Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEPXCR0QZCPBZ81V9SM63T

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The door swung open. "Sorry, love. No takings until-" Silas froze, his jaw dropping open like a taxi's passenger door. "Bloody hell. Haven't seen you in..." His rheumy eyes surveyed Aurora, taking in her baggy cargo pants and matching jacket. "About a decade. You look well, Miss Carter. On the run again, are you?" Aurora squeezed past him, already scanning the dimly lit pub. "I prefer 'living a nomadic existence, Silas.' And I'm only here until the weekend." She unfurled herself from her massive Timberland backpack and plopped it in the corner. "Eva's in trouble again and needs my hacking funds. The roofs are solid here, right? Don't want a repeat of Brixton." Silas pressed a napkin to her head, already dabbing at a thin line of blood. "No leaks here, goose. Wait, aren't you supposed to be studying to be a lawyer? Kind of surprised to see you here." "It's Rory when you haven't seen me for a decade, Silas." She shook his hand off and squared her shoulders. "And I'm taking a break from that. Let's just say there were some complications with the Admissions Committee's database." "An addicting habit, hacking. Mostly bad, though. Reduced the need to stay clean, love. It's..." He looked into the distance for a split second. "It was a bad start for me. Maybe for you, too. Why here? You're a Londoner now, are you?" He waved towards the glass window and the bustling chaos of Brick Lane. "Sorry to disappoint." Aurora smirked. "I'm just here temporarily, for Eva. Until I can find a better place and get to work." "Right then, steady on, love. Think you'll go up?" He gestured to a dark doorway at the back of the pub. "Yeah, as soon as Eva gets back. I don't need any of my shit, just want to drop my bag." She went to the doorway and climbed the steps, her steps squeaking at each riser. She reached the top and grabbed the door handle, trying to calm her shaking hands. "What color's Ms. Balfour's phone? Pretty red piece of garbage. Can't let a little updating slip into fix it, can we? Come on, come on." The door creaked open, revealing the cramped one-bedroom flat. A tabby cat sauntered by, rubbing against her leg. Not Eva, then. But the little devils had told me she'd gone to the supermarket. Still, better to be careful. No need to break anyone's nose tonight. Aurora stepped further into the flat, her eyes adjusting to the dim light filtering through the grimy window. Every surface was covered in books, scrolls, and research notes. She shook her head, a small smile tugging at her lips. Some things never changed. Suddenly, the door slammed shut behind her. She spun around, her heart pounding in her chest. A dark figure loomed in the doorway, blocking the only escape. "Well, well, well. Look what the cat dragged in." Aurora's breath caught in her throat. That voice. She'd know it anywhere, even after all these years. Slowly, she turned to face him, her eyes locking with his. "Hello, Lucien." He stepped into the light, revealing his impeccably tailored charcoal suit and slicked-back platinum blond hair. The ivory handle of his cane gleamed in the dim light. One of his eyes was a startling black, the other a warm amber. It had been the eye-color-gazing that called her into his arms, the first time they had spoken and moved her closer to him, bwonding them. She could recall how his lips had felt pressed against the bones of her hip. But that was a long time ago. These days, he was the most powerful fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. And she was his fuck-up ex. " solche gut wie ich sind nicht dafür gemacht, Fehler zu machen" He gave her a sly half-crack. Not my meta. *Really bad, not cool, augh.* Aurora's gaze narrowed. She knew better than to show fear. Lucien fed on it like a hungry vampire on a donor. Best to get straight to the point. "What are you doing here, Lucien? Eva shouldn't be surprised with you at her..." Lucien held up a hand, his tone quiet yet lethal. "I could ask you the same question, Rory. Last I heard, you were in Edinburgh living it up as a sparing lawyer. Working too hard for client covering up some pretty unpleasant stuff for clients". "Legal aid's not glamorous, but it pays the bills. As for being here, I'm working with Eva on a project. Something you wouldn't understand, given your... public work does earn less then the hard way". She spat the last word, her lip curling in disgust. "I'm not going back to that life, Lucien. You can tell I'm done with what the underground share of information. I'm done with you." Lucien's eyes flashed with a furious angry look. He moved swiftly, faster than any human ever could. In an instant, he had her pinned against the wall, his body pressed tightly against hers. His face hovered just inches from hers, his breath hot on her face. "Is that so?" he growled, his voice a low rumble in his chest. "Because I seem to remember you *begging* for more when we were together. *Pleasunged* for it, in fact." Aurora's stomach clenched at the memory. God, she'd been so weak then, so needy. But she wasn't that girl anymore. She shoved at his chest, but he didn't budge. Even with his injury, he was still too strong. "Get off me, Lucien," she hissed through gritted teeth. "This is over. I'm over it." Lucien's eyes searched hers, as if trying to read her thoughts. Then, with a feral grin, he released her and stepped back. "Over? We both know that's not true, Rory," he said, his voice low and dangerous. "You'll never be over me, not as long as you live. It's a part of the demon markets, except while they do something to really structure the work outs and your way through training, and balcony work compared to their results and giving it all structure. You know this as well as I do" Aurora's heart hammered in her chest, but she refused to back down. She lifted her chin defiantly, her eyes flashing with fury. "Is that a threat, Lucien?" she asked, her voice deadly calm. "Because the last time I checked, I'm the one with the supernaturals tied up event, Lucien. Maybe it's better to back off now, while you still can" Lucien's gaze darkened, his eyes flashing with a dangerous spark. "Careful, Rory. You might just get what you wish for", he replied. In a flash, he was on her again, crashing her against the wall and detailed hands were on her, pulling her hard against the hardness of his body, his lips crashing against hers in a searing.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1145
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
2"really"
3"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.07% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1145
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"database"
count1
2
word"pounding"
count1
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"structure"
count2
6
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"database"
2"pounding"
3"loomed"
4"stomach"
5"structure"
6"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
highlights
0"heart hammered in her chest"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences68
matches
0"g with fury"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences68
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords7
totalWords1146
ratio0.006
matches
0"Really bad, not cool, augh."
