Run: 2026-05-29-01KSSK254SZSN818D0486K2870

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body lay across the third rail, but there was no blood. Quinn crouched at the edge of the platform, brown eyes tracing the angle of the corpse. Forty years on this earth, eighteen of them poking at the dead, and she had never seen a man fall onto a live rail without leaving a mark. The skin should have been scorched. Tissue cooked. Instead the dead man's face wore a serene expression, eyes shut, hands folded across his chest like a saint laid out for viewing. "Cardiac event," DC Patel said behind her. "Coroner's preliminary. Heart gave out, he stumbled off the platform, landed where you see him." "Folded his own arms on the way down, did he?" Patel said nothing. The torch beam wavered in his hand. This wasn't a working station. The signs still read MORNINGTON CRESCENT in faded cream and oxblood, but the line had been sealed since the seventies. No trains. No current in that rail for half a century. Quinn knew it the moment she'd ducked under the tape and smelled the place: dust, old iron, and beneath it something sweeter that she couldn't name. "Who phoned it in?" "Anonymous. Public box near Camden Lock. We traced it, nobody waiting." She straightened and walked the platform slow, heel to toe, the way Morris had taught her a lifetime ago. *Read the floor before you read the body.* The tiles wore decades of grime in an even grey skin, except for one place. A track of footprints led from the stairwell to the body. One set. Clean impressions, pressed into the dust like someone had walked through fresh snow. One set, going in. She stopped. "Patel. How did the body get here if there's only one trail?" "He walked in, didn't he. Then collapsed." "Then where are the prints of whoever folded his arms? Where are the medics' prints? Yours?" She pointed at the tiles between her own feet, the smeared scuffs of constables and the coroner's man. "We've churned the dust to soup over here. But around him?" She swept the torch toward the rail. "Pristine. Not a mark within six feet of the man. Like he was set down from above." Patel's mouth opened, closed. "Maybe the air. Drafts move dust about." "Drafts don't fold a corpse's hands." She descended the short ladder to the track bed, mindful of where she placed her boots. Up close the wrongness deepened. The man was perhaps fifty, well-fed, dressed in a good wool coat. His shoes were polished. No mud, no scuff. A man who had not walked far. And yet the single trail of footprints upstairs matched his size, his stride. She crouched and lifted his right hand. Cold, stiff, the rigor well set. She turned it over. The fingertips were stained a faint grey-blue, the colour of a bruise that had given up. She'd seen that stain once before. Three years ago. On Morris. Her stomach clenched. She let the hand down. "Quinn?" Patel had come to the platform edge. "You all right?" "Fetch me the SOCO photographs of his pockets." "They haven't catalogued the-" "Then we catalogue them now." She went through the coat herself, gloved fingers steady. Wallet, full of notes, untouched. A set of house keys. A folded receipt from a stationer's on the Charing Cross Road. And in the inner breast pocket, hard against the lining, something small and round that her fingers closed on out of pure instinct. She drew it into the torchlight. A compass. Brass, no bigger than a pocket watch, its casing furred green with age. The face wasn't a compass face at all. No north, no south. Instead a ring of marks she half recognised, sharp little symbols scratched deep into the metal. The needle inside trembled, settled, then swung. Not toward magnetic north. Toward the dark mouth of the tunnel behind her. She turned the thing in her palm. The needle followed the tunnel, no matter which way she faced it. "What's that?" Patel asked. "His. Apparently." She watched the needle quiver, hungry, pointing into the black. Cold air drifted from that tunnel, and the sweet smell rode it, thicker now. Candle wax. Crushed herbs. Something underneath that made the back of her throat itch. She'd smelled it once before too. The night Morris vanished. "Bag the body," she said. "But nobody touches this compass but me." "Coroner wants everything logged through-" "The coroner can want." She slipped the compass into an evidence bag, then into her own coat. Against protocol. She didn't care. Three years she'd waited for a thread, and here it lay, curled in a dead man's pocket like a sleeping thing. She climbed back to the platform and crouched once more by the single trail of footprints. This time she set her own boot beside the nearest print. The same size. But the dead man's polished shoes carried no dust on their soles. None. A man who had walked twenty feet across filth and left perfect prints, yet whose own shoes were clean as a shop window. Which meant the prints weren't his. Someone had walked in wearing his shoes. Or someone had made the prints to look like a man had walked in. Staged. The whole scene staged, down to the folded hands, for whoever came after to find. For her, perhaps. "Patel. The anonymous call. What did the caller say? Exact words." He flipped his notebook, angled it to the torch. "Says here, 'A man's died at Mornington Crescent. Tell Quinn.'" The platform seemed to tilt under her. "By name?" "By name. We assumed dispatch knew you were nearest, so they-" "Dispatch didn't put my name in the caller's mouth." She stood. The sweet smell had grown stronger, and now she understood it was rising, not drifting, seeping up from the tunnel as though the dark below were breathing. The compass needle, even bagged in her pocket, she could feel pulling, a faint insistent tug toward that black throat. A sound came from the tunnel then. Soft. The scrape of something on stone, far down, where no train had run in fifty years. Patel went rigid. "There's no access from that side. It's bricked at Euston." "Is it." Quinn drew her torch and pointed it into the dark. The beam ran out into nothing, swallowed whole twenty feet in. The scraping came again. Closer. She stepped down onto the track bed, toward the tunnel, and the needle in her pocket spun to meet her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1086
