Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMETA4ZAERNJ1ZD37PWJ0AF

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Duration:
1m 7s
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$0.001646
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Parasail

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn didn't notice the rain until it had already soaked the collar of her jacket and trickled down her spine. The sting of cold water against her skin did little to clear the fog of determination that had settled over her mind for the past three years. Every Tuesday for the last fifty-seven weeks, she had followed the pattern. Every Tuesday, Blackwood's Clique gathered at The Raven's Nest. And every Tuesday, for the past nine days, she had been closing in on them. Tonight would not be different. "They always head east when they split," she muttered into her collar mic, her sharp jaw set as she tracked the Trinity-cloaked figure disappearing into the alley opposite her. "You sure about this, Quinn?" came the crackle of Sergeant Wilson's voice in her ear. "Backup's three blocks out. The Old Bill is giving us a wide berth in this rain. They're calling it the 'Dog's Bollocks downpour.'" "The vanishing act happens at that green neon sign," she said, her focus locked on the chase. "I've got eyes on. I'll go dark until I have eyes on the package." She85 slammed the car door and plunged into the darkness behind her quarry. The rain hammered down, turning pavement into rivers. Water drummed a frantic rhythm against the hood of her coat as she.Finally burst into the open air, her military-precise bearing undisturbed by the chaotic environment around her. At 41, she moved with a purpose that outpaced her years. She'd been chasing shadows since Morris, and tonight, those shadows were feeling her presence. Tomás Herrera wiped the rain from his eyes as he darted across the slick street. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, his late grandmother's gift, bounced against his chest as he ran. He'd been ten blocks behind them when Quinn had made her move tonight. But she wasn't just chasing a person. She was chasing a ghost he'd been trying to keep buried for two years. And now, she was about to charge into the Veil Market, and he was the only one who might be able to keep her alive long enough to understand what she'd stumbled into. The distinctive green neon sign of The Raven's Nest pulsed in the distance. The back entrance to the hidden market below was just around the corner. He quickened his pace, ignoring the sting of his old scar where his sleeve had ridden up. His generous olive skin, already pale under the street lights, grew nearly translucent in the downpour. The bone token he'd kept in his pocket for emergencies burned against his thigh. Quinn's boots splashed through puddles, the water's brown surface reflecting the grimy lights of Camden's night scene. She felt rather than saw her suspect veer left, toward the abandoned Tube station entrance. Her breath came in controlled puffs visible in the cool air. Eighteen years of police work had taught her that patterns mattered. And this particular pattern had just led her deeper into the shadows than any case in her career. As she approached the station, a faint sound cut through the drumming rain – a low humming that seemed to vibrate through the pavement. The iron gate at the station entrance stood slightly ajar, unsettlingly so on this deserted night. She'd passed this station a hundred times, never once giving it more than a glance beyond noting its state of disrepair. Tonight, it seemed to beckon. Her worn leather watch glowed softly in the darkness, its hour hand edging toward 2 AM. The last time she'd had a lead that felt this substantial was the night Morris had disappeared. The night she'd let her partner investigate alone because she'd been chasing another pattern. A mistake she'd carried like a stone in her pocket ever since. The humming grew stronger as she neared the entrance. Something that felt like static electricity prickled across her skin. She paused beneath the station sign, rain pouring from her hood as she stared into the darkness ahead. The jedemarket lay beyond this entrance, and she knew – absolutely knew – that her suspect had gone this way. But what waited for her was no longer just a dead end or another blind alley. This was something else entirely. Tomás skidded to a stop at the station entrance. The bone token grew warm in his pocket, responding to whatever energies lay beneath the surface. He'd been inside once, passed through the veil briefly to retrieve supplies for the Clique. Most humans didn't know places like these existed. Most humans couldn't even believe such places existed. But Quinn was about to find out. And if the rumors were true about how her partner had been taken, she might be walking into the very same traps that had claimed Morris before her. The detective reached into her jacket and pulled out a small flashlight. She flicked it on, the beam cutting a swath through the darkness of the station tunnel. A narrow staircase descended into blackness. Her fingers tightened around the light, knuckles pale in the illumination. She hesitated only for a second before descending the stairs, each step deliberate. Three-quarters of the way down, the humming stopped abruptly. The silence that followed was nearly as disorienting as the sound had been. As she reached the bottom, she realized the air had changed – thick with something she couldn't identify. Not quite the scent of decay, not precisely stale air. Something alien and supernatural. At