Run: 2026-05-19-01KS0TPHSXCJNVDP2KZKGFBRHW

Run Details

Duration:
52.2s
Cost:
$0.101170
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The colossal pillars of petrified oak loomed over the muddy ridge of Richmond Park like skeletal fingers clawing at the swollen, grey clouds. Rain fell in a steady, freezing drizzle, plastering Rory Carter’s black hair to her temples. Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The skin there always throbbed when the weather turned foul. The shadows beneath the gnarled roots of the nearest oak twisted, detaching themselves from the bark. They slid along the wet earth, rising into a towering, humanoid silhouette. The Shade stood solid for a fraction of a second, its form a bottomless tear in the physical world. Two faintly glowing violet eyes flared in the darkness of its featureless face. "The seal is weeping." Nyx's voice drifted like dry winter grass scraping against a tombstone. "The mortals walk past this place every day, blind to the grease on the window." "Let's get inside before a park ranger spots us." Rory stepped toward the shimmering distortion between the two central oak pillars. The air between the stones rippled like heat haze rising off Cardiff tarmac in July, but the day was freezing. As she drew closer, the scent of wet pine and car exhaust vanished, replaced by a thick, heavy aroma of fermented plums and honey. "Step through quickly." Nyx hovered near her shoulder, the cold radiating from the Shade raising goosebumps on Rory’s neck. "The Veil behaves poorly during the solstice. It might pinch." Rory took a deep breath, braced her shoulders, and plunged forward. A strange resistance met her skin. It felt like wading through a vertical sheet of warm, gelatinous grease. The light of London shattered into a thousand greasy fragments. For a terrifying beat, she couldn't breathe; the heavy, sweet scent of crushed flowers filled her lungs, thick as syrup. Then, the pressure popped. She stumbled onto a bed of soft, springy moss. The grey winter sky of London had vanished. Above her stretched a canopy of towering, silver-barked trees, their leaves shimmering with a pale, pearlescent gold. The sky through the branches wasn't dark, but a warm, permanent twilight of soft pinks and deep amber. Brilliant, oversized wildflowers—pale lavender lilies, blood-red primroses, and orchids that seemed to gently breathe—carpeted the forest floor. "Where are we?" Rory unbuttoned her damp wool coat as a wave of dry, fragrant warmth washed over her. "The Grove of the Exile." Nyx’s shadow flowed across the moss, leaving a faint trail of frost that withered the delicate white petals of a nearby violet. "A pocket stitched between your world and ours. Time moves on a broken spring here." Rory looked back. Behind them, the petrified oak stones were gone, replaced by a wall of dense, thorned briars with black roses that bled red nectar down their stems. The air was absolutely silent. No birds chirped. No insects buzzed. The only sound was the rhythmic, low hum of the earth beneath her boots. She reached into her collar and pulled out the Heartstone Pendant. The crimson gem hummed, pulsing with a deep, inner warmth that heated her fingertips. "Why is it doing that?" Rory held the stone up, its red glow casting long, distorted shadows across the silver moss. "Is there a portal to Hel nearby?" "The boundaries of this grove are thin." Nyx’s violet eyes narrowed as the shadow drifted toward a patch of silver ferns. "The Underworld leaks. The Fae domains leak. Everything bleeds when the solstice nears." A soft rustle of silk drew Rory's eyes toward the deeper thicket. A woman emerged from the silver-white fog. Her waist-length hair was the color of liquid tin, and it flowed behind her as if drifting through water. Her pale lavender eyes held no pupil, only a swirling, milky light. She moved with an eerie, weightless grace; Rory watched her boots glide over the damp silver moss without bending a single blade of grass. She left no footprints. "You carry the ash of Cardiff on your heels, daughter of Jennifer." The woman's voice had the clear, resonant ring of glass harmonizing in the wind. "Yet your hands are cold." "You're Isolde Varga." Rory stepped closer, her eyes tracking the woman's silver gown. "We need to know how to seal the rifts. The Wardens are failing, and the Veil is tearing in London." Isolde stopped a few paces away. Her lavender gaze dropped to the pulsing Heartstone pendant in Rory’s hand. "The eye of the beast cannot see the light." Isolde tilted her head, her silver hair spilling over her shoulder like a frozen waterfall. "You carry the key to the cellar, yet you ask how to lock the door." "Speak plainly." Rory stepped closer. "The riddles won't stop what's coming through the rifts. I've seen the things crawling out of the Thames." "A lie is a straight line, Rory Carter." Isolde's gaze was direct now, unblinking. "The truth is a circle. You ask for a shield, but you require a blade." The half-Fae reached into the wide sleeve of her gown. She slipped out a package wrapped in heavy, indigo silk, unfolding the fabric with slow, deliberate movements. Resting on the silk lay a slender, leaf-shaped dagger. Its metal was moonsilver, polished so brightly it seemed to reflect a moon that wasn't in the sky. A faint, pale blue light luminesced along its edge. "The Fae-Forged blade." Nyx's shadow pooled around the roots of a giant fern. "The cold iron that does not rust." "Take it." Isolde offered the hilt. "The steel of the summer court does not bleed, but it remembers who carved it." Rory reached out and wrapped her fingers around the hilt. An intense, biting shock of cold surged up her arm. She gasped, her knuckles turning white, but she didn't let go. The crescent scar on her left wrist flared with a sharp, burning heat. The frost from the blade crept up the silver guard, dusting