Run: 2026-05-22-01KS85Y8NFJRGEW5NX8GF77Q18

Run Details

Duration:
1m 51s
Cost:
$0.063740
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ancient oak standing stones scraped against Rory’s leather jacket as she squeezed through the narrow gap. She dropped her canvas rucksack onto the damp earth and pulled out her heavy metal torch. The bright beam cut through the thick mist, illuminating a carpet of vibrant wildflowers. Bluebells and foxgloves bloomed in thick clusters, defying the dead soil just inches beyond the boundary. Rory thumbed the torch off. The Heartstone pendant resting against her collarbone pulsed with a faint, rhythmic warmth. She unclasped the delicate silver chain and held the deep crimson gemstone in her palm. A faint inner glow illuminated the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The stone grew hotter. A Hel portal was close. She walked deeper into the Fae Grove. The air tasted of copper and crushed mint. Her boots sank into the soft loam. Every step produced a wet squelch. The silence pressed against her eardrums. No birds. No insects. Just the steady thud of her own heartbeat. A thick fog rolled over the vibrant petals, clinging to her jeans and chilling her skin. Her phone vibrated in her pocket. She pulled it out and answered the call. "Tell me you are out of the park." Silas’s gruff voice crackled through the speaker. "I found the grove," Rory said. She kept her voice low. "The stone is burning." "Get out. Now. The hounds picked up a scent near the river." "I need to find the portal. The benefactor said it would be here." "Your benefactor is a ghost story. The hounds are real. I am looking at their tracks. They are huge, Rory. Leave the pendant and run." "I am not leaving it." "You are being stubborn." "I am being thorough." Rory kicked a clump of bluebells aside. "There is something wrong with the boundary. The stones feel hollow." A loud static hiss erupted from the phone. "Silas?" "Run," a distorted voice whispered through the speaker. It was not Silas. The screen froze. The single signal bar vanished. The phone died. She shoved it back into her pocket and gripped the torch. A twig snapped behind her. Rory spun around. The beam of her torch swept across the wildflowers. Nothing but swaying stems and deep shadows. She lowered the light. The ancient oak standing stones marked the boundary exactly twenty paces back. She counted them. One, two, three. Seven stones. There were supposed to be eight. She rubbed her thumb over the crescent scar on her wrist. Her mind raced through the folklore Eva had forced her to read in the university library. The Fae realm operated on trickery. Missing stones meant a shifted boundary. The pocket dimension was collapsing, or expanding. The wildflowers near the missing stone wilted into black sludge, bubbling softly against the grass. A low hum vibrated through the soles of her boots. The Heartstone pendant flared with intense heat. She dropped it. The silver chain clinked against her collarbone as the deep crimson gem dangled in the air. The glow intensified, casting long, distorted shadows across the flowerbed. "Rory." The voice drifted from the darkness beyond the stones. It carried the exact cadence of her abusive ex. Evan. She kept her torch pointed at the ground. Her breathing slowed. She forced her muscles to relax. Evan was in Cardiff. She had seen the restraining order paperwork herself. The courts had mandated a hundred miles between them. "You left your keys on the counter, babe." The mimicry was perfect. The slight nasal undertone. The false affection masking the underlying threat. Rory clicked the torch off. Plunged into darkness, her other senses sharpened. The smell of copper grew stronger, mixing with the sickly sweet scent of rotting foxgloves. "I know you are in there," the voice said. The sound originated from the left. Then it shifted to the right. "Come out. We need to talk about your little delivery job." She crouched low, moving sideways through the tall bluebells. The damp soil soaked through her jeans. The pendant swung like a pendulum against her chest, burning her skin. She needed to reach the tree line. The grove existed in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm. If she crossed the boundary back into Richmond Park, the entity would lose its anchor. Her foot struck something hard. A root. She stifled a gasp and froze. The humming stopped. "You always were clumsy," the voice whispered. It came from directly above her. Rory rolled backward and clicked the torch on. The beam hit a pale, elongated face peering down from the branches of a twisted oak. Its jaw hung unnaturally low, stretching the skin until it tore. Black ichor dripped from the wound, sizzling as it hit the wildflowers below. The creature dropped from the tree. It landed on all fours, its limbs bending at sickening angles. The joints popped and cracked in rapid succession. It wore a familiar grey hoodie. Evan’s favourite hoodie. The fabric was stained with dark, crusty patches. Its fingers ended in long, translucent talons that dug deep into the soft soil. "You look tired, babe," the creature said. Its lips did not move. The voice echoed directly inside her skull. Rory scrambled to her feet and sprinted toward the gap in the standing stones. The wildflowers tangled around her ankles. She kicked free, her boots slipping on the damp earth. The pendant seared her chest, a blazing beacon in the dark. She reached the boundary. The ancient oak