Run: 2026-06-24-01KVX2Q10MN8NJ82TNAFHT07KW

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1m 5s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The pint glass hit the floor before Rory registered the sound of her own name. "Rory? Rory Carter?" She crouched behind the bar, gathering the shards. Silas would have her hide for breakage, though he'd never say it outright. He'd just add it to the tab she'd never pay off. "That's a lot of glass for one name." Rory looked up. The voice tugged at something deep in her chest, the way a hook pulls tissue from bone. She knew that voice. Knew it the way she knew the smell of her mother's kitchen, the particular quality of Cardiff rain against a bedroom window. Knew it and had spent three years trying not to. "Tomás." He stood at the bar's edge with his coat folded over one arm, the other resting on a leather briefcase that probably cost more than her monthly rent. The Tomás she remembered wore threadbare band t-shirts and Docs scuffed to nothing. This Tomás wore a charcoal suit that fit like it had been grown rather than tailored. His jaw had sharpened. His hair, once a wild black mop she'd had to push out of his face during drunken uni debates, was cropped close and neat. Gold cufflinks caught the green neon glow from outside. "You work here?" "Bartend. Sometimes." She stood, depositing the glass fragments on a tray behind the bar. "Delivery driver, mostly. Golden Empress, over on Lisle Street." "Golden Empress." He repeated it like she'd said something in a foreign language. "You finished your degree, then." Not a question. She heard the shape of what he meant beneath it. He'd finished. She hadn't. "Left Cardiff second year." "I heard. From Eva, eventually. After you'd already gone." He settled onto a barstool with the careful ease of someone who'd learned to occupy space differently. "She said you needed a change." Rory reached for a clean glass. Poured him a lager without asking. Some things you didn't forget. "You look like you did all right for yourself." "Trainee solicitor at Hewitt & Marsh. Commercial litigation." He took the glass but didn't drink. His thumb traced the rim. "Dad finally got his wish." "Senior partner by forty, was it?" "Thirty-eight, actually." A thin smile. "He made partner last spring. I'm just the heir apparent now. Following the family roadmap." The green neon threw strange shadows across his face, and for a half-second she saw the old Tomás underneath the polish. The boy who'd stolen traffic cones at three in the morning and placed them on the statue of John Batchelor in Cathays Park. The one who'd argued with her about natural law over cold chips at four a.m., who'd once cycled twelve miles in the rain to bring her notes before an exam she'd already decided to fail. "You hate it." "I didn't say that." "You didn't have to." He looked at her then. Properly. His gaze dropped to her wrist, to the crescent scar she never thought about anymore, and something shifted behind his eyes. "What happened to your hand?" "Childhood. Fell off a wall in Bute Park. You were there." "I was." He took a sip. Set the glass down. "I meant the other marks." Rory pulled her sleeve down. The motion was automatic, a reflex she thought she'd trained out of herself. The scars from Evan were older, faded to silver, but Tomás had always been the type to notice what people hid. "Old news." "Rory." "Old. News." Silence sat between them like a third patron. Behind her, the ice machine hummed its mechanical heartbeat. From the back room, muffled voices carried through the bookshelf wall, Silas conducting whatever business he conducted on nights like this. "I looked for you," Tomás said. "After you left. Drove to Cardiff three times trying to find you. Your mum said you were travelling. Then Eva said you'd gone abroad. Then nothing." "I was in London the whole time." "I know that now." The admission landed like a stone in still water. Rory felt the ripples spread through her chest. She'd been the one to vanish. She'd written the lies, fed them to her mother, let Eva weave the cover story. All because Evan had known where she'd go, and she'd needed him to think she'd gone somewhere else entirely. "He's gone, by the way. Evan." Tomás watched her face as he said the name. "Left Cardiff about a year after you did. Moved to Bristol, I think. Someone mentioned a new girlfriend. Solicitor." "Good for him." "You don't mean that." "I mean it's good he found someone who tolerates being grabbed by the arm in restaurants." Tomás flinched. The reaction was small, barely visible, but Rory caught it. She'd never told him the specifics. Hadn't told anyone except Eva, and only because Eva had seen the bruises. "I should have, though. Said something. Done something." He turned the glass in his hands. "I saw how he was. At Eve's birthday. The way he spoke to you. I told myself it wasn't my place." "It wasn't." "That's not, it wasn't, that's not what I, look." He exhaled. "You were my best friend, Rory. And I stood there with a drink in my hand and watched him drag you out of the party like you were a dog on a lead." "Tomás." "I've thought about that night every week for three years." The words filled the space between them. Rory felt something loosen in her chest, a knot she'd wound so tight she'd forgotten it was there. Not forgiveness. Something before forgiveness. Acknowledgement, maybe. The relief of being seen by someone who remembered who she'd been. "You sent me letters," she said. "You never replied." "I read them. All of them. Twice, some of them. The one about your grandmother's funeral, more than twice." "She would have liked you to be there. She always said you were the clever one." "She wasn't wrong." Tomás laughed. It cracked the tension, let something lighter into the space. He looked younger when he laughed, more like the boy she remembered. The suit receded. "What happened to us, Rory?" "You got ambitious. I got scared. Same old story." "I wasn't ambitious. I was, my father, it's complicated." "It's always complicated with your father." She poured herself a glass of water. "You used to say you'd rather teach. Remember? Secondary school history. You had that whole plan. The flat above the chip shop in Roath. The rescue dog." "Plans change." "Do they? Or do we just let them?" The back room door opened and Silas emerged, moving with his characteristic measured gait, the limp barely noticeable unless you watched for it. He surveyed the bar, took in Tomás's suit, the briefcase, Rory's posture behind the bar. His hazel eyes missed nothing. "Friend of yours?" "Old friend. Tomás, this is Silas. He owns the place." "Blackwood." Tomás