Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEFNT8S40K782GP74AJ697

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49.6s
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$0.001420
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn's leather boots slapped against the wet pavement as she raced down Carnaby Street. Rain drummed steadily on the pavement, glinting under the neon signs of romance and taxidermy that blurred past her peripheral vision. Straight ahead, the figure in the dark coat ducked through a crosswalk against the light, disregarding the car that screeched to a halt just in time. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" Quinn yelled, though she knew it was useless. The man—Herrera, according to dispatch—had been moving with purpose since he'd spotted her watching The Raven's Nest from across the street. Something about the way he'd frozen when he'd seen her face had set him off. That, and the medallion glinting around his neck. Fifteen minutes of watching the neon green sign of The Raven's Nest had finally paid off when Herrera had emerged, clipboard in hand, but with the nervous energy of a rat sighted a cat. Quinn had almost lost him once, at the Tube station, but now her steady pace was bringing her closer. She pushed her tired legs harder, her sharp jaw set with determination. Three blocks. Two. Herrera disappeared around the corner, his broad shoulders nearly brushing the brick walls of the narrow alleyway. Quinn followed, her breathing heavy in her chest. Flickering streetlamps cast long shadows that danced and twisted as she ran, the rain now buckets down heavily, soaking through her raincoat and plastering her cropped salt-and-pepper hair to her scalp. Her military training had taught her to run through pain, through fatigue, through anything. So she ran now. The alley opened onto a quieter side street, lined with shuttered shops and quiet cafes. Where had he gone? Her eyes scanned the street—no figures, no movement. Then she saw it: a rusted fire escape, several rungs of which were clutched by dripping, muddy hands. "Cor blimey," Quinn muttered, reaching the base. She was forty-one, and climbing fire escapes had become part of her obligatory exercise routine. The wet metal was slippery under her grasping fingers as she began her ascent. The rain chose that moment to intensify, as if nature itself was trying to stop her. Each rung squeaked under her weight, and she cringed at the noise. Herrera was ahead, now disappearing onto the roof of a four-story building. Quinn cleared the roof edge and crouched, adrenaline surging through her. The flat rooftop stretched before her, punctuated by the hulking forms of HVAC units and aging brick chimneys. Herrera was twenty yards ahead, obviously familiar with this terrain. He wasn't running anymore—he was ducking behind structures, doing his best to keep out of sight. Quinn charged forward. Despite her years in the force, her legs were still strong from years of running down perps. She vaulted over an old stone wall, landing awkwardly on her ankle. Pain shot through her leg, but she pushed it aside. No time for that. Herrera was at the edge of the building now, and to her horror, she saw an access ladder descending the side. "Oh no, you don't," she breathed, accelerating into a sprint. She skidded to a halt at the building's edge, watching as Herrera nimbly began his descent. Rain drummed against her hat, running in small rivers down her face. She peered down. Below, the ladder led to an alleyway, then curved sharply into darkness. On the opposite wall, she could just make out a large grate covering what looked like a maintenance tunnel. That had to be where he was headed. Quinn's mind raced. She knew this area of London—somewhere beneath them lay the old Camden Town line, abandoned since the war. According to whispers from Dukestreet Station, something moved down there, something that wasn't entirely human. Herrera reached the bottom of the ladder and slipped through the grate with practiced ease. Quinn watched him disappear into the darkness below. She glanced at her watch, its leather strap soaked and sticky—the time was already pushing 2 AM. "Decision time," she said to herself, scanning the alley below. The entrance to the maintenance tunnel was just visible, the grate partially dislodged by Herrera's passage, creating a perfect square of blackness. Her instinct told her this was the way to go, but her reason warned her against it. Police regulations warned against it explicitly. That area was off-limits due to structural integrity issues. Quinn took a deep breath, feeling the weight of her old service weapon against her hip. She had thirty-nine holes in her belt notching, but this—this felt bigger than a simple collar. Herrera wasn't just some petty crook. The medallion around his neck, the dangerous locations he frequented—it all pointed to something more serious. And The Raven's Nest, with its distinctive green neon sign, was on the list of eight businesses she'd been watching for months. Preparation was everything. The codes required her to notify her superiors before entering potentially dangerous situations. But what if she notified them? They'd tell her to stand down, to wait for backup. By the time backup arrived, Herrera would be long gone, and whatever he was involved in would be one step further out of her reach. Her partner, DS Morris, had been cautious to a fault. "Patience, Harlow," he'd said more times than she could count. "Patience and preparation