Run: 2026-05-20-01KS25YJ1KGXR0CFB6K3Z48Q6A

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Duration:
11.1s
Cost:
$0.014900
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"You have exactly three seconds to tell me how you bypassed my deadbolts, Lucien, before I slide this pairing knife between your ribs." The ivory-handled cane tapped once against the threshold of the Brick Lane flat. Lucien Moreau stood in the narrow, dimly lit hallway, his slicked-back platinum blond hair catching the amber glow of the single exposed bulb hanging overhead. He wore a tailored charcoal suit that looked entirely too clean for East London, smelling faintly of expensive clove tobacco and rain. "One," Aurora muttered, tightening her grip on the worn wooden hilt. "A disappointing greeting, Rory," Lucien said. His heterochromatic eyes, one a warm, predatory amber and the other an abyssal black, swept over her faded Cardiff University sweatshirt. "And here I thought my spare key still held some sentimental value." "I changed the cylinders last month." "Clearly, you bought the cheap European brass." Lucien stepped past her into the cramped room, his gait smooth despite the silver-capped cane. "A tragic oversight. Any third-rate imp from Avaros could rake those pins with a hair clip." "Get out." "Ptolemy seems far more hospitable." Lucien paused, extending a gloved hand toward the tabby cat lounging atop a stack of yellowing occult treatises. The cat blinked, yawned, and immediately rubbed its scent glands against the expensive wool of Lucien's trousers. "Traitor," Aurora hissed at the cat. "Survival instinct, *ma chérie*," Lucien murmured, straightening up. "The feline understands when a guest brings gifts." He set a small, heavy velvet pouch onto the scarred kitchen table. It landed with a dull, metallic thunk, scattering several loose pages of translation notes on Welsh folklore. "I don't want your money, and I certainly don't want your trouble." Aurora closed the door, throwing all three deadbolts with deliberate, heavy clicks. She kept her back to the wood, her heart hammering a frantic rhythm against her ribs. Seeing him here, in her sanctuary, made the tiny flat feel stiflingly small. Every surface, already crowded with Books of Shadows and drying sage, seemed to contract around his broad shoulders. "It isn't money," Lucien said, turning to face her. "It is the translation for the Malphora tablet. The one we... parted ways over in Marseilles." A cold spike of adrenaline hit her. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist flared with a phantom itch, a physical reminder of the night she had barely escaped his world, and his influence, with her life intact. "I burned my notes," she said, her voice dropping to a hard whisper. "You memorised them." Lucien took a slow step forward. The ivory cane clicked against the linoleum. "You have a remarkably stubborn mind, Rory. You remember every syllable." "Why now, Lucien? It's been eight months." "Seven months. Twenty-four days." "I wasn't counting." "A lie," he said, stopped mere inches from her. The heat radiating off him was a physical force, smelling of sulfur and wet asphalt, the distinct scent of a half-demon who had just crossed the threshold between realms. "You survived Evan. You survived Cardiff. Yet, you tremble when I stand near you. Why is that?" "I'm not afraid of you." "Good. Because fear is such a boring emotion." He reached out, the leather of his glove brushing the side of her neck. Aurora flinched, but did not step back. She couldn't. Her spine pressed hard against the deadbolts. The contrast between his freezing leather glove and the fever-heat of his skin underneath made her shudder. "You left me in that burning warehouse," she said, her voice cracking slightly. "You took the grimoire and left." "I drew the templars away from you." "You let me think you were dead." "Would you have run to London if you knew I lived?" Lucien's amber eye flared, a molten ring of fire in the dim room. "No. You would have stayed. You would have tried to fight them alongside me, and they would have torn your pretty soul to ribbons." "It was my choice to make." "I am a demon of Avaros, Rory. We do not offer choices. We protect our investments." "Is that all I am? An investment?" She grabbed his wrist, intending to pull his hand away from her throat, but her fingers locked around the heavy silver cufflink of his sleeve. The sheer, solid mass of him anchored her. For months, she had lived above Silas' bar, hiding in the scent of curry and cheap beer, pretending she was just another human girl hiding from an abusive ex. But the moment Lucien Moreau crossed her threshold, the illusion shattered. She was a scholar of the occult, a woman who had tasted the dark side of London's underworld, and she was desperately, hopelessly drawn to the monster standing in her kitchen. Lucien leaned down, his breath warm against her ear. "You are the only investment that ever made me bankrupt my own soul." "A flattering speech," she whispered, her lips brushing the sharp angle of his jaw. "Did you practice that on the ferry from France?" "I thought of it while scrubbing templar ash out of my favourite suit." Lucien's cane clattered to the floorboards. His hands found her waist, lifting her effortlessly onto the edge of the kitchen table. A stack of Eva's research notes slid off the edge, fluttering like wounded birds to the floor. Aurora wrapped her legs around his hips, her fingers tangling in the slick, platinum strands of his hair. The kiss was not a gentle reunion; it was a collision of teeth and tongue, tasting of salt and old regrets. He groaned into her mouth, his hands sliding up beneath her oversized Cardiff sweatshirt, his palms scorching against her bare ribs. "Tell me to stop," he stepped closer, pressing his weight against her, pinning her against the edge of the table. "Tell me you hate me, Rory." "I do," she gasped, pulling his collar down, exposing the dark, swirling demonic sigils etched into his clavicle. "I hate you more than anyone else on this miserable earth." "Splendid," Lucien murmured, his mouth sliding down her throat, finding the sensitive spot right below her ear. "Then we are perfectly aligned." A heavy, wet thump sounded against the front door, followed by a wet, gurgling wheeze. The lock rattled. Not with a key, but with the brutal, splintering force of something heavy throwing itself against the wood. Ptolemy puffed his tail and hissed, darting under the sofa. Lucien went instantly still, his amber eye locking onto the door, the black one swallowing the pupil entirely. He didn't reach for his cane; his hand slid straight to his waist, where the silver hilt of his concealed blade gleamed. "Your cheap deadbolts," Lucien whispered, his voice dropping an octave, vibrating with a low, demonic resonance. "It seems they brought company."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.435
