Run: 2026-05-19-01KS0TT820WR29R3YX0N5FM46S

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Duration:
27.8s
Cost:
$0.051228
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A heavy crystal tumbler shattered against the brass footrest of the bar. Rory didn't flinch. She kept her eyes fixed on the man standing in the doorway of The Raven's Nest, his silhouette framed by the green neon glow vibrating through the rain-streaked glass. The scruffy Cardiff boy who used to split a single cheap cigarette on the steps of the National Museum had vanished. In his place stood an immaculate, tall, terrifyingly poised stranger. He wore a sharp charcoal Italian wool overcoat over a beautiful slim new black Italian silk tie. His boots, polished black leather, made no sound on the sawdust-covered floorboards as he stepped inside. "Rory." Her name sounded different in his mouth. Cleaned of its soft Welsh lilt. Hardened by the flat, aggressive vowels of the London wealthy. "Julian." "You look well. Different. But well." "You don't look like yourself at all." He stepped forward. Silas Blackwood paused his rhythmic wiping of the mahogany counter. The retired operative leaned his weight onto his good right leg, his hazel eyes narrowing as he took in the newcomer. The silver signet ring on Silas' right hand caught the amber light of the back bar as he stood tall, his presence quiet but heavy. The Raven's Nest smelled of damp wool, spilled stout, and the faint, sweet aroma of Silas' cherry pipe tobacco. Black-and-white photographs of forgotten boxing champions and yellowed maps of pre-war Europe lined the dark pine walls. It was a sanctuary of shadows, but Julian brought a clinical, bright energy that did not belong. Julian took a stool, his movements precise. He didn't look at Silas, though he surely felt the old man's gaze. "A gin and tonic. Hendrick's. Fever-Tree if you have it." Silas didn't move. "We have Gordon's. And tonic from a gun." Julian smiled, a thin, humourless stretch of his lips that didn't reach his eyes. "Gordon's then." Rory stood behind the bar, her fingers tracing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. A nervous tic she hated herself for showing. "I thought you were in Bristol, Julian. Last I heard, you were painting murals in warehouse squats." "We grow out of things, Rory. Or some of us do. The law pays for the canvas now." "Whose law?" "The kind that keeps people out of prison. Or puts them there." Silas slid the drink across the wood. The ice made a dull, wet clink-clank against the cheap glass. Julian picked it up, but he didn't drink. He stared at Rory's apron. "Golden Empress?" He read the faded red embroidery over her chest. "You're delivering spring rolls now? Your father must be thrilled. Brendan Carter’s daughter, the Cardiff University prize student, carrying cardboard boxes through Soho." "It pays the rent." "So does a proper career. I could speak to the partners at my firm. We always need juniors who can actually read a brief." "I don't need your charity, Julian. I left that life behind." "You left everything behind. Just packed up, hopped on a National Express coach, and vanished. Eva wouldn't even tell me where you went." "Eva knows how to keep a secret." "Clearly." Julian took a sip, winced at the harsh gin, and set the glass down. "Though some secrets have a shelf life." The air in the bar grew heavy. Silas had retreated to the far end of the counter, polishing a beer tap, but his head remained tilted, taking in every word. "Why are you here, Julian? Soho isn't your usual hunting ground." "I had a meeting nearby. A client." "In a backstreet pub?" "I remembered you lived around here. A mutual friend mentioned seeing you." "A mutual friend." Rory's heart hammered against her ribs, a wild, frantic rhythm. Julian didn't answer immediately. He reached into his breast pocket and pulled out a heavy gold lighter. He turned it over in his manicured hand, a rhythmic flick-flack of the metal casing. It was Evan's lighter. The Welsh dragon engraving on the side caught the light. The copper tang of fear flooded her mouth. "He's been looking for you, Rory." "I have a restraining order." "In Wales. We’re in England. And besides, those things are incredibly easy to dissolve when the petitioner disappears from the jurisdiction without a forwarding address." "He hurt me, Julian. You saw the bruises. You sat in my kitchen and promised me you'd help." Julian stared at the dragon engraving. "He was upset. You left him with nothing." "He nearly broke my arm." "He lost his temper. People do. You weren't exactly easy to live with, Rory." The betrayal cut deeper than the cold London wind outside. This boy had spent nights holding her hand while she shook, promising he would protect her from Evan's rages. Now, he sat in his tailored Italian suit, defending the monster. "You're working for him." "He's a client now. His father's estate settled. I handle his affairs." "Get out." "Rory, be sensible. He wants a conversation. Just a quiet, private