Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMET8895VPJ2ES6Q8GDFCE8

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Duration:
59.8s
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$0.001351
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Parasail

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt clicked open, and Eva's flat yawned before him, familiar and foreign in equal measure. The overhead light cast long shadows across the crowded room, making sculptures of the stacks of books that teetered precariously on every available surface. The sharp tang of old paper and something faintly metallic hung in the air. "Eva? It's me, Rory. I know you don't want to see me, but I need to talk." The words fell into silence. No shuffle of feet, no rustle of paper answering from deeper within the flat. The tabby cat Ptolemy uncurled himself from an armchair – a throaty protest rumbling from his chest at the intrusion – before maneuvering with practiced grace between the obstacles and padding toward the door. "Rory." Her voice, once a comfortable cloak to him, now sounded as brittle as the spines of her collection of ancient texts. Eva stood framed in the doorway to what he knew was her bedroom, but had somehow transformed into a chaotic command center of magical research. Her red hair was pulled into a messy bun, escaping strands haloing her face like a flame. Bright aquamarine eyes, exhausted but wide with shock, locked onto his in a gaze he could barely hold. "I should have called," he conceded quickly, his knuckles white on the doorframe. "But with everything that's happened..." He trailed off, the excuse tasting hollow even as he spoke it. The corner of her mouth tightened. "Everything that's happened, Rory, or everything you finally couldn't avoid anymore? Bit of a difference, isn't there?" He exhaled slowly, shoving one hand through his dark hair. "It's both, all right? Am I that transparent?" Ptolemy brushed against his leg, silent reproach manifest as fur, before settling to watch the exchange with uncharacteristic stillness. The flat itself seemed to hold its breath, suddenly too small to contain the past year's distance and all the unresolved tension packed within it. "I've got some herbs steeping," Eva said abruptly, turning away. "Might as well drink them. Come in. Don't touch anything." As he slipped inside, shoulder-length black hair falling forward to curtain his face, she added without looking back, "And for heaven's sake, bring that cane. It's giving the books bad vibes." Rory shut the door behind him, the click of each deadbolt an accusation. "It's just a cane, Eva." "Not to Ptolemy," she countered, disappearing around a towering stack that barely reached her shoulder. "He thinks it's got extra puppies inside. Always licking the silver bit whenever you're not watching." His lips curved despite everything. "That cat has issues." "Like his favorite person, you mean?" The warmth that had briefly touched him dissipated at that. Rory navigated the obstacle course of books to where she'd set two earthenware mugs on a small, cluttered table that served as the kitchen area. A handful of copper and silver instruments lay half-buried in loose papers and oversized scrolls that defied their definition. "The whispers on the street are saying you're using that old vigilante identity again," he said carefully. "That's why I came. Not just for..." He gestured vaguely. "This." Eva's hands, delicate but surprisingly strong from years of page turning, hesitated mid-pour. The dark liquid captured the light, almost like smoldering in the clay. When she looked up, her aquamarine eyes burned with an intensity that stole his breath. "So what? You came to check if I'm a dangerous lunatic again, or save me from my own reckless impulses? Which is it, Rory?" "I came because I was worried," he snapped, reaching for his habitual restraint and finding it scraped thin by her dismissal. "And yes, perhaps a little stupidly, thinking that maybe we could talk as something more than strangers who used to share bathroom shelves." "Two strangers," she corrected, handing him the steaming mug. "Who keep bumping into each other, literally and figuratively. The marks you left on your neck three توم temporarily taken by an absence of forbidden languages, but my need for you hasn't." Their fingers brushed as he accepted the brew, and Rory felt something electric pass between them – a collision of comfort and conflict that had always bubbled beneath their surface interactions. The mug in her hands betrayed nothing but steady certainty. "We were trying to make each other ghosts of who we were," Eva continued softly, her eyes never leaving his. "And we almost succeeded. Or had you forgotten that part?" Rory sank into the chair opposite – it groaned under his weight, an octogenarian's protestation about guests. "Do you honestly think I've forgotten anything about us?" "Your selective memory worked well enough for an entire year," she shot back, finally breaking eye contact to blow across the rim of her mug. Tiny steam clouds dissipated around her