Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8ZH7XQ966Z3ZJ9K7F0R221

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The glass slipped. It didn't shatter, but the heavy amber liquid slopped over the rim, soaking the coaster and stinging Rory’s knuckles. She stared at the puddle. A single bead of whiskey rolled across the dark wood of the bar, tracing a path toward the edge like a dying insect. "Still clumsy, then." The voice cut through the low hum of the Soho crowd, sharp and familiar, like a song she had tried to forget. Rory froze. Her heart hammered against her ribs, a frantic bird trapped in a cage of bone. She didn't turn around immediately. She couldn't. She waited for the sensation of a ghost pressing against her spine. "Rory?" She turned. The neon green glow from the sign outside filtered through the window, casting sickly, rhythmic shadows across the face of the man standing three feet away. It was Eva. Or a version of her, sculpted from colder marble. The girl who had once shared cheap cider and dreams of moving to Paris was gone. In her place stood a woman wrapped in a tailored charcoal coat that screamed old money and new cynicism. Her blonde hair, once a chaotic mane, was pulled back into a sleek, unforgiving knot. "Eva." Rory gripped the edge of the bar. The wood felt grainier, rougher under her fingertips. "I heard you were in London. Didn't think you'd be in Soho." "I live nearby." "Since when?" "Two years. Maybe three." Eva leaned against the bar, a movement so fluid it felt predatory. She scanned the room, her eyes lingering on the faded maps and the dusty black-and-white photographs lining the walls of The Raven's Nest. "It hasn't changed. Still smells like stale tobacco and secrets." "It's a bar, Eva. Not a cathedral." "Everything is a cathedral if you look at it long enough." Eva’s gaze snapped back to Rory. She looked at the faded denim jacket, the slightly frayed cuffs of Rory's shirt, and the way her black hair fell in unstyled waves around her face. "You look... tired." "I work. People need food delivered." "Delivery. Right. The Golden Empress, wasn't it? I remember you saying you hated the grease." "I do. But the rent in London doesn't care about my olfactory preferences." A silence stretched between them, thick and suffocating. It wasn't the comfortable silence of their university days, spent hunched over textbooks in the Bodleian. This was a heavy, pressurized thing, the kind that precedes a storm. "You didn't call. After the breakup. After everything." Rory traced the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The skin there was pale, a permanent reminder of a summer spent playing in the Welsh valleys, long before the shadows had moved in. "I didn't think you wanted to hear from me. You were busy becoming... this." Eva smiled, but the expression didn't reach her eyes. They remained hard, polished stones. "Becoming what? Successful? Grounded?" "Expensive." Eva signaled the bartender. A man with a tired face and a stained apron drifted over. "Two more. The good stuff this time. Not the well." "Eva, I'm not in the mood for—" "I'm paying, Rory. Relax. You always were too quick to jump to conclusions." The bartender vanished. Rory felt the weight of the gaze. Eva wasn't just looking at her; she was auditing her. Measuring the distance between who they were and the gap they now occupied. "I saw the news about your father," Eva said softly. The edge had vanished, replaced by a calculated softness. "The barrister. I was sorry to hear about the scandal." Rory felt a cold prickle of sweat at the nape of her neck. "He's fine. Legally speaking." "Scandals have a way of lingering. Like damp in a basement." "Is that what this is? A performance? You come in here, find me in a dive, and play the concerned old friend?" "Is there a difference?" "I didn't know you were into the 'concerned friend' bit. I thought you were into mergers and acquisitions." "The two aren't mutually exclusive. You need to know who people are before you buy them." "I'm not for sale, Eva." "No. You're just hard to find." The bartender returned, sliding two heavy crystal glasses across the wood. The amber liquid caught the light, glowing with an internal, predatory heat. Eva picked up her glass. She didn't drink. She merely held it, watching the light dance in the liquid. "Do you remember that night in Cardiff? The cliffside? We swore we'd never end up like our parents. Stagnant. Trapped by expectations." "I remember thinking we were invincible." "We were idiots." "We were twenty. Idiots are allowed that luxury." "Is it a luxury? Or is it just a lack of foresight?" Eva took a slow, measured sip. She