Run: 2026-05-20-01KS25RSEFAFA7NWPH3AE8WSVX

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Duration:
12.5s
Cost:
$0.021375
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A third heavy blow rattled the three brass deadbolts of the Brick Lane flat. Ptolemy, the ginger tabby cat, bolted beneath a mountain of yellowing scrolls, leaving me holding a chipped mug of lukewarm tea in the sudden silence. I set the mug on a stack of occult law books and reached for the iron poker leaning against the grate. "Open the door, Rory," a voice called through the splintering wood. The French accent was smooth, low, and laced with an irritant that made my chest tighten. "Unless you prefer I let myself in, which will undoubtedly ruin the paintwork." I threw the deadbolts back one by one. The door swung open to reveal Lucien Moreau standing on the narrow landing, smelling of expensive rain and cedarwood. Impeccably dressed as always in a tailored charcoal suit, he leaned lightly on his ivory-handled cane. His heterochromatic eyes, one amber, one a bottomless black, swept over my oversized flannel shirt and bare feet before settling on the poker in my hand. "Still welcoming guests with offensive weaponry, I see." "You aren't a guest," I said, blocking the threshold. "We settled our accounts six months ago, Lucien. I don't work for you anymore." "And yet, here we are." He stepped forward, not waiting for an invitation. The tip of his cane tapped the floorboards, forcing me to step back or risk him stepping on my toes. He glided into the cramped room, his presence immediately shrinking the space. Eva’s flat was small enough with just me and the cat, but Lucien filled it with a heavy, dangerous gravity. He glanced at the stacks of parchment, the half-eaten carton of Golden Empress noodles, and the damp laundry hanging from the radiator. "Charming," Lucien murmured, his gaze lingering on a lace bra drying over a chair. "Though a trifle cluttered." "Get out." I pointed the poker toward the open door. "I mean it. If Silas finds out you're in East London, let alone above his bar—" "Silas is currently occupied with a rather messy shipment of changeling dust at the docks," Lucien interrupted, casually resting his gloved hands on the ivory pommel of his cane. "We have at least an hour. Shut the door, Rory. You are letting the drafts in." I slammed the door, the three deadbolts clicking back into place with a definitive crunch. "What do you want?" I demanded, crossing my arms. "I'm late for my shift at Yu-Fei's as it is." "A lie. You do not start your deliveries until five o'clock." Lucien turned to face me. The amber eye caught the weak light of the single bulb overhead, glowing like hot whiskey. "I require your mind, Carter. The clever, devious, underhanded Welsh mind that managed to slip through my fingers in Marseille." "You let me leave." "I allowed you to believe you had escaped," he corrected, his voice dropping an octave. "There is a distinction." He stepped closer, the polished leather of his oxfords clicking against the floor. The scent of him—rich, dark, and entirely male—triggered a cascade of memories I had spent half a year trying to drown in bad gin and law textbooks. The touch of his gloved fingers on my jaw in that ruined chapel. The taste of copper and honey. The absolute certainty that if I stayed with him, I would lose whatever human soul I had left. "I don't do translation work anymore," I said, my voice steadier than I felt. "Find another scholar." "There are no scholars left who speak the High Dialect of Avaros without their tongues melting." He reached into his breast pocket and withdrew a small, square piece of heavy vellum. "And none who possess your particular... resistance to dark magic." He held the paper out. My eyes drifted to it against my will. The ink was dried blood, the angular runes pulsing with a faint, greasy purple light. I gripped my left wrist, my thumb instinctively rubbing the small crescent-shaped scar there. The air in the room grew suddenly cold, the smell of damp curry house grease replaced by the sharp, metallic tang of sulfur. "Where did you get that?" I whispered. "A dead messenger in Whitechapel. He was carrying it to your father’s old associates." My gaze snapped up to his. "My father is in Cardiff. He has nothing to do with this." "Your father is a barrister who defended three high-ranking lieutenants of the Crimson Sept," Lucien said softly. "Do not play the innocent Welsh maid with me, Rory. It does not suit you. You know exactly what this is." "It's a summoning writ," I stated, forcing my hands to remain still at my sides. "A high-tier contract. Whoever signed this offered a soul in exchange for a breach in the veil." "Indeed." Lucien took another step, closing the distance between us until I could feel the heat radiating from his chest. "And the signature at the bottom?" I looked down. The name was written in a elegant, looping hand that made my stomach plunge. *Malphora.* "My mother’s name," I breathed. "Your mother's true name," Lucien corrected. "The one she abandoned when she fled the rift. It seems she left a few debts behind in Marseille, Rory. Debts that are now being collected from her offspring." He reached out, the black leather of his glove brushing the collar of my flannel shirt. I tensed, but I didn't pull away. The contrast between his freezing demonic blood and the sudden heat of his touch made my breath hitch. "I protected you once," he murmured, his amber eye searching mine. "In the south. I kept your secrets, lulled your pursuers, and let you run to this miserable little corner of London. But the contract has been validated. They know you are here." "I can handle myself." "With a fireplace poker?" A ghost of a smile touched his lips, cold and brilliant. "Against the hounds of Avaros? Please. You would be a light snack before they reached the marrow." "I have friends. Silas, Eva—" "Silas is a retired brawler with a bad knee, and Eva is currently hiding in Camden because she copied the wrong grimoire," Lucien snapped, his composure slipping for a fraction of a second. "You are alone, Rory. Except for me." "I can't trust you," I said, my voice barely a whisper. "You’re a fixer. You work for the highest bidder." "My father was a demon of Avaros, yes," he said, leaning down so his face was inches from mine. "But my mother was a woman who died of a broken heart in a cold French attic. I understand the cost of these contracts. I am not here to sell you, Carter. I am here to buy you back." Before I could process the words, a low, guttural growl echoed from the street below. It wasn't a dog. The sound carried a strange, dual-toned vibration that shook the windowpanes in their wooden frames. Ptolemy hissed loudly from beneath the scrolls, his fur standing on end. Lucien’s grip on his cane tightened. The ivory head twisted with a sharp *clack*, revealing three inches of gleaming, silver-etched steel at the joint. "They are early," he muttered, his amber eye flaring into a brilliant, terrifying gold. The glass of the front window shattered inward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Lucien said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.479
leniency0.958
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.042
87.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1215
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"suddenly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1215
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"could feel"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"gleaming"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"could feel"
2"stomach"
3"whisper"
4"echoed"
5"gleaming"
6"etched"
7"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1213
ratio0.002
matches
0"Malphora."
