Run: 2026-05-10-01KR90PB6BGA038JA8HTKTVZBJ

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Model:
Grok 4.3
Duration:
28.6s
Cost:
$0.008553
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora shoved her way through the packed tables of The Raven's Nest, stack of menus clutched against her chest from her shift at the Golden Empress. The green neon sign outside flickered as she pushed the door, and inside the air hung thick with whisky and cigarette residue that clung to the black-and-white photographs lining the walls. A shoulder brushed past her elbow and she turned to apologise, the words dying on her tongue. Silas stood at the bar, signet ring catching the dim light as he polished a glass, his hazel eyes narrowing before recognition settled into them like sediment in river water. He set the glass down slowly, leaning on the counter with his familiar weight distribution, favouring the left leg. "You," he said. The word carried no question mark, only the weight of years spent stacking themselves between a man and a woman who once passed notes across a library table in Cardiff. Rory set the menus on the nearest table, fingers tracing the small crescent scar on her wrist without thinking. "Me." They regarded each other across a decade and several lifetimes. The man who had met her at the station when she first arrived, who had taught her the difference between surveillance and conversation, who had given her keys to the flat above his bar when the abusive ex had taken everything else including her courage. Now he stood before her with more grey in his beard than auburn, and she wondered if he saw the girl who once believed she would graduate and fight court cases or if her delivery uniform told him the whole revised story. "Still working the deliveries," he observed. No judgment in it, just the fact of her life laid out on the bar like a receipt. "They pay on time and they do not ask about my papers," she answered, then added, almost against her own will, "You still favour that leg." "Tell it to the Czech security forces," he said, and the corner of his mouth lifted in the ghost of a smile that never reached his eyes. "Come and sit. The new barman will not pour my favourite unless I remind him three times, and I am too old to argue with children." She slid onto a stool and the leather creaked beneath her, a sound that belonged to a different era when she had sat in the same spot after midnight and told him she was leaving Evan, that she needed a place to sleep where the walls did not speak. The bar itself had not changed, though someone had replaced the older photographs with newer ones, maps of Prague pressed flat under glass, a single black-and-white print of a woman smoking beside the Thames that Rory did not recognise. "You look different," she said. "Older." "Wiser, maybe." "Both are curses, child." The word child carried no condescension, only the memory of how he had once used it when she had nowhere else to be. She glanced at the silver ring on his right hand, the same one he had worn when he showed her how to pick a lock using nothing but the casing of a ballpoint pen and the belief that every door eventually opened for the patient. "How long has it been since you left Cardiff?" he asked, pouring her the house red without asking if she wanted it. "Nine years in November." "And you ran to London because Eva said she knew a man." "You were that man." The silence between them thickened with all the things she had not told him since, the flat she kept above his bar because rent in Soho ate her wages before they hit the account, the letters she wrote to her parents and never posted, the nights when the scar on her wrist itched and she thought of calling Evan just to hear him say she had ruined everything. Silas watched her without commentary, a skill he had practised long before she met him, and she wondered if he could still tell when someone lied by the angle of their fingers around a glass. "You kept the keys," he said. "You never asked for them back." "Some things are not meant to be reclaimed." A couple near the window laughed loudly, their voices cutting across the low jazz coming from the hidden speakers, and Rory watched their reflections in the mirror behind the optics. She looked ordinary now, black hair brushing the collar of the Golden Empress tee-shirt, while he remained the same measured presence who once could disappear into a crowd while appearing to stand in the centre of it. "I left because I thought the law would fix things," she said finally. "Courts. Rules. The sense that someone, somewhere, wrote it all down fair." "And now you deliver dumplings." "Dumplings do not ask for references." He nodded, the movement barely perceptible, and the ring moved against the counter, silver on polished wood. "Your mother still teaches?" "Last letter I opened." "And your father, the barrister?" "Still tells strangers his daughter will join him one day." The lie sat between them like unfinished business, neither of them willing to touch it. Silas turned the ring slowly, an old habit that meant he measured his next sentence for hidden exits. "You could still do it," he said. "Not the law, perhaps, but something that requires more of that brain than remembering which floor wants the number fifty-four." "I tried once. After I moved in above the bar. Filled out the forms, even. The moment I wrote my name the room felt smaller." "Because you knew what would happen if Evan found the address." The name dropped like a coin in a glass, and she flinched without meaning to. The bruise she carried had long since faded, but the sound of Evan's voice still lived in the small bones behind her ear. Silas had never asked details, only offered the couch and then the flat and then silence that did not