Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMES34Z4Q8XB44Y13ECFFYA

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1m 5s
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$0.002443
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The crunch of gravel beneath her boots was the only sound that matched her expectation. Aurora Carter pulled her coat tighter against the unseasonable chill seeping into the atmosphere of Richmond Park at 11 PM. The night had claimed the grove before she'd entered the ancient oak standing stones that marked its boundary. When she'd read about the Fae Grove in those obscure occult forums, she'd expected something different—magic, perhaps. Not an ordinary copse of trees that felt utterly ordinary except for its isolation at this hour. Her Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly against her chest, a comforting warmth that hadn't started until she'd passed the third standing stone. The artefact had led her here, of that she was certain. Her fingers traced the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—the reminder that not everything magical was benevolent. "Approaching portal." Her voice sounded too loud in the silence. The heartstone warmed further. "So close now." A twig snapped somewhere to her right. Aurora froze, her training as a former special constable in Cardiff kicking in. With controlled breathing, she scanned the shadows between the trees. Nothing moved. Nothing that shouldn't, at least. "Rory, stop being paranoid." She whispered to herself, more to hear a normal voice than to Dressenge. Gravel crunched again—not to her right this time, but behind her. As if whoever—or whatever—had been following suddenly changed their approach. The park rangers never patrolled this area at night, not since the incident with the tourists last summer that hadn't made any papers but had sent whispered warnings through the Five Acre they were doing. The Grove wasn't official park property, just a secluded copse that locals avoided after dusk. The heartstone pulsed rhythmically now, matching her heartbeat which had quickened despite her attempts at calm. Was that a whisper on the breeze? Aurora strained to hear, cocking her head to one side. It sounded like her name—but not spoken by any human throat. It came from everywhere and nowhere. "Laila." The word dissolved into the night air, carried by something that wasn't wind. Her heartstone accelerated its pulsing. Rory took a calming breath. Why had she come here? The answer came unbidden to her mind: to find what was calling her. Since the pendant had arrived in the mail with no return address, she'd experienced increasingly vivid dreams of this place—dreamed of walking between these very trees until she'd been forced to seek them out. "Malphora." This time the voice clearly came from ahead, where the trees seemed to part slightly, revealing a small clearing she hadn't seen on the maps. The name startled her. No one had called her by that particular legacy name since her father had died when she was sixteen. Laila was close friend Evelyn's name for her. Malphora belonged to the mother she barely remembered. How did the voice even know something that private? "Laila." Now the voice seemed to circle her, moving from tree to tree until she found herself standing in the centre of the grove, completely surrounded. Aurora suddenly understood why the park rangers avoided this area. The space glowed faintly, not with light so much as with presence. The ordinary tall trees and wide-spreading oaks of the grove seemed to be watching her. Expecting something. Her heartstone glowed with an intensity that matched the worrying feeling in her stomach. The trees at the edge of the clearing seemed to shift, not in a way that made her doubt her eyes but in a way that suggested they weren't strictly trees anymore. Twilight dancing. Like a summer haze, one moment clear, the next clouded with possibility. Oak limbs parted deliberately. Birch trunks one second, the next... There it was again—movement where trees should stand still. This time she caught it clearly: a figure passing between two pines, moving with an impossible silence. When it turned its head, the moonlight revealed not a human face but something narrower, more slender, with eyes that glowed faintly crimson. The heartstone pendant burned against her chest, warmth turning to heat. Rory's fingers went to the concealed knife in her boot. She wasn't here to be taken. She was here to find answers. "Show yourself," she said, proud that her voice only trembled slightly. The trees bent inward, the spacing between them closing as the figure stepped fully into the moonlight. It was tall and thin, with limbs that seemed too long for its body. Its skin was the silvery colour of birch bark, and it wore what appeared to be woven moss as clothing. But it was the face that held her attention: sharp, elongated, with features that slipped between recognisable and unrecognisable. The eyes, wide and darkly intelligent, fixed on hers. "Why have you come, child of Dymas?" The voice spoke directly into her mind, bypassing her ears completely. The family name again. Only her father had known that her lineage traced back to the legendary kingdom of Dymas, a realm so hidden that few humans even knew it existed. Her hands trembled. This wasn't a simple ghost haunting an old grove. "I..." Her throat was dry. "The