Run: 2026-06-24-01KVX2YT1NVP02CC9HX24EEAZS

Run Details

Duration:
55.8s
Cost:
$0.009347
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pendant burned against Rory's collarbone. She pressed her palm flat against it through the fabric of her jacket, feeling that deep crimson pulse — slow, steady, insistent, like a second heartbeat synced to something on the other side of the air itself. The Fae-Forged Blade hung cold against her hip, a counterweight of moonsilver that never warmed no matter how long she carried it. "Through here." Nyx's whisper scattered like leaves across still water. They had solidified enough to walk beside her, their violet eyes twin candles in the pre-dawn murk of Richmond Park. Their shadow-form rippled where it met the weak light of the distant streetlamps, edges blurring and re-forming with each step. Isolde walked ahead, leaving no prints in the frost-killed grass. Her silver hair caught nothing of the light and yet seemed to glow anyway, as though the strands carried their own faint luminescence. She moved with the certainty of someone who had made this walk a thousand times before. She probably had. Three hundred years offered that kind of repetition. "The Veil is thin here." Isolde stopped between two ancient oaks that had grown so close together their trunks had fused into a single living archway. Moss climbed the bark in dark-green whorls. "Thinner than last I passed. The solstice approaches." Rory stared at the gap between the oaks. She saw nothing but more parkland beyond — the skeletal shapes of winter trees, a distant bench, the orange smear of London's light pollution against the clouds. "Are you sure—" "Look with more than your eyes, Aurora Carter." She bit back the retort that formed on her tongue. Instead, she reached up and closed her fingers around the Heartstone. The pendant flared. The air between the oaks split open like a wound. Not violently — slowly, a shimmer that built from the edges inward, a distortion that made the parkland beyond waver and dissolve the way heat haze dissolved a horizon. Colors Rory had no names for bled through the gap. The temperature shifted. Frost melted in a ring around the oaks' roots, and the smell of earth gave way to something richer — loam and honey and crushed herbs and wine. "The Grove," Isolde said, and stepped through. Rory's pulse hammered. She looked at Nyx. The Shade tilted their head, a gesture that was almost human in its uncertainty. "I exist between realms. This should not harm me." A pause. "Should not." "Reassuring." She stepped forward before she could talk herself out of it. The crossing felt like walking through a curtain of warm water — pressure on every inch of her skin, a brief moment where sound vanished entirely and her ears filled with a low, resonant hum that vibrated in her molars. Her vision whited out. Two heartbeats. Three. Then the world assembled itself around her. Rory's first breath in the Fae Grove tasted of summer. Not London summer — not petrol and concrete and the stale exhale of eight million people. This was summer distilled to its purest essence: pollen and warm stone and green things growing in wild, unchecked profusion. The air was thick with it, almost syrupy, and she pulled in a second breath before she could stop herself. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in every direction — species she recognized and species she didn't. Bluebells the size of her palm. Tiny golden blooms that chimed faintly when the breeze moved through them. Something tall and violet with petals that spiraled like galaxies, each one rotating on its axis in a slow, hypnotic dance. The clearing stretched wider than the two oaks should have allowed. Richmond Park was behind her, through the archway that now shimmered like a soap film — still visible, still there, but already feeling distant. Impossible. The Grove expanded in every direction, ringed by standing stones she hadn't seen from outside. They were ancient, these stones, worn smooth by time, their surfaces carved with spirals and glyphs that seemed to rearrange themselves when she wasn't looking directly at them. Oak trees grew between the stones, but not like any oaks Rory had ever seen. Their bark was silver-white, their leaves a deep blue-green that rippled with an inner light. The canopy above was dense enough to block most of the sky, but what sky she could see through the gaps was wrong — not London's grey overcast but a deep, crystalline blue scattered with stars, even though it had been nearly dawn on the other side. "That's not our sky." Nyx materialized beside her, their form more solid here than Rory had ever seen it. The shadows that composed them moved with greater definition, sharper at the edges, and their violet eyes burned brighter. They stared upward. "The between-realm reflects what it wishes." Nyx's whisper carried a strange note — longing, perhaps. Recognition. "I remember stars. Before." Rory didn't ask before what. She wasn't sure she wanted to know. Isolde had walked ahead to the center of the clearing, where a natural spring welled up from the ground and fed a small pool. The water was impossibly clear, impossibly