leniency0.87
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"abyssal"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"sanctuary"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"shattered"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"aligned"
count1
9
word"resonance"
count1
highlights
0"abyssal"
1"velvet"
2"sanctuary"
3"reminder"
4"whisper"
5"shattered"
6"weight"
7"etched"
8"aligned"
9"resonance"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences55
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1127
ratio0.002
matches
0"ma chérie"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.53% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount754
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.99
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Brick1
Lane1
Moreau2
East1
London2
Lucien15
Cardiff2
University1
Welsh1
Books1
Shadows1
Aurora5
Eva1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Lucien"
2"Aurora"
3"Eva"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"East"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.505
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.887
wordCount1127
matches
0"Not with a key, but with the brutal, splintering force of something heavy throwi"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean26.21
std21.29
cv0.812
sampleLengths
023
160
211
339
46
538
62
746
816
929
1071
1125
1238
1313
1427
157
164
173
1855
195
2022
2133
2219
237
247
2548
266
2716
287
29104
3022
3123
3213
336
3471
3521
3626
3729
3822
3915
4031
4140
4221
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs125
matches(empty)
73.17% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences82
ratio0.024
matches
0"The kiss was not a gentle reunion; it was a collision of teeth and tongue, tasting of salt and old regrets."
1"He didn't reach for his cane; his hand slid straight to his waist, where the silver hilt of his concealed blade gleamed."
96.88% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount505
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.04356435643564356
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01782178217821782
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean13.74
std7.27
cv0.529
sampleLengths
023
113
225
322
411
56
621
712
86
922
1016
112
1223
1317
146
158
168
1712
1817
1924
2016
2113
2218
239
2416
257
2631
2713
289
297
3011
317
324
333
349
3529
3617
375
3822
397
402
417
4217
4313
446
457
467
4724
4824
496
64.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4146341463414634
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners34
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences53
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal"
1"His heterochromatic eyes, one a"
2"He set a small, heavy"
3"It landed with a dull,"
4"She kept her back to"
5"she said, her voice dropping"
6"he said, stopped mere inches"
7"He reached out, the leather"
8"Her spine pressed hard against"
9"she said, her voice cracking"
10"She grabbed his wrist, intending"
11"She was a scholar of"
12"she whispered, her lips brushing"
13"His hands found her waist,"
14"He groaned into her mouth,"
15"he stepped closer, pressing his"
16"she gasped, pulling his collar"
17"He didn't reach for his"
ratio0.34
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences53
matches
0"The ivory-handled cane tapped once"
1"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
2"He wore a tailored charcoal"
3"Aurora muttered, tightening her grip"
4"His heterochromatic eyes, one a"
5"Lucien stepped past her into"
6"Lucien paused, extending a gloved"
7"The cat blinked, yawned, and"
8"Aurora hissed at the cat"
9"Lucien murmured, straightening up"
10"He set a small, heavy"
11"It landed with a dull,"
12"Aurora closed the door, throwing"
13"She kept her back to"
14"Every surface, already crowded with"
15"Lucien said, turning to face"
16"A cold spike of adrenaline"
17"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
18"she said, her voice dropping"
19"Lucien took a slow step"
ratio0.925
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal suit that looked entirely too clean for East London, smelling faintly of expensive clove tobacco and rain."
1"The heat radiating off him was a physical force, smelling of sulfur and wet asphalt, the distinct scent of a half-demon who had just crossed the threshold betwe…"
2"She was a scholar of the occult, a woman who had tasted the dark side of London's underworld, and she was desperately, hopelessly drawn to the monster standing …"
3"He groaned into her mouth, his hands sliding up beneath her oversized Cardiff sweatshirt, his palms scorching against her bare ribs."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Lucien said, turning to face her"
1"she said, her voice dropping to a hard whisper"
2"she said, her voice cracking slightly"
3"she whispered, her lips brushing the sharp angle of his jaw"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1"Aurora hissed (hiss)"
2"Lucien murmured (murmur)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
4"she gasped (gasp)"
5"Lucien murmured (murmur)"
6"Lucien whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0.583
effectiveRatio0.304
75.7896%