the bottom of the stairs, she found a small stone room with a single exit. The side of the room was lined with shelves covered in dust-laden wooden boxes marked "Station Property." Old, frayed ropes hung in loops from the ceiling, and spans of rust had eaten holes through most of the iron rivets holding the station together. Tomás watched from the shadows at the top of the stairs. After accepting this role two years ago, he'd learned to track people without being seen. His breath came steady despite his racing heart. This was it – the decision that would determine whether Quinn lived to see sunrise or became another name in the files of people who disappeared in the veins of this city. The marketplace lay beyond that door, hidden behind a veil that most humans couldn't see unless they somehow touched it. Quinn's training and experience made her dangerous enough. But without knowing what lurked ahead, she would be walking into potential disaster. As Quinn approached the door, her hand instinctively went to the money clip in her pocket. Her eyes glanced at her watchprecisely three minutes past two. The back of her neck prickled. She put her ear to the door, listening for the slightest sound beyond. A faint murmuring, the clinking of glass, and what might have been footsteps. Definitely occupied. But not necessarily hostile. This was a market, after all. A market for what? The police would laugh her out of office if she mentioned what she suspected – that something supernatural was happening in this city. Something that had killed her partner and now seemed to be closing in on her. But she'd felt it before, smelled it when she found Morris's empty car, abandoned at the end of a dead-end street in the same way she stood now, poised on the edge of the unknown. She reached for the handle. Tomás had to move now. If Quinn didn't know what she was getting herself into, she wouldn't survive her first thirty seconds. "Stop," he said, his voice carrying the accent of his homeland but heavy with authority. "You don't know what you're doing." The detective's military back dropped her shoulders as she turned. In one fluid motion, she had her warrant card out at the same time a hand settled on the grip of a pistol inside her coat. Warm brown eyes met hers, blazing with concern that almost matched the intensity of her brown gaze. "You lost, mate?" she asked, her expression inscrutable despite the tension radiating from her frame. Tomás hesitated, calculating. He could play this one of two ways. "My turn," he replied, letting his own Spanish accent thicken slightly. "This market isn't for tourists, Nena." "My business doesn't concern you," Quinn said, turning her attention back to the door. "Clear this area now." "He was my friend too," Tomás said, stepping forward, his scar glinting in the dim light. "Herrera. Not just a name they give me." Quinn froze, her back still to him. The name meant nothing to her officially. Morris never had mentioned a contact, but then Morris also hadn't mentioned much in the weeks leading up to his disappearance. It was like he'd kept two completely separate lives somehow. "The fedora never suited him," Tomás continued, unable to stop his mouth from running now that he'd started. "Your partner. Morris. He was easier to spot in that ridiculous coat he wore to blend in." Quinn turned slowly, her eyes narrowing. "What did you just say?" "The coat," Tomás repeated, his gaze steady. "The something coat with the peacock feather. He thought nobody would notice, but it stood out. Everyone on the street would remember. He was too trusting, though." A muscle in Quinn's sharp jaw twitched. Morris had worn a navy peacoat with a black silk circle inside the collar that looked vaguely like a feather when he wore it. Only she had known about the circle. She'd given it to him for his birthday six months before he disappeared. "How do you know that?" she demanded, her stance widening as she prepared for a fight if necessary. "I was there when he got the gift," Tomás answered honestly. "He bought himself a pint to celebrate. He was smiling. He said it was the best Christmas gift ever." The silence that followed was absolute between them. Only the drips of water from Quinn's coat made any sound at all. Years of tracking Ermittled this clique. Chasing leads that never led anywhere. Following people who disappeared into thin air. And now, someone who appeared to know intimate details about her late partner had cornered her in an abandoned station on a rain-soaked night. Tomás shifted his position slightly, letting his hand drift to his medallion. "I'm not here to hurt you, Detective. But you can't go in there. Not without knowing what you're walking into." "Why do you care?" Quinn asked, her voice low. "Because the people you're looking for – they run this place," Tomás explained. "And they're not what you think they are. Morris understood that. That's why he stopped chasing them so vigorously. That's why he tried to keep you out of it." Quinn shook her head, rain now ploughing down her face. "I have evidence that points directly to your so-called friends. Human trafficking, drug operations, money laundering. They're criminals." "They exist in this city, same as any other supernatural entity," Tomás replied. "But they're not the monsters you're looking for. The real monsters are the ones who control the veil between worlds. The ones who don't care if humans live or die." Quinn studied him – the olive skin slick with rain, the dark curly hair plastered to his forehead, the scar, the Saint Christopher medallion, and those warm brown eyes that held no deceit