Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8YCA0PGYJYB7Z7S38FG60Z

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Model:
Grok 4.3
Duration:
26.0s
Cost:
$0.008975
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory yanked the door chain free and cracked the gap wider, one deadbolt left half-turned in the lock plate. Lucien leaned against the corridor wall, charcoal suit creased at the elbows, platinum hair catching the yellowish bulb overhead. “Brick Lane isn’t on your usual map of favours,” she said. He straightened, the ivory cane’s tip tapping once against cracked linoleum. “I needed the exercise.” Ptolemy wound between Rory’s ankles then retreated toward the sofa, tail high. Warm air from the curry kitchen below seeped through the floorboards, thick with cumin and coriander oil. Rory stayed in the doorway, blocking the room. “Evan gave you my new address, didn’t he?” Lucien’s mismatched eyes lingered on her wrist before he answered. “I pay better than he does.” She stepped aside, the movement mechanical. “Then you can pay for whatever information you’re selling.” The flat pressed in once the door clicked shut, three bookshelves crowding the single window and scrolls curling over the armchair. Lucien closed the gap in two strides, cane left hooked on the coat stand, and shrugged out of his jacket. The widow’s peak of blond hair stayed immaculate. He rolled his cuffs twice, revealing pale forearms marked by thin, straight scars. “Cup of tea,” he offered, voice low and Marseille-soft. “Unless the rule still holds that I’m not allowed near your kettle.” “You’re not allowed near anything that steams.” She crossed to the tiny galley, shoulders tight under her faded delivery shirt. The kettle rattled when she filled it; the light above the sink buzzed. “Unless you’ve changed your mind about keeping your hands to yourself.” A soft snort escaped him. “Changed minds are expensive, Aurora. Yours included.” She measured two scoops of Assam without turning. The spoon clinked, precise. Water began to murmur. For a moment the only sounds were the distant clang of pans from downstairs and the tabby’s claws on the windowsill. Lucien lowered himself onto the sofa arm, careful not to crush a pile of open legal texts. One finger traced the topmost page, the heading “caveat emptor” in Eva’s square hand. “You fled Cardiff without finishing the course. Eva phoned me at three in the morning. I told her the wards on your new door were thin.” “Eva tells everyone too much.” Rory poured boiling water over the mesh strainer, steam curling under her chin. “You drove across the city to tell me my security’s weak?” “I drove across the city because Evan found you.” The kettle settled onto its base with a click. Rory’s fingers stilled on the handle. “He’s not supposed to know.” Lucien’s longer lashes dropped once, slow. “He knows where you work. He knows the bar downstairs belongs to someone called Silas who keeps a loaded shotgun under the till.” A pause, the weight of it filling the space between them. “He knows you changed your surname on the lease to Carter again, hoping the past would dissolve like sugar.” Rory set the mug down instead of offering it. “And you came here first instead of going to him.” “Old habit.” He shifted, suit trousers whispering against the armrest. “You left the crescent scar I once kissed. I still recognize the pattern.” She touched the inside of her left wrist without thinking, then dropped her hand. The cuff of her shirtsleeve hid the mark again. “That scar healed. The rest didn’t.” Lucien stood. Two strides and he reached the narrow counter, close enough for the faint trace of bergamot and smoke to reach her. “The past paid your rent twice when you couldn’t. I never asked for interest.” His voice remained even, almost clinical, yet the single black eye stayed fixed on her mouth. “I’m asking now for time.” “Time costs.” “Name a price.” She lifted the untouched mug, blew across it once, and set it between them on the counter. “Tell me what Evan wants.” “Revenge. And the child he believes you took from him.” The steam between them blurred the shape of his face for a heartbeat. Rory’s breath caught, then steadied. “There was no child.” “I know.” Lucien’s fingers brushed the porcelain but didn’t lift it. “He does not.” Rory’s shoulders loosened by a fraction; the tension in them transferred instead to her jaw. “So you drove here to warn me or to collect on a favour you think I still owe?” “Both.” He looked down at the tea, surface trembling with the beat of his pulse. “And because I missed the way your eyes change colour when you’re furious.” She laughed once, short and sharp, the sound folding into the curry-scented air. “My eyes are the same colour they were the night you left.” “They’re brighter against the dark now,” he answered. “London agrees with you.” “London hides me.” “London hides nothing from the people who know where to look.” They stood close enough that the sleeve of his shirt almost grazed her bare wrist. The contact remained imaginary, yet static leapt along the fine hairs of her arm. Rory picked up the mug again and held it out, a deliberate transfer of heat. “Drink it before it goes cold,” she said. “Then tell me exactly how deep Evan’s reach goes.” Lucien accepted the tea. His thumb rested over the place where her fingers had warmed the clay. He brought the rim to his lips and tasted it without blowing, gaze never leaving hers. “Deeper than the bar below us,” he finally said. “Deep enough to reach the Golden Empress delivery rota and the night you worked late three weeks ago. He waited outside with flowers that smelled of acid rather than lilies.” Rory swallowed, throat tight. The knowledge settled like silt. “I changed