Run: 2026-06-01-01KT1G1CR2HE4VGE29B9J00X80

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45.7s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pint glass slipped from Rory's hand and shattered against the floor when she saw him. "Shit." She crouched, gathering shards into her palm, grateful for the excuse to look away. Three years. He'd put on weight, good weight, the kind that came from regular meals and someone who cooked them. The lanky boy who'd nicked cigarettes from his mother's handbag was gone. "Rory?" She stood. Pretended surprise. "Marcus. God. What are you doing in London?" "Conference." He gestured vaguely at the green neon glow filtering through the windows of the Raven's Nest. "Saw the sign. Thought I'd have one before the train." He paused, something flickering behind his eyes. "You work here?" "Above it. I do deliveries. Chinese restaurant round the corner." The words landed between them like dropped cutlery. She watched him do the maths. Pre-Law at Cardiff. Top of their seminar group. The girl who'd argued circles around their tutor about the Human Rights Act. "Deliveries," he repeated. "It pays." Silas appeared behind the bar, towel over his shoulder, hazel eyes taking in the broken glass, the stranger, the way Rory held herself. He said nothing. Set two clean glasses down and poured without asking, then retreated to the far end where a man in a grey coat waited with a folded newspaper. Silas always knew when to disappear. Marcus took the stool. Rory took the one beside him because leaving now would say more than staying. "You look well," he said. "You're lying, but thank you." He laughed, and for a moment he was nineteen again, doubled over at the back of a lecture hall. Then the laugh died and the years rushed back in to fill the silence. "Eva told me you'd moved here," he said. "After Evan." The name sat on the bar between them. Rory turned her glass a quarter turn. Then another. "Eva talks too much." "She was worried. We all were." He looked at his hands. Soft hands now. Office hands. "Nobody knew where you'd gone. You just stopped answering. Three years of nothing, Rory." "I needed nothing for a while." "From all of us?" She didn't answer. Across the bar, the man in the grey coat slid his newspaper toward Silas and left without finishing his drink. Rory watched the door swing shut. "You're married," she said. It wasn't a question. She'd clocked the ring the moment he'd said her name. "Sophie. You wouldn't know her. We met after. After you left." He twisted the band with his thumb, an old habit grafted onto a new gesture. "Two years now. There's a baby coming." "Congratulations." She meant it, and was surprised to find she did. "Sophie's a lucky woman." "She's a lawyer too. Family law." He smiled, rueful. "We always said we'd do something that mattered, didn't we? Pro bono work. The big firms could rot. Remember that?" "We said a lot of things at two in the morning." "You believed them. That's the difference. I just liked the sound of my own voice. You actually meant it." He turned to face her fully now, and the warmth had gone somewhere complicated. "What happened to you, Rory? The girl who was going to take silk by forty. The girl who corrected the professor on the Belmarsh judgment and got a round of applause." "That girl had a boyfriend who put her head through a kitchen cabinet." She said it flat, the way you'd read a weather report. "Funny what slips down the priority list when you're holding a tea towel to your scalp at four in the morning." Marcus went very still. "I didn't know it was that bad." "No," she said. "Because I made sure none of you did." The silence after that had weight to it. Silas turned up the music a notch, an old jazz record crackling through hidden speakers, and the kindness of it nearly undid her. "You could come back," Marcus said. "To it. To law. You're twenty-five, that's nothing. People convert at thirty, thirty-five. With your mind, Rory, with your father's connections-" "Don't." "I'm only saying-" "I know what you're saying." She finally looked at him properly, and what she found in his face was worse than judgment. Pity. The clean, well-meaning pity of a man whose hardest decision this year had been the colour of a nursery. "You're saying I'm a waste. That the cleverest girl you ever met is carrying chow mein up four flights of stairs in the rain, and isn't that a tragedy." "That's not-" "It is. It's fine. You're allowed to think it." She drank. The whisky burned a clean line down her chest. "I thought it too, for a long time. Used to lie awake doing it. All the courtrooms I'd never stand in." "And now?" She considered the question. Outside, a delivery moped whined past, and somewhere above their heads a pipe knocked in the wall of the flat she now called home. "Now I sleep through the night," she said. "Do you understand what that's worth? I didn't, before. I thought safety was something boring people settled for." She set the glass down. "Turns out it's the whole game, Marcus. Everything else is just noise we make to feel important." He was quiet for a long moment. When he spoke again, his voice had lost its lawyer's polish. "I rang you, you know. The night you left Cardiff. Eva gave me your number. It went to voicemail." He swallowed. "I never left a message. Couldn't think what to say. And then it felt too late, and then it felt ridiculous, and then it was just... done. Years done." "What would you have said?" "That I should have noticed. That I was your friend and I looked straight at it and saw nothing because seeing it would have been inconvenient." His eyes were wet now, and he didn't hide it. "I've thought about that voicemail