extended his hand. "Tomás Reyes. I'm a, I work in law." "Are you." Silas shook his hand, held it a beat longer than necessary. His silver signet ring glinted. "How interesting." Silas turned to Rory. The look he gave her carried weight, the kind of look that said he'd clocked something she hadn't yet. She'd learned to read those looks in her months above the bar. "Delivery for Yu-Fei's in twenty minutes. And we need to talk about last night's shipment when you're done." "Last night's shipment?" "The one you weren't here for." Rory felt the temperature shift. Tomás watched the exchange with the trained attention of someone who spent his days reading people for a living. "I can go," Tomás said. "Stay. Finish your drink." Silas moved past them toward the door. "Ms. Carter's shift doesn't end for another hour." The door closed behind him. Tomás turned back to Rory. "Ms. Carter. He calls you Ms. Carter." "It's a professional environment." "You're delivering Chinese food and pulling pints in a Soho bar, Rory. What exactly is the profession?" She bristled. Heard Evan in the question, heard her father, heard every voice that had ever asked her what she was doing with her life. Then she heard Tomás beneath them all, the old Tomás, the one who'd genuinely wanted to know. "I'm surviving. It looks different than I thought it would." "Surviving isn't the same as living." "No. But it's a start." He finished his drink. Set the glass down with a soft clink. The green neon outside flickered once, twice, casting his face in alternating shadow and sickly light. "Come to dinner. This week. My flat's in Marylebone, nothing fancy, I just, I want to talk. Properly. Not like this, not across a bar." "I don't know if I can, Tomás." "Wednesday. Seven o'clock. I'll text Eva for your number, since you changed yours." He stood, retrieved his coat. "If you don't show, I'll accept that. But I'll be there." He left a twenty on the bar for a six-pound pint and walked toward the door. At the threshold, he paused. "You were right, by the way. I hate every second of it. The job. The suits. The whole performance." He didn't turn around. "Dad's roadmap doesn't have room for the rescue dog." The door swung shut behind him. The green sign hummed. Rory stood motionless behind the bar, the twenty still warm from his hand, and felt the past three years settle on her shoulders like a coat she'd forgotten she owned. Her phone buzzed. Silas. *Back room. Now. Evan's in London.*
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.215
leniency0.43
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1577
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1577
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"mechanical"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"silence"
2"mechanical"
3"tension"
4"measured"
5"weight"
6"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences100
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences161
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords6
totalWords1577
ratio0.004
matches
0"Back room. Now. Evan's in London."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount956
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Rory12
Cardiff1
Tomás15
Docs1
John1
Batchelor1
Cathays1
Park1
Set2
Evan4
Silas7
Eva3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Tomás"
2"Docs"
3"John"
4"Batchelor"
5"Evan"
6"Silas"
7"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Cathays"
2"Park"
globalScore0.715
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1577
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences161
matches
0"knew that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs87
mean18.13
std17.56
cv0.969
sampleLengths
015
13
232
38
456
51
694
73
823
918
1017
114
1232
1317
149
1525
166
1720
1879
193
204
214
2227
235
2411
2515
2639
272
281
292
3038
3132
327
334
3457
3534
363
374
3816
3931
4036
412
4244
431
4410
4544
466
473
4819
4916
94.74% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences100
matches
0"been grown"
1"was cropped"
2"being seen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs185
matches
0"was doing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences161
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount958
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.032359081419624215
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.010438413361169102
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences161
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences161
mean9.8
std7.43
cv0.759
sampleLengths
015
13
28
313
411
58
63
717
84
922
1010
111
1228
1313
1416
154
1624
179
183
1914
209
2113
225
233
2410
252
262
274
2826
296
306
316
325
339
3415
355
365
376
385
3915
4021
4123
4235
433
444
454
465
471
4821
495
55.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.37267080745341613
totalSentences161
uniqueOpeners60
39.22% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Then she heard Tomás beneath"
ratio0.012
74.12% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences85
matches
0"She crouched behind the bar,"
1"He'd just add it to"
2"She knew that voice."
3"He stood at the bar's"
4"His jaw had sharpened."
5"His hair, once a wild"
6"She stood, depositing the glass"
7"He repeated it like she'd"
8"She heard the shape of"
9"He settled onto a barstool"
10"He took the glass but"
11"His thumb traced the rim."
12"He looked at her then."
13"His gaze dropped to her"
14"He took a sip"
15"She'd been the one to"
16"She'd written the lies, fed"
17"She'd never told him the"
18"He turned the glass in"
19"It cracked the tension, let"
ratio0.365
42.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences85
matches
0"The pint glass hit the"
1"She crouched behind the bar,"
2"Silas would have her hide"
3"He'd just add it to"
4"Rory looked up."
5"The voice tugged at something"
6"She knew that voice."
7"He stood at the bar's"
8"The Tomás she remembered wore"
9"This Tomás wore a charcoal"
10"His jaw had sharpened."
11"His hair, once a wild"
12"She stood, depositing the glass"
13"He repeated it like she'd"
14"She heard the shape of"
15"He settled onto a barstool"
16"Rory reached for a clean"
17"Some things you didn't forget."
18"He took the glass but"
19"His thumb traced the rim."
ratio0.835
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The look he gave her carried weight, the kind of look that said he'd clocked something she hadn't yet."
1"Tomás watched the exchange with the trained attention of someone who spent his days reading people for a living."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.051
leniency0.101
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.025
87.7836%