Run: 2026-05-27-01KSMETTXATSYAV3K1700DZE3P

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's breath caught in her throat as she stepped through the circle of standing stones. The air changed immediately—warm and thick with the scent of blooming night-scented jasmine and damp earth. She glanced at Nyx, whose shadowy form rippled like liquid night, and Isolde, who moved with silent grace as if she'd been born to this place. The Seer's lavender eyes gleamed with ancient knowledge, reflecting the otherworldly light that seemed to emanate from everywhere and nowhere at once. "This is it?" Aurora whispered, her voice barely a sound against the gentle humming that vibrated through the soles of her boots. The Fae blade at her hip felt heavier, colder than ever, as if responding to the magic thick in the air. Isolde turned her head, a slight smile playing on her lips. "The Veil thins here," she said, her voice carrying the musical quality of autumn leaves skittering across cobblestones. "Time bends, and the boundaries between worlds blur like watercolor on wet paper." Nyx flowed closer, their violet eyes glowing faintly in the dim light. "I can taste the entrance to Hel from here," they murmured, their voice like a soft wind chime. "The Aether smells of amber and something... hungrier." Aurora shivered despite the warmth. Her fingers instinctively went to the Heartstone pendant around her neck, the deep crimson gem pulsing softly against her fingertips. "It's calling us forward," she noted, surprised by the intensity of the sensation. "This way." They moved deeper into the grove, the trees growing denser around them. The foliage here was unlike anything Aurora had seen in the normal parts of Richmond Park. Leaves in shades of silver and blue shimmered in the oblique light filtering through an amber sky that seemed to curve unnaturally overhead. " according to the Wardens' maps, we should find a rift point about a hundred yards north of here," Aurora said, checking the coordinates on her phone as they walked. The device's screen flickered oddly, as if the signal was caught between two realities. "The mundane world measures what it cannot comprehend," Isolde remarked, her long silver hair cascading down her back like water. "The paths of magic do not bend to human reckoning." Suddenly, the trees opened onto a clearing unlike any Aurora had imagined. In the center stood a towering tree, easily twice the height of any oak in the park outside, its bark swirling with patterns of gold and purple. Its canopy was a lattice of leaves that glowed with soft, ethereal light, casting dappled patterns on the ground below. Around the tree's base, dozens of night-blooming flowers pulsed with gentle luminescence, their petals shifting colors from deep violet to soft blue. "Fae perfumery," Nyx whispered appreciatively, taking in a deep breath. "The scent of starlight and honeyed wine." Aurora approached the tree reverently, her fingers brushing against the bark. It was warm to the touch, and beneath her skin, she felt energy thrumming like a heartbeat. The Heartstone pendant at her throat responded, glowing more intensely, casting dancing shadows in the clearing. "Can you feel it?" Aurora asked, looking back at her companions. "It's... alive. The tree, I mean." Isolde nodded, her eyes half-closed in concentration. "The World Tree roots run deep here, connecting all realms. We stand at one of the places where the barriers are thinnest. On the winter solstice, the Veil will tear like parchment." Nyx drifted forward, becoming more substantial for a moment before flowing beneath the canopy of the tree. "And yet we hear nothing but the rustle of these impossible leaves. No movements from Hel. No whispers from the Courts." "A sacred place," Isolde affirmed. "Even those drawn to gluttony in Dymas respect the borders of this sanctuary. Though the prince of that realm would likely try to breach them at any opportunity." As if summoned by her words, the undergrowth at the edge of the clearing rustled. Aurora's hand flew to the Fae blade at her hip, her body tensing. The dagger glowed faintly in response, its cold comfort a stark contrast to her racing heartbeat. From between the twisted roots of another, older tree emerged a creature unlike anything Aurora could have imagined. It stood about the height of a large fox, with fur the color of moonlight and eyes like polished amethysts. A cascade of what appeared to be liquid light spilled from its mane, leaving a trailing path of soft illumination in the wake of its movement. "A shadow fox," Isolde said quietly, her voice a mix of wonder and caution. "Rare even in the Fae realm. They're guardians of liminal spaces." The creature regarded them with intelligent curiosity, its head tilted to one side. Then, with a movement impossibly graceful, it padded across the glowing moss to stand before them, its tail brushing against Aurora's boots. It seemed to regard them with approval, then bounded toward the great tree and disappeared beneath its canopy. "The guardians have acknowledged us," Isolde said with a small smile. "We may proceed." Aurora looked at Nyx, whose form had grown more distinct, more tangible, since entering the grove. "And in the direction this Heartstone is leading?" "The shadows grow denser there," Nyx replied, their violet eyes fixed on a part of the grove where the trees seemed to grow in a deliberate spiral pattern. "A way to step closer to the rift without stepping through it completely." As they moved in that direction, Aurora felt the air change again. The comfortable warmth of the grove gave way to something else—an expectation, a hunger. The amber light of the sky seeped into gold, deepening to a color that promised feasting and indulgence. "We're near Dymas," Aurora realized suddenly, the pulse of the Heartstone more insistent against her collarbone. "The Veil grows thinner here," Isolde confirmed, her steps light as she wove between the trees. "The line between worlds blurs into a shimmer you might see if you looked sideways." The grove's character transformed as they walked. The flourishing wildflowers gave way to cultivated vines heavy with grapes that gleamed like polished jewels. Towering hedges sculpted into fantastic