in the station concourse. His torch beam wavered over overturned crates and splintered wooden pallets. "Half the lab thinks it took a week to cool." Quinn didn't answer at once. The station had been closed since the early nineties, yet her boots left fresh prints when they shouldn't. She crouched by a smear that still glistened under her light. Copper stung her nostrils once more. Recent. "When did uniform seal the place?" she asked. "Last night. No one in, no one out. Except us," Patel said. He pointed at the far wall where chalk-white symbols caught the torch glare, reversed lettering that slanted backward like bruised learning. "University lads reckon it's Greek. Or backwards Greek. They'd argue the grammar all day if we let them." She traced the edge of the nearest mark with a gloved fingertip. The paint fumes were faint, masked by the metallic tang. When she sniffed again, the rust scent carried an undertone heavier than decay, something that burned low in the throat rather than sharp on the tongue. Not paint. Not ordinary blood either. Patel's light swung to a spill of pamphlets near the ticket booth: "Lost symbols recovered, reasonable rates." Amateur print, slightly off-centre. Quinn picked one up, careful not to smudge the ink. A crimson fingerprint marked the corner, fresh enough to leave a tacky impression on her latex. "They left calling cards," said Patel. "Someone wants the press to link this to occult rubbish." "Or someone wants us to look at occult rubbish," she answered. The leaflet edge cut sharper than it should. She flipped it. In pencil, half-smudged, sat a date three days ahead and coordinates she recognised from confiscated smuggling logs. Patel laughed under his breath. "You always see the darkest angle." She thumbed the side of her watch, the leather strap creaking in the silence. The metal casing felt colder than the air around it. "Last time an odd pulpit showed up, half a dozen files went missing before evidence reached the lab. I want the lot tagged before any fiction gets attached." She walked the perimeter where the old platform edge met limestone. A glint caught her eye between two steel rails long out of service. She knelt and brushed dust aside with the side of her palm. A brass compass lay wedged under a rail, its patina dull but its needle trembling with a faint, rhythmic twitch. The glass front bore faint concentric scratches that formed interlocking circles, reminiscent of protective marks, yet she kept that observation to herself. She lifted it carefully and dropped the instrument into an evidence bag. "Looks like something off the stall down Camden Lock. Tourists buy them by the dozen," Patel said, his voice echoing back from the tunnel mouth. "Doesn't connect to Morris's old files at all." Quinn straightened too quickly. The name had landed with more weight than she expected. She slipped the bag into her coat pocket and tested the compass direction with a glance: the needle swung toward the far arch where darkness swallowed the far rail. Not random. Not broken. Not ordinary lost property. "Take samples from the blood pools anyway," she said. "Double bag the pamphlets. If this compass points anywhere but junk, I want a second opinion before the coroner writes it up as gang nonsense." Patel sighed and began bagging the leaflets one by one, fingers smearing one edge. Quinn watched the ink run slightly under pressure, carbon black dissolving into the paper's grain. She stored that detail. The compass weighed against her hip as she followed the rail deeper. Every step farther brought warmer air instead of cooler, another impossibility the others had missed. At the archway, she paused. Voices travelled ahead in the dark, low and careful, too many to belong to her team. Quinn clicked the torch to low red. The beams ahead flickered once, twice, then steadied. Someone else had arrived ahead of forensics, and they hadn't announced themselves. She raised her voice only enough for the tunnel to carry it without distortion. "Police. Stay where you are." The reply came flat, almost friendly. "We already are." Three silhouettes resolved against the red shaft, all in darker coats than standard issue. One of them, close enough for Quinn to note the glint of metal on his wrist, held an identical compass, except the needle on his pointed directly at hers. The discrepancy between the two instruments made her grip tighten. "You'll need to surrender those," she said. The central figure tilted his head as though amused. "And if we don't?" Quinn kept her free hand steady on the rail. Behind her, Patel's torch beam swung around the corner, catching the glint of the stranger's compass. The sudden competition of pulses filled the stale tunnel space. The central man's companion whispered something urgent. The reply came muttered, not loud enough for language. They shifted their footing, boots scraping against loose ballast. Quinn's own compass tugged faintly against inner fabric of the evidence bag. The needle inside it circled once more, quicker than before, as though answering a faster current. Patel cleared his throat. "Detective?" "Stay back," she ordered without turning. The strangers didn't retreat. One lowered his torch, revealing the edge of a bone-coloured token hanging from his lapel, carved with the same reversed symbols Quinn had examined on the wall. The compass needles locked on each other, their silent agreement louder than any spoken word. Something in the pressure of the air shifted. Dust lifted off the rails in tight spirals. Quinn's throat tightened around the metallic sting that had followed them since the entrance. Her watch strap cut into her wrist where leather met skin. The bag in her pocket trembled once. The central figure took one step closer. His