Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMEQMT32713JP4B3RWCGD8B

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Sweat beaded her skin, mingling with the gore on her hands. Aurora's heart thundered against her ribs, a staccato beat pounding in sync with the throbbing pulse she clutched in her fingers. The shoe that had housed this foot moments ago lay upturned nearby, a crimson pool darkening the sole like wine spilled on a doily. Three weeks ago, Aurora believed she'd left violence behind, along with her childhood street demons and the man who'd once embodied them both. But the past has a habit of creeping back when you least expect it, its claws bared and ready to rend. "Rory?" The voice cut through the haze of shock and adrenaline. Aurora looked up, taking in the scene before her. She was in an alley behind a row of garment shops, the bruised sky visible through the narrow sliver between buildings. And standing before her, arms held wide in shocked disbelief, was her childhood friend Eva Chen. "Eva," Aurora gasped. She took in her former shock at seeing Eva again - the shock, the recognition, the dread - barely sparing attention to the man Isեthe still on the ground before them, his face twisted in a final mask of terror. Only an hour ago, Aurora had been lighting a cigarette in the alley behind the Golden Empress, where she delivered food on her bike. She'd heard the skitter of footsteps and turned to see the man from her past again. A man whose surname she'd yawned to keep, years ago. He'd stepped out from the shadows, once bulky frame now skeletal in the darkness. "Aurora," he'd said coolly, almost amused. "Too bad you won't make it out of this alley." A weak chuckle. "You never knew my gift for tracking." "Evan," she whispered now. "He was yours." "Was, not is," Eva clarified with a sharp nod. "Was a long time ago. I moved on. He didn't." Aurora swallowed hard, her throat suddenly dry. "I was watching him," Eva murmured. "Thought someone should keep an eye on that waste of skin from my past. Didn't think one of these days I'd be reliving my past." Now, Sergei stood in front of them, a glinting blade in his hand, a sheet of dark grey cloth drawn over his head. "Evan's death. It wasn't vigilante justice. It was murder," Silas said, calmly. "It was personal. Deeply personal. It was planned. This isn't over." His eyes flickered to Aurora with a cold gimlet. "Rory. You should know that you can't run much further from the life you were born into." Authoritative. Example, confident, he always was. "I'm done running," Aurora replied curtly, snatching a tissue from the bar to wipe Evan's blood from her hands. "And from you." "Never say never, Rory." Sergei leaned closer, darkly and deeply. It was a tone that promised more than threats. "That was Evan's mistake: not knowing your true self. You're hasty, impulsive. Never know when to walk away. *That's when things got out of hand in Pakistan. That's why you're in this mess now.* And you're going to end up dead. It's inevitable. It's who you are." He straightened, looking her up and down coldly. "The trick is knowing when to stay up or go under." "I'm done letting people like Evan and like you define my worth. I'm done running, from the life I was born into and the life I was forced into. I'm done with it all." "You've always been a survivor at heart. In more ways than one. So put your knack for staying alive to good use and work for me. I know you're *that* smart to reject the offer right off the bat. Whatever your answer to work with me, it's best to rest. I'm taking to heart your attempt to give me another chance. Don't throw it away by antagonizing me." She did. That one night. The night that changed everything. Aurora had waited tables at The Sheriff, trying to meet the sketchy bastards Sergei had sent her letters promising to make all her doubts easier, if only she would work for him again. But this one night, instead of beer and burgers, she'd found Evan waiting in the back. Serious and deeply into his eyes they had exchanged information. "I'll save you from Sergei again, if you like. You've no one else." "I'm not yours to save." "I wasn't talking about being a mother anymore using you, Rory. I was talking about taking you out of this game. Out of this life. But you don't no how. Do you even want to know how?" Better, a question; there have been some other ones. "...I'm sorry I didn't circle back around to you. Come on, Rory. Call me if you need me. Whenever you need me." "I'll keep it in mind, Serena. That's all I can say." Then Sergei had emerged to open the bar. Him in the cursed, boutique style clothing. Dark, imposing, and filled with perpetual dark promise. "What do you want, Sergei?" she asked. He raised a cocked eyebrow. This could have been spoken. "I don't want anything, Rory. I'm here to see my father-kinsman with the false betrayer and reveal the mask she wears." He stepped closer. It was a tone that promised more than threats. "I told you to leave me alone. I don't want to hear what you have to say, Sergei, and none of the other words. You do know Mrs. Dowager was your boyfriend's mother, right. At least, that's what you say. And it got her killed." "I didn't kill Mrs. Dowager." "I don't believe you. I think you wanted her gone so you could focus your anger and hatred towards me. And towards your own mother." Sergei stepped closer. Dangerous, like he would attack her at any moment. "You don't know what you're talking about, Rory. You should just stay out of this. I'm warning you. Many deaths have happened. This wasn't just a thing about my mother and grandmother's studies and your mother-in-law's secrets. This was about winning." "And who won?" She spat back, hating the way he was trying to control and coerce her, hating how weak she felt in his presence. She held onto her anger, using it as a shield against the fear and hurt he brought out in her. "Me, of course. As it should be. I'm done letting you and your damn secrets control my life. I'm done being afraid of you and what you might do. I'm going to expose you and everyone else who's involved in this mess, no matter what it takes." Sergei threw his head back and laughed, a cold, calculating sound that sent chills down her spine. "You're welcome to try, Rory. But I wouldn't get my hopes up if I were you. I've been playing this game a lot longer than you have. And I always win in the end." With that, he turned on his heel and stalked out of the bar, leaving Aurora standing there, shaking and seething with rage. She knew he was right- he had been playing this dangerous game for a lot longer than she had. And he always did seem to win in the end. But she refused to give up, no matter how much he threatened or pressured her. She would expose the truth, no matter what it took. Even if it meant confronting the darkest, most painful parts of her past and her own true self in the process. She owed it to Mrs. Dowager, and to herself, to finally put an end to this once and for all.