1"clack"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.22% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount727
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.38
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Brick1
Lane1
French1
Lucien10
Moreau1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.812
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1213
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean27.57
std18.96
cv0.688
sampleLengths
039
121
240
369
48
523
613
774
818
926
1045
1115
1219
1352
144
1519
1677
1717
1841
1913
2052
217
2214
2318
2438
2532
2626
2717
281
295
3035
3141
3243
334
3432
355
3640
3720
3858
3915
4031
4124
4214
438
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"was written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs123
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences86
ratio0.012
matches
0"The scent of him—rich, dark, and entirely male—triggered a cascade of memories I had spent half a year trying to drown in bad gin and law textbooks."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount734
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"faint, greasy purple light."
1"strange, dual-toned vibration"
2"gleaming, silver-etched steel"
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.02316076294277929
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.013623978201634877
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean14.1
std7.59
cv0.538
sampleLengths
014
125
221
311
416
513
68
719
816
926
108
119
1214
1313
1420
1512
1620
1722
1814
194
2010
2116
2229
2316
2415
259
2610
2716
2816
2920
304
3115
324
3313
3427
3513
366
3718
3814
393
4031
4110
425
438
4415
4514
4623
477
4814
496
63.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4069767441860465
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners35
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Impeccably dressed as always in"
ratio0.018
30.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences57
matches
0"I set the mug on"
1"I threw the deadbolts back"
2"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber,"
3"I said, blocking the threshold"
4"He stepped forward, not waiting"
5"He glided into the cramped"
6"He glanced at the stacks"
7"I pointed the poker toward"
8"I slammed the door, the"
9"I demanded, crossing my arms"
10"he corrected, his voice dropping"
11"He stepped closer, the polished"
12"I said, my voice steadier"
13"He reached into his breast"
14"He held the paper out."
15"My eyes drifted to it"
16"I gripped my left wrist,"
17"My gaze snapped up to"
18"I stated, forcing my hands"
19"I looked down."
ratio0.474
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences57
matches
0"A third heavy blow rattled"
1"Ptolemy, the ginger tabby cat,"
2"I set the mug on"
3"a voice called through the"
4"The French accent was smooth,"
5"I threw the deadbolts back"
6"The door swung open to"
7"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber,"
8"I said, blocking the threshold"
9"He stepped forward, not waiting"
10"The tip of his cane"
11"He glided into the cramped"
12"Eva’s flat was small enough"
13"He glanced at the stacks"
14"Lucien murmured, his gaze lingering"
15"I pointed the poker toward"
16"Lucien interrupted, casually resting his"
17"I slammed the door, the"
18"I demanded, crossing my arms"
19"Lucien turned to face me"
ratio0.965
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Before I could process the"
ratio0.018
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The name was written in a elegant, looping hand that made my stomach plunge."
1"The sound carried a strange, dual-toned vibration that shook the windowpanes in their wooden frames."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"He stepped, not waiting for an invitation"
1"he corrected, his voice dropping an octave"
2"I said, my voice steadier than I felt"
3"he murmured, his amber eye searching mine"
4"Lucien snapped, his composure slipping for a fraction of a second"
5"I said, my voice barely a whisper"
6"he muttered, his amber eye flaring into a brilliant, terrifying gold"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"Lucien murmured (murmur)"
1"Lucien interrupted (interrupt)"
2"I demanded (demand)"
3"he corrected (correct)"
4"I whispered (whisper)"
5"I stated (state)"
6"I breathed (breathe)"
7"Lucien corrected (correct)"
8"he murmured (murmur)"
9"Lucien snapped (snap)"
10"he muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.354
leniency0.708
rawRatio0.647
effectiveRatio0.458
81.5773%