Run: 2026-05-19-01KS0TYKEVKF1C4V9DFF55WQ10

Run Details

Duration:
37.5s
Cost:
$0.071843
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
My boots sank into the damp mossy earth as I slipped between the two towering oak standing stones. The Richmond Park fence lay fifty yards behind me, but the hum of London traffic died instantly. I clutched the silver chain around my neck. The small crimson Heartstone Pendant pulsed against my collarbone, a tiny rhythmic throb of heat that warned me I had crossed the threshold. Silas said the Grove hid secrets, but he had omitted the suffocating weight of the air. It tasted of ancient ozone and copper. The scent of sweet blooming lavender and rotting pine needles filled my nose. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, their petals glowing with an unnatural luminescent violet hue in the absolute darkness. I stepped forward, adjusting the strap of my canvas satchel. The quiet here felt deliberate. It pressed against my eardrums, thick and expectant, like the silence in a empty courtroom before a judge delivers a death sentence. Time behaved strangely in this place. I checked my silver watch. The delicate second hand dragged itself forward three seconds, struggled, and then slid backward, trapped in a useless tick-tock stutter. Silas had warned me about this distorting pocket. An hour in the Grove might cost me a week in the real world, or I might return to London before I even left. I could not afford to lose days. Not with Yu-Fei expecting me at the Golden Empress for the morning prep, and certainly not with Evan's thugs still sniffing around my flat. I traced the small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist, a nervous habit from an old childhood accident. The skin felt unusually cold. A sharp click-clack echoed to my left. I froze, lifting my chin. My gaze swept the gnarled trunks of the surrounding trees. Nothing moved. The ancient oaks stood like skeletal sentinels, their twisted branches interwoven to form a dense canopy that blocked out the sky. "Show yourself," I said. The forest ignored me. My voice sounded flat, swallowed instantly by the moss. I forced my feet to move, heading deeper into the clearing. The path began to zigzag around massive root structures that clawed through the earth like arthritic fingers. I needed to find the marker Silas described, a strange large old rectangular black basalt slab near the centre of the grove. If his contact had indeed left the ledger there, I could finally tie my abusive ex, Evan, to the disappearances along the docks. The pre-law courses Cardiff University forced upon me could not help me here, but logic still applied. Find the evidence. Get out. The Heartstone grew warmer. It burned against my skin now, a hot coal resting on my sternum. Another sound. A soft sliding rustle, like a heavy coat dragging over dry leaves. I spun around. My bright blue eyes strained against the shadows. A massive oak trunk stood twenty feet away, its bark split into a grotesque weeping crack. But the shadow behind it did not align with the wood. It stretched at an hostile angle, sliding slowly toward me against the nonexistent light source. A droplet of sweat rolled down my temple. I reached into my coat pocket and gripped my heavy brass flashlight. I resisted the urge to switch it on. Light made you a target in places like this, exposing your position to whatever slithered in the canopy. A sweet sticky scent replaced the lavender. Copper. Blood. Recent. I followed the metallic tang, my heart hammering a frantic rhythm against my ribs. Three steps. Four. The moss beneath my boots grew slicker, wetter. I looked down. The luminescent wildflowers lay crushed, their stems broken and oozing a thick milky sap that mingled with a dark puddle. I squatted, touching the edge of the puddle. I rubbed my fingers together. Viscous. Hot. Something dripped onto the back of my hand. Drip-drop. I wiped the hot moisture onto my jeans and slowly tilted my head back. Directly above me, hanging from a low thick branch, sat a tattered leather satchel. My satchel. Or rather, an exact duplicate of the wrapper-strewn bag I carried on my delivery routes for the Golden Empress. It swayed gently, though no wind stirred the air. Red liquid seeped through the canvas seams, staining the strap. "Rory." The voice came from the dark spaces between the standing stones behind me. It sounded like Eva. Exactly like her, down to the slight Welsh lilt she kept despite her years in London. But the pitch remained perfectly flat, devoid of any human cadence. It sounded like a recording played back through a broken speaker. "Eva?" I whispered, breaking my own rule of silence. "Rory," the voice repeated, closer now. The sound did not travel through the air; it vibrated in my teeth. "Help me. It is cold." I backed away from the dripping bag, my boots squelching in the bloody moss. I slipped the brass flashlight from my pocket and flicked the switch. The beam pierced the gloom, a bright yellow cone of light. It cut through the mist, illuminating the grey wooden bark of the ancient oaks. The light caught a pair of eyes. They hovered six feet off the ground, nested in the hollow of a massive split trunk. They were not animal eyes. They were wide, unblinking, and entirely black, reflecting the flashlight's glare like twin pools of spilled ink. Surrounding them, pale thin fingers clutched the rough edges of the bark. The nails were long, yellowed, and split to the quick. I did not run. Panic was an luxury I could not afford. I took a slow deliberate step backward, keeping the light fixed on the hollow. The fingers twitched. "Eva is dead, Rory," the voice whispered. This time, it did not come from the standing stones. It drifted down from the canopy directly above my head. "You brought us such a lovely little old crimson Dymas gemstone." The Heartstone surged with intense white-hot heat, burning through my shirt. I gasped, dropping the flashlight. It tumbled into the wet moss, its beam casting long erratic shadows across the clearing. In the shifting light, I saw them. Not just one. Dozens of pale thin figures slithered down the trunks of the oak trees. They did not fall; they clung to the bark like insects, their limbs bending at impossible angles. Their joint-cracking movements made a dry click-clack sound that filled the grove. They were blocking the path back to the standing stones. I lunged toward the right, aiming for a narrow gap between two gnarled roots. My foot caught on a hidden vine. I crashed downward, my chest hitting the wet earth. The impact knocked the wind from my lungs. The flashlight rolled, its yellow beam sweeping across the ground to illuminate a horrific sight. Just inches from my face, half-buried under the sodden moss, lay a pale hand. On the left wrist was a small crescent-shaped scar. I stared at the hand. My hand. A cold wet palm pressed against the back of my neck.