her thumb with tiny, white ice crystals. The contrast between the cold weapon and the warm air of the grove sent a violent shiver down her spine. "It's freezing." Rory gritted her teeth, her breath pluming into white mist. "It is the chill of the first winter." Isolde's eyes drifted toward the shimmering canopy. "It will cut the threads of the demons, and it will pierce the wards of the deep. But every cut has a price." Rory slipped the dagger into her belt. The cold radiated through her clothes, numbing her hip. "How do we get back? The way we came is blocked by thorns." "The path of the silver water." Isolde pointed toward a faint, shimmering vapor rising through the trees to the east. "Follow the mercury. Do not drink, and do not look back when you cross the bridge." With a soft, fluid turn, Isolde melted back into the silver fog. Her silver hair was the last thing to fade, vanishing like steam. Rory turned toward the east. The warm, sweet air now felt slick and suffocating, clinging to her lungs. The red light of her pendant pulsed faster, a rapid heartbeat matching her own. "Let’s move." Rory started down the faint path. "Quickly." Nyx's shadow stretched ahead, a dark arrow pointing toward the sound of rushing water. "The air is getting sweeter. That means the grove is preparing to digest us." The fog thickened, swallowing the base of the silver trunks. It felt damp, but unlike London's greasy fog, this was sweet-tasting, coating Rory’s tongue with a sugary, numbing film. She scraped her fingernails against her palms to stay focused, the crescent scar on her left wrist tingling. Every step felt heavier, as if the air itself had transitioned from gas to liquid. "Keep moving, Carter." Nyx hissed from the shifting darkness. "The air is beautiful, yes? It invites you to lie down. If you sleep here, the roots will have you by dawn." "I'm fine. Just... my legs feel like lead." Rory shook her head, blinking away a sudden, heavy lethargy. "The Grove dines on the ambition of travelers." Isolde’s voice drifted from somewhere ahead, though she was no longer visible through the milk-white mist. "Many have stayed to watch the lilies bloom. They are still watching." The sound of rushing water broke the oppressive silence. A narrow stream cut through the silver gravel, but the water wasn't clear. It ran like liquid mercury, thick and shining with a metallic, silver gleam under the golden twilight sky. Small, translucent fish with bulbous, pale violet eyes darted beneath the surface, leaving trails of cold light. "Cross here." Isolde’s voice echoed, cold and distant. "And do not look back at the bank." Rory reached the edge of the mercury stream. The cold radiating from the water matched the chill of the Fae blade at her hip. She looked down at the liquid metal. Her reflection didn't show her face; instead, the surface mirrored a sky filled with burning, amber clouds and the distorted silhouette of jagged stone spires. The mercury river didn't flow like water; it slid. It moved with a heavy, viscous rhythm, slapping against the silver gravel with a metallic clink. A bridge of woven, bleached roots hummed with a pale bioluminescence, stretching across the shimmering stream. "The bridge touches the undercurrent of Dymas." Nyx paused at the foot of the bridge, the shadow-form shivering as the violet light in its eyes dimmed. "Be careful, Rory. The silver water is hungry today." Rory stepped onto the first root. The wood beneath her boots was slick as ice, but she kept her balance, her hand resting on the hilt of the moonsilver dagger. High above, the warm amber twilight began to bruise into a dark, pulsing violet.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Nyx's voice drifted like [like]"
1"Nyx's shadow pooled around [around]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.523
leniency1
rawRatio0.087
effectiveRatio0.087
90.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1619
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1619
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count2
4
word"absolutely"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"silk"
count3
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"chill"
count2
9
word"the last thing"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"oppressive"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"throbbed"
2"shattered"
3"warmth"
4"absolutely"
5"rhythmic"
6"silk"
7"down her spine"
8"chill"
9"the last thing"
10"pulsed"
11"oppressive"
12"silence"
13"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1617
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
64.15% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1223
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory21
Carter1
Shade2
Cardiff1
July1
London3
Nyx8
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Isolde9
Fae2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carter"
2"Shade"
3"Nyx"
4"Isolde"
5"Fae"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"July"
4"London"
globalScore0.641
windowScore0.667
64.77% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like wading through a vertical she"
1"orchids that seemed to gently breathe—carpeted the forest floor"
2"as if drifting through water"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1617
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean33.69
std17.26
cv0.512
sampleLengths
058
160
230
321
444
529
611
752
89
960
1019
1142
1254
1325
1428
1534
1612
1766
1831
1933
2018
2139
2223
2329
2463
2520
2621
2710
2872
2912
3038
3116
3213
3336
3424
3532
368
3729
3862
3931
4018
4136
4257
4316
4456
4541
4635
4744
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs188
matches(empty)
20.76% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences117
ratio0.043
matches
0"For a terrifying beat, she couldn't breathe; the heavy, sweet scent of crushed flowers filled her lungs, thick as syrup."
