Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8VVATR8QWKYR564073T8TW

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Model:
Grok 4.3
Duration:
18.8s
Cost:
$0.008969
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xAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn strode past the police tape that sagged across the entrance to the forgotten platform. Her leather watch strap chafed against her wrist as she checked it once, noted the time, and kept walking. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden smelled of damp brick and rust, the air thick enough to coat her tongue. Behind her, a constable muttered about torch batteries. She ignored him. The body lay half-curled against the curved wall where the last train might have stopped fifty years ago. DS Patel crouched beside it, his torch beam cutting through the gloom in narrow slices. Gravel crunched under her boots as she approached. "Harlow. Didn't expect you this quick." "Dispatch caught me before my second coffee. What have we got?" Patel straightened, brushing dust from his knees. "Jane Doe, mid-twenties maybe. No ID, no phone, no bag. Multiple lacerations to the throat and chest. Looks like she disturbed a dealer or slept rough in the wrong spot. This station gets the occasional addict." Harlow knelt. The woman's coat was expensive wool, the kind that belonged above ground in Chelsea rather than beneath it. She lifted the lapel gently with two gloved fingers. The lining showed no tags, no maker marks, nothing. Someone had removed them. Under the torchlight the fabric shone faintly, as though coated in something that refused to dry properly. She moved the beam lower. Three parallel cuts ran from collarbone to sternum, deep but not arterial, the sort made by something sharper than a standard knife. The edges were clean, almost surgical, yet the surrounding tissue bore small scorch marks. She traced one with her fingertip inside the glove. The mark felt warm even through latex. "Pattern's odd for a mugging," she said. "Desperate times. They get creative down here." Patel stood and swept his torch across the platform. The beam found old posters peeling from the tiles, then a cluster of metal rails half-buried in rubble. Something glinted between the rails. Harlow crossed to it and retrieved a small brass compass tangled in a coil of old signal wire. The casing carried verdigris, the face etched with tiny symbols that caught the light and twisted it. The needle spun once, then settled pointing not north but directly at the body. Patel chuckled. "Souvenir hunters must love this place. Tourist gear." Harlow turned the compass in her palm. The weight felt deliberate, not cheap. The needle trembled when she shifted her stance, as though tracking movement rather than direction. She slipped it into an evidence bag and sealed it. "Take a closer look at the chest wounds." Patel bent again. "Clean slices. No hesitation marks. Maybe the attacker had a military background or worked in a slaughterhouse." "Or neither." Harlow lifted the woman's right hand. The nails were trimmed and polished, but the index finger showed a small tattoo of interlocking circles barely visible against the skin. She photographed it with her phone. "This wasn't printed yesterday. Looks old enough to have settled." They worked in silence for several minutes. Patel bagged the hands, the hair, the few fragments of fibre clinging to the collar. Harlow walked the platform edge, her torch low. Something moved in the periphery of the beam, too fluid for a rat. She stopped. A footprint, fresh, pressed into the layer of soot and oil that coated the rails. The tread was distinctive: a narrow heel and a sole pattern that matched none of the standard issue boots of the attending officers. She crouched, measured it with her watch strap for scale, and took a photograph. "Patel. Come here." He joined her. "What?" She pointed at the print. "Wrong depth for the weight of the body over there. Someone else stood here after she died. The edges are still sharp. Recent." Patel frowned. "Could be a copper clearing the scene. Or the photographer." "Photographer wears trainers. This sole has a deliberate cut across the ball of the foot, same as certain leather boots issued to private security, the sort that avoid leaving marks on expensive floors." She straightened. "And look at the angle. Whoever made this print was facing the victim, not walking away from her." The torch in Patel's hand wavered slightly. "You think she was meeting someone down here." "I think she was led." Harlow stepped onto the rail and balanced, testing the spacing. The compass in her pocket gave a faint click, the needle swinging again. She ignored it. "The lacerations stopped bleeding before she hit the ground. That means her heart had already slowed. The wounds were made post-mortem or while she was unconscious." "Post-mortem cutting?" She shook her head. "Not cutting. Marking. Someone wanted us to see the pattern." Patel rubbed the back of his neck. "Look, Quinn, I respect the twenty years. But every time we get a body in a weird place you start chasing ghosts. Three years ago you nearly lost your badge over that business with Morris." Harlow's jaw tightened. She said nothing for three seconds, long enough for Patel to hear the silence. Then she spoke. "Three years ago my partner walked into a house in Islington and came out the wrong way. The coroner called it a heart attack. I called it the same thing everyone else did until the toxicology came back blank and the house records showed the place had been empty for eight months." She turned the torch off. Darkness swallowed the platform except for the distant emergency lights at the stairwell. "Send the fibre samples to the lab by tonight. Ask them to test for residual copper and burnt animal matter. And get me the CCTV from the three access points that still work on the surface. Someone brought that compass here. Someone knew what it pointed to." Patel hesitated, then nodded. "Done." She walked back