Run: 2026-05-10-01KR92F7M4VDER10STJW7GN3YX

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory snatched the wet rag from the counter, her knuckles white against the grey fabric. The spilled gin soaked into the dark mahogany, a sticky, translucent puddle that refused to vanish. "I'll get the salt." Silas didn't look up from the glass he was polishing. He moved with a slow, practiced grace, despite the slight hitch in his left leg. The Raven's Nest sat heavy in the Soho air, a sanctuary of shadows and low murmurs. Around them, the dim light of the green neon sign bled through the window, painting the street outside in a sickly, emerald hue. Old, faded maps covered the walls, their edges curling like parched skin, while black-and-white photographs of men with hollow eyes watched the patrons from the gloom. Rory scrubbed the wood until her forearm ached. She felt the familiar, rhythmic tick-tock of the wall clock, a steady pulse in the quiet moments between the rush. The door chimed. A woman stepped inside, bringing the sharp, biting scent of rain and expensive perfume. She wore a tailored, charcoal, heavy wool coat that screamed of Mayfair boutiques and calculated elegance. Her hair, once a wild, chestnut mane that smelled of clove cigarettes and rebellion, was now pulled back into a tight, severe knot. Rory froze. The rag slipped from her hand, landing with a dull thud on the bar. "Eva?" The woman paused. She scanned the room, her gaze sweeping over the maps and the dim corners with the detached interest of a predator. When her eyes landed on Rory, they didn't soften. They sharpened. "Rory." Eva walked toward the bar, her heels clicking a precise, rhythmic beat against the floorboards. She didn't hesitate. She didn't stumble. She sat on the high stool, her movements fluid and terrifyingly composed. "You look... well." "You look expensive." Eva reached into her handbag and pulled out a slim, gold, rectangular lighter. She flicked it open. The flame danced in her eyes. "Life in London has its rewards." "Is that what we're calling it now? Rewards?" "We weren't exactly thriving in Cardiff, were we?" Rory turned to the tap, her movements sudden and jerky. She needed to do something. She needed to avoid the way Eva's presence seemed to suck the oxygen from the room. "I heard you went into finance." "Something like that." "You used to hate anyone in a suit. You used to say they were just vultures in better tailoring." "Vultures eat what they find, Rory. It's a matter of survival." Eva tapped the gold lighter against the bar. Click. Click. Click. "You found your survival. I see you're working for Blackwood now." "I deliver for the restaurant. I live upstairs. It's a quiet life." "Quiet is just another word for stagnant." The insult landed with a dull weight. Rory gripped the edge of the bar, the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist stinging as if the old wound had reopened. She remembered the night they had fled the house in Cardiff, the terror of the headlights in the rearview mirror, and the way Eva had gripped her hand, promising they would never look back. "I'm not stagnant. I'm safe." "Safe is a delusion." Eva leaned forward, her eyes locking onto Rory's. The warmth that used to reside there, the fierce, protective spark that had guided Rory through the darkest months after Evan, was gone. In its place sat a cold, polished void. "You always were a terrible liar." "I'm not lying." "You're hiding. Just like you did back then. Only now, you've built a prettier cage." "At least my cage doesn't involve selling my soul to the highest bidder." "My soul was traded a long time ago. I just got a better price for it." Silence stretched between them, thick and suffocating. A patron at the corner table laughed, a harsh, sudden sound that felt violent in the tension of the bar. Silas moved closer, his hazel eyes tracking the exchange with a quiet, watchful intensity. He didn't intervene, but his presence felt like a coiled spring. "Why are you here, Eva?" "I wanted to see if you'd actually made it." "Made it to where? A delivery job in Soho?" "To a life." "This is a life. It's mine." "Is it? Or is it just the absence of fear?" Eva reached out, her manicured fingers brushing the surface of the bar near Rory's hand. The movement was predatory, a subtle claim of space. "I'm moving into the new development in Canary Wharf. It's a different world." "I bet." "You should come by. For a drink. A real drink, not this watered-down rot." "I don't think so." "Don't be difficult. It's beneath you." "You're the one who's difficult, Eva. You're the one who's unrecognizable." "Change is the only constant, Rory. You should learn that before the world decides to change you against your will." Eva stood up, the movement sudden and final. She smoothed the front of her charcoal coat, her expression returning to that mask of terrifying composure. "Goodbye, Rory." "Goodbye, Eva." Rory watched her walk toward the door. The woman moved with a grace that felt manufactured, a performance of success that lacked any foundation of joy. The door chimed again as she stepped out into the damp London night. Rory sank onto a stool, her legs feeling like lead. She stared at the empty space where Eva had sat. The scent of that clinical, expensive perfume still lingered, clashing with the smell of stale hops and old wood. "She's gone too far, hasn't she?" Silas leaned against the back bar, his expression unreadable. "She's just doing what she has to do." "There's a difference between doing what is necessary and becoming the thing you once fought." "She's not my fight, Silas." "No. But she's a shadow. And shadows have a way of following you." Silas turned to walk away, his limp more pronounced in the heavy silence. Rory reached for a glass, but her hand trembled. She looked toward the window, watching the blurred lights of passing cars. The door didn't chime this time. It crashed. The heavy oak door hit the wall with a violent, echoing boom. Two men in grey, structured suits stepped into the light. They didn't look like patrons. They didn't look like they were looking for a drink. They moved with a synchronized, lethal