face – a temporary mist around an inescapable fire. "You used to laugh more," he found himself saying, tracking her movements. "I used to have less people to be disappointed in." Her shoulders lifted, a subtle, controlled gesture that nevertheless carried the weight of worlds. "Happiness became a bit of a luxury when I discovered my childhood friend was running around playing at being some nonsense a demon named Malphora." "And what about me stupidly in love with someone who discarded the person I'd built myself to be?" White-faced, he realized the admission had torn out loudly. The ring Truth had cut deeply between them like shards of glass. She put her own cup down carefully, fingers steepling together. "I discarded nothing," She sounded low, soft thor she spoke. "I suppose we have to talk?" Her hands go into her jeans pockets, she came and sat much closer and studied his face. "It's been interesting to explore all the things I've potentially unlocked," she continued, sounding suddenly professional rather than personal. "The witch ancestry on Mother's side, the fledgling abilities... But you." Her gaze softened, though her voice remained brittle. "I wanted a normal life that week ago when I fled to London together. Brendan and Jennifer and maybe a couple of children somewhere down the line." Rory nodded slightly, the reckless feeling of intentionally walking into the past overcame him. "Would have been boring, though. You'd have been disappointed within a year." "Not boring," Eva corrected, leaning forward slightly. "Peaceful. Solid. And that would have felt like... like I deserved something nice after everything." She laughed humorlessly this time. "God, that was naive, wasn't it? I should have known better." "I thought you deserved something," Rory said suddenly, the words escaping with an urgency that surprised even him. "Something better, something easier than dragging my sometimes illegal mini-relationship baggage around with you." The Mug felt cold in his hands, suddenly untouchable. "Was that so terrible. I'm used to it." "Except people like you and I don't get normal, Rory. The universejected long ago." Eva's fingers brushed his, hovering barely a breath away without quite touching. Distant sirens sang a melancholic refrain against night windows, and time seemed to compress within Eva's cluttered flat – every research scribble and astrological chart witness to their fractured history. He reached into his jacket pocket and pulled out the ivory-handled cane, placing it between them on the cluttered table. The blade, concealed within, gleamed dully in the lamplight – a perfect, dangerous crescent. Eva's eyes flashed to the weapon, then back to his face. "Why did you really come tonight, Rory?" Not Rory ran away from home London escaped trod lexis threats imposed by demons. The answer wept from his very soul but would not come so freely to his lips. "Again," Eva prompted when he remained silent, the delicate drumbeat of her fingers against the mug creating a staccato rhythm. "For professional guidance about supernatural matters cowering behind your mama protective face ,or the undeniable connection we all pretend disappeared when you vanished without a word?" Rory looked at the woman who knew him íntimately. "Maybe both." Thin laugh lines cracked around Eva's exquisite tanzanite crystals of ordinary eyes. Eyes that had seen things ordinary people invented could never see and possibly understand darkness streets beyond London. "We're both something else, aren't we? Delirious." "You are," he confirmed softly, though the edges of stand-up comedy between them shimmered with increasing tension and unspoken desires holding promising. The turquoise sea of her irises anchored him completely yet spring-contempt watched as tip sw routines spun Rory uttered his ruin personal meanings swimming against her somber aquatic swimming entirely silence, but the silly ringing heavy edibility inside wonder stood at despot remains. Their mutual previous lifetime ceased to want others although shared heated breaths between each other still dampening. All of Rory's hope for the previous increased in weight truth clutched tightly in white-transparent skin diamonds, counted years quickly spending themselves humming stuck in fixed positions both marveling becoming oddly magnetised wonder but feeling leave tremors between wanting Elizabeth preserved more despite deployment again ancient sacred sources stirred more internally hidden sapphires slow eyes furled desires limitationsless stood in willing heaviness damaging it being senseless again for."Can you ever forgive at home lost ten great desperate holding wearies fatigue?" doing it together? we I admit froze tiny sore claustrophobia filling maybe, anything interweaving against furled frivolous expressions needing cut renovations felt sorely worn distortions, now." Eva rose suddenly, leaving her cooling mug abandoned on the table as philosophers once dreamed or dreamed about unanswerable crystalized solutions like bonbons wrinkled wishes. The tabby cat sacked up protecting to cruise along her ankles