Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEE6Z67GFCCPMRW6EBSQC1

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48.5s
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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Fae Grove hummed with ancient power, each step within its boundaries sending ripples through the air. Aurora Carter eyed the standing stones that marked its entrance, their silvery bark catching the unusual light that filtered through the canopy above. To her right, Nyx flowed in and out of solid form, their violet eyes scanning the impossible landscape with curiosity. Behind them, Isolde moved with ethereal grace, her silver hair seeming to glow with inner light despite being shielded from direct sunlight. "This isn't possible," Aurora murmured, her fingers brushing against the trunk of an oak tree that should have been centuries younger based on its appearance. "The grove... it defies nature." "The grove obeys different rules, little mortal," Isolde replied, her voice carrying the faint echo of distant bells. "Time here... it winds and unwinds as it pleases." Aurora nodded slowly, her black hair swinging with the movement. The pendant around her neck pulsed warmth against her skin, a sensation that had become familiar since entering the grove. "I can feel it," she said. "The energy. It's thick here." Nyx shifted closer, their shadowy form coalescing more substantively. "Can you feel the instability? Time and space are warped." "It's because of the standing stones," Aurora guessed, running her scarred wrist along the bark. "They're anchor points." Isolde smiled, but it didn't quite reach her lavender eyes. "The stones are guardians. They keep what wants in and what wants to stay out." The path before them widened into a clearing bathed in perpetual twilight. Grasses of silver and green grew in impossible patterns, swaying without wind. Flowers of every conceivable color and shape carpeted the ground, releasing sweet fragrances that competed with wilder, earthier scents. "I've never seen anything like this," Aurora breathed, stepping forward. "On Earth, I mean." "On Earth, you only see what you're meant to see," Nyx's whisper seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. "This place exists in the spaces between what is and what could be." Aurora approached a flower that appeared to be made of starlight and sugar. As she drew near, it closed its petals, emitting a chime like tiny bells. She stopped short, eyes wide with wonder. "Did you see that?" Isolde was already moving further into the clearing. "The Grove responds to curiosity and kindness, but not always as you might expect." Ahead of them, a small stream cut through the clearing, its waters crystal clear and seeming to glow with the same inner light she'd noted in Isolde's hair. Bridges of living wood crisscrossed above it at impossible angles—sturdy yet organic, they appeared to grow from the terrain itself rather than having been built. "How do we know which way to go?" Aurora asked, her voice barely above a whisper. "In matters of the heart, the path often reveals itself," Isolde replied, pausing at the nearest bridge. "Trust your senses, little mortal. They will serve you well here." Aurora followed the half-Fae onto the bridge, testing its stability with a cautious step. The wood responded beneath her feet, shifting slightly but holding firm. As she crossed, the bridge seemed to pick up her rhythm, adjusting its flow to match her footsteps. "Fascinating," she murmured, watching as her hand brushed against the carved railing that servers as a handrail. "It's responsive." "It recognizes power," Nyx said, though whether they meant hers or Isolde's was unclear. "And questions." On the other side of the stream, the trees began to change their appearance. Their bark transformed into patterns of silver and charcoal, their leaves taking on metallic sheens. The air grew heavier, charged with a different kind of energy. "The Grove is divided," Aurora realized. "This is something different." "A pocket realm," Isolde confirmed, her voice taking on a more grave tone. "The Grove exists in multiple layers, beyond just the hollow. History has found purchase here, enough to carve its own spaces." As they delved deeper, the landscape transformed completely. Grand ruins of stone and ivory rose between the twisted trees, dawn- and dusk-colored blooms climbing their crumbling walls. Preparation for an audience awaited in one small courtyard—stone chairs floating in a circular pattern, dead bouquets whispering of long-lost music that lingered in the air. Aurora reached a fallen pillar, its surface covered in carvings that swirled between her fingers as she tried to comprehend their alien script. The Heartstone Pendant warmed against her chest, pulsing in time with the runes beneath her touch. "This place holds memories," she observed, an involuntary shiver running through her. "Old ones." "The Grove preserves