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1171
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"gently"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.49% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1171
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"throb"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"sentinels"
count1
8
word"lilt"
count1
9
word"vibrated"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"rhythmic"
2"throb"
3"weight"
4"silence"
5"traced"
6"echoed"
7"sentinels"
8"lilt"
9"vibrated"
10"flicked"
11"gloom"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences114
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1171
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1146
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"London"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"London"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
London3
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Grove2
Yu-Fei1
Golden2
Empress2
Evan2
Silas3
Cardiff1
University1
Eva1
Welsh1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Grove"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Evan"
4"Silas"
5"University"
6"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Golden"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like a recording played back throu"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1171
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean27.88
std23.65
cv0.848
sampleLengths
035
154
267
394
423
57
638
74
813
995
1017
1114
1253
1346
148
152
1648
1715
188
191
2014
2154
221
2355
249
2524
2626
2725
287
2960
3026
313
3238
3331
347
3545
3610
3738
3815
3923
407
4111
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs179
matches
0"were blocking"
94.02% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences117
ratio0.017
matches
0"The sound did not travel through the air; it vibrated in my teeth."
1"They did not fall; they clung to the bark like insects, their limbs bending at impossible angles."
76.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1157
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"strange large old rectangular black basalt"
2"intense white-hot heat,"
3"small crescent-shaped scar."
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.03111495246326707
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.012100259291270527
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean10.01
std5.96
cv0.596
sampleLengths
018
117
28
323
416
57
613
717
810
95
1022
116
125
1320
148
1524
167
1724
1818
195
207
215
2210
232
2421
254
264
279
2811
2917
3022
3123
3217
333
342
354
3613
372
3812
393
408
4116
4211
4315
448
4512
468
4718
487
491
57.55% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.37606837606837606
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners44
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences100
matches
0"Directly above me, hanging from"
1"Exactly like her, down to"
2"Just inches from my face,"
ratio0.03
36.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences100
matches
0"My boots sank into the"
1"I clutched the silver chain"
2"It tasted of ancient ozone"
3"I stepped forward, adjusting the"
4"It pressed against my eardrums,"
5"I checked my silver watch."
6"I could not afford to"
7"I traced the small crescent-shaped"
8"I froze, lifting my chin."
9"My gaze swept the gnarled"
10"My voice sounded flat, swallowed"
11"I forced my feet to"
12"I needed to find the"
13"It burned against my skin"
14"I spun around."
15"My bright blue eyes strained"
16"It stretched at an hostile"
17"I reached into my coat"
18"I resisted the urge to"
19"I followed the metallic tang,"
ratio0.46
30.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences100
matches
0"My boots sank into the"
1"The Richmond Park fence lay"
2"I clutched the silver chain"
3"The small crimson Heartstone Pendant"
4"Silas said the Grove hid"
5"It tasted of ancient ozone"
6"The scent of sweet blooming"
7"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, their"
8"I stepped forward, adjusting the"
9"The quiet here felt deliberate."
10"It pressed against my eardrums,"
11"Time behaved strangely in this"
12"I checked my silver watch."
13"The delicate second hand dragged"
14"Silas had warned me about"
15"An hour in the Grove"
16"I could not afford to"
17"I traced the small crescent-shaped"
18"The skin felt unusually cold."
19"A sharp click-clack echoed to"
ratio0.86
50.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"If his contact had indeed"
ratio0.01
94.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The small crimson Heartstone Pendant pulsed against my collarbone, a tiny rhythmic throb of heat that warned me I had crossed the threshold."
1"The path began to zigzag around massive root structures that clawed through the earth like arthritic fingers."
2"The luminescent wildflowers lay crushed, their stems broken and oozing a thick milky sap that mingled with a dark puddle."
3"Their joint-cracking movements made a dry click-clack sound that filled the grove."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
1"the voice repeated (repeat)"
2"the voice whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.75
85.5137%