Run: 2026-06-01-01KT1H7WZAZZ473ED46DPZKDFT

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5m 40s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The woman at the bar ordered a single malt, neat, and Silas Blackwood's hands went still on the cloth he was holding. She had not looked up from the menu board chalked on the wall. Her hair was shorter than he remembered, silver threading through chestnut at the temples, cut in a way that would never have been practical in the field. Dark wool coat, expensive but anonymous. No jewellery except a plain watch on a leather strap. "Helen." She lifted her gaze. A small nod. The corner of her mouth twitched, the old half-smile he had once known better than his own handwriting. "Hello, Si." He set the glass in front of her. The single malt measured out exactly, three fingers, because some habits died harder than regrets. The amber caught the green glow of the neon sign outside and threw it back, bruised. "Budapest, wasn't it," he said. "Lyon." He poured his own measure. His knee clicked under the bar, the old cartilage grinding whenever the temperature dropped. He lowered himself onto the stool he kept behind the counter, a thing he rarely did when there were customers, but Helen Thorne was not a customer, and they both knew it. "Lyon," he repeated. "You always did prefer the better restaurants." "I missed your chips." "They're not chips, Helen. They're thrice-cooked." "Still not chips." She turned the glass a quarter-turn. Watched the whisky move. Her eyes travelled the room, the black-and-white photographs in their cracked frames, the wall maps, the dented brass fittings. Taking inventory. Old habits. "You kept the Beirut one." He glanced at the print above the till, the grainy shot of a souk at dusk, two men in keffiyehs sharing a cigarette. "A customer gave it to me. Said it was bad luck to have on the wall." "Is it?" "Business has been fine." She almost smiled. Almost. Helen Thorne had never quite committed to a smile in her life. Not in Vienna. Not in Ankara. Not in the long cold months in Prague when they had planned an operation that had gone wrong in every way an operation could go wrong. He lifted his glass. "To old friends." She raised hers. The toast hung between them, unanswered. He drank. She watched him drink. Then she drank too. "How's the knee?" He flexed it under the bar, a reflex, the click of bone on bone. "Sentimental. Predicts rain." "And the rest of you?" "Still standing. More or less." "You used to stand more." "I used to do a lot of things." The door opened. Two students tumbled in, laughing about something he didn't catch, and settled at a corner table. Helen watched them with eyes that never quite focused, the way she used to watch a room in an unfamiliar city. He wondered if she knew she still did it. "Pints of the lager," she said, without looking at him. "And a gin and tonic for me. Then we can talk." "Helen." "Silas." "Last time you said 'then we can talk,' three people ended up in the Thames." "Two," she said. "The third was in the Cam." He pulled the pints. The gin he made with the same care he gave everything now, the precision of a man who had decided, somewhere around his fiftieth birthday, that if he could no longer save the world he would at least make it a decent drink. He set the tray on the students' table, who had already forgotten him, then returned to the woman at the bar. "You didn't come for the chips." "No." He waited. He had learned, in the years since Prague, that silence was more useful than questions, that people who had spent their lives asking them were often the easiest to outlast. Helen Thorne was not easy to outlast. She had been his control officer in Vienna. She had been the voice in his earpiece in Ankara when the asset had been burned and the escape route had been a single window four storeys up. She had been the woman who had not come back for him in Prague, though that was unfair, and he knew it was unfair, and she knew he knew, and they had never discussed it in eight years, which was the kind of arrangement only people who had once trusted each other with their lives could maintain. His signet ring caught the light as he polished a glass. The silver had dulled. He should have it cleaned. "I'm not here officially," she said. "I didn't think you were." "I'm not here unofficially either." "People keep telling me that. The last one ended up in a cellar in Whitechapel." "This is not Whitechapel, Si. This is Soho. The cellars are considerably nicer." He almost laughed. Almost. "You're not here, then. You're somewhere else. You came here to be not there." "A name came up," she said. "A name I haven't heard in a long time." "Whose?" "Mine. Yours. A few others." His hand found the cloth again. He kept wiping the same stretch of bar, the wood already clean. "Which name?" "Yours first. This morning. A man in Bratislava asked a question he shouldn't have asked, and when the dust settled, your name was in the answer." He set the glass down. The thud of it on the wood was small and final. "Bratislava," he said. "Bratislava." "I've been in Soho for nine years, Helen." "I know." "I own a bar." "I know." "I have a limp." "I know, Si." "Then why would anyone in Bratislava be asking my name?" She looked at him then, fully, and for the first time since she had walked in, Helen Thorne looked like the woman he had known. The woman who had once, on a bad night in Ankara, leaned her head against his shoulder in the back of a car and murmured that she was tired of being the smartest person in every room. "Because," she said, "some names have a way of walking out of the dark when you stop saying them aloud." The neon outside buzzed. One of the students laughed, the bright careless sound of a life Silas had once had and could no longer quite picture. He looked at the photograph above the till, the two men sharing a cigarette, and he thought about Prague. About the man in the car park who had not been supposed to be there. About the sound his own knee had made when it bent the wrong way. About Helen's voice in his earpiece saying his name, once, twice, and then nothing. "I have a girl upstairs," he said, surprising himself. "Aurora. Works