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1058
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
5.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1058
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"sanctuary"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"rhythmic"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"calculated"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"predator"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
11
word"silence"
count2
12
word"tension"
count1
13
word"intensity"
count1
14
word"unreadable"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"synchronized"
count1
highlights
0"sanctuary"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"rhythmic"
4"pulse"
5"calculated"
6"scanned"
7"predator"
8"flicked"
9"weight"
10"warmth"
11"silence"
12"tension"
13"intensity"
14"unreadable"
15"trembled"
16"echoing"
17"synchronized"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1058
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount730
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.64
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Mayfair1
Rory12
Eva9
Cardiff1
Evan1
London1
Silas4
Click3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore0.678
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a coiled spring"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1058
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean16.53
std17.07
cv1.033
sampleLengths
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328
43
553
616
71
835
91
1033
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123
1323
146
158
168
1731
186
193
2019
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2211
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2412
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275
284
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306
313
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3313
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365
379
389
393
406
4110
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4313
442
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464
476
4811
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99.78% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"was gone"
88.89% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs120
matches
0"was polishing"
1"were looking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences106
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount734
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.01226158038147139
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0027247956403269754
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean9.98
std6.45
cv0.646
sampleLengths
015
116
24
310
415
516
623
726
88
920
103
1114
1216
1323
142
1514
161
173
1821
199
202
211
2215
233
243
2512
263
273
2813
294
306
316
328
338
3410
355
3616
376
383
3919
4011
418
421
431
441
4511
4612
477
487
4923
47.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3490566037735849
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners37
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences58
matches
0"He moved with a slow,"
1"She felt the familiar, rhythmic"
2"She wore a tailored, charcoal,"
3"Her hair, once a wild,"
4"She scanned the room, her"
5"She didn't hesitate."
6"She didn't stumble."
7"She sat on the high"
8"She flicked it open."
9"She needed to do something."
10"She needed to avoid the"
11"She remembered the night they"
12"He didn't intervene, but his"
13"She smoothed the front of"
14"She stared at the empty"
15"She looked toward the window,"
16"They didn't look like patrons."
17"They didn't look like they"
18"They moved with a synchronized,"
ratio0.328
3.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences58
matches
0"Rory snatched the wet rag"
1"The spilled gin soaked into"
2"Silas didn't look up from"
3"He moved with a slow,"
4"The Raven's Nest sat heavy"
5"Rory scrubbed the wood until"
6"She felt the familiar, rhythmic"
7"The door chimed."
8"A woman stepped inside, bringing"
9"She wore a tailored, charcoal,"
10"Her hair, once a wild,"
11"The rag slipped from her"
12"The woman paused."
13"She scanned the room, her"
14"Eva walked toward the bar,"
15"She didn't hesitate."
16"She didn't stumble."
17"She sat on the high"
18"Eva reached into her handbag"
19"She flicked it open."
ratio0.914
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
43.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The spilled gin soaked into the dark mahogany, a sticky, translucent puddle that refused to vanish."
1"She wore a tailored, charcoal, heavy wool coat that screamed of Mayfair boutiques and calculated elegance."
2"Her hair, once a wild, chestnut mane that smelled of clove cigarettes and rebellion, was now pulled back into a tight, severe knot."
3"Rory gripped the edge of the bar, the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist stinging as if the old wound had reopened."
4"The woman moved with a grace that felt manufactured, a performance of success that lacked any foundation of joy."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
81.2779%