more than I've thought about my wedding, Rory. That's a terrible thing to admit to a pregnant woman's husband, but there it is." The record changed. A woman's voice, low and smoke-stained, filled the dim space between the old maps on the walls. Rory reached out and, after a moment, covered his hand with hers. The crescent scar on her wrist caught the green light from the window. "You couldn't have saved me," she said. "I want you to hear that and actually believe it, because you look like a man who needs permission to stop carrying something. Nobody saved me. I left. There's a difference, and it's the only thing in three years I've been proud of." His phone buzzed against the bar. He glanced at it. Sophie's name lit the screen. The train. The conference. The whole tidy architecture of the life he'd built without her in it. "I have to-" "I know." She withdrew her hand. "Go on. Don't make her wait." He stood, gathering his coat, his ring, his future. At the door he turned. "Are you happy?" Rory looked at the broken glass Silas still hadn't swept, at the green sign humming in the window, at the stairs that led up to a small room where she slept the sleep of the unhaunted. The door banged open before she could answer, and a courier in a Golden Empress jacket stumbled in soaked to the skin, a torn ticket clutched in his fist. "Rory! Yu-Fei's going spare, the Kowloon order's gone to the wrong address and there's a bloke threatening to call the council-" She was already off the stool, already reaching for her keys.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.793
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.034
96.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"warmth"
4"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences77
matches
0"was surprised"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences77
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1267
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions26
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.28% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount690
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Three1
Raven1
Nest1
Cardiff1
Human1
Rights1
Act1
Silas5
Soft1
Marcus3
Pity1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Silas"
3"Soft"
4"Marcus"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Golden"
globalScore0.993
windowScore1
90.48% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"appeared behind the bar, towel over his shoulder, hazel eyes taking in the broken glass, the stranger, the way Rory held herself"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean22.23
std18.39
cv0.827
sampleLengths
016
147
21
312
437
510
635
73
82
959
1018
115
125
1333
1410
1517
164
1730
186
194
2029
2118
2233
2315
2429
2511
2664
2745
284
297
3011
3131
3227
331
343
3571
362
3741
382
3928
4048
4118
4250
435
4464
4520
4625
4750
4832
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96.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences77
matches
0"was gone"
1"was surprised"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs127
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount693
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.031746031746031744
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007215007215007215
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean11.31
std9.33
cv0.825
sampleLengths
016
115
22
318
412
51
62
72
88
917
1017
113
1210
138
146
153
165
1713
183
192
2023
213
2227
236
244
2514
265
275
2819
2914
308
312
328
337
342
354
3611
373
382
3914
406
414
423
4320
446
454
464
4710
4826
497
68.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.44642857142857145
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners50
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then the laugh died and"
ratio0.017
43.73% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences59
matches
0"She crouched, gathering shards into"
1"He'd put on weight, good"
2"He gestured vaguely at the"
3"He paused, something flickering behind"
4"She watched him do the"
5"He said nothing."
6"He laughed, and for a"
7"He looked at his hands"
8"She didn't answer."
9"It wasn't a question."
10"She'd clocked the ring the"
11"He twisted the band with"
12"She meant it, and was"
13"He smiled, rueful"
14"He turned to face her"
15"She said it flat, the"
16"She finally looked at him"
17"She considered the question."
18"She set the glass down"
19"He was quiet for a"
ratio0.441
19.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences59
matches
0"The pint glass slipped from"
1"She crouched, gathering shards into"
2"He'd put on weight, good"
3"The lanky boy who'd nicked"
4"He gestured vaguely at the"
5"He paused, something flickering behind"
6"The words landed between them"
7"She watched him do the"
8"Pre-Law at Cardiff."
9"Top of their seminar group."
10"The girl who'd argued circles"
11"Silas appeared behind the bar,"
12"He said nothing."
13"Silas always knew when to"
14"Marcus took the stool."
15"Rory took the one beside"
16"He laughed, and for a"
17"The name sat on the"
18"Rory turned her glass a"
19"He looked at his hands"
ratio0.881
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The girl who'd argued circles around their tutor about the Human Rights Act."
1"Rory looked at the broken glass Silas still hadn't swept, at the green sign humming in the window, at the stairs that led up to a small room where she slept the…"
81.52% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He paused, something flickering behind his eyes"
1"He smiled, rueful"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.155
leniency0.31
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.034
85.9177%