Run: 2026-05-20-01KS25WT8F43KRJ4KA51FNG0K0

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Duration:
11.1s
Cost:
$0.014972
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt screeched, a stubborn, rusted protest that always betrayed my presence to the entire landing. I shoved the heavy oak door open with my shoulder, balancing two damp cartons of sesame chicken from the Golden Empress under my chin. "If you've eaten my salt beef, Eva, I'll—" The threat died in my throat. The aroma of cardamom and old paper that usually defined the tidy flat on Brick Lane was entirely overwhelmed by the sharp, expensive scent of sandalwood and wet wool. Lucien Moreau sat in Eva’s velvet armchair. He held his ivory-handled cane across his knees, those heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—tracking my movement with the slow precision of a cat stalking a sparrow. "You really must grease those locks, Rory. A toddler with a butter knife could breach this perimeter." "What are you doing here, Lucien?" "Am I not allowed to visit an old friend?" "We aren't friends. We stopped being friends when you left me in quella cantina in Marseille." "An unfortunate necessity." He adjusted the cuffs of his tailored charcoal suit, his movements fluid and maddeningly calm. "The situation deteriorated. I adapted." I dropped the greasy takeaway boxes onto the nearest stack of leather-bound grimoires, not caring if the sauce ruined the ancient vellum. My skin prickled with a sudden, sharp heat. Seeing him here, in this cramped, domestic space, felt like a violent disruption of the fragile peace I had built since fleeing Cardiff. "Out," I said, pointing a finger toward the door. "Now. Before I find out if Eva's silver-plated letter opener actually works on half-demons." "You always were delightfully hostile when startled." Lucien leaned forward, resting his hands on the smooth ivory of his cane. "But we have a problem. Your Welsh shadows have finally crept across the Severn." My left wrist began to itch. I rubbed the small crescent-shaped scar there, a nervous habit I hated myself for showing him. "Evan doesn't know where I am." "Evan is a dullard who couldn't find his own shoes in the dark," Lucien said, his refined French accent clipping the vowels. "But his new friends are considerably more resourceful. They paid a visit to Silas' bar downstairs. About twenty minutes ago." The air in the room grew heavy, the temperature dropping a fraction of a degree. Outside, the muffled shouts of Brick Lane's dinner crowd filtered through the thin windowpanes, but inside, the silence stretched like a bowstring. I stepped closer, my boots clicking against the warped floorboards. "Did they see you?" "I am a phantom when I wish to be, ma chérie." "Don't call me that." "Old habits." He stood up, his five-foot-eleven frame immediately dominating the small room. The movement brought him close, too close. I could see the subtle gold flecks in his amber eye, the deep, lightless void of the black one. He smelled of rain and Parisian nights, a cocktail of memories I had desperately tried to drown in cheap cider and long shifts at the restaurant. "You're shaking," he murmured. "I'm angry." "A thin shield for terror." He reached out, the tips of his fingers brushing the fabric of my sleeve. "I can help you. Again." "Like you helped me in France?" I curled my hands into fists, stepping back to break the contact. "You used me as bait, Lucien. I spent three days breathing in coal dust and listening to things scraping against the other side of the cellar door." "You survived." "No thanks to you." "I killed the broker who purchased you." His voice dropped to a dark, gravelly register that vibrated in my chest. "I tore his throat out with my bare hands. But I suppose they left that part out of your little Welsh bedtime stories." My breath hitched. I looked at his hands, currently resting so elegantly on his cane. They were smooth, pale, and entirely devoid of the violence he claimed to have unleashed. Yet, I knew the demon blood running through his veins made him capable of atrocities he masked behind bespoke tailoring. "Why?" I whispered. "Why do you care what happens to me?" "You're a valuable asset, Rory. Your mind... it thinks in patterns others cannot see." "That's a lie." "Is it?" He stepped into my space again, crowding me against the edge of the desk. A stack of Eva's research notes fluttered to the floor, but neither of us looked down. "Perhaps I simply dislike seeing my favorite things in the hands of lesser men." "I am not a thing." "Then stop acting like prey." His gaze dropped to my lips. For a terrifying, exhilarating second, I thought he was going to lean down and bridge the small distance between us. My heart hammered against my ribs, a wild, erratic beat that demanded I either strike him or pull him closer. The memory of his lips against mine, hot and tasting of stolen wine in a Marseille safehouse, flared behind my eyelids. A sharp, demanding mew break the spell. Ptolemy, Eva’s chubby tabby cat, trotted into the room, entirely unbothered by the supernatural tension. He immediately rubbed his flank against Lucien’s trousers, leaving a streak of orange fur on the immaculate charcoal wool. Lucien closed his eyes, a look of profound annoyance crossing his handsome features. "Your companion has atrocious taste in associates," he muttered, though he didn't kick the cat away. "Ptolemy likes anyone who smells like expensive meats," I said, the tension breaking just enough for me to draw a proper breath. "Which, unfortunately for both of us, includes you." "We must leave, Rory. The men downstairs are checking the mailboxes. It is only a matter of minutes before they realise 'Laila' is a terrible anagram