Run: 2026-05-10-01KR90SEGNCWVSW7BF86HCKFM5

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Grok 4.3
Duration:
19.6s
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$0.009360
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xAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory ducked under a low branch that glowed with veins of liquid starlight, her hand tightening around the cool hilt of the moonsilver dagger Isolde had pressed into her palm hours earlier. The black edge parted the air like water. “Stay close,” she said without turning. “Something here watches.” Nyx slid from shadow to substance beside her, their violet eyes dim orbs in the gloom. “The Veil already thinned before we crossed the standing oaks,” they whispered, voice rustling through leaves that never grew on Earth’s trees. Behind them, Isolde’s silver hair swept across the path without stirring a single wildflower petal underfoot. “Paths remember feet that never walked them,” she murmured in her riddle-voice. They moved deeper through the pocket realm of the Fae grove. The familiar scents of Richmond Park—wet grass, car exhaust, pigeon feathers—had vanished the moment they stepped between the living oak pillars. In their place rose the heady perfume of blooms that opened only when footsteps drew near, petals unfurling with wet, paper sounds. White and gold flowers exhaled motes that drifted upward like slow pollen, illuminating irregular patches of bark that shimmered with script in an alphabet Rory’s eyes refused to hold long enough to read. A low pulse resonated in her wrist. She glanced at the crimson Heartstone pendant; it warmed against her sternum, a faint heartbeat answering some unseen rhythm. Ahead, the ground changed from moss that yielded like velvet to something smoother, almost glass yet veined with quicksilver. Her trainers left no print, yet each step sent ripples of colour through the surface, racing outward in widening rings of violet and sapphire. Nyx paused at the first ripple’s outer edge. “This place feeds on curiosity,” they warned, half-solid, half-shadow. “Step and the pattern learns your name.” Rory crouched, studying the colours without touching them. “What happens when it learns?” A musical ripple answered for Nyx, and from the nearest cluster of stone-like flowers rose a cluster of thin stalks bearing berries the shade of fresh blood. Each berry split open as they approached, revealing translucent seeds that spun like tiny constellations. The air grew denser, tasting faintly of honey and ozone. “Rory,” Isolde said softly. She turned. The seer’s pale lavender eyes reflected lights that did not exist around them. “The grove does not open doors without also opening bargains.” “Understood.” Rory straightened. The pendant’s warmth had grown into a steady throb, and she felt it tugging—not physically, but like a memory insisting on attention. She followed the sensation along a curve of silver-veined ground that had not been there moments before. They encountered the first standing mirror half-hidden behind a curtain of hanging vines that hummed like plucked strings when touched. The glass surface swam with blurred shapes: a man in seventeenth-century dress speaking silently to empty air; a young woman with a crescent scar drawing the same scar on her own wrist with trembling fingers. Rory’s own reflection lingered a beat too long before fading, replaced by the image of a vast amber sky over vineyards tended by transparent hands. Nyx’s whisper brushed her ear. “Hel’s gluttony realm Dymas leaks through the thinnest walls. Your pendant feels its heartbeat.” A soft click sounded from deeper in the grove—stone shifting against stone. More vines withdrew of their own accord, revealing an avenue lined with trees whose trunks twisted into pillar forms, each crowned by living crystal fruit that dripped slow sap into pools below. The sap glowed the deep red of the pendant, and where droplets struck the mirrored ground, miniature orchards sprouted in seconds, perfect replicas of the larger scene. Rory swallowed. “We’re not walking anymore. It’s guiding us.” Footfalls without feet nudged against the hem of her leather jacket. She reached for the blade’s reassurance. Its cold moonsilver bite steadied her pulse. Isolde drifted forward, footprints invisible even on the responsive glass. “Every seeker receives a reflection of their own desires. You may not like what yours shows.” Ahead, the avenue opened into a circular amphitheatre of living wood. At its centre rose a single tree whose bark spun slowly, revealing fleeting scenes: Aurora’s childhood scar reopening in silver lines; Nyx’s own former human silhouette burning away during an ancient summoning gone wrong; Isolde