messages. I thought it was a joke." The eye thing tilted its head, regarding her with what seemed like amusement. "Messages?" A mental laugh echoed through her consciousness, chilling her despite the heat from her pendant. "We do not use your crude methods of communication. We called to what belongs to us." The pendant urged her forward. Rory took a reluctant step. "This belongs to me. Someone gave it to me." "Gave?" The thing chuckled. "There is no giving in this matter, Daughter of Dymas. One of the Blood gave up the heartstone willingly to bring you here, to begin what was left unfinished." "Unfinished?" Fear turned to determination. Whatever was happening was connected to her, connected to her family history—and she would not be led blindly into whatever trap these things had set. The figure froze, becoming so still that it seemed to disappear against the trees behind it. The air grew cold enough that her breath came out in visible puffs. When it spoke again, the mental voice shifted in tone, becoming urgent. "Hostile presence detected. Ancient boundary crossed." "What?" Rory looked around. The grove appeared the same as before—lit by an unnatural glow, trees that might not be trees, a being from another realm—but now something felt different. The watcher in the grove was no longer alone. The heartstone pendant blazed with heat, so hot it felt as though it might burn through her top. Rory tore the chain from her neck and held the glowing stone before her. "What's happening?" "Question mark," The voice whispered, fading in and out as if struggling to hold form. "Slip. Between worlds. They come. You need to run." "Run?" The word seemed ridiculous until the ground beneath her feet trembled. Roots shifted and groaned. The trees bent lower, as if preparing to strike. "You need to flee," The intellectual reply came from its direction, but something was wrong with the words themselves. An accent and cadence she recognised—Brendan's, her father's—emerged from the alien form. "Malphora, the way back..." It raised a slender hand and pointed to where she had entered, but the trees had intertwined, sealing off the path. The pendant's warmth turned painful, a beacon of pure energy in her hand. These things—these fae—whatever they were, they were terrified of something coming for her. "The grove is a crossroads," The being spoke with her father's voice and diction. "Time moves differently here. Remember that when you return. Not all that was is now. And what seems distant may be near." Something stirred in the shadows beyond the grove's edge—the presence alluded to by her former would-be savour. Above the arboreal canopy, a wrong-shape shadow passed momentarily across the stars. "We didn't expect them so soon," The entity continued to borrow her father's vocal patterns. "Take the stone. When it pulses once for each world it touches, you have successfully crossed the border home. Don't look back. Don't hesitate." A branch swung down from overhead, moving with unnatural speed. Rory stumbled backward, instinctively raising the heartstone. Its crimson glow intensified, forming a visible shield between her and the descending limb. The bark sizzled and curled where the light touched. "Now." The creature vanished into the trees, leaving her alone in the suddenly hostile grove. The way she'd entered was blocked. All around her, branches coiled like snakes and wherein the trees now only creatures ready to strike remained. The heartstone singed her palm, but she clenched it tighter, feeling suddenly wise to her situation. She wasn't leaving. She'd come here looking for answers, maybe closure about her father's mysterious accident—or his disappearance, if she was being honest. Instead, Rory Carter—out-of-the-box thinker and reluctant adventurer—found a truth more terrifying than any from the occult forums. As the first branch lashed toward her, Aurora Carter remembered what else her father had taught her besides family history: When commanding a roomful of barristers, never back down. It was a rule that she found applied to magical forests quite well. "The way back?" she demanded, voice carrying through the grove. "Show me the way back." In answer, the trees parted suddenly, revealing not the path she had entered by but another clearing deeper in the grove. At its centre stood an archway of living branches that hadn't been there moments before. Beyond, she glimpsed what appeared to be not Richmond Park but a London street entirely alien to her neighbourhood. Aurora took a step toward the strange portal. Here in the strange forest, the wood of the standing stones gave an unsettling pulse. Above her the stars seemed to swirl, not in a pleasant way, more like they were caught in some cosmic current, and even the air smelt different, of copper and ozone: a storm brewing somewhere not visible to the eye. The things that weren't trees twitched at the forest's edge, waiting for her to turn. The way forward meant the way into the unknown, which the lobbyist within herself wanted on principle to resist, yet the switch inside her, flipped recently, urged her forth. Uncertainty often made silence, she had lived telling herself, and now was the time to prove it. Aurora Carter had never been one to wait for answers to come to her. Each step taking her towards the acting, partially formed arch resonated with a power that made the heartstone glow so strongly it was becoming uncomfortable to hold. Beyond lay questions, and beyond that, she knew, lay answers that her father had apparently been trying to protect her from. With one final glance that didn't quite see the branches springing toward her from either side, Aurora Carter, pragmatist and pragmatist who normally weighed risks perfectly, took a leap of faith she'd never imagined herself capable of and ran for the portal, eye prosaically fixed on branches still between her and certain, she was starting to think, death by something.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Her voice sounded too [too]"