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1086
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"tracing"
count1
1
word"wavered"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"churned"
count1
4
word"pristine"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"magnetic"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"wavered"
2"traced"
3"churned"
4"pristine"
5"stomach"
6"trembled"
7"magnetic"
8"perfect"
9"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences96
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords8
totalWords1086
ratio0.007
matches
0"Read the floor before you read the body."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount869
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Patel"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Patel"
discoveredNames
Patel6
Morris3
Charing1
Cross1
Road1
Cold2
Quinn3
persons
0"Patel"
1"Morris"
2"Quinn"
places
0"Charing"
1"Cross"
2"Road"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1086
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"seen that stain"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean23.11
std22.44
cv0.971
sampleLengths
012
175
222
310
410
562
64
711
868
94
102
1112
127
1369
1411
156
1661
1744
188
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208
214
225
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246
2563
2619
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3012
315
3243
3366
346
3540
3611
3719
387
392
4011
4158
4224
4313
4423
455
4620
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences96
matches
0"been scorched"
1"been sealed"
2"were stained"
97.44% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs130
matches
0"was rising"
1"were breathing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences116
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount871
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.021814006888633754
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean9.36
std6.77
cv0.724
sampleLengths
012
116
228
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715
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107
115
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132
149
1526
164
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1819
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2213
234
242
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267
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304
317
326
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345
3512
364
374
387
3913
407
416
424
4316
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485
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79.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners58
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"Instead the dead man's face"
1"Instead a ring of marks"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences80
matches
0"She straightened and walked the"
1"She pointed at the tiles"
2"She swept the torch toward"
3"She descended the short ladder"
4"His shoes were polished."
5"She crouched and lifted his"
6"She turned it over."
7"She'd seen that stain once"
8"Her stomach clenched."
9"She let the hand down."
10"She went through the coat"
11"She drew it into the"
12"She turned the thing in"
13"She watched the needle quiver,"
14"She'd smelled it once before"
15"She slipped the compass into"
16"She didn't care."
17"She climbed back to the"
18"He flipped his notebook, angled"
19"She stepped down onto the"
ratio0.25
97.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences80
matches
0"The body lay across the"
1"Quinn crouched at the edge"
2"The skin should have been"
3"DC Patel said behind her"
4"Patel said nothing."
5"The torch beam wavered in"
6"This wasn't a working station."
7"The signs still read MORNINGTON"
8"Quinn knew it the moment"
9"She straightened and walked the"
10"A track of footprints led"
11"She pointed at the tiles"
12"She swept the torch toward"
13"Patel's mouth opened, closed."
14"She descended the short ladder"
15"The man was perhaps fifty,"
16"His shoes were polished."
17"A man who had not"
18"She crouched and lifted his"
19"She turned it over."
ratio0.725
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The fingertips were stained a faint grey-blue, the colour of a bruise that had given up."
1"A man who had walked twenty feet across filth and left perfect prints, yet whose own shoes were clean as a shop window."
2"The sweet smell had grown stronger, and now she understood it was rising, not drifting, seeping up from the tunnel as though the dark below were breathing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.1
leniency0.2
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.1157%