Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8XE6FQTMMZQG1J6FH4DMB8

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4.3
Duration:
1m 6s
Cost:
$0.008523
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora pushed through a gap in the undergrowth and caught her breath. The pendant warmed against her collarbone, a small pulse of heat that refused to fade when she started walking again. She had come for the stones. Eva's last scribbled note mentioned a circle of oaks "where the world feels thinner" and a meeting time that never arrived. Four days later the police still called it a missing-persons case with no leads. Aurora had maps, torch, and the old silver chain she now wished she had left behind. A crow gave a single bark somewhere above the canopy. She waited, but the bird stayed silent. The air held no wind, yet leaves scraped against low branches as though something large brushed past them. She clicked the torch on, swept the beam across the path ahead, and kept moving toward the clearing. The path narrowed. Roots humped across the dirt like buried spines. She stepped over two and then paused; the third root lay differently than she remembered from her first cautious survey. A thin line of earth had shifted across the trunk. She turned the beam back and forth. Nothing moved. She stepped carefully, expecting her foot to land on solid ground, and froze when the earth gave a soft give beneath her trainer. She crouched. The indentation was long, narrow, and fresh. The toe end pointed toward the grove. The heel end had already begun to fill with loose grit. She brushed the sides with two fingers and found no animal tracks, only the impression of something dragged. A faint metallic scent clung to the damp soil, copper and iron together. She wiped her hand on her jacket and stood. The trees parted. Five weathered oaks anchored the clearing in a loose ring, their roots twined around six low standing stones that still held carved grooves even with the moss. Aurora played the torch across each trunk, counting shadows. Nothing. She crossed to the largest stone and knelt, searching the moss for the faint white markings Eva had described, yet every patch looked older than the note had suggested. Cold lapped at her shins. She looked down and watched a thin film of mist rise from the centre of the circle. It did not spread outward; it lifted straight, a finger of vapour that thickened until it stood shoulder-height. She backed two paces. The mist thinned again, and the clearing appeared unchanged. A rustle sounded behind her. Not a leaf. Something heavier turned on itself, slow and deliberate. She swung the torch in a full half-circle. The beam met empty air and black bark. She exhaled, counted three beats, and the sound repeated exactly once, the same deliberate turn on one heel. She took another careful step back until her shoulder pressed against an oak trunk, then stayed still. The pendant throbbed once, harder. Warmth bled through her shirt and onto her chest. She touched the stone through the fabric. It answered with a second pulse that matched the rhythm she imagined her own heart had abandoned. From the far side of the ring a new sound rose, low and sliding, the dry friction of cloth on cloth, repeated every few seconds. She kept the torch lowered, letting only a thin spill reach the grass. The grass itself looked different. Where the light touched, the blades lay brushed in one direction, as if traffic had passed. She followed the pattern with the beam until it pointed at a gap between two stones. Beyond the gap the grass pointed the opposite way. Whatever had passed had walked inside the circle and then walked out again, leaving two trails that should have cancelled each other. She realised she had stopped breathing and forced air through her nose. The exhale sounded loud. The sliding sound stopped at once. In the new silence she heard a single footfall on the far side, soft, testing. She shifted her weight to move the torch another inch and the footfall copied the movement exactly, one careful step in the opposite arc. Branches above her creaked once without wind. A small object dropped and hit the leaf litter with a muted click, like a coin on stone. She did not look up. Instead she turned the beam towards the sound and watched a single black feather settle among the roots. It had no shine. The barbs seemed coated in dull film, and a darker spot at the shaft caught the light as though the feather had soaked in liquid recently. The pendant grew hot enough that she felt the sting through cotton. She unbuttoned the collar and let the stone rest against skin. Its glow, faint at first, strengthened until a red pulse leaked between her fingers. The clearing answered with a ripple. Leaves closest to the ground trembled though nothing touched them. The ripple travelled from one oak to the next, a slow wave that stilled only when it reached the stone she leaned against. Another footfall, closer. Then a second. The rhythm was wrong for walking; each step paused too long, as if the walker listened for her answering heart. She released the pendant and gripped the torch with both hands. The red glow settled into her side, no longer painful but constant. The sound of sliding cloth resumed. This time it came from her right, just beyond the nearest stone. She risked a low whisper, forcing the syllables toward the dark. "Eva?" The name met silence first. Then the cloth sound answered, longer, pulled out like thread from a spool. She heard breathing next, shallow and controlled, hidden behind bark. Not her own. The rhythm matched nothing she recognised. Her beam found movement at last, a dark shape that resolved into the outline of a figure crouched between two stones. She saw the suggestion of dark hair, the curve of a shoulder, and then the