created_at"2026-05-27T10:12:26.081Z" 5/27/2026, 10:12:26 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
85.71% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Aurora replied curtly [curtly]"
1"She spat back [back]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.114
88.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1266
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"coolly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"coldly"
count1
highlights
0"coolly"
1"suddenly"
2"coldly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Chen"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1266
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"thundered"
count1
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"imposing"
count1
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"calculating"
count1
9
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"thundered"
1"pounding"
2"pulse"
3"footsteps"
4"glinting"
5"flickered"
6"imposing"
7"eyebrow"
8"calculating"
9"down her spine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences58
matches
0"g with rage"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords17
totalWords1268
ratio0.013
matches
0"That's when things got out of hand in Pakistan. That's why you're in this mess now."
1"that"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
76.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount681
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.47
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora10
Eva4
Chen1
Golden1
Empress1
Sergei6
Authoritative1
Evan2
Sheriff1
Mrs1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Chen"
3"Sergei"
4"Evan"
5"Mrs"
places(empty)
globalScore0.766
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1268
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean36.23
std22.32
cv0.616
sampleLengths
056
144
257
343
464
516
610
77
819
97
1031
1123
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136
1422
1585
1634
1768
1869
1913
205
2168
2211
2323
2417
2533
2645
275
2825
2953
3045
3147
3251
3366
3451
99.21% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"been spoken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs115
matches
0"was trying"
69.60% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences78
ratio0.026
matches
0"She took in her former shock at seeing Eva again - the shock, the recognition, the dread - barely sparing attention to the man Isեthe still on the ground before them, his face twisted in a final mask of terror."
1"\"I wasn't talking about being a mother anymore using you, Rory. I was talking about taking you out of this game. Out of this life. But you don't no how. Do you even want to know how?\" Better, a question; there have been some other ones."
95.05% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount679
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.045655375552282766
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.01914580265095729
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean16.26
std13.17
cv0.81
sampleLengths
011
121
224
323
421
511
69
721
816
93
1040
1124
1216
1310
1414
156
1610
173
187
194
203
219
2210
237
246
2525
2623
2712
2820
2917
301
315
3219
333
3410
359
3655
3711
3834
3968
402
413
425
4333
4416
4510
4613
475
4846
4922
67.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.46153846153846156
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences53
matches
0"Only an hour ago, Aurora"
1"Then Sergei had emerged to"
ratio0.038
84.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences53
matches
0"She was in an alley"
1"She took in her former"
2"She'd heard the skitter of"
3"He'd stepped out from the"
4"he'd said coolly, almost amused"
5"she whispered now"
6"His eyes flickered to Aurora"
7"It was a tone that"
8"He straightened, looking her up"
9"Him in the cursed, boutique"
10"He raised a cocked eyebrow."
11"He stepped closer"
12"It was a tone that"
13"She spat back, hating the"
14"She held onto her anger,"
15"She knew he was right-"
16"She would expose the truth,"
17"She owed it to Mrs."
ratio0.34
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount38
totalSentences53
matches
0"Sweat beaded her skin, mingling"
1"Aurora's heart thundered against her"
2"The shoe that had housed"
3"The voice cut through the"
4"Aurora looked up, taking in"
5"She was in an alley"
6"She took in her former"
7"She'd heard the skitter of"
8"A man whose surname she'd"
9"He'd stepped out from the"
10"he'd said coolly, almost amused"
11"A weak chuckle."
12"she whispered now"
13"Eva clarified with a sharp"
14"Aurora swallowed hard, her throat"
15"Silas said, calmly"
16"His eyes flickered to Aurora"
17"Example, confident, he always was."
18"Aurora replied curtly, snatching a"
19"Sergei leaned closer, darkly and"
ratio0.717
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences53
matches
0"Now, Sergei stood in front"
1"Even if it meant confronting"
ratio0.038
28.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The shoe that had housed this foot moments ago lay upturned nearby, a crimson pool darkening the sole like wine spilled on a doily."
1"Three weeks ago, Aurora believed she'd left violence behind, along with her childhood street demons and the man who'd once embodied them both."
2"Aurora had waited tables at The Sheriff, trying to meet the sketchy bastards Sergei had sent her letters promising to make all her doubts easier, if only she wo…"
3"Sergei threw his head back and laughed, a cold, calculating sound that sent chills down her spine."
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Silas said, calmly"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Aurora gasped (gasp)"
1"he'd (would)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"Eva clarified (clarify)"
4"Eva murmured (murmur)"
5"She spat back (spit)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.257
leniency0.514
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.343
87.4923%