with defiance eyes bluntly suspended, yet she caged heartbeats longer in this moment carefully hiding conflict stuffed between them questioning Repairing things between them together slowly involved against all shrinking away. "No time to watch past while everyone worrying. Sorely pricks needing gilded re-stitch flag unfortunate remembering everyone remembers tiny ages slowly crystalizing between eyes without breaking anything trespassing maybe tattered then live terrifically." without having much anger cautionously against bothering bust confident question Abruptly backspun shoulders, archer and warning older submerged things between talking in her throat suddenly visible with ordinary strength more anything tried possibly instead standing between nothing tragic tension warped eyes restlessly she felt more wanting ordinary regarding truth speak what meaningful could about both ordinary indeed between other necessary possible despite being thinking now. Maybe, maybe maybe quite, different perhaps greatly ordinary versus fragile glissing interchangeably between ordinary unnecessary free space embroiled nothing extra regarding nothing Though inspired uncertain mixing needing difficult ordinary needed, becoming quite emotional more. Their collisions boiling between something quite perhaps extremely agreed when finally worlds listener breaking words softly just accusing closer than fumbling deliberately hearing between palming shadows striking older passing different meanings, perhaps drowning trails separations getting ordinary close happening meanwhile quite-loud worlds knowing quite improvising against lit circles becoming later now crashing between welcoming each possessed newly offering quite ancient sacred rounds shed tearfully while impossible separating could metamorphosing. Rogue listeners bursting worlds quaking between molded quickly simultaneity between bodies deeply rooted in floodings transforming between various stilling bridging hearts quick decisively now, tearing nothing someone burst all around passionate endless needs bridging somewhere familiar, beckoning deeply.
created_at"2026-05-27T10:13:51.508Z" 5/27/2026, 10:13:51 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount9
adverbTags
0"he conceded quickly [quickly]"
1"Eva said abruptly [abruptly]"
2"he said carefully [carefully]"
3"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
4"Eva continued softly [softly]"
5"She laughed humorlessly [humorlessly]"
6"Rory said suddenly [suddenly]"
7"he confirmed softly [softly]"
8"weight truth clutched tightly [tightly]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.472
leniency0.943
rawRatio0.36
effectiveRatio0.34
32.25% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1845
totalAiIsmAdverbs25
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count3
1
adverb"slowly"
count3
2
adverb"suddenly"
count6
3
adverb"carefully"
count3
4
adverb"softly"
count3
5
adverb"slightly"
count2
6
adverb"really"
count1
7
adverb"very"
count1
8
adverb"completely"
count1
9
adverb"tightly"
count1
10
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slowly"
2"suddenly"
3"carefully"
4"softly"
5"slightly"
6"really"
7"very"
8"completely"
9"tightly"
10"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1845
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"comfortable"
count1
3
word"chaotic"
count1
4
word"tension"
count3
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"navigated"
count1
7
word"intensity"
count1
8
word"electric"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"carried the weight"
count1
11
word"fractured"
count1
12
word"perfect"
count1
13
word"shimmered"
count1
14
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
2"comfortable"
3"chaotic"
4"tension"
5"warmth"
6"navigated"
7"intensity"
8"electric"
9"weight"
10"carried the weight"
11"fractured"
12"perfect"
13"shimmered"
14"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen124
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1852
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount1233
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.97
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva12
Ptolemy2
Rory10
Tiny1
White-faced1
Truth1
Mug1
London2
Elizabeth1
Repairing1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Rory"
3"Truth"
4"Mug"
5"Elizabeth"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1852
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean37.8
std30.16
cv0.798
sampleLengths
055
117
253
31
421
560
630
723
818
944
1020
1131
1218
1331
149
156
1654
1728
1840
1924
2044
2141
2241
2330
2426
2540
2612
2749
2818
2931
3016
3182
3226
3338
3449
3514
3612
3730
3834
3918
4030
4146
4211
4337
44188
4567
4643
4789
48107
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"was pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs231
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences98
ratio0.061
matches
0"The tabby cat Ptolemy uncurled himself from an armchair – a throaty protest rumbling from his chest at the intrusion – before maneuvering with practiced grace between the obstacles and padding toward the door."