will get us anywhere." But Morris wasn't here anymore. He'd disappeared during a case that had tested the limits of her understanding, a case involving things that walked like men but weren't. That jade-green box she'd found in the warehouse he'd been investigating—those strange symbols carved into its surface—had led her down a path of research that had altered everything she thought she knew about the world. "I'm not waiting anymore," Quinn said, reaching for the ladder. Her aching ankle protested, but she ignored it, descending as quickly as safely possible. The wet rungs of the ladder screamed under her weight, but she wasn't looking back. As her feet touched the alleyway, Quinn approached the grate where Herrera had disappeared. The darkness beyond was absolute. Fumbling in her coat pocket, she pulled out a small, powerful torch she always carried. The beam illuminated the damp, concrete tunnel ahead. The air coming from within was cold and smelled of earth and decay. Taking a deep breath, she pushed the grate aside further and stepped through. The moment she entered the tunnel, the sounds of the city above faded, replaced by an oppressive silence broken only by the ding of her boots against puddles of water. The moving beam of her torch revealed the tunnel walls—damp concrete stained with rust and green mildew. It sloped downward, deeper into the earth. Quinn's shoulder brushed against the walls as she progressed, the ceiling low enough that she had to bend slightly. The fine hairs on the back of her neck stood up. She could see no signs of Herrera ahead, no footprints in the thin layer of water covering the floor. "You'd better be worth this, Herrera," she muttered to the darkness. The tunnel curved, and as she rounded the corner, her torch beam landed on a wider space ahead. The tunnel opened into a cavernous chamber, the source of a faint, distanteccho. Boxes and crates were stacked haphazardly against the walls, creating a maze-like passage. And there he was. Herrera stood in the center of the chamber, holding a strange device that looked like a cross between a screwdriver and an alarm remote. He was facing a section of the wall that appeared different from the rest—as her torch light swept over it, she caught a glimpse of brick rather than concrete. "Police, Tomás Herrera," Quinn said, her voice echoing unnaturally in the cavern. "We need to talk about The Raven's Nest." Herrera spun around, his warm brown eyes widening with surprise before settling into a hard expression. "Detective," he said. "How did you find me?" "Never mind that," Quinn replied, slowly moving forward, her free hand on the butt of her weapon. "Something tells me you know a hell of a lot more than you've been letting on about those boxes moving in and out of the bar." Herrera looked pained, his olive skin growing even paler in the torchlight. "You wouldn't understand." "That's right, I might not. So why don't you explain it to me before I haul you downtown and let you try explicating it to my sergeant?" "Jessica's going to kill me," Herrera said, shaking his head. "Or worse." He backed up against the wall, pressing his device against a section that looked suspiciously like a hidden latch. "Who's Jessica?" Quinn asked, watching warily as he worked. "Never mind her. Just warn her I was coming and that I was caught before I could get—" The hidden section of wall slid aside with a wet scraping sound, revealing not another tunnel, but a cavernous room filled with shadowy figures and all variety of impossible objects. Quinn froze, her mind struggling to process what she was seeing. Scales, sharp canines, and impossible silhouettes moved in the deep shadows. Torches flickered along the stone walls, illuminating makeshift stalls filled with goods that couldn't possibly exist—or at least, couldn't possibly coexist in the same space. "The Veil Market," Herrera said softly, coming up behind her now that she'd stopped moving forward. "And you just walked right in." Quinn's torch beam trembled slightly in her hand. "What is this place?" "This is where things that can't be seen in the daylight get bought and sold. Information. Potions. Artifacts that bend the laws of physics." Herrera stepped closer, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper. "And the bone you need." "A bone?" Quinn asked, her eyes still wide with disbelief. "Every person needs a bone to get in and out," Herrera explained. "Take one from a fresh grave, let it dry out, carve a বিশ montrer your intent. That's the ticket." "That's... that's illogical," Quinn stammered, her mind struggling to process this revelation. Masculine laughter echoed from inside the cavern. "Illogical is exactly what you shouldn't be, Detective." Quinn whipped her head around as a large figure emerged from the shadows. Her torch beam landed on a man with salt-and-pepper hair tied back in a ponytail and a polished silver cane. His eyes gleamed with intelligence and something else—amiability. Silas Reed stood there in the entrance of what Quinn now realized was the Veil Market, looking as comfortable as if he were hosting a party in his own home rather than presiding over an ongoing supernatural bazaar. "The Raven's Nest," Quinn said, a realization dawning. "Your bar is a front." "Right in one, Detective!" Reed said, a grin spreading across his face. "I do love the professionals. Now, now, come in. No need to stand on ceremony. Well, no need to stand in torrential rain either, but I'm sure you've already gotten plenty of that tonight."