for Malphora, and that your flat is directly above the cellar." My stomach plummeted. "They know about the name?" "They are dumb, but they are persistent." Lucien turned toward the window, pulling the lace curtain back a fraction of an inch to peer down into the rain-slicked street. The amber light of the streetlamps caught his profile, highlighting the sharp angle of his jaw. Suddenly, his posture stiffened. "Rory." "What?" "The locks." A heavy, rhythmic thud echoed from the stairwell outside. It wasn't the slow, clumsy step of a drunk returning from the pub. It was the synchronized, deliberate tread of two men who knew exactly which door they were looking for. I lunged for my coat, but Lucien’s arm shot out, grabbing my wrist. His grip was iron, his thumb resting directly over my crescent scar. His skin was burning hot, the demonic heat surging beneath his exterior. "The window," he hissed. "Now." A loud splintering sound shattered the quiet of the flat as the first kick hit the bottom deadbolt.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.277
leniency0.553
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1124
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1124
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"vibrated"
count1
3
word"fluttered"
count1
4
word"tension"
count2
5
word"profound"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"synchronized"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"silence"
2"vibrated"
3"fluttered"
4"tension"
5"profound"
6"stomach"
7"rhythmic"
8"echoed"
9"synchronized"
10"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
90.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences55
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences89
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount748
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Brick2
Lane2
Moreau1
Eva3
Cardiff1
Lucien7
French1
Parisian1
Marseille1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Golden"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Cardiff"
4"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
98.98% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a violent disruption of the f"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1122
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean20.4
std17.82
cv0.874
sampleLengths
041
18
235
333
417
56
69
716
823
953
1023
1134
1222
136
1442
1537
1610
174
1811
194
202
2163
224
232
2424
2545
262
274
2843
2950
3011
3114
323
3346
345
355
3667
377
3834
3913
4016
4130
4237
433
445
457
4638
474
481
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
87.96% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs119
matches
0"were looking"
1"was burning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences89
ratio0.011
matches
0"He held his ivory-handled cane across his knees, those heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—tracking my movement with the slow precision of a cat stalking a sparrow."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount756
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.03042328042328042
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.018518518518518517
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences89
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences89
mean12.61
std7.81
cv0.619
sampleLengths
017
124
28
36
429
57
626
717
86
99
1016
1118
125
1322
148
1523
169
1714
1820
1914
206
2116
226
2322
2420
2515
2622
2710
284
2911
304
312
3211
337
3419
3526
364
372
3819
395
4018
4127
422
434
4420
4523
463
4712
4815
4920
62.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.42696629213483145
totalSentences89
uniqueOpeners38
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Suddenly, his posture stiffened."
ratio0.019
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences52
matches
0"I shoved the heavy oak"
1"He held his ivory-handled cane"
2"He adjusted the cuffs of"
3"I dropped the greasy takeaway"
4"My skin prickled with a"
5"I said, pointing a finger"
6"My left wrist began to"
7"I rubbed the small crescent-shaped"
8"I stepped closer, my boots"
9"He stood up, his five-foot-eleven"
10"I could see the subtle"
11"He smelled of rain and"
12"He reached out, the tips"
13"I curled my hands into"
14"His voice dropped to a"
15"My breath hitched."
16"I looked at his hands,"
17"They were smooth, pale, and"
18"He stepped into my space"
19"His gaze dropped to my"
ratio0.577
8.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences52
matches
0"The third deadbolt screeched, a"
1"I shoved the heavy oak"
2"The threat died in my"
3"The aroma of cardamom and"
4"Lucien Moreau sat in Eva’s"
5"He held his ivory-handled cane"
6"He adjusted the cuffs of"
7"I dropped the greasy takeaway"
8"My skin prickled with a"
9"I said, pointing a finger"
10"Lucien leaned forward, resting his"
11"My left wrist began to"
12"I rubbed the small crescent-shaped"
13"Lucien said, his refined French"
14"The air in the room"
15"I stepped closer, my boots"
16"He stood up, his five-foot-eleven"
17"The movement brought him close,"
18"I could see the subtle"
19"He smelled of rain and"
ratio0.904
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Yet, I knew the demon"
ratio0.019
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"My heart hammered against my ribs, a wild, erratic beat that demanded I either strike him or pull him closer."
1"It was the synchronized, deliberate tread of two men who knew exactly which door they were looking for."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
64.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
2"he muttered (mutter)"
3"he hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.149
leniency0.298
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.17
86.9247%