shapes lined what appeared to be paths—a stark contrast to the wild overgrowth they'd traversed earlier. Ahead, the trees thinned to reveal a lake, and beyond that, the unmistakable silhouette of a grand castle with turrets that reached toward the strange sky. "Dymas," Nyx breathed, flowing closer to Aurora's side. "Prince Belphegor's domain. Or at least, a reflection of it." Aurora's hand tightened on the Fae blade. "We shouldn't be able to see that. Should we?" "Normally, no," Isolde answered. "But the winter solstice approaches. The veil thins in both directions." The gleaming lake beckoned, its surface so smooth it appeared made of liquid glass, reflecting the castle turrets in perfect detail. As they neared the shore, Aurora saw small fires flickering around what seemed like feast tables laden with unnaturally perfect food—n umbering sketches of impossible entrees that steamed in the mild air despite no visible heat. "The feasting grounds of Dymas," Nyx explained, their voice low with what might have been appreciation or unease. "They can extend tendrils of desire through the thin Veil, tempting creatures from both worlds with promised indulgence." Aurora watched as a figure appeared to materialize near the shore—a woman whose movements were gracefully languid, dressed in flowing white robes that seemed to change color with her steps. She saw them but did not seem surprised. "Visitors from beyond the Veil," she called, her voice carrying unnaturally across the water. "The prince has been expecting important guests who would bring him a pyrrhic victory." Nyx's form rippled with unease. "A sentinel. Dymas knows to watch for us." Isolde's expression became uncharacteristically grave. "The prince plays a longer game than we realized. This border has been weakened intentionally." "Then we have our revelation," Aurora said, reaching to touch the Heartstone around her neck, which pulsed warmly under her fingers. "This pendant called us here to this rift point for a reason. Prince Belphegor has been planning something, and we've just stumbled into the middle of it." "Or been led precisely here," Nyx added, their shadowy form growing more distinct in preparation for whatever came next. "The seer stands at the edge of two paths," Isolde said cryptically, her lavender eyes bright with ancient knowing. "One leads to a feast that consumes the soul, and the other to a battle that might save worlds. Which will you choose, daughter of two realms?" Aurora studied the reflection on the l liquid lake surface—showing not her face, but a castle, a feast, and a battle raging between worlds. The Heartstone grew hot against her chest, the Fae blade by her hip grew cold, and the gentle humming of the grove resolved into the song of two realms calling at once. "Which one," Aurora murmured, understanding dawning, "isn't the real trap after all?"
created_at"2026-05-27T10:14:10.614Z" 5/27/2026, 10:14:10 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
22.22% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Nyx whispered appreciatively [appreciatively]"
1"Isolde said quietly [quietly]"
2"Aurora realized suddenly [suddenly]"
3"Isolde said cryptically [cryptically]"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.489
leniency0.978
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.178
76.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1489
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
2
adverb"intensely"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"warmly"
count1
5
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"suddenly"
2"intensely"
3"completely"
4"warmly"
5"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1489
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"otherworldly"
count1
1
word"vibrated"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"intensity"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"cascading"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count2
8
word"dancing"
count1
9
word"sanctuary"
count1
10
word"stark"
count2
11
word"racing"
count1
12
word"tangible"
count1
13
word"comfortable"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"gleaming"
count1
16
word"perfect"
count2
17
word"desire"
count1
18
word"sentinel"
count1
19
word"grave"
count1
20
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"otherworldly"
1"vibrated"
2"warmth"
3"intensity"
4"shimmered"
5"flickered"
6"cascading"
7"pulsed"
8"dancing"
9"sanctuary"
10"stark"
11"racing"
12"tangible"
13"comfortable"
14"pulse"
15"gleaming"
16"perfect"
17"desire"
18"sentinel"
19"grave"
20"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences70
matches
0"d with unease"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences93
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1484
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.10% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1051
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Nyx10
Isolde11
Seer1
Fae4
Aurora21
Heartstone5
Richmond1
Park1
Suddenly1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Isolde"
2"Seer"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Fae"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore0.501
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"as if responding to the magic thick in the air"
1"sky that seemed to curve unnaturally overhead"
2"appeared made of liquid glass, reflecting the castle turrets in perfect detail"
3"robes that seemed to change color with her steps"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.674
wordCount1484
matches
0"not her face, but a castle, a feast"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
93.76% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean37.1
std17.74
cv0.478
sampleLengths
079
143
242
338
440
551
644
730
881
917
1044
1117
1239
1338
1433
1544
1664
1725
1853
1914
2024
2141
2244
2316
2431
2570
2618
2716
2815
2957
3036
3138
3228
3313
3420
3548
3619
3746
3856
3912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"was caught"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs175
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences93
ratio0.065
matches
0"The air changed immediately—warm and thick with the scent of blooming night-scented jasmine and damp earth."