delivery for one of the restaurants in Chinatown. Sharp. Quick. Hasn't learned to be careful yet." "Noted," Helen said, and he hated how the word sounded, professional, clipped, the word of a woman who had come to do a job. "If whatever this is touches her," he said, "I will make it my business, Helen. And you remember what my business used to look like." She looked at the bar. At the photographs. At the green neon and the students and the brass fittings and the soft ordinary hum of a Tuesday night in Soho. She looked, he thought, like a woman who had come home to a house she did not live in anymore, and was trying to remember where she had put the key. "Finish your drink," he said. "I'll get the bottle." He went around the bar. His knee clicked. The door to the back room, the one hidden behind the bookshelf, was closed. He had not opened it in eleven months. He reached for the shelf. The wood was cool under his fingers. He looked back at Helen, and she raised her glass to him, a small salute from a long way off. The bookshelf swung open. The dark behind it breathed out the smell of paper and old smoke and secrets he had almost forgotten he had. "After you," he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.259
leniency0.517
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1337
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.52% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1337
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1337
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount977
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Helen"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Helen"
discoveredNames
Silas2
Blackwood1
Helen8
Thorne4
Watched1
Vienna2
Ankara3
Prague4
Tuesday1
Soho1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Blackwood"
2"Helen"
3"Thorne"
places
0"Vienna"
1"Ankara"
2"Prague"
3"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like the woman he had known"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1337
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"murmured that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean19.38
std21.89
cv1.13
sampleLengths
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325
42
539
65
71
851
910
104
116
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1339
142
154
1648
177
1819
193
2017
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225
235
248
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271
281
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309
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326
331
3432
35100
3620
376
385
395
4015
4113
4218
4315
441
455
4620
4726
4816
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97.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences89
matches
0"been burned"
1"been supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs161
matches
0"was holding"
1"was trying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences133
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount611
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.031096563011456628
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.006546644844517185
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean10.05
std9.54
cv0.949
sampleLengths
022
113
227
36
410
51
64
73
818
92
108
1115
1216
135
141
155
1614
1732
183
197
204
216
229
234
2419
252
262
275
2823
2916
302
314
323
331
3412
353
363
3726
384
393
403
416
422
434
444
453
4614
473
485
495
45.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.3609022556390977
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners48
45.66% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Then she drank too."
ratio0.014
6.30% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences73
matches
0"She had not looked up"
1"Her hair was shorter than"
2"She lifted her gaze."
3"He set the glass in"
4"He poured his own measure."
5"His knee clicked under the"
6"He lowered himself onto the"
7"She turned the glass a"
8"Her eyes travelled the room,"
9"He glanced at the print"
10"She almost smiled."
11"He lifted his glass."
12"She raised hers."
13"She watched him drink."
14"He flexed it under the"
15"He wondered if she knew"
16"she said, without looking at"
17"He pulled the pints."
18"He set the tray on"
19"He had learned, in the"
ratio0.534
55.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences73
matches
0"The woman at the bar"
1"She had not looked up"
2"Her hair was shorter than"
3"She lifted her gaze."
4"A small nod."
5"The corner of her mouth"
6"He set the glass in"
7"The single malt measured out"
8"The amber caught the green"
9"He poured his own measure."
10"His knee clicked under the"
11"He lowered himself onto the"
12"She turned the glass a"
13"Her eyes travelled the room,"
14"He glanced at the print"
15"She almost smiled."
16"Helen Thorne had never quite"
17"He lifted his glass."
18"She raised hers."
19"The toast hung between them,"
ratio0.808
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
20.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Her hair was shorter than he remembered, silver threading through chestnut at the temples, cut in a way that would never have been practical in the field."
1"Not in the long cold months in Prague when they had planned an operation that had gone wrong in every way an operation could go wrong."
2"The gin he made with the same care he gave everything now, the precision of a man who had decided, somewhere around his fiftieth birthday, that if he could no l…"
3"He had learned, in the years since Prague, that silence was more useful than questions, that people who had spent their lives asking them were often the easiest…"
4"She had been the woman who had not come back for him in Prague, though that was unfair, and he knew it was unfair, and she knew he knew, and they had never disc…"
5"The woman who had once, on a bad night in Ankara, leaned her head against his shoulder in the back of a car and murmured that she was tired of being the smartes…"
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, without looking at him"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.224
leniency0.448
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.034
85.0952%