Run: 2026-05-29-01KSSJMJYXXFHHH509Z3AT1NZR

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts gave way one after another, three sharp clicks, and then the door swung open on Lucien Moreau leaning against the frame like he owned the whole crumbling building. "You changed the locks." "You're not supposed to be in London." Rory kept the door half-shut, her body wedged in the gap. Ptolemy threaded between her ankles, tail curling around her calf. "Eva's not here." "I didn't come for Eva." The amber eye caught the hall light. The black one stayed dark, a hole punched in the side of his face, and she hated how her stomach still pitched at the sight of it. Three months. She'd told herself three months had been enough. "Then you wasted a trip." She moved to close the door. His cane came up. Not threatening, just resting against the wood, the ivory handle a pale knuckle between them. "Five minutes, Aurora. After that I'll vanish. You're rather good at letting people do that." That landed where he'd aimed it. She felt the sting bloom across her chest and despised the satisfaction in the set of his mouth. She stepped back. The door swung wide. "Five minutes." He came in like he was doing her a favour, charcoal suit immaculate against the chaos of Eva's flat, scrolls heaped on every surface, a teetering tower of library books reclaimed past their due dates. He didn't sit. He never sat in places he didn't trust, and the cat hissed at him from the windowsill. "Charming companion." "He's a good judge of character." "Then he and I are old friends." Lucien turned, both eyes finding her now, and something in the easy mockery slipped for half a second. "You look tired." "I work two jobs and one of them involves climbing four flights with other people's noodles. Forgive me if I don't sparkle." "You always sparkle. It's exhausting." He set the tip of the cane to the floor and leaned his weight on it. "I need to know what you told Silas." There it was. Not concern. Business. She should have expected it, and the disappointment that arrived anyway made her angrier than anything he could have said. "Nothing." "Aurora." "I told him nothing, Lucien. About you, about Avaros, about the night on the bridge. Nothing." She crossed her arms over the worn collar of her jumper. "Is that what kept you up? Worried I'd been talking?" "It's kept a number of people up." "Then they can sleep. I'm very good at keeping secrets." She held his gaze. "You taught me that." He flinched. She watched it happen, the small tightening at the corner of his jaw, and she logged it the way he'd once taught her to log everything, a tell, a crack, a way in. He'd made her sharp. That was the cruellest part. He'd given her the very tools she now used to read the lie in him. "That isn't fair," he said. "No. It isn't." She picked Ptolemy up off the sill, mostly to have something to do with her hands. The cat went rigid, ears flat, watching Lucien over her arm. "You don't get to walk back in here and decide what's fair. You left me on that bridge with blood on my coat and a number that didn't connect. I called it nine times." "I know." "You know." "I counted them." His voice dropped, and for the first time the polish wore through to something underneath, something with rougher edges. "Every one. I sat in a car in Marseille and watched my phone light up nine times and I let it go dark because the alternative would have got you killed. There were people who wanted to know who the human girl was. Where she lived. What she meant." A breath. "If I'd answered, I'd have told them. Just by answering." The flat held very still. Even the cat had gone quiet. "You could have said that," she said. Her throat ached. "A text. Two words. *I'm sorry.*" "I don't apologise. It implies I'd do otherwise given the chance." He came a step closer, and the floorboard groaned between them. "I wouldn't. I'd leave you on that bridge a hundred times to keep you breathing. That's the truth, and you wanted truth, so there it is." She put the cat down. Her hands were shaking and she folded them under her arms again to hide it, and she knew he saw, because he saw everything, that was the whole problem. "That's a coward's love," she said. "Yes." He didn't look away. "It's the only kind I have." The honesty knocked the breath out of her worse than any lie could have. She'd built three months of fury on the assumption he hadn't cared at all. That was a clean thing to hate. This, this was a mess, and she was standing in the middle of it with no idea where to put her feet. "Why now?" she managed. "If the danger's real, why come here at all? You're putting a target on the door." "Because the people who wanted to know about you are dead." He said it the way other men commented on the weather. "I made certain of it. So I find myself, for the first time, with the luxury of being honest, and I discover I've nothing left to lose by it." His mouth curved, but it didn't reach the