standing stones loomed ahead. She aimed for the narrow gap she had entered through. The gap was gone. The stones had fused together, forming a solid, impenetrable wall of bark and wood. She slammed her shoulder against the rough surface. It did not yield. She struck it again. Pain shot down her arm. The squelch of wet footsteps approached from behind. Slow. Deliberate. "Nowhere left to run," the voice echoed in her mind. Rory turned around, raising the heavy metal torch like a club. The creature stood ten paces away. It rose onto its hind legs, its spine snapping into a rigid, vertical line. It grew taller, towering over the wildflowers. The pale face split into a wide, jagged smile. It raised a long, multi-jointed finger and pointed at the glowing pendant on her chest. "Give it to me," it demanded. Rory tightened her grip on the torch. She glanced at the solid wall of wood behind her, then back at the towering monstrosity. She unclasped the silver chain, letting the Heartstone drop into her palm. The crimson light flared, blindingly bright. The creature lunged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.45
leniency0.9
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.01% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"chilling"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count2
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"affection"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count2
11
word"beacon"
count1
12
word"loomed"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"rhythmic"
2"warmth"
3"silence"
4"chilling"
5"vibrated"
6"raced"
7"perfect"
8"affection"
9"familiar"
10"echoed"
11"beacon"
12"loomed"
13"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences126
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1096
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
98.02% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount962
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.04
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory10
Heartstone3
Hel1
Fae3
Grove1
Silas2
Eva1
Cardiff1
Earth1
Richmond1
Park1
Evan3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Silas"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Cardiff"
3"Richmond"
4"Park"
globalScore0.98
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1096
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean24.36
std19.31
cv0.793
sampleLengths
063
155
262
314
415
515
612
713
825
95
104
1122
128
131
1412
1522
165
1749
1861
1946
201
2119
2238
238
2415
2527
2632
2762
2813
293
3013
3148
3256
3319
3441
3521
364
3735
3810
3910
4047
4115
426
4341
443
99.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"were supposed"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs165
matches
0"was collapsing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences137
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount963
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.01973001038421599
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.007268951194184839
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean8
std4.35
cv0.543
sampleLengths
017
116
214
316
45
513
615
713
84
95
107
118
127
136
146
152
162
178
1816
196
208
2115
226
235
244
2512
2613
2725
285
294
3011
3111
328
331
348
354
363
375
383
3911
405
413
429
437
444
4512
463
473
482
496
41.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.24817518248175183
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners34
56.98% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"Just the steady thud of"
1"Then it shifted to the"
ratio0.017
83.25% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences117
matches
0"She dropped her canvas rucksack"
1"She unclasped the delicate silver"
2"She walked deeper into the"
3"Her boots sank into the"
4"Her phone vibrated in her"
5"She pulled it out and"
6"She kept her voice low."
7"It was not Silas."
8"She shoved it back into"
9"She lowered the light."
10"She counted them."
11"She rubbed her thumb over"
12"Her mind raced through the"
13"She dropped it."
14"It carried the exact cadence"
15"She kept her torch pointed"
16"Her breathing slowed."
17"She forced her muscles to"
18"She had seen the restraining"
19"She crouched low, moving sideways"
ratio0.342
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount109
totalSentences117
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones"
1"She dropped her canvas rucksack"
2"The bright beam cut through"
3"Bluebells and foxgloves bloomed in"
4"Rory thumbed the torch off."
5"The Heartstone pendant resting against"
6"She unclasped the delicate silver"
7"A faint inner glow illuminated"
8"The stone grew hotter."
9"A Hel portal was close."
10"She walked deeper into the"
11"The air tasted of copper"
12"Her boots sank into the"
13"Every step produced a wet"
14"The silence pressed against her"
15"A thick fog rolled over"
16"Her phone vibrated in her"
17"She pulled it out and"
18"Silas’s gruff voice crackled through"
19"She kept her voice low."
ratio0.932
42.74% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences117
matches
0"If she crossed the boundary"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"It landed on all fours, its limbs bending at sickening angles."
1"Its fingers ended in long, translucent talons that dug deep into the soft soil."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"a distorted voice whispered (whisper)"
1"the voice whispered (whisper)"
2"it demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.3
84.6123%