Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMET8E6QZFRHGG9F08B15W1

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door burst open, revealing a man who stole the air from the small flat instantly. Platinum blond hair slicked back, heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—scanned the room with predatory precision. Lucien Moreau. Here. After three years of silence. "Rory." Her name slithered off his tongue like a habit he hadn't kicked. The crisp white shirt under his charcoal suit strained ever so slightly across shoulders that filled the doorway. No cane today. Just him. Both hands empty but threatening with their mere proximity to his body. The tabby cat Ptolemy, oblivious to the atmosphere thickening with history and hurt, curled further around her ankles. "I've been looking for you," he said, stepping inside without invitation. The worn wooden floor creaked under his expensive shoes—a sound that belonged to someone else's life. "A long time." The door clicked shut behind him, sealing her crime scenes. Fifty pages of research notes about missing persons. Photographs of suspicious symbols. Her life, strewn across the floor in scrolls and loose paper. His eyes lingered on the layout, a practiced habit from their last dancing around each other. The faint scent of his—bergamot and something electric—cut through the spice from the curry house downstairs. "Keep the cape disappearing, have you?" Her voice came out harder than she intended. Rory slid her reading glasses off, pinching the bridge of her nose. The crescent-scarred wrist brushed against her cheek, a reminder. A habit. "Funny." His dealt with dark romance always found the unexpected. "You've not changed. Still collecting mysteries for breakfast." Three deadbolts separate me from most problems. You just strolled through them. Three years should have made history feel further away than that. Four generations of O'Reillys have got nothing on your timing, Frenchman. His cane—usually ivory-handled, blade hidden—reminded her teeth of something not saying. It was what they never did with each other. Straight to the tooth, then straight to the throat. One gold pocket watch always had something to do with this. Brief. Accurate. Nailed to the wall between her criminal ledgers and occult symbols, she left him her mother's watch. The last time he'd seen it in her possession. *That was different.* "Something important, Luc? Haven't lost anymore wives, have you?" Words fell like shrapnel between them. Each went digging precisely where the last had buried itself—agitated, and waiting to hurt. He stepped closer now. odstemelled her flat in three strides, attention tracking the constant movement from layers of information. "Still protecting your little findings, I see." Amber-eyed warning light surged, sending her focused brain to figuring its different motives. *Work. Stalking. Marriage? None of the cards that fit the deck this time.* "What do you want?" *Modern art in her criminal closets? Wine? Suits or secrets?* The advantage, mine. His pauses read like royal Scottish phrases. Precisely Austrian-training in everything except verbal precision. "Found something." Fingers folded, hands resting on cane handles. His suit was lacking its usual immaculate precision. Cufflinks absent from wrists currently meeting in arcs. Bore nothing for style. Posture for communication. "What news?" she asked, folding her limbs inward like protectors. Flat steadily lurking below their shoulders bristled with hidden things. "Suspect." The careful word didn't carry the finality it normally did when they pursued ghosts together—two bodies with common ghosts. One half-demon's curious reputation. Boundary-crossing leaves two lives rewritten. Professional. History private. The cigarette pack was briefly sitting on another clue-spattered counter, where perhaps deeper investigation left something crumbled, flawed. *I remember meeting the international society's analyst. Straight British teeth showing when teeth-grasping kept stalker secrets younger, quieter, and lots forbidding.* He marked the flat but softly—tread that remembered to breathe in its footsteps. Looking at the walls of intellectual obsession, blue and black eyes tracking crimes layering each other on her walls: ritualistic, financial, human. "My project." Lucien walked toward the central table clutter. Symbols, receipts, modern art. Negligent genius in ink. Crumpled kills twisted in planning creases. Each scroll meant potentially something catastrophic. Each photograph planned maybe manufactured information to trade—some escape. "They needed specifics on the new carton symbols. That's the ledgers pairing consistently right?" Gold-pocketed sociopath, or wayfaring dangerous still? Asking Isto's question mobilised Rory's tired mountain of files. Collapsed defeated original flat under mine, hers hasn't lifted those eyes off-managerial Frenchman since she let herself import. "You follow specifications?" her retort entangled prospects. Posts romantic widow intentions behind illicit circles to possibly mean objective protection? "Neither type I remember. Wife came first." Wife came first and last. Wife between and now. Lucien's breath changed instantly from London's wide-eyed architect학생 to signature vermilion. Practical sartorial adjustments, always. Panel-up. Purpose composed into planes, angles shifting through combustion Wilson to hold her accountable created. "Always forward. New plane's entire stake problem—not accurate post-dimension. One sacrifices possible correctness." Ritual evolved precise. Frenchman in-flight could fly lavish first-class twice tonight if needed: deadly, dangerous, all for switching the game. London's scene flipped twice, landed current missing pieces exchanged. "Night coming, Rory. Curtains closing down. Lot volunteered this harsh, cutting. You decide.” *Hostilities must wait. One step ahead or watch London burn again. Your floor, no pickle jar.* “Casa Follow me through Camelot's Key Independents first,” her voice scraped. Places bring precision. Accessories carry weight.” “Understood.” Patiently turned handle, anti-clockwise. Waiting slightly. "Rare sake." We leave shadows for oil street gas lamps refracted bricks smiling back. Threshold crossed thrice. Third nightfall refuses become in air for second runaround—to forget their first leap across, yacht-clothes morning-run privacy, his hand grabbed heart, never returned wore Brendan's gloves. Oliver twist framework slipped brick-lane secrets once intimately razor-sharp.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Words fell like [like]"
1"Patiently turned [Patiently]"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
73.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount940
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count2
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"ever so slightly"
1"precisely"
2"softly"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.45% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount940
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"dancing"
count1
3
word"electric"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"framework"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"silence"
2"dancing"
3"electric"
4"reminder"
5"footsteps"
6"weight"
7"framework"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
90.44% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences2
adjustedGibberishSentences2
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount1
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0.019
matches
0"Lucien's breath changed instantly from London's wide-eyed architect학생 to signature vermilion."