amber eye. "Inconvenient. I prefer leverage." "You killed them." "I had them killed. There's a vulgar distinction, but it matters to lawyers, and your father was one." The cane tapped once. "I came to tell you that you're safe. That you've been safe for a week and I couldn't bring myself to send a message, because a message would be the coward's love again, and you've already had enough of that from me." She stared at him. The slicked blond hair, the perfect suit, the blade hidden in the ivory, and underneath all of it a man who had crossed a sea to stand in a curry-scented stairwell and say the one thing he'd never offered her. "That's more than five minutes," she said. "I'm aware. Throw me out." She didn't. She closed the distance instead, and his hand came up to her jaw before she'd finished the step, warm, certain, and the cane clattered to the floor between them as the cat shot under the sofa with an outraged yowl. And someone began pounding on the deadbolted door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The cane tapped once [once]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.391
leniency0.783
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.043
86.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"stomach"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"weight"
2"perfect"
3"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences58
matches
0"felt the sting"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1080
ratio0.002
matches
0"I'm sorry."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount637
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien3
Moreau1
Ptolemy2
Eva1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences33
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1080
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean24
std21.89
cv0.912
sampleLengths
030
14
231
35
444
511
634
724
87
92
1055
112
126
1328
1422
1529
1626
171
181
1937
207
2118
2259
235
2464
252
262
2783
2811
2916
3048
3134
326
3311
3457
3520
3665
373
3864
3944
407
415
422
4340
448
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
21.43% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs112
matches
0"was doing"
1"were shaking"
2"was standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount639
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.023474178403755867
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.001564945226917058
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.71
std11.63
cv0.915
sampleLengths
030
14
218
310
43
55
67
727
82
98
1011
114
1215
1315
146
1518
163
174
182
1935
203
2117
222
236
2425
253
2622
2721
288
293
302
311
3220
331
341
3527
3610
377
3814
394
402
4133
424
435
4415
455
4619
4711
4834
492
53.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3764705882352941
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners32
70.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences47
matches
0"Even the cat had gone"
ratio0.021
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences47
matches
0"She'd told herself three months"
1"She moved to close the"
2"His cane came up."
3"She felt the sting bloom"
4"She stepped back."
5"He came in like he"
6"He didn't sit."
7"He never sat in places"
8"He set the tip of"
9"She should have expected it,"
10"She crossed her arms over"
11"She held his gaze"
12"She watched it happen, the"
13"He'd made her sharp."
14"He'd given her the very"
15"She picked Ptolemy up off"
16"His voice dropped, and for"
17"Her throat ached."
18"He came a step closer,"
19"She put the cat down."
ratio0.574
2.55% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences47
matches
0"The deadbolts gave way one"
1"Rory kept the door half-shut,"
2"Ptolemy threaded between her ankles,"
3"The amber eye caught the"
4"The black one stayed dark,"
5"She'd told herself three months"
6"She moved to close the"
7"His cane came up."
8"That landed where he'd aimed"
9"She felt the sting bloom"
10"She stepped back."
11"The door swung wide."
12"He came in like he"
13"He didn't sit."
14"He never sat in places"
15"Lucien turned, both eyes finding"
16"He set the tip of"
17"She should have expected it,"
18"She crossed her arms over"
19"She held his gaze"
ratio0.915
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences17
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Her hands were shaking and she folded them under her arms again to hide it, and she knew he saw, because he saw everything, that was the whole problem."
1"The slicked blond hair, the perfect suit, the blade hidden in the ivory, and underneath all of it a man who had crossed a sea to stand in a curry-scented stairw…"
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He came, and the floorboard groaned between them"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"other men commented (comment)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.109
leniency0.217
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.043
82.3958%