Run: 2026-05-19-01KS0TQSJJKFPFDC5J2CE44QYV

Run Details

Duration:
24.2s
Cost:
$0.040585
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The heat of the Heartstone pendant was the first warning. Beneath Rory’s collarbone, the thumbnail-sized crimson gem flared, pulsing with a sudden, localized fever that seeped through her cotton shirt. She reached up, her thumb brushing the silver chain, then tracing the familiar crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a grounding habit she couldn't seem to shake. Beside her, the air shuddered. "The seam is parting," Nyx whispered. The sound was like dry leaves scraping across flagstones, carrying no physical weight but vibrating directly in Rory’s ears. The Shade’s silhouette was an ink-blot against the twilight green of the Richmond grove, a six-foot-two tear in reality that absorbed the earthly light. Only their eyes—faintly glowing violet pools—remained fixed on the empty space between two ancient oak standing stones. "Step swiftly," Isolde said. The half-Fae didn't look back. She moved with an impossible, drifting grace, her waist-length silver hair gleaming like spun pewter. When she crossed the threshold between the stones, she left no footprints in the damp moss. Rory took a breath, gripped the leather-wrapped hilt of her Fae-Forged blade, and stepped through. The transition didn't feel like walking through glass or falling through water; it felt like a sudden, violent change in atmospheric pressure that popped her ears and stole the breath from her lungs. The cool, damp scent of English rain and decaying oak vanished, replaced instantly by an air so thick and sweet it felt almost physical. Rory stumbled, her boots sinking into ground that felt like damp velvet. She gasped, and the air she inhaled tasted of overripe peaches, burnt sugar, and a sharp, metallic tang that made the humors of her mouth water against her will. "Welcome to Dymas," Nyx murmured, their shadow-form stretching and pooling alongside Rory as if trying to find its bearings under a foreign sky. Rory looked up, and the breath caught in her throat. The sky was not blue, nor black, but a vast, suffocating dome of warm amber. It looked like liquid honey suspended in a state of eternal dusk, casting a heavy, golden-copper glow over everything. There were no clouds, only slow, swirling currents of deeper bronze that drifted across the heavens like oil on water. They stood at the edge of an orchard that defied any earthly botany. The trees were massive, their trunks twisting upward like dark, polished obsidian. Instead of leaves, their branches bore clusters of translucent, crystalline needles that chimed softly in a nonexistent breeze, a sound like hundreds of tiny glass bells. Hanging from these crystalline boughs were fruits of terrifying perfection: massive, blood-colored pears that glowed with a faint, inner luminescence, and clusters of grapes the size of plums, their skins so taut they looked ready to burst. "It’s beautiful," Rory whispered, though a cold knot of dread was tightening in her stomach. "A beautiful trap," Isolde replied, her pale lavender eyes catching the amber light. She stood a few paces ahead, her gaze sweeping over the glittering orchard. "Every root in this soil drinks from the desires of those who fell before us. To taste is to bind; to indulge is to drown." "Can we eat nothing here?" Rory asked, her fingers tightening around the cold, moonsilver hilt of her dagger. The weapon was a comforting anchor. It was always cold to the touch, and in this heavy, muggy warmth, the chill of the blade ice-plating her palm was the only thing keeping her sharp. "Nothing that grows from the dirt, nothing that pours from the vine," Isolde said, her voice carrying the flat, unyielding cadence of her Fae compulsion. She could mislead, but she could not lie. "The Prince of this realm sets a table where the guests eventually become the feast." Nyx glided past them, their form shifting from a solid humanoid silhouette into a ribbon of smoke that wrapped around the trunk of a nearby obsidian tree. "Belphegor’s servants are industrious," the Shade whispered, their violet eyes flickering within the darkness. "Hear them?" Rory held her breath, listening. Beneath the delicate, musical chiming of the crystal needles, there was another sound. A low, rhythmic thrumming, like the beating of a distant drum, or perhaps the roaring of a massive furnace. It came from deeper within the valley, where the orchards sloped down toward sprawling, terraced vineyards. "We need to move," Rory said, her practical, Cardiff-bred instincts kicking in. "We’re exposed here." They began to descend the amber-lit slope. Walking through Dymas felt like wading through a dream. The soil beneath their feet was a dark, purple-black loam that smelled of yeast and crushed berries. With every step Rory took, the heavy scent of the air seemed to shift. For a second, she smelled the rich, roasted garlic and ginger of Yu-Fei’s kitchen at the Golden Empress—a scent that brought a sharp pang of homesickness—and then it shifted to the buttery, sweet pastry of her mother's Welsh cakes. She gritted her teeth, recognizing the insidious nature of the realm. It was digging into her mind, finding the sensory keys to her lock. "Do not let the air linger in your throat, Carter," Nyx warned, appearing suddenly at her left shoulder. "The air itself is a vintage. It seeks to soften the mind before the offering is even presented." "I'm fine," Rory said, though her throat felt dry and her tongue tasted excessively of sugar. She looked at Isolde. The half-Fae walked with her hands folded, completely unaffected, her silver hair swaying