what has passed," Isolde explained, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the distant horizon where two moons—one silver, one blue—hung in a sky the color of teal. "Not all that has passed is meant to be forgotten." Nyx's form rippled, expanding momentarily before solidifying again. "Or released," they added, their faint violet eyes scanning the ruins thoughtfully. "Some things are not meant to have died." The ruins opened into a larger clearing, revealed with a sudden breaking of the canopy. Before them stood a circle of stones, older and far more imposing than those they'd entered the grove through. They formed a perfect ring, connected by lines of light that glowed with a life of their own. "The convergence point," Aurora breathed, her fingers instinctively going to the Fae-Forged blade at her belt. "This is what we came for." The gems embedded in the stones seemed to watch them, their colors shifting in patterns that defied prediction. At the center of the circle, what appeared to be a basin of liquid mercury slowly rotated, reflecting images that seemed to be memories, visions, or both. "This is the Fountain," Isolde whispered, reverence plain in her voice. "It shows what the user needs to see, what the heart most desires to see, or what the heart most fears to see." "The mission," Aurora said, gripping the Fae blade with determination. "I need to touch it." As she stepped forward, Nyx placed a shadowy hand on her arm. "Beware," they whispered. "The Fountain does not merely show. It can be persuaded. It can be pulled. One can drown in its waters if one is not careful." Aurora met the Shade's violet eyes and nodded. "I know what I'm doing." But as she approached the Fountain's edge, doubts began to surface. The memories twisted and turned, showing her fragments of her father's success in the courtroom, her mother's sadness after Aurora left Cardiff, Evan's betrayal, her uncertainty about the path ahead. Each vision was more vivid than the last, tugging at her heart with emotional hooks. "You must be strong," Isolde cautioned, her voice echoing slightly. "Focus on what brought you here." "Evan," Aurora whispered, her hand clenching around the Fae blade. "His connection to Dymas. That's why we're here. The Veil's weakening during the solstice. The rituals at the restaurants." The visions shifted, showing Evan in a dark room, the pendant from Dymas hanging around his neck, pulsating with the same warm glow as Aurora's own. Adrenaline surged through her veins, and with the conviction growing stronger than any doubt, Aurora stepped to the very edge of the Fountain and plunged her free hand into its mercury depths. The world dissolved around her. The Fae Grove, Isolde, Nyx—all faded away as the visions took on substance and life. She stood in a grand dining hall, where chefs moved with impossible speed, preparing dishes that shimmered with magic. She watched as souls—human souls—were led toward a long, carved table where Prince Belphegor himself presided, tasting each course with delight. "As the solstice approaches, Hel's hunger grows stronger," Belphegor's voice echoed in her mind, though his lips did not move. "And your world continues to indulge itself, providing us with the feast we crave." Aurora felt anger, righteous and burning, flowing through her. These people—the chefs at Yu-Fei's, the diners, Evan himself—were being used as livestock in some terrible sacrifice she didn't yet fully comprehend. But she knew it had something to do with the Heartstone Pendant and the Fae-Forged blade, the tools of future she had yet to see. The vision shifted again, showing her a map of London, with lines of light pulsing from restaurants, pubs, and food markets—each a tearing required feeding into Dymas. Then the image changed to an audience room somewhere in Cardiff, where several Monterey mossy wicker chairs were arranged, and her father was on trial, and a stranger sat upon a throne, a stranger who bore striking resemblance to Prince Belphegor. "Father," Aurora whispered, reaching out as if she could touch him through the vision. Another shift. Now she stood outside Silas' bar, her home away from home. Eric was hauling in the last advance delivery from a catering food van, the delivery marked as an "order." Aurora watched in horror as Eric took a bite from one of the prepared dishes, his eyes glazing over slightly before returning to his work, none the wiser. A final, jarring shift. She was back in the grove, standing at the Fountain's edge, her hand still submerged. Isolde and Nyx watched her, concerned expressions etched on their faces. "You saw," Isolde said, though it wasn't really a question. "The truth of what's happening on both sides." Aurora nodded, slowly withdrawing her hand from the liquid mercury. The grove came back into focus, the ancient trees and ethereal light returning with each blink of her eyes. "The restaurants," she said, realizing the full extent of it. "They're not just part of some scheme. They're... feeding grounds. Harvest grounds. Some of the chefs are Helbound souls, contracted for their earthly skills." "And some," Nyx added, their shadowy form shifting with unease, "are regular folk being prepared, packaged, and delivered as gourmet cuisine to the prince's table." "But why Yu-Fei's?" Aurora asked, her mind racing. "Why use it as a gateway?" "A powerful chef longed for the opportunity her earthly status wouldn't allow," Isolde explained. "Her ambition and talent made her the perfect vessel to maintain the passage."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.508
