Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8XSSTSVF9CJNP36MFP1XT1

Run Details

Duration:
7.0s
Cost:
$0.003347
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heavy iron door of the abandoned Camden Tube station groaned against rusted hinges. I ducked beneath a flickering emergency light, the harsh buzz of the fixture competing with the rhythmic drip of groundwater somewhere in the dark. "Twenty minutes late," Harlow Quinn remarked, not turning away from the chalk-dusted floor. "I expected military precision from someone who carries themselves like you, Aurora." "Traffic in the surface world is a variable I haven't quite mastered, Detective." "Save the excuses for the commissioner. Look at this." Quinn pointed a gloved finger toward the centre of the disused platform. A jagged circle, roughly six feet in diameter, marred the grime-stained tiles. It wasn't just chalk. The lines hummed with a low, dissonant frequency that made the hair on the back of my neck stand up, prickling like static electricity before a summer storm. Beside the circle lay a smear of something dark, tacky, and distinctly iridescent under the gloom of the station. "Classic containment ritual," she added, her sharp jaw tight. "Looks like a minor rift opened, spilled its contents, and the perpetrator sealed it back up. Amateur work, really. Likely a teenager playing with books they shouldn't have stolen from the restricted sections." I knelt, reaching into my satchel to retrieve the brass Veil Compass. Its needle spun in a frantic, erratic circle, refusing to settle on any cardinal direction. The verdigris on the casing seemed to glow faintly in response to the residue on the floor. "Amateur, you say? A teenager doesn't know how to synthesize ectoplasm base with iron powder." "They have the internet now, don't they? Recipes for chaos are barely a click away," Quinn replied, pacing the perimeter of the circle. She adjusted the worn leather watch on her wrist, her movements tight and controlled. "Morris saw this kind of thing three years ago. We brushed it off as vandalism then too. Until he went missing." "There's a difference between vandalism and blood sacrifice, Harlow." "Blood?" She laughed, a short, dry sound that lacked any warmth. "That’s just spillover. Pig, most likely. The butchers in the Market are always careless when the moon shifts." I ignored the dismissal, focusing on the specific tilt of the etched sigils. They were inverted, yes, but not to contain energy. They were feeding it. I stood up, feeling the vibrations travel through the soles of my boots. The air felt heavy, like walking through water, and the copper tang of blood sharpened in the stagnant air. "It's not a containment seal," I corrected quietly, tracing the line of a sigil with the tip of my boot. "Look at the flow of the etchings. Each stroke terminates in a point directed inward, not outward. This was a siphon. Someone wasn't keeping something out. They were drawing something in." Quinn stepped closer, her expression shifting from irritation to a cold, clinical focus. She pulled a small flashlight from her belt, the beam cutting through the dust-choked air. "If it's a siphon, where’s the host? The energy dump creates heat. There should be charring on the tiles." "Exactly." I walked toward the edge of the platform where the tracks dropped into a yawning, pitch-black tunnel. The station felt like a tomb that had been robbed, the shadows stretching and pulling against the walls with a life of their own. I tucked a lock of red hair behind my left ear, a nervous habit I couldn't suppress when the truth started to settle into my gut like lead. "You're seeing ghosts, Aurora. My job is evidence. Evidence says someone performed a ritual, realized they were out of their depth, and fled." "The evidence is telling you what they want you to believe, Harlow. You're looking for a person. I'm looking for a footprint that doesn't belong to a human." We crossed into the tunnel, the silence of the underground space absolute, broken only by our footsteps. The damp walls wept mineral-rich water, creating long, weeping streaks in the soot. I held the Veil Compass up. The needle stopped spinning. It pointed straight ahead, deeper into the dark, vibrating with such intensity that the brass casing began to grow warm against my palm. "Whatever was here," I whispered, "it didn't leave through the station exit." Quinn reached for her service weapon, her thumb finding the safety with practiced, reflexive grace. "Stay behind me. If you’re right, this isn't amateur hour. It’s an extraction." "Extraction of what?" "A soul, maybe. Or a passage. My partner was investigating a string of these 'amateur' stashes before he vanished. He called them Waystations. He thought someone was building a bridge." We rounded a sharp curve in the tunnel, and the temperature plummeted. My breath hitched in my chest, blooming in a pale cloud before me. The air smelled of ozone, burnt sugar, and old, stagnant earth. Pinned against a rusted maintenance ladder was a coat—a heavy, woollen trench coat that looked suspiciously like the one Morris had been wearing in the last file photos I had seen of him. It was empty, draped hollowly against the metal rungs. I stepped forward, but Quinn’s hand shot out, grabbing my shoulder with a strength that bruised. "Don't move," she hissed, her voice stripped of its usual bravado. "Is that..." "Morris," she confirmed. She turned the beam of her torch upward. Above the coat, suspended in the darkness by threads of thin, black ink that pulsed like arteries, hung a shadow. It wasn't a man. It was a silhouette, a tear in the fabric of the tunnel, shaped like a human but devoid of light, depth, or mass. It didn't have eyes, but I felt the weight of its attention press against my mind, a cold, crushing pressure that made my vision dim. The creature didn't move, yet the air around us began to hum a discordant, grinding tune. The Veil Compass in my hand grew scorching, the sigils on its face flaring with a brilliant, blinding white light. "Harlow, the compass—it’s identifying the rift!" "Forget the device," she shouted, drawing her weapon as the black ink threads began to lengthen toward us. "It's not a rift, it's a doorway!" The creature’s chest cavity opened, a jagged maw of darkness that began to pull the very air from the tunnel. My feet slipped on the slick tiles, and for a second, I felt the ground vanish beneath me, replaced by an infinite, hollow hunger that screamed of a thousand lost souls. The creature lunged, stretching out a hand made of static and shadow, and the last of the safety we had clung to shattered like glass.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I corrected quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.643