shoe tread left a clearer mark than her own team had managed on the same dust. Quinn's pulse settled into the same deliberate rhythm she had learned years ago when every second counted and Morris was still beside her. "Detective Quinn," the voice said, precise and unhurried. "You've come earlier than protocol suggests. That usually means you already suspect." She kept her torch steady. "I suspect evidence that hasn't been properly logged yet." "Protocol can wait for the dead," he answered. His hand opened to show the token, now warm in the faint red beam. "This market doesn't close on your schedule." The tunnel air thinned around the words. Quinn felt her compass needle press harder against the plastic bag. Patel shifted weight behind her, leather creaking. The three figures waited, patient and oddly familiar with the darkness. No one moved. The red light flickered once more across the rail, catching the figure's token as it turned slowly in his fingers. The token's edge touched the rail metal, and a single sharp note rang through the tunnel like struck bone. In that instant the second compass needle swung hard, then froze, pointing directly past the detective into the deeper blackout ahead. The air drew tighter. The tunnel waited.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1216
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
2"quickly"
3"slowly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
30.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1216
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"wavered"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"glint"
count3
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"flickered"
count2
8
word"resolved"
count1
9
word"standard"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"wavered"
1"traced"
2"silence"
3"glint"
4"rhythmic"
5"echoing"
6"weight"
7"flickered"
8"resolved"
9"standard"
10"trembled"
11"pulse"
12"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences94
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1216
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
84.61% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount994
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity1.31
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn13
Patel10
Amateur1
Morris1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Patel"
2"Morris"
places(empty)
globalScore0.846
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though answering a faster current"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1216
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences108
matches
0"kept that observation"
1"stored that detail"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean33.78
std19.5
cv0.577
sampleLengths
036
135
241
38
451
554
647
716
839
911
1052
1190
1233
1351
1434
1560
1648
1719
189
1953
207
2113
2235
2353
245
256
2646
2748
2847
2920
3014
3129
3236
3342
3425
353
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"been closed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences108
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.30% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount998
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.04308617234468938
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.014028056112224449
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean11.26
std6.61
cv0.587
sampleLengths
016
120
214
311
410
55
618
711
86
91
108
1112
1221
1318
1412
1510
1626
172
184
1921
2010
2116
226
2310
2411
258
263
2717
285
296
3014
3110
3228
3311
3413
3512
3620
3722
3812
3925
408
414
4210
4329
442
452
464
479
4825
4914
57.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3888888888888889
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners42
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences83
matches
0"His torch beam wavered over"
1"She crouched by a smear"
2"He pointed at the far"
3"She traced the edge of"
4"She flipped it."
5"She thumbed the side of"
6"She walked the perimeter where"
7"She knelt and brushed dust"
8"She lifted it carefully and"
9"She slipped the bag into"
10"She stored that detail."
11"She raised her voice only"
12"They shifted their footing, boots"
13"she ordered without turning"
14"Her watch strap cut into"
15"His shoe tread left a"
16"She kept her torch steady."
17"His hand opened to show"
ratio0.217
32.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences83
matches
0"Detective Quinn stepped over the"
1"A faint copper sting clung"
2"His torch beam wavered over"
3"Quinn didn't answer at once."
4"The station had been closed"
5"She crouched by a smear"
6"Copper stung her nostrils once"
7"He pointed at the far"
8"She traced the edge of"
9"The paint fumes were faint,"
10"Patel's light swung to a"
11"Quinn picked one up, careful"
12"A crimson fingerprint marked the"
13"The leaflet edge cut sharper"
14"She flipped it."
15"Patel laughed under his breath."
16"She thumbed the side of"
17"The metal casing felt colder"
18"She walked the perimeter where"
19"A glint caught her eye"
ratio0.855
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The glass front bore faint concentric scratches that formed interlocking circles, reminiscent of protective marks, yet she kept that observation to herself."
1"The needle inside it circled once more, quicker than before, as though answering a faster current."
2"One lowered his torch, revealing the edge of a bone-coloured token hanging from his lapel, carved with the same reversed symbols Quinn had examined on the wall."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Patel said, his voice echoing back from the tunnel mouth"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.346
leniency0.692
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.077
84.4786%