1"begging"
2"Pleasunged"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.12% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount668
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora8
Timberland1
Silas2
Brick1
Lane1
Eva1
London1
Lucien5
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Silas"
2"Eva"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"London"
globalScore0.901
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if trying to read her thoughts"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.873
wordCount1146
matches
0"not glamorous, but it pays the bills"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean33.71
std17.68
cv0.525
sampleLengths
04
150
259
337
439
556
622
721
850
925
1045
1143
1227
139
1428
152
1680
1728
1826
1928
2014
2145
2226
2343
2446
2531
2638
2715
2822
2969
3022
3138
3210
3348
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"was covered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs117
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences84
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.53% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount666
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.04054054054054054
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.016516516516516516
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean13.64
std8.95
cv0.656
sampleLengths
04
116
220
314
410
528
621
715
822
920
1019
1124
1232
135
1417
1521
1635
1715
1825
199
209
213
2212
235
247
2518
2610
2711
284
297
309
3111
329
336
342
359
3611
372
3816
3911
4013
4125
4215
437
4415
456
4618
473
485
493
95.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5714285714285714
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences65
matches
0"Still, better to be careful."
1"Suddenly, the door slammed shut"
2"Slowly, she turned to face"
3"*Really bad, not cool, augh.*"
4"Then, with a feral grin,"
ratio0.077
66.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences65
matches
0"His rheumy eyes surveyed Aurora,"
1"She unfurled herself from her"
2"She shook his hand off"
3"He looked into the distance"
4"He waved towards the glass"
5"He gestured to a dark"
6"She went to the doorway"
7"She reached the top and"
8"She shook her head, a"
9"She spun around, her heart"
10"She'd know it anywhere, even"
11"He stepped into the light,"
12"It had been the eye-color-gazing"
13"She could recall how his"
14"He gave her a sly"
15"She knew better than to"
16"She spat the last word,"
17"He moved swiftly, faster than"
18"His face hovered just inches"
19"he growled, his voice a"
ratio0.385
98.46% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences65
matches
0"The door swung open."
1"Silas froze, his jaw dropping"
2"His rheumy eyes surveyed Aurora,"
3"Aurora squeezed past him, already"
4"She unfurled herself from her"
5"Silas pressed a napkin to"
6"She shook his hand off"
7"He looked into the distance"
8"He waved towards the glass"
9"He gestured to a dark"
10"She went to the doorway"
11"She reached the top and"
12"The door creaked open, revealing"
13"A tabby cat sauntered by,"
14"Aurora stepped further into the"
15"Every surface was covered in"
16"She shook her head, a"
17"Some things never changed."
18"She spun around, her heart"
19"A dark figure loomed in"
ratio0.723
76.92% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Even with his injury, he"
ratio0.015
37.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Aurora stepped further into the flat, her eyes adjusting to the dim light filtering through the grimy window."
1"It had been the eye-color-gazing that called her into his arms, the first time they had spoken and moved her closer to him, bwonding them."
2"Lucien's eyes searched hers, as if trying to read her thoughts."
3"In a flash, he was on her again, crashing her against the wall and detailed hands were on her, pulling her hard against the hardness of his body, his lips crash…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Silas froze, his jaw dropping open like a taxi's passenger door"
1"She went, her steps squeaking at each riser"
2"he growled, his voice a low rumble in his chest"
3"he said, his voice low and dangerous"
4"she asked, her voice deadly calm"
87.50% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he growled (growl)"
1"she hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.313
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.125
89.8064%