1"\"Always forward. New plane's entire stake problem—not accurate post-dimension. One sacrifices possible correctness.\""
64.08% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords63
totalWords927
ratio0.068
matches
0"That was different."
1"Work. Stalking. Marriage? None of the cards that fit the deck this time."
2"Modern art in her criminal closets? Wine? Suits or secrets?"
3"I remember meeting the international society's analyst. Straight British teeth showing when teeth-grasping kept stalker secrets younger, quieter, and lots forbidding."
4"Hostilities must wait. One step ahead or watch London burn again. Your floor, no pickle jar."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount814
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.37
worstName"Frenchman"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"London"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Ptolemy1
Rory2
Three2
Frenchman3
Words1
Scottish1
Austrian-training1
Flat1
One3
British1
Symbols1
Isto1
Posts1
London3
Wilson1
Places1
Patiently1
Brendan1
Lucien3
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Words"
3"Flat"
4"Isto"
5"Wilson"
6"Places"
7"Patiently"
8"Brendan"
9"Lucien"
places
0"Three"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount927
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean28.09
std14.28
cv0.508
sampleLengths
039
11
247
318
430
565
637
718
834
929
1039
113
1229
1326
1426
154
1627
1732
1820
1932
2018
2121
2235
2352
2433
2526
269
2730
2813
2929
3013
3154
3238
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs142
matches
0"was briefly sitting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences106
ratio0.085
matches
0"Platinum blond hair slicked back, heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—scanned the room with predatory precision."
1"The worn wooden floor creaked under his expensive shoes—a sound that belonged to someone else's life."
2"The faint scent of his—bergamot and something electric—cut through the spice from the curry house downstairs."
3"His cane—usually ivory-handled, blade hidden—reminded her teeth of something not saying."
4"Each went digging precisely where the last had buried itself—agitated, and waiting to hurt."
5"\"Suspect.\" The careful word didn't carry the finality it normally did when they pursued ghosts together—two bodies with common ghosts."
6"He marked the flat but softly—tread that remembered to breathe in its footsteps."
7"Each photograph planned maybe manufactured information to trade—some escape."
8"Threshold crossed thrice. Third nightfall refuses become in air for second runaround—to forget their first leap across, yacht-clothes morning-run privacy, his hand grabbed heart, never returned wore Brendan's gloves. Oliver twist framework slipped brick-lane secrets once intimately razor-sharp."
98.12% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount783
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.0421455938697318
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.019157088122605363
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean8.75
std5.87
cv0.672
sampleLengths
016
115
22
31
45
51
612
718
83
92
1012
1118
1211
1316
143
1510
168
174
1811
1916
2016
2114
2212
239
242
2510
268
277
285
2911
3011
3111
329
339
3411
351
361
3717
389
393
4015
4114
424
4315
447
4513
461
471
481
4910
98.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.7452830188679245
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners79
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences83
matches
0"Precisely Austrian-training in everything except"
1"Patiently turned handle, anti-clockwise. Waiting"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences83
matches
0"Her name slithered off his"
1"he said, stepping inside without"
2"Her life, strewn across the"
3"His eyes lingered on the"
4"Her voice came out harder"
5"His dealt with dark romance"
6"You just strolled through them."
7"His cane—usually ivory-handled, blade hidden—reminded"
8"It was what they never"
9"He stepped closer now."
10"His pauses read like royal"
11"His suit was lacking its"
12"she asked, folding her limbs"
13"*I remember meeting the international"
14"He marked the flat but"
15"her retort entangled prospects"
16"Your floor, no pickle jar.*"
17"her voice scraped"
18"We leave shadows for oil"
ratio0.229
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences83
matches
0"The door burst open, revealing"
1"Platinum blond hair slicked back,"
2"Her name slithered off his"
3"The crisp white shirt under"
4"Both hands empty but threatening"
5"The tabby cat Ptolemy, oblivious"
6"he said, stepping inside without"
7"The worn wooden floor creaked"
8"The door clicked shut behind"
9"Photographs of suspicious symbols."
10"Her life, strewn across the"
11"His eyes lingered on the"
12"The faint scent of his—bergamot"
13"Her voice came out harder"
14"Rory slid her reading glasses"
15"The crescent-scarred wrist brushed against"
16"His dealt with dark romance"
17"You just strolled through them."
18"His cane—usually ivory-handled, blade hidden—reminded"
19"It was what they never"
ratio0.699
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
81.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The door burst open, revealing a man who stole the air from the small flat instantly."
1"The crisp white shirt under his charcoal suit strained ever so slightly across shoulders that filled the doorway."
2"The worn wooden floor creaked under his expensive shoes—a sound that belonged to someone else's life."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Fingers folded, hands resting on cane handles"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.095
leniency0.19
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.2965%