closed her eyes for a fraction of a second, and for a heartbeat, the mask slipped. A flicker of something—longing, perhaps, or pure, unadulterated exhaustion—passed over her features. "I spent three years trying to build a life that no one could touch. A life that was entirely mine." "And did it work?" "I'm untouchable." "You look lonely." Eva's eyes snapped open. The mask slammed back into place, tighter than before. "Loneliness is a small price for autonomy." "It's a high price if you're paying it in installments." Rory reached for her glass, her hand trembling slightly. She took a swallow. The whiskey burned, a welcome, searing distraction from the sudden tightness in her chest. "You moved to London to escape Evan," Eva said, her voice dropping an octave. "I thought you'd find your feet. I thought you'd find... something better." "I found my feet. I just didn't find a throne." "A throne. How poetic. You always did have a flair for the dramatic, even when you were just studying law." "I didn't finish the degree, Eva. Let's not pretend I'm a lawyer." "I know. I saw the update on your LinkedIn. Or rather, the lack of one." "I don't believe in digital footprints. They make it too easy for people to track you down." "Like I did?" The question hung in the air, jagged and unasked. Rory didn't answer. She couldn't. The truth was too heavy to lift. "Why are you really here, Eva? You didn't just wander into Soho by accident. This isn't your neighbourhood. You don't do 'dimly lit' unless there's a contract involved." Eva set her glass down with a controlled click. "I needed to see if you were still the same person. The one who believed everything could be fixed with enough logic and a bit of grit." "And?" "You're still messy. You're still hiding in the shadows of people like Silas Blackwood." Rory stiffened. The name felt like a physical blow. "I don't know what you're talking about." "Don't lie. It's beneath you. Even in that jacket." Eva leaned closer, the scent of her expensive, woody perfume clashing with the bar's musk. "I know about the deliveries. I know they aren't just pizzas and Thai food. I know why you spend so much time in the Nest." "You don't know anything." "I know enough to know that you're playing a game you don't understand the rules of. And I know that when you lose, there won't be anyone left to bail you out." "I've been bailing myself out for years." "Until now." Eva stood up. She smoothed her coat, the movement precise and final. "Don't look so wounded, Rory. It's unbecoming." "Where are you going?" "Back to the world that actually matters." Eva turned to leave, but paused, her hand hovering over the strap of her leather handbag. "If you ever decide you want to be more than a ghost in a delivery van, call me. I might have a way for you to use that brain of yours without getting blood on it." She didn't wait for an answer. She walked towards the door, her heels clicking a rhythmic, military cadence against the floorboards. Rory watched her go. She watched the heavy oak door swing shut, cutting off the cool air from the street. The green neon sign flickered, casting a long, emerald shadow across the empty stool where Eva had sat. Rory looked down at her drink. The ice had melted, diluting the amber liquid into a pale, watery gold. Suddenly, the heavy door creaked open again. It wasn't the smooth, confident entrance of a socialite. It was a violent, frantic shove. A man stumbled in, his breath coming in ragged, wet gasps. His shirt was torn at the collar, and a dark, glistening stain was spreading across his chest. He gripped the edge of the bar, his knuckles white, his eyes wide with a primal, unthinking terror. He looked up, his gaze colliding with Rory's. "Help," he wheezed, a spray of red flecking his lips. "They're... they're right behind me." Before Rory could speak, the sound of heavy boots thundered against the pavement outside, accompanied by the screech of tyres.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva’s gaze snapped back [back]"
1"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.09
leniency0.179
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.06
83.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1490
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"really"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1490
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"tracing"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"rhythmic"
count2
3
word"marble"
count1
4
word"chaotic"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"comfortable"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"reminder"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"calculated"