like a pendulum. "Isolde, how far to the rift point?" "The boundary lies where the sweet waters meet the bitter," Isolde said, her speech typically oblique. "Where the press squeezes the grapes of wrath, the wall between worlds is thin enough to pierce." "The winepresses," Rory translated, looking down the valley. In the basin below, the orchards gave way to massive, terraced vineyards. The vines were thick as ancient ivy, curling around giant trellises carved from white bone. They weren't wood; they looked like calcified ribs of long-dead leviathans, arching over the pathways in a series of grotesque tines. Hanging from the bone trellises were heavy, black clusters of grapes that dripped a thick, syrupy juice onto the flagstones below. The stones were stained a deep, permanent mahogany. As they drew closer, the sound of the thrumming grew louder. It was accompanied by the sound of rushing water—or rather, rushing liquid. They reached the edge of a massive, stone-lined canal that sliced through the center of the vineyards. The liquid flowing within was not water. It was a thick, dark crimson stream, foaming with a pinkish froth at the edges. The scent of alcohol and fermentation was so potent here that Rory felt a sudden wave of dizziness. "A river of wine," Rory muttered, staring at the swirling current. "The tears of the insatiable," Nyx whispered. The Shade bent down, their dark form hovering over the bank. "They drink, they thirst, they drink again. The cycle is the engine of Dymas." Rory looked across the canal. On the opposite bank, the bone trellises cast long, ribbed shadows under the amber sky. The environment was stunning in its excess, a masterpiece of grotesque luxury, but the deeper they went, the more the wonder turned to a sickening claustrophobia. The amber sky felt like a lid on a jar, sealing them in with the perfume of rot and sugar. The Heartstone pendant against her chest suddenly flared with an intense, biting heat, more aggressive than before. Rory gasped, clutching her chest. "We are close," she said, her voice tight. "The pendant... it’s burning." "The portal is near, but so are the keepers," Isolde said, her pale eyes narrowing as she looked toward a massive stone structure rising from the vineyards. It was a tower shaped like an inverted chalice, constructed from dark, basaltic rock. At its base, a massive wooden wheel turned slowly, driven by the current of the crimson river. "The press," Nyx whispered. Before Rory could reply, a low, guttural vibration shook the ground beneath their boots. The translucent needles on the obsidian trees chimed in a frantic, discordant chorus. From the shadows of the bone trellises, something began to stir.
created_at"2026-05-19T19:17:25.208Z" 5/19/2026, 7:17:25 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1368
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"suddenly"
2"completely"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1368
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"tracing"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"gleaming"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"crystalline"
count2
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"comforting"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"rhythmic"
count1
12
word"roaring"
count1
13
word"pang"
count1
14
word"structure"
count1
15
word"constructed"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"familiar"
2"weight"
3"gleaming"
4"velvet"
5"crystalline"
6"stomach"
7"comforting"
8"warmth"
9"chill"
10"crystal"
11"rhythmic"
12"roaring"
13"pang"
14"structure"
15"constructed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
73.17% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1362
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
73.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1171
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Rory18
Shade3
Richmond1
Fae-Forged1
English1
Isolde6
Fae4
Cardiff-bred1
Dymas1
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Welsh1
Nyx6
persons
0"Rory"
1"Shade"
2"Isolde"
3"Fae"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Golden"
globalScore0.731
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like a sudden, violent change in a"
1"felt like damp velvet"
2"as if trying to find its bearings under a foreign sky"
3"looked like liquid honey suspended in a s"
4"felt like wading through a dream"
5"looked like calcified ribs of long-dead l"
6"felt like a lid on a jar, sealing them"
53.16% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.468
wordCount1362
matches
0"no physical weight but"
1"not blue, nor black, but a vast, suffocating dome of warm amber"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean38.91
std22.81
cv0.586
sampleLengths
056
15
266
340
415
557
641
723
810
954
1088
1115
1251
1352
1448
1543
1653
1715
1886
1924
2036
2143
2233
238
2477
2523
2657
2711
2832
2966
3022
3112
3258
334
3438
96.71% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"were stained"
1"was accompanied"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs196
matches
0"was tightening"
1"was digging"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences91
ratio0.077
matches
0"She reached up, her thumb brushing the silver chain, then tracing the familiar crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a grounding habit she couldn't seem to shake."
1"Only their eyes—faintly glowing violet pools—remained fixed on the empty space between two ancient oak standing stones."
2"The transition didn't feel like walking through glass or falling through water; it felt like a sudden, violent change in atmospheric pressure that popped her ears and stole the breath from her lungs."
