Run: 2026-05-10-01KR8ZVNCWK95ZYYD0RD43Z934

Run Details

Model:: Gemma 4 31B (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 1m 46s
Cost:: $0.001364
Provider:: DeepInfra

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
0.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
97.92%	Name drop frequency	(details)
73.08%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
60.92%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
47.62%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
31.43%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
71.43%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
63.49%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
87.9960%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The Heartstone Pendant flared, a violent pulse of crimson that tore a jagged seam through the air. Aurora stepped through the rift, her boots hitting ground that felt like packed sugar. Behind her, Nyx slipped through the gap as a smudge of ink, their violet eyes flickering like dying embers. Isolde followed, her silver hair trailing in the wind, leaving no mark upon the shimmering white soil.

The rift snapped shut.

An amber haze choked the horizon, casting a thick, honey-colored light over a landscape of impossible scale. Towering vines, thick as ancient oaks and translucent as frosted glass, spiraled toward a sky where three pale suns hung in a frozen triangle. Great clusters of violet grapes, each the size of a human head, wept heavy, iridescent syrup that pooled in gold-rimmed basins.

"The belly of the beast welcomes the guests." 

Isolde traced the edge of a leaf with a pale finger. The plant shivered, emitting a sound like a distant harp string snapping.

Aurora gripped the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade. The moonsilver pommel remained ice-cold against her palm, a sharp contrast to the oppressive, humid heat that clung to her skin. 

"This is Dymas."

Nyx’s voice drifted like a draft through a graveyard. The Shade drifted toward a grove of trees whose bark resembled polished mahogany. Their form flickered, expanding and contracting as they merged with the long, distorted shadows cast by the amber suns.

"It smells like a bakery in a fever dream."

Aurora wiped a bead of sweat from her forehead. The scent of cinnamon and roasting meats collided with a metallic tang, something reminiscent of old coins and dried blood. She stepped forward, her boots crunching on the crystalline earth. Every breath felt heavy, as if the air itself held the weight of a thousand feasts.

They moved deeper into the grove. The vegetation grew denser, the flora turning aggressive. Flowers with petals like raw velvet snapped shut as they passed, their centers pulsing with a rhythmic, heartbeat-like throb. To the left, a river of liquid gold flowed uphill, bubbling with a sound that mimicked human laughter.

"Do not drink from the river of longing, Little Bird."

Isolde stopped by the bank, her lavender eyes reflecting the molten stream. She didn't look at Aurora, her gaze fixed on a shimmering fish that leaped from the gold, its scales carved from diamond.

"Why not?"

"The thirst it gives is a debt paid in years, not coins."

Aurora looked away from the water. Her stomach twisted into a tight knot, a sudden, ravenous hunger clawing at her ribs. She glanced at the oversized fruits hanging from the glass vines. They looked succulent, their skins stretched thin over glowing pulp. She felt a pull, an instinctive urge to reach out and sink her teeth into the nearest berry.

"Don't."

Nyx appeared beside her, a sudden void in the amber light. Their violet eyes narrowed.

"The hunger here isn't yours, Aurora. It's the land. It wants to be tasted."

Aurora stepped back, shaking her head to clear the fog. She focused on the Heartstone Pendant. It vibrated against her chest, the warmth intensifying as they approached a massive structure in the distance. 

The forest opened into a wide plaza paved with sheets of molten brass. In the center stood a pavilion of white marble and gold leaf, its roof a canopy of living emerald leaves that filtered the amber light into emerald shards. Long tables stretched for miles under the canopy, laden with platters of food that defied nature. Roasted birds with feathers of sapphire, cakes that floated an inch above the porcelain, and fruits that changed color in a slow, rhythmic cycle.

There were no guests. Only the servants.

Figures in colorless rags moved between the tables with mechanical precision. Their eyes were vacant, milky orbs devoid of pupils. They carried silver trays of delicacies, their movements synchronized and silent.

"Bound souls."

Aurora’s voice sounded small in the vastness of the plaza. She watched a servant lean over a platter of glistening pomegranate seeds, his movements jerky, like a puppet on fraying strings.

"The chefs of Belphegor."

Isolde drifted toward the nearest table. She reached out to touch a crystal goblet filled with a swirling, pearlescent liquid.

"A feast for the blind, a banquet for the broken."

The servant nearest to her froze. He turned his head, the movement a series of sharp, clicking snaps. His jaw dropped open, releasing a cloud of grey ash instead of a voice. He lunged, not with a weapon, but with a desperate, starving grip, his fingers clawing for Isolde’s throat.

The Fae-Forged Blade cleared its sheath in a blur of silver. Aurora stepped between them, the blade slicing through the air. She didn't plunge the metal into the creature; she swept the flat of the blade across the servant's chest.

The moonsilver sparked upon contact. A shockwave of cold energy blasted outward, throwing the bound soul backward. He hit the brass pavement with a hollow thud, his body dissolving into a heap of grey soot that smelled of burnt sugar.

"He wasn't attacking us."

Nyx floated over the remains, the violet glow of their eyes intensifying.

"He was attacking the light. He’s forgotten what it is to be full."

Aurora lowered the blade, her chest heaving. The sudden violence left a bitter taste in her mouth, overriding the cloying sweetness of the air. She looked at the endless tables, the opulent waste, and the hollow shells of the people serving it.

"We need to find the way to the inner sanctum."

Isolde pointed toward the far end of the plaza, where a massive gate of obsidian stood closed. The stone absorbed the amber light, creating a hole of absolute blackness in the middle of the gold.

"The Prince sleeps in the house of excess."

A low, resonant boom echoed through the plaza, shaking the brass beneath their feet. From the obsidian gate, a wave of heat rolled toward them, carrying the scent of sulfur and expensive incense. The bound souls stopped their work in unison, turning their milky eyes toward the trio.