1"Their fingers brushed as he accepted the brew, and Rory felt something electric pass between them – a collision of comfort and conflict that had always bubbled beneath their surface interactions."
2"Rory sank into the chair opposite – it groaned under his weight, an octogenarian's protestation about guests."
3"Tiny steam clouds dissipated around her face – a temporary mist around an inescapable fire."
4"Distant sirens sang a melancholic refrain against night windows, and time seemed to compress within Eva's cluttered flat – every research scribble and astrological chart witness to their fractured history."
5"The blade, concealed within, gleamed dully in the lamplight – a perfect, dangerous crescent."
34.21% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1288
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"ordinary unnecessary free space"
1"needing difficult ordinary needed, becoming"
adverbCount100
adverbRatio0.07763975155279502
lyAdverbCount58
lyAdverbRatio0.04503105590062112
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean18.9
std18.06
cv0.955
sampleLengths
017
124
214
317
45
514
634
71
821
925
1017
1118
1213
1317
146
1517
1610
178
1819
1925
2010
2110
2231
2313
245
2515
2616
275
284
296
3010
3125
3219
3317
3410
351
3613
3712
3815
3924
4021
4123
429
4332
4431
4510
4620
4710
4817
499
80.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners49
47.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Sorely pricks needing gilded re-stitch"
ratio0.014
71.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences70
matches
0"Her voice, once a comfortable"
1"Her red hair was pulled"
2"he conceded quickly, his knuckles"
3"He trailed off, the excuse"
4"He exhaled slowly, shoving one"
5"she countered, disappearing around a"
6"His lips curved despite everything."
7"he said carefully"
8"He gestured vaguely"
9"he snapped, reaching for his"
10"she corrected, handing him the"
11"Their fingers brushed as he"
12"she shot back, finally breaking"
13"he found himself saying, tracking"
14"Her shoulders lifted, a subtle,"
15"She put her own cup"
16"She sounded low, soft thor"
17"Her hands go into her"
18"she continued, sounding suddenly professional"
19"Her gaze softened, though her"
ratio0.371
38.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences70
matches
0"The third deadbolt clicked open,"
1"The overhead light cast long"
2"The sharp tang of old"
3"The words fell into silence."
4"The tabby cat Ptolemy uncurled"
5"Her voice, once a comfortable"
6"Eva stood framed in the"
7"Her red hair was pulled"
8"he conceded quickly, his knuckles"
9"He trailed off, the excuse"
10"The corner of her mouth"
11"He exhaled slowly, shoving one"
12"Ptolemy brushed against his leg,"
13"The flat itself seemed to"
14"Eva said abruptly, turning away"
15"Rory shut the door behind"
16"she countered, disappearing around a"
17"His lips curved despite everything."
18"The warmth that had briefly"
19"Rory navigated the obstacle course"
ratio0.843
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
55.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The overhead light cast long shadows across the crowded room, making sculptures of the stacks of books that teetered precariously on every available surface."
1"Rory navigated the obstacle course of books to where she'd set two earthenware mugs on a small, cluttered table that served as the kitchen area."
2"A handful of copper and silver instruments lay half-buried in loose papers and oversized scrolls that defied their definition."
3"Their fingers brushed as he accepted the brew, and Rory felt something electric pass between them – a collision of comfort and conflict that had always bubbled …"
4"Their collisions boiling between something quite perhaps extremely agreed when finally worlds listener breaking words softly just accusing closer than fumbling …"
45.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he conceded quickly, his knuckles white on the doorframe"
1"He trailed, the excuse tasting hollow even as he spoke it"
2"Her gaze softened, though her voice remained brittle"
3"Rory said suddenly, the words escaping with an urgency that surprised even him"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"he conceded quickly (concede)"
1"he snapped (snap)"
2"she corrected (correct)"
3"Eva continued softly (continue)"
4"she continued (continue)"
5"Eva corrected (correct)"
6"She laughed humorlessly (laugh)"
7"he confirmed softly (confirm)"
8"we I admit (admit)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.226
leniency0.453
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.34
70.5854%