Run: 2026-05-20-01KS25SVP6GFJ1HNGS6KVNYR1R

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Duration:
11.7s
Cost:
$0.016794
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"You're pouring with your right hand now." Silas didn't stop the stream of dark Irish stout, but his silver signet ring caught the amber glow of the bar lamp. He slowly set the pint down on the polished mahogany. The foam settled into a perfect cream head. "Fewer spills that way," Silas said. His voice was a dry gravel rasp, unchanged from the days he used to whisper instructions through a wire in the rain. I pulled the wet hood of my coat down. Strands of straight shoulder-length black hair clung to my cheeks. Outside, the Soho rain was drumming against the thick glass of The Raven's Nest, but inside, the air tasted of stale tobacco, spilled gin, and the sharp scent of polish. The distinctive green neon sign from the street cast long, sickly shadows across the old maps lining the walls. "You look different, Rory," Silas said. His hazel eyes, sharp as broken glass despite the grey-streaked auburn hair framing his face, mapped the contours of my face. "Older. Or perhaps just tired." "Serving cold dim sum to screaming students at three in the morning tends to age a person." I reached for the pint. The movement tugged my sleeve back just enough to reveal the small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist. "But I didn't think you'd end up renting a retirement home in Soho, Silas. Especially not one with sticky floors." Silas leaned his weight onto his right leg, relieving the pressure on his stiff left knee. The limp was more pronounced than when we last parted in the shadow of the velvet revolution. "The floors are clean. It's the clientele that's sticky." "You used to have standards." "I used to have a government pension." He picked up a rag and began wiping the bar, though the wood already shone. "What brings you back to London? The last I heard, you were hiding in Wales, pretending your father's law books had the answers to life's little mysteries." "Cardiff was suffocating," I said, taking a long sip of the stout. The bitterness coated my tongue, heavy and honest. "And my father's books only proved that you can explain away any sin if you use enough Latin. London has more places to get lost." "Or found." "Don't start." "I simply observe," Silas said, his hand dragging the rag in slow, precise circles. "A young woman with your particular talents shouldn't be delivering greasy cardboard boxes for Yu-Fei Cheung. It's a waste." "It's honest." "It's a hiding place." He stopped wiping and looked at me directly. "You left a trail, you know. Even back then. You always were too clever to be quiet." "And you were too quiet to be trusted." A couple in the corner booth burst into loud, drunken laughter, breaking the tension between us like a dropped glass. A man in a tailored suit was whispering into a woman's ear, his hand sliding up her thigh. Silas watched them for a fraction of a second, his pupils contracting, a predatory instinct that forty years of service had baked into his bones. It was a reflex he couldn't switch off. "This place," I said, gesturing to the dim room, the heavy bookshelf tucked near the back, the ancient maps of Europe with borders that no longer existed. "It feels like a mausoleum." "It's a business." "It's a trap." I leaned in closer, my fingers tracing the silver rim of the pint glass. "Who are you waiting for, Silas? You didn't buy a pub in Soho just to pull pints for tourists and adulterous bankers." "The beer keeps the lights on." "The beer is mediocre. The company is worse." I looked toward the bookshelf. "And that door behind the history section has a deadbolt that requires a key you keep in your breast pocket. You're still in the trade." Silas didn't blink. "You're seeing ghosts, Rory." "I'm seeing a man who can't let go of the trigger." "And I'm seeing a girl who still runs the moment things get hot," Silas countered softly. The words weren't loud, but they had the weight of an iron grate slam. "Evan was a mistake. We both know that. But Cardiff wasn't the answer. Neither is this delivery gig." The mention of Evan's name made my fingers tighten around the glass. The scar on my wrist throbbed, a phantom ache from an old kitchen table argument that ended in shattered ceramic. "I didn't come here for a lecture," I said. "Then why did you come?" Silas asked. "The Golden Empress is three miles east. There are fifty pubs between here and there. You didn't wander in here because of the rain, Rory. You saw the sign. You knew I was here." "A coincidence." "I don't believe in coincidences. Neither did your father." "Leave him out of this." "He was a good man, Brendan. He wanted you to have a life that didn't involve looking over your shoulder." Silas reached under the bar and pulled out a small, amber bottle of Irish whiskey. He poured a finger into a clean glass for himself. "He asked me to watch out for you. Before the end." "He had no right," I whispered. "He had every right," Silas said. He raised his glass slightly. "To survival." He drank it in one swallow, his throat moving rhythmically. The smell of peat and smoke drifted across the counter. "I need a place," I said, the confession slipping out before I could find the brakes. "The flat above the grocer is damp. The landlord's got fingers that linger too long on the doorframe when rent is due." Silas looked up at the ceiling. The floorboards above us creaked under the weight of some heavy, unseen furniture. "The apartment above the Nest is empty. It's small. Drafty." "How much?" "Three deliveries a week," Silas said, resting his hands flat on the polished counter. "To addresses I provide. No questions. No names." I stared at him. The man I knew in Prague would have offered a shoulder to cry on before slipping a tracking device into my coat pocket. This version of Silas was colder, stripped of the charm that made him a legend in the corridors of Vauxhall Cross. He was a