require repayment. "He is in Swansea now," she said, voice level. "Opened a shop. Sells fishing gear to tourists who never catch anything." "Good. Keep him there." A man at the far end asked for his tab, and the new barman produced it without the three reminders Silas had predicted. The room felt suddenly too warm, the photographs watching her with antique eyes, and she stood before the wine she had barely touched could ferment between them into regret. "I should lock up the menus," she said. "The Golden Empress waits for no one." "Neither does your rent." She turned away, menus tucked beneath her arm, the scar itching again beneath the cuff of her sleeve. Behind her Silas lifted the glass she left, considered the untouched surface, and set it back down without drinking. The green neon outside pulsed once, twice, and then steadied, as if waiting for the conversation to resume in a later, colder night when neither of them could pretend the years had been kind.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.057
87.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1174
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1174
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"measured"
count2
6
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"familiar"
2"weight"
3"tracing"
4"silence"
5"measured"
6"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences41
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences41
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences65
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1174
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount906
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.66
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Golden2
Empress2
Cardiff1
Evan3
Prague1
Thames1
Rory3
Soho1
Silas6
persons
0"Raven"
1"Evan"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
places
0"Golden"
1"Cardiff"
2"Prague"
3"Thames"
4"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
74.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences33
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if waiting for the conversation to resume in a later, colder night when neither of them could pretend the years had been kind"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.852
wordCount1174
matches
0"Not the law, perhaps, but something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean26.09
std27.51
cv1.054
sampleLengths
057
117
249
333
419
51
697
724
826
953
1088
115
121
132
144
1568
1622
174
1812
194
20103
216
226
238
2467
2525
265
276
2817
294
304
315
3210
3333
3427
3525
3611
3759
3821
394
4052
418
427
434
4471
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences41
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs150
matches
0"was leaving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences65
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount911
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.03732162458836443
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.012074643249176729
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences65
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences65
mean18.06
std13.79
cv0.763
sampleLengths
026
131
217
330
419
53
630
719
81
910
1045
1142
126
1318
1426
1527
1626
1749
1839
195
201
212
224
2323
2445
2522
264
2712
284
2968
3035
316
326
338
3430
3537
3613
3712
385
396
4017
414
424
435
4410
4515
4618
477
4820
4925
81.54% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5076923076923077
totalSentences65
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences35
matches(empty)
ratio0
82.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences35
matches
0"He set the glass down"
1"They regarded each other across"
2"she answered, then added, almost"
3"he said, and the corner"
4"She slid onto a stool"
5"She glanced at the silver"
6"he asked, pouring her the"
7"She looked ordinary now, black"
8"she said finally"
9"He nodded, the movement barely"
10"she said, voice level"
11"She turned away, menus tucked"
ratio0.343
2.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount32
totalSentences35
matches
0"Aurora shoved her way through"
1"The green neon sign outside"
2"A shoulder brushed past her"
3"Silas stood at the bar,"
4"He set the glass down"
5"The word carried no question"
6"Rory set the menus on"
7"They regarded each other across"
8"The man who had met"
9"she answered, then added, almost"
10"he said, and the corner"
11"She slid onto a stool"
12"The bar itself had not"
13"The word child carried no"
14"She glanced at the silver"
15"he asked, pouring her the"
16"The silence between them thickened"
17"Silas watched her without commentary,"
18"A couple near the window"
19"She looked ordinary now, black"
ratio0.914
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences35
matches
0"Now he stood before her"
ratio0.029
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The green neon sign outside flickered as she pushed the door, and inside the air hung thick with whisky and cigarette residue that clung to the black-and-white …"
1"The man who had met her at the station when she first arrived, who had taught her the difference between surveillance and conversation, who had given her keys t…"
2"She slid onto a stool and the leather creaked beneath her, a sound that belonged to a different era when she had sat in the same spot after midnight and told hi…"
3"A couple near the window laughed loudly, their voices cutting across the low jazz coming from the hidden speakers, and Rory watched their reflections in the mir…"
4"The green neon outside pulsed once, twice, and then steadied, as if waiting for the conversation to resume in a later, colder night when neither of them could p…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.057
86.9979%