Run: 2026-05-29-01KSSJP68VB5ZM0N2A7BYHV9R6

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body had no business being here. Quinn ducked under the strip of police tape that someone had strung between two corroded girders, and her torch beam swallowed itself in the dark. Camden's old Tube tunnels did that. They drank light the way they drank sound, leaving you with nothing but your own breathing and the drip of water through a hundred years of London clay. "Mind the third rail," called a voice ahead. "Dead, supposedly. I wouldn't trust it." Detective Sergeant Patel crouched beside the corpse, his phone propped against a brick to throw extra light. A young man lay sprawled across the disused track, one arm flung out, palm up, fingers curled as though he'd reached for something and missed. "Talk to me, Raj." "Male, late twenties. No ID. Caretaker found him an hour ago doing his rounds." Patel rocked back on his heels. "Heart attack's my guess. No wounds, no blood, no struggle. Bloke wandered down here, had a bad turn, that's that." Quinn said nothing. She walked the perimeter of the body first, the way Morris had taught her, three years dead now and still narrating in her ear. *Walk the edges before you touch the middle. The scene tells you a story. Don't let the corpse interrupt.* The dust was the first problem. A fine grey film coated everything down here, undisturbed for decades. The caretaker's prints came in from the north, heavy boots, a clear trail. Patel's prints. Her own, fresh. And the dead man's. Just the one set. "Raj. How did he get here?" "Walked, I'd imagine." Patel gestured at the tunnel mouth. "Same way we did." "Then where are his footprints?" The torch beam tracked the body's trainers, pristine white, not a smudge on them. Around the corpse the dust lay smooth as poured cream. No scuffs. No drag marks. No approach. The man lay in the centre of a clean grey sheet, as if he'd been lowered from above by wire, except there was nothing above but the curved black ceiling and forty feet of earth. "Maybe he came from the other direction." Patel's voice had lost some of its certainty. "South platform." "Check it." He went, and she heard his footsteps recede, then a long pause, then him calling back, thinner now. "Nothing this way. Dust's clean for thirty yards. Wall's bricked up beyond that." Quinn crouched. She pulled on a glove and lifted the dead man's outflung wrist. Cold, but not cold enough. Rigor hadn't fully set in the jaw, yet the fingers had already locked rigid, which was backwards, which meant nothing she could explain standing in a tunnel that smelled of iron and something sweeter underneath it. She bent close. Sniffed. Ozone. The sharp clean tang you got after lightning, here, sixty feet under Camden where no storm had ever reached. "Raj. What do you smell?" His boots crunched back toward her. He inhaled, frowning. "Damp. Rust." A pause. "Something burnt?" "Burnt." She nodded slowly. The word fit better than ozone. Burnt, the way the air goes when something passes through it that shouldn't fit. She studied the man's face. Young, unlined, almost peaceful, except for the eyes. They were open, and the whites had gone the dull red of a broken egg, every small vessel ruptured at once. She'd seen that in pressure deaths. Divers who came up too fast. Pilots who lost a cabin. Never in a man lying flat on a tunnel floor. "Pupils." She tilted his head. The left eye stared wide and black. The right was a pinprick. "That's not a heart attack, Raj." "Stroke, then." He crouched opposite her, eager now, wanting the scene to behave. "Aneurysm. Burst something in his head, hence the eyes." "And the footprints?" He had no answer for the footprints. Quinn reached into her coat and her fingers closed around the brass thing she'd carried for three years and shown no one. Small, cold, the casing furred green with age, its face scratched over with marks no compass maker had ever stamped. She'd taken it from Morris's pocket after they pulled him from the canal, and she'd never understood why his needle pointed nowhere on any map she owned. She didn't take it out. Not with Patel watching. But she felt it through the glove, and the thing was trembling. Not vibrating from her own pulse. *Trembling*, a fine insistent shiver, the way a tuning fork hums after the strike. It only did that near him. Near the man on the ground. "Quinn?" Patel was watching her face. "You've gone somewhere." "His shoes." She made herself release the compass. "Look at the soles." Patel turned one foot. The trainers were spotless, the tread unworn, but the rubber along the edges had blistered, bubbled up in tiny grey beads as though held briefly to a flame. The laces on the left foot had fused into a single melted knot. Above the ankle, nothing. The socks were clean. The skin unmarked. "Heat from the feet up," Quinn said. "But it stopped at the ankle. You don't burn from the ground in a stroke, Raj. You don't burn at all, lying still, in a cold tunnel, with no scorch on the floor underneath you." Patel looked down at the smooth dust beneath the corpse. No char. No ash. The man's clothes hadn't even smoked. "That's not possible." "No." She stood, knees cracking, and let the torch sweep the ceiling. The brickwork arched away, unbroken, a hundred years sealed. "It isn't." She turned slowly on the spot, reading the clean grey floor the way Morris had taught her. The body in the centre. The smooth ring of dust around it, perfect, untouched, a circle no man had walked into and no man had walked out of. The footprints that began nowhere and led nowhere. The smell of burnt air with no fire. A scene that told a story in a language she'd spent three years refusing to learn. "Get Forensics down here," she said. "Then get everyone out. Including you." "You can't process a scene alone, that's against every-" "Out, Raj." He hesitated, glanced at the dead man's ruined eyes, and went. Quinn waited until his torch had vanished round the bend. Then she drew the brass compass from her coat and held it flat on her palm. The needle spun once, twice, and snapped to point straight down. Into the earth. Beneath the body. And from somewhere under the dust, under the dead man's spine, came a sound like a held breath being let slowly out.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