created_at"2026-05-27T10:08:04.949Z" 5/27/2026, 10:08:04 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"wall slid aside [aside]"
1"Herrera said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.647
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
80.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1825
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"warily"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"quickly"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
4"warily"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1825
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"raced"
count2
1
word"glinting"
count2
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"hulking"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"practiced ease"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"oppressive"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"trembled"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"grave"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count1
18
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"raced"
1"glinting"
2"scanned"
3"weight"
4"hulking"
5"familiar"
6"charged"
7"practiced ease"
8"scanning"
9"perfect"
10"oppressive"
11"silence"
12"echoing"
13"flickered"
14"trembled"
15"whisper"
16"grave"
17"echoed"
18"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences117
matches
0"t with determination"
1"g with surprise"
2"e with disbelief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences117
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1811
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1548
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn23
Carnaby1
Street1
Herrera20
Raven3
Nest3
Tube1
London1
Camden1
Town1
Dukestreet1
Station1
Morris2
Masculine1
Reed2
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Morris"
6"Reed"
7"Market"
places
0"Carnaby"
1"Street"
2"Tube"
3"London"
4"Camden"
5"Town"
6"Dukestreet"
globalScore0.757
windowScore0.5
48.99% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences99
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"y yards ahead, obviously familiar with this"
1"looked like a maintenance tunnel"
2"looked like a cross between a screwdriver"
3"appeared different from the rest—as her torch light swept over it, she caught a glimpse of brick rather than concrete"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.552
wordCount1811
matches
0"not another tunnel, but a cavernous room filled with shadowy figures"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"chose that moment"
85.64% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean43.12
std19.39
cv0.45
sampleLengths
063
155
268
374
445
576
655
767
838
942
1036
1140
1264
1376
1457
1527
1663
1739
1855
1943
2073
2155
2257
2320
2424
2543
2615
2727
2831
299
3048
3147
3222
3312
3439
3510
3631
3712
3856
3938
4013
4146
93.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences117
matches
0"were clutched"
1"was headed"
2"was involved"
3"were stacked"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount9
totalVerbs274
matches
0"was bringing"
1"was trying"
2"was ducking"
3"wasn't running"
4"was already pushing"
5"wasn't looking"
6"was facing"
7"was seeing"
8"were hosting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences129
ratio0.093
matches
0"The man—Herrera, according to dispatch—had been moving with purpose since he'd spotted her watching The Raven's Nest from across the street."
1"Her eyes scanned the street—no figures, no movement."
2"He wasn't running anymore—he was ducking behind structures, doing his best to keep out of sight."
3"She knew this area of London—somewhere beneath them lay the old Camden Town line, abandoned since the war."
4"She glanced at her watch, its leather strap soaked and sticky—the time was already pushing 2 AM."
5"She had thirty-nine holes in her belt notching, but this—this felt bigger than a simple collar."
6"The medallion around his neck, the dangerous locations he frequented—it all pointed to something more serious."
7"That jade-green box she'd found in the warehouse he'd been investigating—those strange symbols carved into its surface—had led her down a path of research that had altered everything she thought she knew about the world."