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
70.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1685
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count3
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count3
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
5
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"slightly"
3"completely"
4"very"
5"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1685
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"scanning"
count2
1
word"echo"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count2
6
word"crystal"
count1
7
word"sturdy"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"fascinating"
count1
10
word"charged"
count1
11
word"grave"
count1
12
word"delved"
count1
13
word"imposing"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count2
15
word"echoing"
count1
16
word"clenching"
count1
17
word"depths"
count1
18
word"shimmered"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"racing"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"echo"
2"pulsed"
3"warmth"
4"familiar"
5"whisper"
6"crystal"
7"sturdy"
8"footsteps"
9"fascinating"
10"charged"
11"grave"
12"delved"
13"imposing"
14"perfect"
15"echoing"
16"clenching"
17"depths"
18"shimmered"
19"echoed"
20"etched"
21"racing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
76.55% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells5
narrationSentences86
matches
0"e with wonder"
1"e with determination"
2"e with delight"
3"d in horror"
4"g with unease"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount10
narrationSentences86
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
2"began to"
3"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1675
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
60.86% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount1234
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.78
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Fae7
Grove2
Carter1
Nyx9
Isolde15
Aurora22
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Fae-Forged2
Shade1
Fountain3
Cardiff2
Evan3
Dymas2
Prince2
Belphegor3
Yu-Fei1
London1
Monterey1
Eric2
persons
0"Carter"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Aurora"
4"Pendant"
5"Shade"
6"Fountain"
7"Evan"
8"Prince"
9"Belphegor"
10"Eric"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Fae-Forged"
3"Cardiff"
4"Dymas"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"London"
globalScore0.609
windowScore0.667
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite reach her lavender eyes"
1"images that seemed to be memories, visions, or both"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1675
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"railing that servers"
97.20% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean33.5
std16.42
cv0.49
sampleLengths
082
130
227
341
419
518
625
743
814
934
1038
1122
1253
1316
1428
1543
1619
1716
1840
1910
2034
2153
2239
2314
2440
2528
2652
2722
2845
2934
3015
3140
3213
3356
3416
3529
3658
3760
3834
3956
4068
4114
4260
4330
4418
4529
4634
4725
4814
4927
84.86% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences86
matches
0"being shielded"
1"been built"
2"were led"
3"being used"
4"were arranged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs223
matches
0"was already moving"
1"was hauling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences116
ratio0.06
matches
0"Bridges of living wood crisscrossed above it at impossible angles—sturdy yet organic, they appeared to grow from the terrain itself rather than having been built."
1"Preparation for an audience awaited in one small courtyard—stone chairs floating in a circular pattern, dead bouquets whispering of long-lost music that lingered in the air."
2"\"The Grove preserves what has passed,\" Isolde explained, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the distant horizon where two moons—one silver, one blue—hung in a sky the color of teal."
3"The Fae Grove, Isolde, Nyx—all faded away as the visions took on substance and life."
4"She watched as souls—human souls—were led toward a long, carved table where Prince Belphegor himself presided, tasting each course with delight."
5"These people—the chefs at Yu-Fei's, the diners, Evan himself—were being used as livestock in some terrible sacrifice she didn't yet fully comprehend."