3"\"Every root in this soil drinks from the desires of those who fell before us. To taste is to bind; to indulge is to drown.\""
4"For a second, she smelled the rich, roasted garlic and ginger of Yu-Fei’s kitchen at the Golden Empress—a scent that brought a sharp pang of homesickness—and then it shifted to the buttery, sweet pastry of her mother's Welsh cakes."
5"They weren't wood; they looked like calcified ribs of long-dead leviathans, arching over the pathways in a series of grotesque tines."
6"It was accompanied by the sound of rushing water—or rather, rushing liquid."
76.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1197
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"familiar crescent-shaped scar"
1"massive, blood-colored pears"
2"practical, Cardiff-bred instincts"
3"massive, stone-lined canal"
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.03592314118629908
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.013366750208855471
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean14.97
std7.59
cv0.507
sampleLengths
010
120
226
35
46
519
624
717
84
95
1015
1116
1215
1333
1424
1512
1629
1723
1810
1915
2019
2120
2213
2312
2426
2537
2615
2713
2813
2925
3018
316
3228
3325
348
3515
3627
3714
382
395
4013
4119
4216
4312
443
457
469
4717
4814
4939
55.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.38461538461538464
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners35
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Only their eyes—faintly glowing violet"
1"Instead of leaves, their branches"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences78
matches
0"She reached up, her thumb"
1"She moved with an impossible,"
2"She gasped, and the air"
3"It looked like liquid honey"
4"They stood at the edge"
5"She stood a few paces"
6"It was always cold to"
7"She could mislead, but she"
8"It came from deeper within"
9"They began to descend the"
10"She gritted her teeth, recognizing"
11"It was digging into her"
12"She looked at Isolde."
13"They weren't wood; they looked"
14"It was accompanied by the"
15"They reached the edge of"
16"It was a thick, dark"
17"she said, her voice tight"
18"It was a tower shaped"
ratio0.244
75.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences78
matches
0"The heat of the Heartstone"
1"She reached up, her thumb"
2"The sound was like dry"
3"The Shade’s silhouette was an"
4"The half-Fae didn't look back."
5"She moved with an impossible,"
6"Rory took a breath, gripped"
7"The transition didn't feel like"
8"The cool, damp scent of"
9"Rory stumbled, her boots sinking"
10"She gasped, and the air"
11"Nyx murmured, their shadow-form stretching"
12"Rory looked up, and the"
13"The sky was not blue,"
14"It looked like liquid honey"
15"They stood at the edge"
16"The trees were massive, their"
17"Rory whispered, though a cold"
18"Isolde replied, her pale lavender"
19"She stood a few paces"
ratio0.769
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Before Rory could reply, a"
ratio0.013
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Beneath Rory’s collarbone, the thumbnail-sized crimson gem flared, pulsing with a sudden, localized fever that seeped through her cotton shirt."
1"She reached up, her thumb brushing the silver chain, then tracing the familiar crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a grounding habit she couldn't seem to sha…"
2"The Shade’s silhouette was an ink-blot against the twilight green of the Richmond grove, a six-foot-two tear in reality that absorbed the earthly light."
3"The transition didn't feel like walking through glass or falling through water; it felt like a sudden, violent change in atmospheric pressure that popped her ea…"
4"She gasped, and the air she inhaled tasted of overripe peaches, burnt sugar, and a sharp, metallic tang that made the humors of her mouth water against her will…"
5"Instead of leaves, their branches bore clusters of translucent, crystalline needles that chimed softly in a nonexistent breeze, a sound like hundreds of tiny gl…"
6"Hanging from these crystalline boughs were fruits of terrifying perfection: massive, blood-colored pears that glowed with a faint, inner luminescence, and clust…"
7"Nyx glided past them, their form shifting from a solid humanoid silhouette into a ribbon of smoke that wrapped around the trunk of a nearby obsidian tree."
8"The soil beneath their feet was a dark, purple-black loam that smelled of yeast and crushed berries."
9"For a second, she smelled the rich, roasted garlic and ginger of Yu-Fei’s kitchen at the Golden Empress—a scent that brought a sharp pang of homesickness—and th…"
10"It was digging into her mind, finding the sensory keys to her lock."
11"Hanging from the bone trellises were heavy, black clusters of grapes that dripped a thick, syrupy juice onto the flagstones below."
12"They reached the edge of a massive, stone-lined canal that sliced through the center of the vineyards."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"the Shade whispered, their violet eyes flickering within the darkness"
1"Rory said, though her throat felt dry and her tongue tasted excessively of sugar"
2"Isolde said, her speech typically oblique"
3"she said, her voice tight"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"Rory whispered (whisper)"
3"the Shade whispered (whisper)"
4"Nyx warned (warn)"
5"Rory muttered (mutter)"
6"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
7"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.63
leniency1
rawRatio0.471
effectiveRatio0.471
72.8641%