that she could detect. He spoke like a man who'd seen things, experienced things that gnawed at his soul. "The myth," she finally said. "Real-life goblins and ghosts wearing a human skin?" "The people you're watching go into that bar upstairs aren't the same people who exist down here," Tomás explained patiently. "This is the Veil Market. They're not trafficking humans – they're protecting what's left of them from the things that truly enjoy the hunt." Quinn watched as a single tear mixed with the rain on her cheek. It had been three years since she'd cried over Morris's disappearance. Three years of signing forms, chasing rumours, following patterns. Three years of unanswered questions. Now someone was standing in an abandoned station telling her that everything she thought she knew was backwards. "We should go back upstairs," Tomás said gently. "Get you back to the world you understand." Quinn's fingers hesitated on the doorknob, torn between duty and something she couldn't yet name. The people she'd been investigating weren't just criminals – they were something else entirely. And if they were protecting humans, if they were the good guys in whatever role-playing game this city was, then her entire investigation had been built on a foundation of lies and deception. She took her hand off the knob and looked at Tomás. "Did you... did you know I was coming?" "Always," he replied. "The Clique has eyes everywhere. And as the one who looks after their... health needs, I was the one assigned to watch you too. To see which ledge you were getting ready to jump off." Quinn gave a humourless smile. "And now you're telling me the cliff's edge is where I'm supposed to be?" Tomás nodded. "Maybe. Come on. Let's get out of this rain. There are things I can show you. Things I'll have to show you, if you want to understand what you've been chasing all these years."
created_at"2026-05-27T10:13:53.451Z" 5/27/2026, 10:13:53 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
53.66% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Tomás answered honestly [honestly]"
1"Tomás explained patiently [patiently]"
2"Tomás said gently [gently]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.439
leniency0.878
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.146
75.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2200
totalAiIsmAdverbs11
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"precisely"
count2
4
adverb"completely"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
6
adverb"truly"
count1
7
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"very"
3"precisely"
4"completely"
5"slowly"
6"truly"
7"gently"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.36% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2200
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"down her spine"
count1
1
word"chaotic"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"quickened"
count1
4
word"absolutely"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"racing"
count1
8
word"potential"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"intensity"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
12
word"calculating"
count1
13
word"glinting"
count1
14
word"silk"
count1
15
word"single tear"
count1
highlights
0"down her spine"
1"chaotic"
2"pulsed"
3"quickened"
4"absolutely"
5"flicked"
6"silence"
7"racing"
8"potential"
9"footsteps"
10"intensity"
11"tension"
12"calculating"
13"glinting"
14"silk"
15"single tear"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences136
matches(empty)
79.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences136
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"watch –"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2211
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions69
wordCount1744
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.09
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn19
Tuesday3
Blackwood1
Clique2
Raven2
Nest2
Trinity-cloaked1
Sergeant1
Wilson1
Morris8
Herrera1
Saint2
Christopher2
Veil1
Market1
Camden1
Tube1
Old1
Tomás16
Spanish1
Ermittled1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Blackwood"
3"Clique"
4"Raven"
5"Sergeant"
6"Wilson"
7"Morris"
8"Herrera"
9"Saint"
10"Christopher"
11"Camden"
12"Old"
13"Tomás"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.955
windowScore0.667
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences114
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"humming that seemed to vibrate through the pavement"
1"felt like static electricity prickled a"
2"Not quite the scent of decay, not precisely stale air"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2211
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences157
matches
0"knew – that her"
1"suspected – that something"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean42.52
std21.93
cv0.516
sampleLengths
090
129
238
331
474
5100
673
772
866
959
1078
1156
1235
1345
1467
1559
1666
1741
1834
1942
2073
215
2222
2321
2453
2515
2628
2718
2824
2945
3035
3111
3234
3351
3418
3530
3664
3732
389
3942
4028
4143
4252
4313
4444
4556
4616
4762
4819
4938
92.36% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences136
matches
0"been ten"
1"been taken"
2"was lined"
3"being seen"
4"been built"
60.63% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs287
matches
0"were feeling"
1"wasn't just chasing"
2"was chasing"
3"was happening"
4"was getting"
5"was standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences157
ratio0.051
matches
0"As she approached the station, a faint sound cut through the drumming rain – a low humming that seemed to vibrate through the pavement."