6"The vision shifted again, showing her a map of London, with lines of light pulsing from restaurants, pubs, and food markets—each a tearing required feeding into Dymas."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1182
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.02707275803722504
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.010998307952622674
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean14.44
std8.11
cv0.562
sampleLengths
017
123
220
322
425
55
618
79
810
920
106
115
129
1310
1415
153
1610
1715
1812
1912
2019
2110
224
2321
2413
2513
2614
277
284
298
3014
3128
3225
3316
3417
3511
3614
3711
3818
3917
402
4114
422
4314
4415
4511
466
474
4813
4921
66.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4396551724137931
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners51
41.15% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"Then the image changed to"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences81
matches
0"She stopped short, eyes wide"
1"she murmured, watching as her"
2"Their bark transformed into patterns"
3"she observed, an involuntary shiver"
4"they added, their faint violet"
5"They formed a perfect ring,"
6"She stood in a grand"
7"She watched as souls—human souls—were"
8"She was back in the"
9"she said, realizing the full"
ratio0.123
52.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences81
matches
0"The Fae Grove hummed with"
1"Aurora Carter eyed the standing"
2"Aurora murmured, her fingers brushing"
3"Isolde replied, her voice carrying"
4"Aurora nodded slowly, her black"
5"The pendant around her neck"
6"Nyx shifted closer, their shadowy"
7"Aurora guessed, running her scarred"
8"Isolde smiled, but it didn't"
9"The path before them widened"
10"Grasses of silver and green"
11"Flowers of every conceivable color"
12"Aurora breathed, stepping forward"
13"Nyx's whisper seemed to come"
14"Aurora approached a flower that"
15"She stopped short, eyes wide"
16"Isolde was already moving further"
17"Bridges of living wood crisscrossed"
18"Aurora asked, her voice barely"
19"Isolde replied, pausing at the"
ratio0.815
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"To her right, Nyx flowed"
1"Before them stood a circle"
2"Now she stood outside"
ratio0.037
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Aurora Carter eyed the standing stones that marked its entrance, their silvery bark catching the unusual light that filtered through the canopy above."
1"The pendant around her neck pulsed warmth against her skin, a sensation that had become familiar since entering the grove."
2"Flowers of every conceivable color and shape carpeted the ground, releasing sweet fragrances that competed with wilder, earthier scents."
3"The wood responded beneath her feet, shifting slightly but holding firm."
4"Preparation for an audience awaited in one small courtyard—stone chairs floating in a circular pattern, dead bouquets whispering of long-lost music that lingere…"
5"Aurora reached a fallen pillar, its surface covered in carvings that swirled between her fingers as she tried to comprehend their alien script."
6"They formed a perfect ring, connected by lines of light that glowed with a life of their own."
7"The visions shifted, showing Evan in a dark room, the pendant from Dymas hanging around his neck, pulsating with the same warm glow as Aurora's own."
8"She stood in a grand dining hall, where chefs moved with impossible speed, preparing dishes that shimmered with magic."
9"Then the image changed to an audience room somewhere in Cardiff, where several Monterey mossy wicker chairs were arranged, and her father was on trial, and a st…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"Isolde replied, her voice carrying the faint echo of distant bells"
1"Aurora asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"Isolde confirmed, her voice taking on a more grave tone"
3"she observed, an involuntary shiver running through her"
4"Isolde cautioned, her voice echoing slightly"
5"Aurora whispered, her hand clenching around the Fae blade"
6"Belphegor's voice echoed, though his lips did not move"
7"she stood, her home away from home"
8"Nyx added, their shadowy form shifting with unease,"
9"Aurora asked, her mind racing"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags24
fancyCount15
fancyTags
0"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora guessed (guess)"
2"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
3"she murmured (murmur)"
4"Isolde confirmed (confirm)"
5"she observed (observe)"
6"Isolde explained (explain)"
7"they added (add)"
8"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
9"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
10"they whispered (whisper)"
11"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
12"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
13"Nyx added (add)"
14"Isolde explained (explain)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.407
leniency0.814
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.508
71.9985%