to the body one last time. The coat still gleamed. She lifted the edge again and looked beneath the fabric at the concrete floor where the victim had fallen. A thin line of fine white powder traced a half-circle around the head. Chalk? Salt? She brushed a sample into a vial. The compass in her pocket gave another click, louder this time. "Harlow," Patel said from the stairwell. "Dispatch says Detective Inspector Calder wants an update in twenty. Something about a task force meeting on Camden break-ins." She stood. The station air pressed against her skin, colder than before. The footprint on the rail was already starting to fill with loose dust. She took one more photograph, then pocketed the phone. "Give Calder the standard report. Suspicious death, no immediate witnesses, ongoing forensic sweep." She paused. "Everything else stays between us until the results come back." Patel nodded once and started up the stairs. Harlow remained a moment longer, eyes on the compass bag. The needle had stopped spinning. It pointed straight at the archway leading deeper into the tunnels, toward the old maintenance door no one had opened in decades. The door stood ajar by three inches. Light, or something white and moving, flickered behind it. Heavy footsteps echoed from the stairwell above. Calder's voice carried down, clipped and impatient. Harlow clicked her torch on again and walked toward the door, leaving the body behind. The compass clicked once more in her pocket, urgent now, as though counting steps she had not yet taken.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.207
leniency0.414
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1227
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slightly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
30.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1227
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"standard"
count3
2
word"traced"
count2
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"measured"
count1
8
word"wavered"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"standard"
2"traced"
3"etched"
4"weight"
5"trembled"
6"silence"
7"measured"
8"wavered"
9"flickered"
10"footsteps"
11"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences84
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1227
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount800
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.63
worstName"Patel"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Patel"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube1
Camden1
Patel13
Chelsea1
Harlow10
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Camden"
2"Patel"
3"Chelsea"
4"Harlow"
places(empty)
globalScore0.688
windowScore0.5
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as though tracking movement rather than direction"
1"as though counting steps she had not yet taken"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.815
wordCount1227
matches
0"not north but directly at the body"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean33.16
std24.27
cv0.732
sampleLengths
066
141
26
311
443
559
657
77
87
981
1010
1138
128
1320
1446
1597
163
174
1828
1912
2053
2115
2257
232
2414
2542
2620
2752
2818
2947
305
3165
3225
3334
3425
3561
3648
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs139
matches
0"was already starting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences107
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount803
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.0361145703611457
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007471980074719801
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean11.47
std8.96
cv0.782
sampleLengths
016
119
220
38
43
518
615
78
86
911
107
1136
122
1318
149
159
164
1717
185
1922
2014
219
227
237
247
259
2618
275
2818
2917
3014
312
328
337
346
3515
3610
378
383
3917
408
4122
426
4310
447
4515
468
4713
482
4915
68.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.42990654205607476
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners46
45.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"Then she spoke."
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences74
matches
0"Her leather watch strap chafed"
1"She ignored him."
2"She lifted the lapel gently"
3"She moved the beam lower."
4"She traced one with her"
5"She slipped it into an"
6"She photographed it with her"
7"They worked in silence for"
8"She crouched, measured it with"
9"He joined her."
10"She pointed at the print."
11"She ignored it."
12"She shook her head."
13"She said nothing for three"
14"She turned the torch off."
15"She walked back to the"
16"She lifted the edge again"
17"She brushed a sample into"
18"She took one more photograph,"
19"It pointed straight at the"
ratio0.27
0.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences74
matches
0"Harlow Quinn strode past the"
1"Her leather watch strap chafed"
2"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
3"She ignored him."
4"The body lay half-curled against"
5"DS Patel crouched beside it,"
6"Gravel crunched under her boots"
7"Patel straightened, brushing dust from"
8"The woman's coat was expensive"
9"She lifted the lapel gently"
10"The lining showed no tags,"
11"Someone had removed them."
12"She moved the beam lower."
13"The edges were clean, almost"
14"She traced one with her"
15"The mark felt warm even"
16"Patel stood and swept his"
17"The beam found old posters"
18"Something glinted between the rails."
19"Harlow crossed to it and"
ratio0.919
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Harlow Quinn strode past the police tape that sagged across the entrance to the forgotten platform."
1"The woman's coat was expensive wool, the kind that belonged above ground in Chelsea rather than beneath it."
2"The tread was distinctive: a narrow heel and a sole pattern that matched none of the standard issue boots of the attending officers."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.069
leniency0.138
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.6241%