standing before the Fae Courts, lips sealed by thorned magic. The tree’s branches lowered gradually until one thick limb touched the ground exactly before Rory. A single crimson crystal detached from the bark and rolled to her trainers, halting just short of contact. Inside it pulsed a miniature version of the Gluttony realm: golden tables laden with fruit that wept nectar, souls in chef’s whites tasting dishes that writhed on plates. The Heartstone pendant flared, burning hot. Pain lanced up Rory’s chest, sharp as a bitten tongue. She staggered, caught herself on the active glass surface. Colours raced from her palm like frightened fish, and the amphitheatre trembled. The living mirrors along its walls flared bright enough to throw shadow-Nyx into sudden, hollow relief. Rory forced her fingers around the Fae blade. Its cold edge parted the vibrating air, but the crystal at her feet cracked on its own, spilling liquid light that pooled and began to rise, shaping itself into the outline of a doorway framed in amber skies and impossible vineyards. Wind smelling of spiced wine and charred meat poured through the widening crack. Isolde’s voice cut the sudden gusts. “One choice remains before the portal decides for you.” The doorway wanted to open wider. Rory felt the decision crawl across her skin like static. The pendant’s warmth now matched the heat blasting from Dymas, and the moonsilver dagger hummed in answer, its edge glowing faint blue against the intrusion of gluttony. Another tremor, harder. The amphitheatre’s wooden walls groaned inward, and the scent of the forbidden realm thickened into something almost edible, rich and cloying. She met Nyx’s faintly glowing eyes. They shimmered with rare urgency for a creature forever caught between. “Back or through?” the Shade asked, voice barely more than a shadow against the rising roar. The glass beneath their feet cracked in three directions at once, spider-webbing toward the still-flowering tree. Sap-red light flared beneath the fractures. Rory raised the Fae dagger, its cold clarity the only steady thing left, and stepped straight at the half-open doorway just as the first skeletal hand, wearing chef’s whites blackened at the cuffs, reached through from the amber sky beyond.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.467
leniency0.933
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.133
90.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1073
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1073
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"resonated"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"racing"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count2
9
word"throb"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"crystal"
count3
12
word"perfect"
count1
13
word"fleeting"
count1
14
word"pulsed"
count1
15
word"raced"
count1
16
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"familiar"
2"footsteps"
3"shimmered"
4"pulse"
5"resonated"
6"velvet"
7"racing"
8"warmth"
9"throb"
10"whisper"
11"crystal"
12"perfect"
13"fleeting"
14"pulsed"
15"raced"
16"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences72
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1069
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
93.24% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount969
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.14
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Isolde6
Nyx7
Earth1
Fae4
Richmond1
Park1
Rory11
Heartstone2
Aurora1
Courts1
Gluttony1
Dymas1
Shade1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Nyx"
2"Earth"
3"Rory"
4"Aurora"
5"Shade"
places
0"Fae"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Dymas"
globalScore0.932
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.935
wordCount1069
matches
0"not physically, but like a memory insisting on attention"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences72
matches
0"dishes that writhed"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean34.48
std21.77
cv0.631
sampleLengths
040
19
238
328
487
569
624
713
852
94
1025
1142
1280
1319
1471
159
1624
1726
1856
1961
2016
2137
2249
2313
2415
2543
2624
2717
2816
2922
3040
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs163
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences72
ratio0.083
matches
0"The familiar scents of Richmond Park—wet grass, car exhaust, pigeon feathers—had vanished the moment they stepped between the living oak pillars."
1"She glanced at the crimson Heartstone pendant; it warmed against her sternum, a faint heartbeat answering some unseen rhythm."
2"The pendant’s warmth had grown into a steady throb, and she felt it tugging—not physically, but like a memory insisting on attention."