8"The moving beam of her torch revealed the tunnel walls—damp concrete stained with rust and green mildew."
9"He was facing a section of the wall that appeared different from the rest—as her torch light swept over it, she caught a glimpse of brick rather than concrete."
10"Torches flickered along the stone walls, illuminating makeshift stalls filled with goods that couldn't possibly exist—or at least, couldn't possibly coexist in the same space."
11"His eyes gleamed with intelligence and something else—amiability."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1571
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount60
adverbRatio0.03819223424570337
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.015913430935709738
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean14.04
std8.25
cv0.588
sampleLengths
016
121
226
311
421
515
68
734
819
912
102
111
1217
138
1431
1514
164
1715
184
198
2018
217
2215
2314
2416
2512
2612
2711
2818
2910
3016
313
3217
3312
3410
354
3621
3710
3816
3912
403
4112
4219
438
443
4518
4615
4715
488
4917
76.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4806201550387597
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners62
29.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"Then she saw it: a"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences113
matches
0"She pushed her tired legs"
1"Her military training had taught"
2"Her eyes scanned the street—no"
3"She was forty-one, and climbing"
4"He wasn't running anymore—he was"
5"She vaulted over an old"
6"she breathed, accelerating into a"
7"She skidded to a halt"
8"She peered down."
9"She knew this area of"
10"She glanced at her watch,"
11"she said to herself, scanning"
12"Her instinct told her this"
13"She had thirty-nine holes in"
14"They'd tell her to stand"
15"Her partner, DS Morris, had"
16"he'd said more times than"
17"He'd disappeared during a case"
18"Her aching ankle protested, but"
19"It sloped downward, deeper into"
ratio0.23
52.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences113
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's leather boots"
1"Rain drummed steadily on the"
2"Quinn yelled, though she knew"
3"The man—Herrera, according to dispatch—had"
4"Something about the way he'd"
5"That, and the medallion glinting"
6"Quinn had almost lost him"
7"She pushed her tired legs"
8"Herrera disappeared around the corner,"
9"Quinn followed, her breathing heavy"
10"Her military training had taught"
11"The alley opened onto a"
12"Her eyes scanned the street—no"
13"Quinn muttered, reaching the base"
14"She was forty-one, and climbing"
15"The wet metal was slippery"
16"The rain chose that moment"
17"Each rung squeaked under her"
18"Herrera was ahead, now disappearing"
19"Quinn cleared the roof edge"
ratio0.814
44.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"By the time backup arrived,"
ratio0.009
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Rain drummed steadily on the pavement, glinting under the neon signs of romance and taxidermy that blurred past her peripheral vision."
1"Straight ahead, the figure in the dark coat ducked through a crosswalk against the light, disregarding the car that screeched to a halt just in time."
2"Flickering streetlamps cast long shadows that danced and twisted as she ran, the rain now buckets down heavily, soaking through her raincoat and plastering her …"
3"According to whispers from Dukestreet Station, something moved down there, something that wasn't entirely human."
4"He'd disappeared during a case that had tested the limits of her understanding, a case involving things that walked like men but weren't."
5"That jade-green box she'd found in the warehouse he'd been investigating—those strange symbols carved into its surface—had led her down a path of research that …"
6"Herrera stood in the center of the chamber, holding a strange device that looked like a cross between a screwdriver and an alarm remote."
7"He was facing a section of the wall that appeared different from the rest—as her torch light swept over it, she caught a glimpse of brick rather than concrete."
8"Torches flickered along the stone walls, illuminating makeshift stalls filled with goods that couldn't possibly exist—or at least, couldn't possibly coexist in …"
9"Silas Reed stood there in the entrance of what Quinn now realized was the Veil Market, looking as comfortable as if he were hosting a party in his own home rath…"
11.36% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice echoing unnaturally in the cavern"
1"Herrera stepped, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper"
2"Quinn asked, her eyes still wide with disbelief"
3"Quinn said, a realization dawning"
4"Reed said, a grin spreading across his face"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Quinn yelled (yell)"
1"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"Herrera explained (explain)"
5"Quinn stammered (stammer)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.353
effectiveRatio0.353
71.6926%