Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8XQ0FS0W1HRRNWWMCNPS1B

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Duration:
8.0s
Cost:
$0.003365
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pint glass shattered against the edge of the mahogany bar, sending a jagged spray of amber liquid across my sleeve. I didn't reach for a towel. I kept staring at the man sitting near the back, his fingers tracing the rim of a tumbler with a rhythmic, measured precision that felt like a phantom heartbeat from a decade ago. "Rough shift, Rory?" I ignored the bartender, my eyes locked on the stranger’s profile. The auburn hair was streaked with grey now, and he held himself with a heavy, deliberate stillness, as if he expected the floorboards underneath his stool to give way at any second. It was Silas. But the man sitting there looked like he had been hollowed out and refilled with something colder, harder. I crossed the room, the scent of stale ale and pine cleaner fading as I approached the back corner. The air here felt charged, stagnant. Silas looked up. His hazel eyes didn't widen in surprise; they sharpened, scanning my face as if checking for a wire or a hidden weapon. "You're late," he said. His voice was a rasp, a low friction sound that settled deep in the chest. "I wasn't coming at all," I replied. "Yet here you are." He gestured to the empty stool beside him with his silver-ringed hand. "Sit. You look like you've been running, though there's nowhere left to go." I sat, the wood creaking beneath me. The Raven’s Nest had changed. The maps on the walls were different ones now, pinned with red thread that cut through the topography of London like surgical incisions. Everything in the room felt heavy, loaded with a meaning I wasn't meant to parse. "You left a stain on my life, Silas," I said, catching his reflection in the polished wood of the counter. "I left you a career, Carter," he corrected, turning his heavy head toward me. "And a place to hide. Don't mistake my pragmatism for malice." "I was nineteen. I believed you were a mentor." "Belief is a luxury for those who don't have to navigate the dark," he said, taking a slow, controlled sip of his drink. "I taught you how to see the patterns. You just don't like what you see now." I traced the crescent scar on my left wrist, the skin pull of it a constant reminder of the day everything broke. I hadn't come here to argue about the past, but the sight of him—the way he still held that silver signet ring like a talisman—dragged the buried anger into the light. The room felt smaller, the walls pressing in with the weight of unsaid things. He was the architect of my exile, the one who had whispered the necessity of my flight from Cardiff, and yet, here he was, looking like a man who had forgotten the taste of mercy. "What did you do with the records?" I asked. He laughed, a dry, joyless sound that barely moved his shoulders. "Records are for the dead, Rory. I have files, memories, and debts. You’re currently in the middle of a very long, very complicated debt." "I paid my dues." "You did," he admitted, his gaze shifting to a black-and-white photograph taped near the shelf. It was grainy, a street corner in Prague, blurred by motion. "But the world moved. People you thought were erased managed to find ink. They’re looking for the girl who left Cardiff with nothing but a grudge and a missing barrister’s daughter." My breath hitched. I hadn't thought about my father in an eternity. My hand moved instinctively to the bag at my feet, my fingers brushing the strap, ready to bolt. "You’re lying," I said. "Am I?" He leaned closer, the scent of woodsmoke clinging to his coat. "Check the delivery manifest for tomorrow morning. You think your boss at the Golden Empress is just a cook? People don't accidentally hire ghosts, Rory. You were placed." "Placed by who?" "By the only person who figured out who you really were before you even crossed the border." He tapped the silver ring against the glass. The sound was like a gavel. I stood up, the chair scraping sharply against the grit on the floor. The patrons near the door didn't even turn their heads. This was a place where things disappeared, and I had been sleepwalking through the middle of it for months. Silas watched me with that infuriating, detached calm, his leg twitching slightly—a ghost of the injury that had ended his field life, or perhaps just a reminder that he was still earthbound. "Don't go to the restaurant tonight," he whispered. "I need the wage." "You need to survive. There's a difference." I looked at him, searching for the man who had once promised me safety. I found only a strategist counting his losses. Outside, the neon green sign buzzed, a sickly flicker that cast long, distorted shadows across the wet pavement visible through the window. The city felt predatory tonight, every footstep in the alleyway behind the bar sounding like a lead-up to a confrontation. "Why tell me now?" I asked. "Because they’re already in the building," he said, his eyes flicking toward the entrance. I didn't turn around. I heard the lock click—a heavy, mechanical sound of iron sliding into a deadbolt. The front door hadn't just been shut; it had been secured from the outside. Silas stood up, his limp pronounced as he braced himself against the bar, drawing a slim, weighted blade from beneath his coat with a fluid motion that betrayed his age. "Rory," he said, and for the first time, there was urgency in his voice. "The bookshelf. Behind the maps." I didn't wait for a second instruction. I vaulted over the bar, the glass and bottles shattering around me as I scrambled toward the hidden seam in the wall, my heart hammering against my ribs like a trapped bird. Behind me, the muffled thud of boots hit the barroom floor, and the unmistakable sound of a suppressor being threaded onto a barrel cut through the silence. Silas turned to face the door, his silhouette framed by the flickering green light, the silver ring catching the dim glow as he braced for the impact. I reached the bookshelf, fingers trembling as I clawed at the wood, trying to find the release. The wall groaned, but it wouldn't give. "It's finished," a voice called out from the doorway, cold and precise. "Not yet," Silas replied. The first shot shattered a row of bottles, the smell of liquid chaos filling the trapped air. I pulled, twisted, and threw my weight against the panel, my breath caught in a jagged, silent scream. It gave way just as the lights in the bar flickered and died, plunging us into a darkness so thick it felt like drowning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.567