1"The comfortable warmth of the grove gave way to something else—an expectation, a hunger."
2"Towering hedges sculpted into fantastic shapes lined what appeared to be paths—a stark contrast to the wild overgrowth they'd traversed earlier."
3"As they neared the shore, Aurora saw small fires flickering around what seemed like feast tables laden with unnaturally perfect food—n umbering sketches of impossible entrees that steamed in the mild air despite no visible heat."
4"Aurora watched as a figure appeared to materialize near the shore—a woman whose movements were gracefully languid, dressed in flowing white robes that seemed to change color with her steps."
5"Aurora studied the reflection on the l liquid lake surface—showing not her face, but a castle, a feast, and a battle raging between worlds."
93.96% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1060
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.045283018867924525
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.02169811320754717
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences93
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences93
mean15.96
std7.29
cv0.457
sampleLengths
015
116
226
322
422
521
611
718
813
912
1018
118
125
1320
1413
152
1612
1716
1823
1930
2014
2120
2210
2312
2427
2520
2622
2710
287
2911
3017
3116
3211
336
347
3532
3617
3721
385
3928
4015
4113
4216
4318
4420
4526
4614
4711
4813
4922
58.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3978494623655914
totalSentences93
uniqueOpeners37
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Suddenly, the trees opened onto"
1"Then, with a movement impossibly"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences68
matches
0"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
1"she said, her voice carrying"
2"they murmured, their voice like"
3"Her fingers instinctively went to"
4"she noted, surprised by the"
5"They moved deeper into the"
6"Its canopy was a lattice"
7"It was warm to the"
8"It stood about the height"
9"It seemed to regard them"
10"She saw them but did"
11"she called, her voice carrying"
ratio0.176
40.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences68
matches
0"Aurora's breath caught in her"
1"The air changed immediately—warm and"
2"She glanced at Nyx, whose"
3"The Seer's lavender eyes gleamed"
4"Aurora whispered, her voice barely"
5"The Fae blade at her"
6"Isolde turned her head, a"
7"she said, her voice carrying"
8"Nyx flowed closer, their violet"
9"they murmured, their voice like"
10"Aurora shivered despite the warmth."
11"Her fingers instinctively went to"
12"she noted, surprised by the"
13"They moved deeper into the"
14"The foliage here was unlike"
15"Aurora said, checking the coordinates"
16"The device's screen flickered oddly,"
17"Isolde remarked, her long silver"
18"Its canopy was a lattice"
19"Nyx whispered appreciatively, taking in"
ratio0.838
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"As if summoned by her"
ratio0.015
20.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The Fae blade at her hip felt heavier, colder than ever, as if responding to the magic thick in the air."
1"Leaves in shades of silver and blue shimmered in the oblique light filtering through an amber sky that seemed to curve unnaturally overhead."
2"The amber light of the sky seeped into gold, deepening to a color that promised feasting and indulgence."
3"The flourishing wildflowers gave way to cultivated vines heavy with grapes that gleamed like polished jewels."
4"Ahead, the trees thinned to reveal a lake, and beyond that, the unmistakable silhouette of a grand castle with turrets that reached toward the strange sky."
5"As they neared the shore, Aurora saw small fires flickering around what seemed like feast tables laden with unnaturally perfect food—n umbering sketches of impo…"
6"Aurora watched as a figure appeared to materialize near the shore—a woman whose movements were gracefully languid, dressed in flowing white robes that seemed to…"
11.36% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde said quietly, her voice a mix of wonder and caution"
1"Aurora realized suddenly, the pulse of the Heartstone more insistent against her collarbone"
2"Isolde confirmed, her steps light as she wove between the trees"
3"she called, her voice carrying unnaturally across the water"
4"Aurora murmured, understanding dawning,"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
1"they murmured (murmur)"
2"she noted (note)"
3"Nyx whispered appreciatively (whisper)"
4"Isolde confirmed (confirm)"
5"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
6"Nyx explained (explain)"
7"Nyx added (add)"
8"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences45
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leniency0.844
rawRatio0.474
effectiveRatio0.4
68.5362%