1"Brilliant, oversized wildflowers—pale lavender lilies, blood-red primroses, and orchids that seemed to gently breathe—carpeted the forest floor."
2"She moved with an eerie, weightless grace; Rory watched her boots glide over the damp silver moss without bending a single blade of grass."
3"Her reflection didn't show her face; instead, the surface mirrored a sky filled with burning, amber clouds and the distorted silhouette of jagged stone spires."
4"The mercury river didn't flow like water; it slid."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1235
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender, leaf-shaped dagger."
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.020242914979757085
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005668016194331984
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean13.82
std5.88
cv0.425
sampleLengths
023
115
210
310
416
512
619
713
815
915
1021
1120
1224
1319
1410
1511
166
1712
1810
1920
204
219
228
2317
2418
2517
2619
2727
2815
293
3026
315
323
333
3414
3511
3614
3721
387
3921
4013
4112
427
4319
4412
4524
464
4726
485
4913
48.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.36752136752136755
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners43
34.36% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"Then, the pressure popped."
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences97
matches
0"Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped"
1"They slid along the wet"
2"It felt like wading through"
3"She stumbled onto a bed"
4"She reached into her collar"
5"Her waist-length hair was the"
6"Her pale lavender eyes held"
7"She moved with an eerie,"
8"She left no footprints."
9"Her lavender gaze dropped to"
10"She slipped out a package"
11"Its metal was moonsilver, polished"
12"She gasped, her knuckles turning"
13"Her silver hair was the"
14"It felt damp, but unlike"
15"She scraped her fingernails against"
16"It ran like liquid mercury,"
17"She looked down at the"
18"Her reflection didn't show her"
19"It moved with a heavy,"
ratio0.206
27.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences97
matches
0"The colossal pillars of petrified"
1"Rain fell in a steady,"
2"Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped"
3"The skin there always throbbed"
4"The shadows beneath the gnarled"
5"They slid along the wet"
6"The Shade stood solid for"
7"Nyx's voice drifted like dry"
8"Rory stepped toward the shimmering"
9"The air between the stones"
10"Nyx hovered near her shoulder,"
11"Rory took a deep breath,"
12"A strange resistance met her"
13"It felt like wading through"
14"The light of London shattered"
15"She stumbled onto a bed"
16"The grey winter sky of"
17"The sky through the branches"
18"Rory unbuttoned her damp wool"
19"Nyx’s shadow flowed across the"
ratio0.866
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
ratio0
75.47% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Above her stretched a canopy of towering, silver-barked trees, their leaves shimmering with a pale, pearlescent gold."
1"Brilliant, oversized wildflowers—pale lavender lilies, blood-red primroses, and orchids that seemed to gently breathe—carpeted the forest floor."
2"Behind them, the petrified oak stones were gone, replaced by a wall of dense, thorned briars with black roses that bled red nectar down their stems."
3"The crimson gem hummed, pulsing with a deep, inner warmth that heated her fingertips."
4"Her waist-length hair was the color of liquid tin, and it flowed behind her as if drifting through water."
59.78% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory stepped, her eyes tracking the woman's silver gown"
1"Rory gritted, her breath pluming into white mist"
2"Nyx's shadow stretched, a dark arrow pointing toward the sound of rushing water"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.023
leniency0.045
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.045
80.7519%