routes after that night.” “Change alone will not suffice.” Lucien set the mug down, half-drained, its rim bearing the faint crescent of his teeth. “I can draw wards stronger than Eva’s scribbles. Or I can stay tonight and watch the door.” The offer hung, unblushingly physical. Rory studied the line of his throat above the loosened collar, where a single vein pulsed in time with the bass from the restaurant’s speakers below. She tasted the bitter memory of Cardiff rain and the metallic edge of that last argument. Hurt pressed beneath her ribs, yet the shape of him reminded her body of other nights, better ones. “You always offer protection with strings,” she said. “Strings that kept you breathing when Evan’s friends came looking.” Lucien’s hand lifted, stopped short of her cheek. “I can cut them after tonight if you insist.” Rory stepped back until her spine met the counter edge, creating six deliberate inches. “One night. No touching. You sleep on the sofa, I lock my bedroom. In the morning we decide what to do about Evan.” “Agreed.” He inclined his head, a courtly gesture incongruous in the cramped galley. The single amber eye gleamed. “And Aurora?” She waited, pulse audible in her ears. “Stop calling yourself Laila in the lobby registry. It does not suit you.” The flat’s single bulb flickered once. Somewhere under the floorboards Ptolemy scratched at the skirting board, claws testing old wood for hidden prey. The tabby’s low purr rose like a warning hum. Rory’s fingers found the deadbolt again out of habit, the metal cool and final beneath her touch. She turned it twice, slow deliberate clicks, sealing them inside while the city outside continued its relentless pulse.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.604
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1233
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1233
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"mechanical"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"porcelain"
count1
5
word"tension"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"mechanical"
1"measured"
2"traced"
3"weight"
4"porcelain"
5"tension"
6"pulse"
7"pulsed"
8"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences69
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1233
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
65.25% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount767
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory13
Marseille-soft1
Assam1
Eva1
Lucien10
Cardiff1
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
3"Ptolemy"
places
0"Assam"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.653
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1233
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean26.8
std17.51
cv0.653
sampleLengths
038
111
215
345
416
515
662
721
844
912
1037
1157
1229
139
1420
1559
1619
1723
1829
1958
202
213
2222
2310
2422
2514
2633
2728
2825
2912
303
3111
3244
3317
3433
3539
3615
3737
3865
398
4027
4137
4220
437
4413
4567
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs125
matches(empty)
88.44% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences105
ratio0.019
matches
0"The kettle rattled when she filled it; the light above the sink buzzed."
1"Rory’s shoulders loosened by a fraction; the tension in them transferred instead to her jaw."
99.82% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount771
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.040207522697795074
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005188067444876783
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean11.74
std6.58
cv0.561
sampleLengths
019
119
211
311
44
512
617
78
88
910
106
116
129
1321
1420
158
1613
179
1812
1920
2013
2111
225
237
248
254
264
2721
2817
2914
3026
3118
3211
339
349
356
365
376
3834
3919
409
4110
4210
4313
4414
459
466
472
4821
4930
66.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.41904761904761906
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners44
52.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"Somewhere under the floorboards Ptolemy"
ratio0.016
95.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences64
matches
0"He straightened, the ivory cane’s"
1"She stepped aside, the movement"
2"He rolled his cuffs twice,"
3"he offered, voice low and"
4"She crossed to the tiny"
5"She measured two scoops of"
6"He shifted, suit trousers whispering"
7"She touched the inside of"
8"His voice remained even, almost"
9"She lifted the untouched mug,"
10"He looked down at the"
11"She laughed once, short and"
12"They stood close enough that"
13"His thumb rested over the"
14"He brought the rim to"
15"he finally said"
16"She tasted the bitter memory"
17"He inclined his head, a"
18"She waited, pulse audible in"
19"She turned it twice, slow"
ratio0.313
6.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences64
matches
0"Rory yanked the door chain"
1"Lucien leaned against the corridor"
2"He straightened, the ivory cane’s"
3"Ptolemy wound between Rory’s ankles"
4"Rory stayed in the doorway,"
5"Lucien’s mismatched eyes lingered on"
6"She stepped aside, the movement"
7"The flat pressed in once"
8"Lucien closed the gap in"
9"The widow’s peak of blond"
10"He rolled his cuffs twice,"
11"he offered, voice low and"
12"She crossed to the tiny"
13"The kettle rattled when she"
14"A soft snort escaped him."
15"She measured two scoops of"
16"The spoon clinked, precise."
17"Water began to murmur."
18"Lucien lowered himself onto the"
19"Rory poured boiling water over"
ratio0.906
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he offered, voice low and Marseille-soft"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.075
leniency0.151
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.4531%