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1145
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
2"sharply"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1145
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"shattered"
count2
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"reminder"
count2
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"mechanical"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"tracing"
2"rhythmic"
3"measured"
4"charged"
5"scanning"
6"navigate"
7"traced"
8"reminder"
9"weight"
10"flicker"
11"mechanical"
12"silence"
13"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences64
matches
0"n in surprise"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences77
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1141
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount894
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.67
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Silas6
Raven1
Nest1
London1
Cardiff1
Prague1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like a phantom heartbeat from a de"
1"looked like he had been hollowed out and"
2"as if checking for a wire or a hidden weapon"
3"felt like drowning"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1141
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean31.69
std25.66
cv0.81
sampleLengths
060
13
264
350
419
57
629
750
820
925
109
1139
12102
139
1435
154
1657
1730
184
1941
203
2131
2274
238
244
257
2664
276
2814
2962
3019
3166
3251
3312
344
3559
83.33% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences64
matches
0"was streaked"
1"been hollowed"
2"been shut"
3"been secured"
4"being threaded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs149
matches
0"was, looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences77
ratio0.065
matches
0"His hazel eyes didn't widen in surprise; they sharpened, scanning my face as if checking for a wire or a hidden weapon."
1"I hadn't come here to argue about the past, but the sight of him—the way he still held that silver signet ring like a talisman—dragged the buried anger into the light."
2"Silas watched me with that infuriating, detached calm, his leg twitching slightly—a ghost of the injury that had ended his field life, or perhaps just a reminder that he was still earthbound."
3"I heard the lock click—a heavy, mechanical sound of iron sliding into a deadbolt."
4"The front door hadn't just been shut; it had been secured from the outside."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount902
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.02328159645232816
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0066518847006651885
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences77
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences77
mean14.82
std8.89
cv0.6
sampleLengths
021
16
233
33
411
532
63
718
819
96
103
1122
124
1315
147
1516
1613
177
185
1923
2015
2120
2214
2311
249
2523
2616
2722
2831
2914
3035
319
3211
3324
344
3515
3611
3731
383
399
4018
414
4213
4328
443
4525
466
4713
4810
4919
53.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.37662337662337664
totalSentences77
uniqueOpeners29
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences57
matches
0"I didn't reach for a"
1"I kept staring at the"
2"I ignored the bartender, my"
3"It was Silas."
4"I crossed the room, the"
5"His hazel eyes didn't widen"
6"His voice was a rasp,"
7"He gestured to the empty"
8"I sat, the wood creaking"
9"I said, catching his reflection"
10"he corrected, turning his heavy"
11"he said, taking a slow,"
12"I traced the crescent scar"
13"I hadn't come here to"
14"He was the architect of"
15"He laughed, a dry, joyless"
16"he admitted, his gaze shifting"
17"It was grainy, a street"
18"My breath hitched."
19"I hadn't thought about my"
ratio0.614
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences57
matches
0"The pint glass shattered against"
1"I didn't reach for a"
2"I kept staring at the"
3"I ignored the bartender, my"
4"The auburn hair was streaked"
5"It was Silas."
6"I crossed the room, the"
7"The air here felt charged,"
8"Silas looked up."
9"His hazel eyes didn't widen"
10"His voice was a rasp,"
11"He gestured to the empty"
12"I sat, the wood creaking"
13"The Raven’s Nest had changed."
14"The maps on the walls"
15"Everything in the room felt"
16"I said, catching his reflection"
17"he corrected, turning his heavy"
18"he said, taking a slow,"
19"I traced the crescent scar"
ratio0.947
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"I kept staring at the man sitting near the back, his fingers tracing the rim of a tumbler with a rhythmic, measured precision that felt like a phantom heartbeat…"
1"The auburn hair was streaked with grey now, and he held himself with a heavy, deliberate stillness, as if he expected the floorboards underneath his stool to gi…"
2"His hazel eyes didn't widen in surprise; they sharpened, scanning my face as if checking for a wire or a hidden weapon."
3"He was the architect of my exile, the one who had whispered the necessity of my flight from Cardiff, and yet, here he was, looking like a man who had forgotten …"
4"Silas watched me with that infuriating, detached calm, his leg twitching slightly—a ghost of the injury that had ended his field life, or perhaps just a reminde…"
5"Silas stood up, his limp pronounced as he braced himself against the bar, drawing a slim, weighted blade from beneath his coat with a fluid motion that betrayed…"
6"I vaulted over the bar, the glass and bottles shattering around me as I scrambled toward the hidden seam in the wall, my heart hammering against my ribs like a …"
66.18% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He leaned, the scent of woodsmoke clinging to his coat"
1"he said, his eyes flicking toward the entrance"
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he corrected (correct)"
1"he admitted (admit)"
2"he whispered (whisper)"
3"a voice called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.467
leniency0.933
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.267
67.4595%