merchant now, trading in secrets and rent. "I'm done with the courier work," I said. "The legal kind is bad enough." "These aren't legal," Silas said. "But they are safe. For you. My clients don't care about Welsh girls with law degrees they didn't finish. They care about discretion." "And if I say no?" "The rain is still falling, Rory. And London is a very large, very cold place for someone who doesn't want to exist." The green neon light flickered, casting a sickly chartreuse glow across his face, highlighting the deep lines around his eyes. He looked ancient. He looked like the future I was running toward. Before I could answer, the heavy wooden door of the pub opened with an aggressive thud. The brass bell above it chimed, a sharp, metallic sound that cut through the low hum of the room. A tall man in a dripping wax jacket stepped inside. He didn't shake the water off. He didn't look at the bar. His eyes went straight to the dark corner of the room where the couple was sitting. His hand was buried deep in his right pocket, the fabric stretched taut around a heavy, rectangular shape. Silas didn't move a muscle, but his left hand slid beneath the counter, his fingers searching for something hidden under the beer taps. The limp in his leg was forgotten. "Rory," Silas said, his voice dropping an octave, losing all the warmth of our reunion. "Go upstairs."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Silas countered softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.368
leniency0.737
rawRatio0.048
effectiveRatio0.035
80.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1288
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"softly"
2"slightly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1288
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"tension"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"charm"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"whisper"
2"weight"
3"velvet"
4"tension"
5"tracing"
6"throbbed"
7"shattered"
8"charm"
9"flickered"
10"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1288
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount757
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.25
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Irish2
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Europe1
Silas17
Evan1
Prague1
Vauxhall1
Cross1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Europe"
2"Prague"
3"Vauxhall"
globalScore0.377
windowScore0.333
98.98% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like the future I was running towa"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1288
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean26.29
std20.06
cv0.763
sampleLengths
07
140
228
368
432
560
642
75
849
945
102
112
1233
132
1429
158
1671
1732
183
1939
206
2138
227
2311
2448
2532
269
2741
282
299
305
3156
326
3313
3420
3538
3629
372
3822
3958
4014
4128
425
4322
4432
4573
4618
4730
4817
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences64
matches
0"was buried"
1"was forgotten"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs124
matches
0"was drumming"
1"was whispering"
2"was running"
3"was sitting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences100
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount760
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.015789473684210527
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.009210526315789473
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean12.88
std7.85
cv0.609
sampleLengths
07
122
210
38
46
522
69
710
830
919
106
1121
125
1322
1418
1520
1616
1717
189
195
2022
2127
2212
238
2425
252
262
2714
2819
292
3012
3117
328
3320
3418
3525
368
3727
385
393
4017
4122
426
4313
4425
453
464
4711
4816
4914
34.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.31
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
48.57% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences56
matches
0"He slowly set the pint"
1"His voice was a dry"
2"I pulled the wet hood"
3"His hazel eyes, sharp as"
4"I reached for the pint"
5"He picked up a rag"
6"I said, taking a long"
7"He stopped wiping and looked"
8"It was a reflex he"
9"I said, gesturing to the"
10"I leaned in closer, my"
11"I looked toward the bookshelf"
12"He poured a finger into"
13"He raised his glass slightly."
14"He drank it in one"
15"I said, the confession slipping"
16"I stared at him."
17"He was a merchant now,"
18"He looked ancient."
19"He looked like the future"
ratio0.429
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences56
matches
0"Silas didn't stop the stream"
1"He slowly set the pint"
2"The foam settled into a"
3"His voice was a dry"
4"I pulled the wet hood"
5"Strands of straight shoulder-length black"
6"The distinctive green neon sign"
7"His hazel eyes, sharp as"
8"I reached for the pint"
9"The movement tugged my sleeve"
10"Silas leaned his weight onto"
11"The limp was more pronounced"
12"He picked up a rag"
13"I said, taking a long"
14"The bitterness coated my tongue,"
15"Silas said, his hand dragging"
16"He stopped wiping and looked"
17"A couple in the corner"
18"A man in a tailored"
19"Silas watched them for a"
ratio0.964
89.29% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Before I could answer, the"
ratio0.018
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"A man in a tailored suit was whispering into a woman's ear, his hand sliding up her thigh."
1"This version of Silas was colder, stripped of the charm that made him a legend in the corridors of Vauxhall Cross."
2"The green neon light flickered, casting a sickly chartreuse glow across his face, highlighting the deep lines around his eyes."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Silas said, his hand dragging the rag in slow, precise circles"
1"I leaned, my fingers tracing the silver rim of the pint glass"
2"I said, the confession slipping out before I could find the brakes"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.246
leniency0.491
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.035
78.2753%