count1
12
word"crystal"
count1
13
word"dance"
count1
14
word"measured"
count1
15
word"flicker"
count1
16
word"searing"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"glistening"
count1
19
word"thundered"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"familiar"
2"rhythmic"
3"marble"
4"chaotic"
5"scanned"
6"silence"
7"comfortable"
8"traced"
9"reminder"
10"weight"
11"calculated"
12"crystal"
13"dance"
14"measured"
15"flicker"
16"searing"
17"flickered"
18"glistening"
19"thundered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1488
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount828
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.93
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory15
Soho1
Eva16
Paris1
Raven1
Nest1
Bodleian1
Welsh1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Raven"
places
0"Soho"
1"Paris"
2"Bodleian"
3"Welsh"
globalScore0.534
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a physical blow"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1488
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean16.91
std14.19
cv0.839
sampleLengths
022
128
23
358
41
528
662
71
815
912
103
112
124
1335
1410
157
1647
176
1815
1913
2036
218
2234
2314
2414
254
261
2716
2810
297
3013
3133
3229
3317
3411
3522
364
3718
3816
395
406
4123
4219
4322
446
453
468
4767
484
492
92.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences80
matches
0"was gone"
1"was pulled"
2"was torn"
57.14% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs140
matches
0"was auditing"
1"wasn't just looking"
2"was spreading"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences141
ratio0.014
matches
0"Eva wasn't just looking at her; she was auditing her."
1"A flicker of something—longing, perhaps, or pure, unadulterated exhaustion—passed over her features."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount833
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"grainier, rougher under her"
1"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.025210084033613446
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.008403361344537815
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean10.55
std7.16
cv0.679
sampleLengths
03
119
25
323
43
522
62
715
85
92
1012
111
122
1326
143
159
1616
1719
1815
191
207
218
2212
233
242
254
2612
2723
2810
297
3017
3127
323
336
3415
3513
368
3716
3812
398
4010
4124
4214
439
445
454
461
474
4812
4910
38.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.28368794326241137
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners40
44.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"Suddenly, the heavy door creaked"
ratio0.013
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences75
matches
0"It didn't shatter, but the"
1"She stared at the puddle."
2"Her heart hammered against her"
3"She didn't turn around immediately."
4"She waited for the sensation"
5"It was Eva."
6"Her blonde hair, once a"
7"She scanned the room, her"
8"She looked at the faded"
9"It wasn't the comfortable silence"
10"They remained hard, polished stones."
11"She didn't drink."
12"She merely held it, watching"
13"She closed her eyes for"
14"She took a swallow."
15"She smoothed her coat, the"
16"She didn't wait for an"
17"She walked towards the door,"
18"She watched the heavy oak"
19"It wasn't the smooth, confident"
ratio0.333
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences75
matches
0"The glass slipped."
1"It didn't shatter, but the"
2"She stared at the puddle."
3"A single bead of whiskey"
4"The voice cut through the"
5"Her heart hammered against her"
6"She didn't turn around immediately."
7"She waited for the sensation"
8"The neon green glow from"
9"It was Eva."
10"The girl who had once"
11"Her blonde hair, once a"
12"Rory gripped the edge of"
13"The wood felt grainier, rougher"
14"Eva leaned against the bar,"
15"She scanned the room, her"
16"Eva’s gaze snapped back to"
17"She looked at the faded"
18"A silence stretched between them,"
19"It wasn't the comfortable silence"
ratio0.933
66.67% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"Before Rory could speak, the"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She scanned the room, her eyes lingering on the faded maps and the dusty black-and-white photographs lining the walls of The Raven's Nest."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva said, her voice dropping an octave"
1"he wheezed, a spray of red flecking his lips"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva’s gaze snapped back (snap)"
1"he wheezed (wheeze)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.06
leniency0.119
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.06
80.5469%