shape folded downward so quickly the torch caught only disturbed leaves. She took one stride forward, meaning to close the distance, while another footfall mirrored hers from behind. The pendant flared again. The glow spilled across the grass and picked out a narrow track of crushed blades that led straight toward her. The track ended at her own feet. Fresh earth clung to the hem of her jeans; she had not noticed the soil until the light showed it. The figure had walked directly to her and stopped. She raised the beam again. The clearing returned nothing but the five oaks, the patent stones, and the slow lift of mist that renewed itself at the centre. The breathing had gone. The sliding cloth had gone. Only the pendant burned, steady and patient, against the scar on her wrist where the silver chain now rested warmer than skin. Behind the nearest oak the earth shifted once more, the soft press of weight settling. She did not turn. The clearing had begun to breathe with her, each inhale matched by a distant footfall that never drew closer, each exhale answered by a faint brush of leaf against bark. The pulse of the pendant kept even time between them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
24.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"pulse"
count4
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"footfall"
count5
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"throbbed"
2"warmth"
3"silence"
4"footfall"
5"weight"
6"trembled"
7"whisper"
8"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences99
matches
0"felt the sting"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1188
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions5
wordCount1182
uniqueNames2
maxNameDensity0.25
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Eva2
Aurora3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Aurora"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"appeared unchanged"
1"seemed coated in dull film, and a darker spot at the shaft caught the light as though the feather had soaked in liquid recently"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.842
wordCount1188
matches
0"no longer painful but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
63.33% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean56.57
std21.03
cv0.372
sampleLengths
032
157
253
373
467
569
653
767
838
9106
1061
1178
1276
1349
1429
151
1637
1764
1860
1959
2059
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs199
matches(empty)
28.57% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences100
ratio0.04
matches
0"She stepped over two and then paused; the third root lay differently than she remembered from her first cautious survey."
1"It did not spread outward; it lifted straight, a finger of vapour that thickened until it stood shoulder-height."
2"The rhythm was wrong for walking; each step paused too long, as if the walker listened for her answering heart."
3"Fresh earth clung to the hem of her jeans; she had not noticed the soil until the light showed it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1185
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.036286919831223625
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.010126582278481013
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean11.88
std7.22
cv0.608
sampleLengths
012
120
26
321
414
516
610
77
818
918
103
118
1220
1310
147
152
1623
172
187
197
2011
2118
2213
239
243
2527
269
271
2829
295
3017
3118
324
339
345
353
368
378
388
3918
4017
415
429
437
4417
4525
4613
475
4816
4916
37.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners30
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences96
matches
0"Instead she turned the beam"
1"Then a second."
2"Then the cloth sound answered,"
3"Only the pendant burned, steady"
ratio0.042
82.50% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences96
matches
0"She had come for the"
1"She waited, but the bird"
2"She clicked the torch on,"
3"She stepped over two and"
4"She turned the beam back"
5"She stepped carefully, expecting her"
6"She brushed the sides with"
7"She wiped her hand on"
8"She crossed to the largest"
9"She looked down and watched"
10"It did not spread outward;"
11"She backed two paces."
12"She swung the torch in"
13"She exhaled, counted three beats,"
14"She took another careful step"
15"She touched the stone through"
16"It answered with a second"
17"She kept the torch lowered,"
18"She followed the pattern with"
19"She realised she had stopped"
ratio0.344
38.13% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences96
matches
0"Aurora pushed through a gap"
1"The pendant warmed against her"
2"She had come for the"
3"Eva's last scribbled note mentioned"
4"Aurora had maps, torch, and"
5"A crow gave a single"
6"She waited, but the bird"
7"The air held no wind,"
8"She clicked the torch on,"
9"The path narrowed."
10"Roots humped across the dirt"
11"She stepped over two and"
12"A thin line of earth"
13"She turned the beam back"
14"She stepped carefully, expecting her"
15"The indentation was long, narrow,"
16"The toe end pointed toward"
17"The heel end had already"
18"She brushed the sides with"
19"A faint metallic scent clung"
ratio0.844
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The pendant warmed against her collarbone, a small pulse of heat that refused to fade when she started walking again."
1"The air held no wind, yet leaves scraped against low branches as though something large brushed past them."
2"It did not spread outward; it lifted straight, a finger of vapour that thickened until it stood shoulder-height."
3"The rhythm was wrong for walking; each step paused too long, as if the walker listened for her answering heart."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"note mentioned (mention)"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
81.2837%