1"The jedemarket lay beyond this entrance, and she knew – absolutely knew – that her suspect had gone this way."
2"As she reached the bottom, she realized the air had changed – thick with something she couldn't identify."
3"This was it – the decision that would determine whether Quinn lived to see sunrise or became another name in the files of people who disappeared in the veins of this city."
4"Her eyes glanced at her watch – precisely three minutes past two."
5"The police would laugh her out of office if she mentioned what she suspected – that something supernatural was happening in this city."
6"Quinn studied him – the olive skin slick with rain, the dark curly hair plastered to his forehead, the scar, the Saint Christopher medallion, and those warm brown eyes that held no deceit that she could detect."
7"The people she'd been investigating weren't just criminals – they were something else entirely."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1743
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.03843947217441193
lyAdverbCount31
lyAdverbRatio0.01778542742398164
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean14.08
std7.88
cv0.56
sampleLengths
022
127
212
39
415
55
629
715
823
917
1014
1113
128
1328
1411
1514
1615
1718
1813
197
2014
2133
2213
2313
2417
2516
2614
2717
2815
2911
3011
3118
3224
3316
3421
355
3616
3717
3814
3912
409
4110
4218
4320
4416
455
469
4716
4815
498
53.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.34394904458598724
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners54
50.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences131
matches
0"Only she had known about"
1"Only the drips of water"
ratio0.015
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences131
matches
0"she muttered into her collar"
1"she said, her focus locked"
2"She'd been chasing shadows since"
3"He'd been ten blocks behind"
4"She was chasing a ghost"
5"He quickened his pace, ignoring"
6"His generous olive skin, already"
7"She felt rather than saw"
8"Her breath came in controlled"
9"She'd passed this station a"
10"Her worn leather watch glowed"
11"She paused beneath the station"
12"He'd been inside once, passed"
13"She flicked it on, the"
14"Her fingers tightened around the"
15"She hesitated only for a"
16"His breath came steady despite"
17"Her eyes glanced at her"
18"She put her ear to"
19"She reached for the handle."
ratio0.237
85.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences131
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn didn't notice"
1"The sting of cold water"
2"Every Tuesday for the last"
3"Every Tuesday, Blackwood's Clique gathered"
4"Tonight would not be different."
5"she muttered into her collar"
6"she said, her focus locked"
7"She85 slammed the car door"
8"The rain hammered down, turning"
9"Water drummed a frantic rhythm"
10"She'd been chasing shadows since"
11"Tomás Herrera wiped the rain"
12"The Saint Christopher medallion around"
13"He'd been ten blocks behind"
14"She was chasing a ghost"
15"The distinctive green neon sign"
16"The back entrance to the"
17"He quickened his pace, ignoring"
18"His generous olive skin, already"
19"The bone token he'd kept"
ratio0.748
76.34% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences131
matches
0"If Quinn didn't know what"
1"Now someone was standing in"
ratio0.015
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The sting of cold water against her skin did little to clear the fog of determination that had settled over her mind for the past three years."
1"Something that felt like static electricity prickled across her skin."
2"And now, someone who appeared to know intimate details about her late partner had cornered her in an abandoned station on a rain-soaked night."
3"Quinn studied him – the olive skin slick with rain, the dark curly hair plastered to his forehead, the scar, the Saint Christopher medallion, and those warm bro…"
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she asked, her expression inscrutable despite the tension radiating from her frame"
1"Tomás repeated, his gaze steady"
2"Quinn asked, her voice low"
3.66% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Tomás continued (continue)"
2"Tomás repeated (repeat)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"Tomás explained (explain)"
5"Tomás explained patiently (explain)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.415
leniency0.829
rawRatio0.353
effectiveRatio0.293
78.8577%