85.71% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Patel rocked back [back]"
1"She nodded slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.114
86.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1097
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count3
highlights
0"slowly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.77% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1097
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"pristine"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"pristine"
1"footsteps"
2"pulse"
3"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences94
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords20
totalWords1097
ratio0.018
matches
0"Walk the edges before you touch the middle. The scene tells you a story. Don't let the corpse interrupt."
1"Trembling"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.94% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount899
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Patel"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Patel"
discoveredNames
Tube1
London1
Detective1
Sergeant1
Patel9
Quinn6
Morris3
Camden2
persons
0"Sergeant"
1"Patel"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
4"Camden"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.999
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1097
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean23.34
std19.4
cv0.831
sampleLengths
07
159
214
342
44
540
646
76
833
94
106
1113
125
1366
1417
152
1631
1759
1820
195
2015
2124
2261
2323
2422
253
267
2769
2821
2920
3012
319
3212
3356
3442
3520
363
3723
3861
3916
4012
419
422
4311
4426
4517
4622
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"been lowered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs151
matches
0"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences116
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount899
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.03114571746384872
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.006674082313681869
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean9.46
std7.87
cv0.832
sampleLengths
07
125
26
328
48
56
617
725
84
920
1020
113
1224
138
146
155
166
1711
1813
192
203
214
224
236
249
254
265
2714
2810
292
303
312
3235
3315
342
352
3618
3713
382
3912
405
4136
423
431
441
4519
465
476
483
494
76.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.5086206896551724
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners59
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences83
matches
0"Just the one set."
1"Then she drew the brass"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences83
matches
0"They drank light the way"
1"She walked the perimeter of"
2"Her own, fresh."
3"He went, and she heard"
4"She pulled on a glove"
5"She bent close."
6"His boots crunched back toward"
7"He inhaled, frowning."
8"She nodded slowly"
9"She studied the man's face."
10"They were open, and the"
11"She'd seen that in pressure"
12"She tilted his head"
13"He crouched opposite her, eager"
14"He had no answer for"
15"She'd taken it from Morris's"
16"She didn't take it out."
17"It only did that near"
18"She made herself release the"
19"She stood, knees cracking, and"
ratio0.265
92.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences83
matches
0"The body had no business"
1"Quinn ducked under the strip"
2"Camden's old Tube tunnels did"
3"They drank light the way"
4"Detective Sergeant Patel crouched beside"
5"A young man lay sprawled"
6"Patel rocked back on his"
7"Quinn said nothing."
8"She walked the perimeter of"
9"The scene tells you a"
10"The dust was the first"
11"A fine grey film coated"
12"The caretaker's prints came in"
13"Her own, fresh."
14"Patel gestured at the tunnel"
15"The torch beam tracked the"
16"The man lay in the"
17"Patel's voice had lost some"
18"He went, and she heard"
19"She pulled on a glove"
ratio0.735
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
56.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"A young man lay sprawled across the disused track, one arm flung out, palm up, fingers curled as though he'd reached for something and missed."
1"The man lay in the centre of a clean grey sheet, as if he'd been lowered from above by wire, except there was nothing above but the curved black ceiling and for…"
2"Rigor hadn't fully set in the jaw, yet the fingers had already locked rigid, which was backwards, which meant nothing she could explain standing in a tunnel tha…"
3"The trainers were spotless, the tread unworn, but the rubber along the edges had blistered, bubbled up in tiny grey beads as though held briefly to a flame."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She stood, knees cracking, and let the torch sweep the ceiling"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.114
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.4677%