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.071
90.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1105
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1105
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count1
1
word"variable"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"maw"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"variable"
2"gloom"
3"warmth"
4"etched"
5"tracing"
6"silence"
7"footsteps"
8"intensity"
9"pulsed"
10"weight"
11"maw"
12"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences52
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"started to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1103
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount767
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.78
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Tube1
Quinn6
Veil3
Compass3
Morris1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a tomb that had been robbed,"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1103
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean32.44
std23.02
cv0.709
sampleLengths
038
125
213
39
475
542
644
715
858
99
1029
1158
1251
1347
141
1569
1623
1728
1863
1912
2028
213
2230
2336
2442
2516
2611
272
283
2980
3036
316
3225
3376
91.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences52
matches
0"were inverted"
1"been robbed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs125
matches
0"were feeding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences71
ratio0.014
matches
0"Pinned against a rusted maintenance ladder was a coat—a heavy, woollen trench coat that looked suspiciously like the one Morris had been wearing in the last file photos I had seen of him."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount773
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"brilliant, blinding white light."
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.02199223803363519
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.009055627425614488
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean15.54
std7.9
cv0.509
sampleLengths
014
124
213
312
413
59
612
712
84
928
1019
119
1233
1312
1415
1517
1615
1723
1814
1921
209
2111
2218
2313
249
254
2613
2719
2820
2931
3013
3115
3219
331
3417
3524
3628
3723
3828
3917
4013
416
424
4323
4412
4515
4613
473
4830
4912
74.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4788732394366197
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners34
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences50
matches
0"I ducked beneath a flickering"
1"It wasn't just chalk."
2"she added, her sharp jaw"
3"I knelt, reaching into my"
4"Its needle spun in a"
5"She adjusted the worn leather"
6"She laughed, a short, dry"
7"I ignored the dismissal, focusing"
8"They were inverted, yes, but"
9"They were feeding it."
10"I stood up, feeling the"
11"I corrected quietly, tracing the"
12"She pulled a small flashlight"
13"I walked toward the edge"
14"I tucked a lock of"
15"We crossed into the tunnel,"
16"I held the Veil Compass"
17"It pointed straight ahead, deeper"
18"We rounded a sharp curve"
19"My breath hitched in my"
ratio0.58
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences50
matches
0"The heavy iron door of"
1"I ducked beneath a flickering"
2"Harlow Quinn remarked, not turning"
3"Quinn pointed a gloved finger"
4"A jagged circle, roughly six"
5"It wasn't just chalk."
6"The lines hummed with a"
7"she added, her sharp jaw"
8"I knelt, reaching into my"
9"Its needle spun in a"
10"The verdigris on the casing"
11"Quinn replied, pacing the perimeter"
12"She adjusted the worn leather"
13"She laughed, a short, dry"
14"I ignored the dismissal, focusing"
15"They were inverted, yes, but"
16"They were feeding it."
17"I stood up, feeling the"
18"The air felt heavy, like"
19"I corrected quietly, tracing the"
ratio0.94
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
20.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The lines hummed with a low, dissonant frequency that made the hair on the back of my neck stand up, prickling like static electricity before a summer storm."
1"The station felt like a tomb that had been robbed, the shadows stretching and pulling against the walls with a life of their own."
2"Pinned against a rusted maintenance ladder was a coat—a heavy, woollen trench coat that looked suspiciously like the one Morris had been wearing in the last fil…"
3"It didn't have eyes, but I felt the weight of its attention press against my mind, a cold, crushing pressure that made my vision dim."
4"The Veil Compass in my hand grew scorching, the sigils on its face flaring with a brilliant, blinding white light."
5"My feet slipped on the slick tiles, and for a second, I felt the ground vanish beneath me, replaced by an infinite, hollow hunger that screamed of a thousand lo…"
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Harlow Quinn remarked, not turning away from the chalk-dusted floor"
1"she added, her sharp jaw tight"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"she added (add)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
2"I corrected quietly (correct)"
3"I whispered (whisper)"
4"she hissed (hiss)"
5"she confirmed (confirm)"
6"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.875
effectiveRatio0.5
70.7341%