1"The voice spoke directly [directly]"
2"Rory looked around [around]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.581
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
65.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1857
totalAiIsmAdverbs13
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count5
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count2
4
adverb"completely"
count2
5
adverb"deliberately"
count1
6
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
3"slightly"
4"completely"
5"deliberately"
6"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1857
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"traced"
count2
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"quickened"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
10
word"intensity"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"dancing"
count1
13
word"trembled"
count3
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"chilling"
count1
16
word"beacon"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"resonated"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pulsed"
2"comforting"
3"warmth"
4"traced"
5"reminder"
6"silence"
7"scanned"
8"quickened"
9"whisper"
10"intensity"
11"stomach"
12"dancing"
13"trembled"
14"echoed"
15"chilling"
16"beacon"
17"pulse"
18"resonated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences122
matches(empty)
37.47% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1835
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount1653
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.48
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter5
Richmond2
Park2
Fae1
Grove2
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Cardiff1
Dressenge1
Gravel1
Five1
Acre1
Evelyn1
Aurora8
Dymas1
Fear1
Roots1
Brendan1
Rory7
London1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Gravel"
4"Evelyn"
5"Aurora"
6"Fear"
7"Roots"
8"Brendan"
9"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Cardiff"
5"Dressenge"
6"Five"
7"Dymas"
8"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
2.94% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"sounded like her name—but not spoken by an"
1"as if struggling to hold form"
2"seemed ridiculous until the ground beneath her feet trembled"
3"as if preparing to strike"
4"her father had apparently been trying to prot"
5"quite see the branches springing toward her from either side, Aurora Carter, pragmatist and pragmatist who normally weighed risks perfectly, took a leap of faith she'd never imagined herself capable of and ran for the portal, eye prosaically fixed on branches still between her and certain, she was starting to think, death by something"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.27
wordCount1835
matches
0"not to her right this time, but behind her"
1"not since the incident with the tourists last summer that hadn't made any papers but had sent whispered warnings through the Five Acre they were"
2"not in a way that made her doubt her eyes but in a way"
3"not a human face but something narrower, more slender, with eyes"
4"not the path she had entered by but another clearing deeper in the grove"
5"not Richmond Park but a London street entirely alien to her neighbourhood"
91.48% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences133
matches
0"Was that a"
1"known that her hidden that few"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean40.78
std22.04
cv0.54
sampleLengths
087
150
217
337
417
571
650
714
862
926
1048
1126
1253
1356
1449
1533
1611
1779
1818
1943
2013
2145
2219
2333
2430
2541
266
2739
2834
2924
3025
3156
3226
3336
3429
3539
3640
3739
3856
3942
4015
4155
4263
4361
44122
88.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences122
matches
0"been forced"
1"was connected"
2"were terrified"
3"being spoke"
4"was blocked"
5"were caught"
62.54% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs291
matches
0"were doing"
1"was calling"
2"was happening"
3"wasn't leaving"
4"was being"
5"was starting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences133
ratio0.105
matches
0"When she'd read about the Fae Grove in those obscure occult forums, she'd expected something different—magic, perhaps."
1"Her fingers traced the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—the reminder that not everything magical was benevolent."
2"Gravel crunched again—not to her right this time, but behind her."
3"As if whoever—or whatever—had been following suddenly changed their approach."
4"It sounded like her name—but not spoken by any human throat."
5"Since the pendant had arrived in the mail with no return address, she'd experienced increasingly vivid dreams of this place—dreamed of walking between these very trees until she'd been forced to seek them out."
6"There it was again—movement where trees should stand still."