talk. To clear the air." "I said, get out." Silas stepped forward, his slight limp barely noticeable, yet his bulk was imposing. His hand rested on the wood, the silver signet ring stark against the dark oak. "The lady asked you to leave." Julian didn't look at Silas. He kept his eyes locked on Rory, a cruel, pleased smirk playing on his lips. He reached into his pocket once more. He didn't pull out a business card. He pulled out a key ring on a yellow leather fob. He laid them on the bar. The yellow leather fob had a logo: The Golden Empress. "He doesn't need to look for you anymore, Rory. He found your flat this morning. He's waiting upstairs." A heavy thud echoed from the ceiling directly above them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.205
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount963
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.69% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount963
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"crystal"
count1
1
word"shattered"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"lilt"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count2
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"sanctuary"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"imposing"
count1
9
word"stark"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"shattered"
2"silk"
3"lilt"
4"rhythmic"
5"weight"
6"sanctuary"
7"tracing"
8"imposing"
9"stark"
10"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences52
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords963
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount573
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.4
worstName"Julian"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Julian"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Cardiff1
National1
Museum1
Italian3
Welsh2
London2
Blackwood1
Black-and-white1
Europe1
Julian8
Silas7
Rory5
Evan2
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Museum"
3"Blackwood"
4"Julian"
5"Silas"
6"Rory"
7"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Europe"
globalScore0.802
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount963
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean17.51
std14.16
cv0.809
sampleLengths
012
132
264
31
423
51
66
77
859
953
1020
1110
1211
1316
1424
1517
1618
172
1812
1918
2013
2134
224
2324
2411
2523
267
2722
2830
2911
307
314
3212
3313
3446
358
366
375
3825
3918
4014
415
4214
4340
444
4512
462
4716
484
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs88
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount455
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"beautiful slim new black Italian"
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.02857142857142857
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.01098901098901099
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean10.94
std6.35
cv0.58
sampleLengths
012
13
229
321
410
517
616
71
87
96
1010
111
126
137
143
1510
1621
1725
1819
1917
2017
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2213
2310
243
258
2614
272
2816
298
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322
3312
347
3511
368
375
3811
3923
404
4124
4211
4323
447
4515
467
477
4823
4911
40.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3181818181818182
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
ratio0
81.54% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences52
matches
0"She kept her eyes fixed"
1"He wore a sharp charcoal"
2"His boots, polished black leather,"
3"Her name sounded different in"
4"He stepped forward."
5"It was a sanctuary of"
6"He didn't look at Silas,"
7"He stared at Rory's apron."
8"He read the faded red"
9"He reached into his breast"
10"He turned it over in"
11"It was Evan's lighter."
12"His hand rested on the"
13"He kept his eyes locked"
14"He reached into his pocket"
15"He didn't pull out a"
16"He pulled out a key"
17"He laid them on the"
ratio0.346
8.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences52
matches
0"A heavy crystal tumbler shattered"
1"Rory didn't flinch."
2"She kept her eyes fixed"
3"The scruffy Cardiff boy who"
4"He wore a sharp charcoal"
5"His boots, polished black leather,"
6"Her name sounded different in"
7"He stepped forward."
8"Silas Blackwood paused his rhythmic"
9"The retired operative leaned his"
10"The silver signet ring on"
11"The Raven's Nest smelled of"
12"It was a sanctuary of"
13"Julian took a stool, his"
14"He didn't look at Silas,"
15"Silas didn't move."
16"Julian smiled, a thin, humourless"
17"Rory stood behind the bar,"
18"A nervous tic she hated"
19"Silas slid the drink across"
ratio0.904
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Now, he sat in his"
ratio0.019
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The scruffy Cardiff boy who used to split a single cheap cigarette on the steps of the National Museum had vanished."
1"Julian smiled, a thin, humourless stretch of his lips that didn't reach his eyes."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
87.2166%