3"The glass surface swam with blurred shapes: a man in seventeenth-century dress speaking silently to empty air; a young woman with a crescent scar drawing the same scar on her own wrist with trembling fingers."
4"A soft click sounded from deeper in the grove—stone shifting against stone."
5"At its centre rose a single tree whose bark spun slowly, revealing fleeting scenes: Aurora’s childhood scar reopening in silver lines; Nyx’s own former human silhouette burning away during an ancient summoning gone wrong; Isolde standing before the Fae Courts, lips sealed by thorned magic."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount984
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"half-solid, half-shadow."
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03048780487804878
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.011178861788617886
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences72
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences72
mean14.85
std9.88
cv0.665
sampleLengths
032
18
26
33
416
522
616
712
811
921
1022
1133
127
1319
1419
1524
168
179
187
198
205
2127
2215
2310
244
252
2613
2710
283
2922
3017
3120
3235
3325
345
3514
3612
3732
3827
392
407
4111
426
437
4410
4516
4611
4745
4815
4918
79.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.4861111111111111
totalSentences72
uniqueOpeners35
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences61
matches
0"she said without turning"
1"they whispered, voice rustling through"
2"she murmured in her riddle-voice"
3"They moved deeper through the"
4"She glanced at the crimson"
5"Her trainers left no print,"
6"they warned, half-solid, half-shadow"
7"She followed the sensation along"
8"They encountered the first standing"
9"She reached for the blade’s"
10"Its cold moonsilver bite steadied"
11"She staggered, caught herself on"
12"Its cold edge parted the"
13"She met Nyx’s faintly glowing"
14"They shimmered with rare urgency"
ratio0.246
41.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences61
matches
0"Rory ducked under a low"
1"The black edge parted the"
2"she said without turning"
3"Nyx slid from shadow to"
4"they whispered, voice rustling through"
5"she murmured in her riddle-voice"
6"They moved deeper through the"
7"The familiar scents of Richmond"
8"A low pulse resonated in"
9"She glanced at the crimson"
10"Her trainers left no print,"
11"Nyx paused at the first"
12"they warned, half-solid, half-shadow"
13"Rory crouched, studying the colours"
14"A musical ripple answered for"
15"Each berry split open as"
16"The air grew denser, tasting"
17"Isolde said softly"
18"The seer’s pale lavender eyes"
19"The pendant’s warmth had grown"
ratio0.836
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Rory ducked under a low branch that glowed with veins of liquid starlight, her hand tightening around the cool hilt of the moonsilver dagger Isolde had pressed …"
1"In their place rose the heady perfume of blooms that opened only when footsteps drew near, petals unfurling with wet, paper sounds."
2"White and gold flowers exhaled motes that drifted upward like slow pollen, illuminating irregular patches of bark that shimmered with script in an alphabet Rory…"
3"Each berry split open as they approached, revealing translucent seeds that spun like tiny constellations."
4"She followed the sensation along a curve of silver-veined ground that had not been there moments before."
5"They encountered the first standing mirror half-hidden behind a curtain of hanging vines that hummed like plucked strings when touched."
6"More vines withdrew of their own accord, revealing an avenue lined with trees whose trunks twisted into pillar forms, each crowned by living crystal fruit that …"
7"Inside it pulsed a miniature version of the Gluttony realm: golden tables laden with fruit that wept nectar, souls in chef’s whites tasting dishes that writhed …"
8"Its cold edge parted the vibrating air, but the crystal at her feet cracked on its own, spilling liquid light that pooled and began to rise, shaping itself into…"
9"The pendant’s warmth now matched the heat blasting from Dymas, and the moonsilver dagger hummed in answer, its edge glowing faint blue against the intrusion of …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"they whispered, voice rustling through leaves that never grew on Earth’s trees"
1"the Shade asked, voice barely more than a shadow against the rising roar"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"they warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.4
72.2061%