Aurora shifted her grip on the hilt, the crescent scar on her wrist tingling. The Heartstone Pendant began to glow a fierce, blinding crimson, pulsing in time with the distant thumping of a giant heart.

"They know we're here."

Nyx merged into the shadow of a nearby pillar, their voice a ghostly whisper.

"And the kitchen is open."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

100.00%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount	1079
totalAiIsmAdverbs	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1079

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"traced"
count	1

word	"oppressive"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"crystalline"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"velvet"
count	1

word	"rhythmic"
count	2

word	"throb"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"vibrated"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"structure"
count	1

word	"marble"
count	1

word	"porcelain"
count	1

word	"mechanical"
count	1

word	"synchronized"
count	1

word	"glistening"
count	1

word	"crystal"
count	1

word	"echoed"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulse"
1	"traced"
2	"oppressive"
3	"flickered"
4	"crystalline"
5	"weight"
6	"velvet"
7	"rhythmic"
8	"throb"
9	"stomach"
10	"vibrated"
11	"warmth"
12	"structure"
13	"marble"
14	"porcelain"
15	"mechanical"
16	"synchronized"
17	"glistening"
18	"crystal"
19	"echoed"
20	"whisper"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"eyes widened/narrowed"
count	1

highlights

0	"eyes narrowed"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	70
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	87
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	28
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1079
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	0
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

97.92%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

960

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.04

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

1.5

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Heartstone	3
Pendant	3
Nyx	5
Fae-Forged	2
Blade	2
Shade	1
Aurora	10
Isolde	6

persons

0	"Pendant"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Blade"
3	"Shade"
4	"Aurora"
5	"Isolde"

places

(empty)

globalScore

0.979

windowScore

73.08%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"felt like packed sugar"
1	"appeared beside her, a sudden void in the amber light"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.927

wordCount

1079

matches

0	"not with a weapon, but with a desperate, starving grip, his fingers clawing for Iso"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	87
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

25.09

std

20.81

0.829

sampleLengths

0	67
1	4
2	62
3	8
4	23
5	29
6	3
7	41
8	9
9	55
10	51
11	10
12	34
13	2
14	12
15	60
16	1
17	15
18	14
19	33
20	81
21	7
22	31
23	2
24	31
25	4
26	20
27	10
28	50
29	40
30	40
31	4
32	12
33	13
34	42
35	10
36	35
37	8
38	48
39	35
40	4
41	14
42	5

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	70
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	146
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.011

matches

0	"She didn't plunge the metal into the creature; she swept the flat of the blade across the servant's chest."

94.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

965

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"ice-cold against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.00932642487046632

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.002072538860103627

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	87
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

12.4

std

5.97

0.482

sampleLengths

0	17
1	14
2	19
3	17
4	4
5	17
6	24
7	21
8	8
9	11
10	12
11	8
12	21
13	3
14	9
15	13
16	19
17	9
18	9
19	20
20	10
21	16
22	6
23	8
24	19
25	18
26	10
27	12
28	22
29	2
30	12
31	6
32	15
33	11
34	10
35	18
36	1
37	11
38	4
39	14
40	10
41	6
42	17
43	13
44	28
45	16
46	24
47	4
48	3
49	11

60.92%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.3793103448275862
totalSentences	87
uniqueOpeners	33

47.62%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Only the servants."

ratio

0.014

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their form flickered, expanding and"
1	"She stepped forward, her boots"
2	"They moved deeper into the"
3	"She didn't look at Aurora,"
4	"Her stomach twisted into a"
5	"She glanced at the oversized"
6	"They looked succulent, their skins"
7	"She felt a pull, an"
8	"Their violet eyes narrowed."
9	"She focused on the Heartstone"
10	"It vibrated against her chest,"
11	"Their eyes were vacant, milky"
12	"They carried silver trays of"
13	"She watched a servant lean"
14	"She reached out to touch"
15	"He turned his head, the"
16	"His jaw dropped open, releasing"
17	"He lunged, not with a"
18	"She didn't plunge the metal"
19	"He hit the brass pavement"

ratio

0.3

31.43%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The Heartstone Pendant flared, a"
1	"Aurora stepped through the rift,"
2	"Isolde followed, her silver hair"
3	"The rift snapped shut."
4	"An amber haze choked the"
5	"Isolde traced the edge of"
6	"The plant shivered, emitting a"
7	"Aurora gripped the hilt of"
8	"The moonsilver pommel remained ice-cold"
9	"Nyx’s voice drifted like a"
10	"The Shade drifted toward a"
11	"Their form flickered, expanding and"
12	"Aurora wiped a bead of"
13	"The scent of cinnamon and"
14	"She stepped forward, her boots"
15	"Every breath felt heavy, as"
16	"They moved deeper into the"
17	"The vegetation grew denser, the"
18	"Flowers with petals like raw"
19	"Isolde stopped by the bank,"

ratio

0.857

71.43%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"To the left, a river"

ratio

0.014

63.49%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Aurora stepped through the rift, her boots hitting ground that felt like packed sugar."
1	"Great clusters of violet grapes, each the size of a human head, wept heavy, iridescent syrup that pooled in gold-rimmed basins."
2	"The moonsilver pommel remained ice-cold against her palm, a sharp contrast to the oppressive, humid heat that clung to her skin."
3	"Long tables stretched for miles under the canopy, laden with platters of food that defied nature."
4	"Roasted birds with feathers of sapphire, cakes that floated an inch above the porcelain, and fruits that changed color in a slow, rhythmic cycle."
5	"He hit the brass pavement with a hollow thud, his body dissolving into a heap of grey soot that smelled of burnt sugar."

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	0
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

87.9960%