7"Whatever was happening was connected to her, connected to her family history—and she would not be led blindly into whatever trap these things had set."
8"The grove appeared the same as before—lit by an unnatural glow, trees that might not be trees, a being from another realm—but now something felt different."
9"An accent and cadence she recognised—Brendan's, her father's—emerged from the alien form."
10"These things—these fae—whatever they were, they were terrified of something coming for her."
11"Something stirred in the shadows beyond the grove's edge—the presence alluded to by her former would-be savour."
12"She'd come here looking for answers, maybe closure about her father's mysterious accident—or his disappearance, if she was being honest."
13"Instead, Rory Carter—out-of-the-box thinker and reluctant adventurer—found a truth more terrifying than any from the occult forums."
82.61% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1679
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount81
adverbRatio0.048243001786777845
lyAdverbCount42
lyAdverbRatio0.02501488981536629
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean13.8
std8.62
cv0.625
sampleLengths
015
120
218
317
417
521
611
718
810
94
103
117
1213
1310
142
155
1617
1711
1810
1935
2015
2116
227
2310
2411
256
2614
275
285
295
3013
3134
3226
334
3419
358
368
379
3826
3910
4012
4115
422
4314
4432
452
4612
474
486
499
67.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.45864661654135336
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners61
56.02% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"Only her father had known"
1"Instead, Rory Carter—out—of—the—box thinker and"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences119
matches
0"Her Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly"
1"Her fingers traced the small"
2"Her voice sounded too loud"
3"She whispered to herself, more"
4"It sounded like her name—but"
5"It came from everywhere and"
6"Her heartstone accelerated its pulsing."
7"Her heartstone glowed with an"
8"She wasn't here to be"
9"She was here to find"
10"she said, proud that her"
11"It was tall and thin,"
12"Its skin was the silvery"
13"Her hands trembled."
14"Her throat was dry"
15"It raised a slender hand"
16"Its crimson glow intensified, forming"
17"She wasn't leaving."
18"She'd come here looking for"
19"It was a rule that"
ratio0.176
73.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences119
matches
0"The crunch of gravel beneath"
1"Aurora Carter pulled her coat"
2"The night had claimed the"
3"Her Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly"
4"The artefact had led her"
5"Her fingers traced the small"
6"Her voice sounded too loud"
7"The heartstone warmed further."
8"A twig snapped somewhere to"
9"Aurora froze, her training as"
10"Nothing that shouldn't, at least."
11"She whispered to herself, more"
12"Gravel crunched again—not to her"
13"The park rangers never patrolled"
14"The Grove wasn't official park"
15"The heartstone pulsed rhythmically now,"
16"Aurora strained to hear, cocking"
17"It sounded like her name—but"
18"It came from everywhere and"
19"The word dissolved into the"
ratio0.773
84.03% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"As if whoever—or whatever—had been"
1"Now the voice seemed to"
ratio0.017
49.69% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The crunch of gravel beneath her boots was the only sound that matched her expectation."
1"Her Heartstone Pendant pulsed faintly against her chest, a comforting warmth that hadn't started until she'd passed the third standing stone."
2"The heartstone pulsed rhythmically now, matching her heartbeat which had quickened despite her attempts at calm."
3"Her heartstone glowed with an intensity that matched the worrying feeling in her stomach."
4"When it turned its head, the moonlight revealed not a human face but something narrower, more slender, with eyes that glowed faintly crimson."
5"But it was the face that held her attention: sharp, elongated, with features that slipped between recognisable and unrecognisable."
6"The grove appeared the same as before—lit by an unnatural glow, trees that might not be trees, a being from another realm—but now something felt different."
7"Each step taking her towards the acting, partially formed arch resonated with a power that made the heartstone glow so strongly it was becoming uncomfortable to…"
8"With one final glance that didn't quite see the branches springing toward her from either side, Aurora Carter, pragmatist and pragmatist who normally weighed ri…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, proud that her voice only trembled slightly"
1"she demanded, voice carrying through the grove"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"She whispered (whisper)"
1"The voice spoke directly (speak)"
2"The thing chuckled (chuckle)"
3"The voice whispered (whisper)"
4"The entity continued (continue)"
5"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.226
leniency0.452
rawRatio0.857
effectiveRatio0.387
69.6912%