blue, and reflected that alien sky back with perfect fidelity. The Seer knelt at its edge, silver hair pooling on the ground around her like spilled moonlight. "Come. Both of you." Rory picked her way through the wildflowers. The ground was soft beneath her boots, springy, alive. Something small and winged darted past her ear — not an insect, not a bird. Something in between, with a body like a glowing ember and wings like stained glass. It hovered near her face for a moment, studying her with what might have been curiosity, then vanished into the canopy. The Fae-Forged Blade stayed cold at her hip. Whatever enchantments guarded this place, they weren't triggering the weapon's defensive properties. That was either a good sign or a very convincing trap. She reached the pool and knelt across from Isolde. The water was so clear she could see the bottom — smooth stones, pale sand, and something that looked like roots radiating outward from the spring's center in concentric circles, pulsing with a faint green-gold light. The roots of the Grove itself, maybe. The roots of something old and vast and patient. "The Veil weakens." Isolde trailed her fingertips across the surface of the pool. Ripples spread outward, but instead of distorting the reflection, they revealed something else — images, layered and shifting. A sky the color of warm amber. Vineyards stretching to a horizon that curved wrong. Tables groaning under the weight of food that looked beautiful and obscene in equal measure. "Dymas presses against the boundary. Your pendant confirms it." Rory looked down. The Heartstone was glowing now — not the faint pulse she'd grown used to but a steady, deep crimson radiance that threw red light across her hands and the stones beneath her. "How long?" Isolde withdrew her hand from the water. The images dissolved. "The solstice is days away. The Veil will not hold where it has already thinned. A door will open." "Here?" "Here. Elsewhere. Wherever the fabric is weakest." Isolde's pale lavender eyes lifted to meet Rory's. The Seer's expression carried the weight of three centuries. "You asked me to show you the path. This is the path. Whether you walk it is not mine to command." Nyx crouched at the edge of the pool, staring into its depths. Their shadow-form rippled, and for a moment Rory saw something beneath the surface of their silhouette — a hint of bone, of human structure, of the sorcerer named Aldric who had been lost between realms nearly four hundred years ago. "Dymas," Nyx whispered, and the word carried the weight of memory. "I have been there. In the between, I have brushed against its borders. The Prince does not welcome guests. He collects them." A chill ran through Rory that had nothing to do with the Grove's temperature. She wrapped her fingers around the pendant, feeling its heat against her palm, and watched the wildflowers turn their faces toward her — all of them, simultaneously, like a field of tiny observers. The Grove was beautiful. The Grove was alien. The Grove was watching her decide. She looked back at the shimmering archway between the oaks. London. Her flat above Silas' bar. Her delivery routes. The life she'd built out of rubble and escape. Then she looked down at the pool, where the amber sky of Dymas still ghosted across the surface like a promise or a warning. "What do we need to prepare?"
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx's whisper scattered like [like]"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.609
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.087
92.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1413
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.38% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1413
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"vibrated"
count1
3
word"dance"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"crystalline"
count1
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"carried the weight"
count2
9
word"depths"
count1
10
word"structure"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"whisper"
2"vibrated"
3"dance"
4"shimmered"
5"crystalline"
6"perfect"
7"weight"
8"carried the weight"
9"depths"
10"structure"
11"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
98.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences97
filterMatches
0"decide"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1429
ratio0
matches(empty)
83.33% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Ripples spread outward, but instead of distorting the reflection, they revealed something else — images, layered and shi…"
98.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1257
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Rory13
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Richmond2
Park2
Moss1
London4
Isolde8
Nyx6
Shade1
Fae3
Grove7
Recognition1
Seer2
Ripples1
Aldric1
Dymas1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Blade"
2"Moss"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
5"Shade"
6"Seer"
7"Dymas"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
globalScore0.983
windowScore1
51.32% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like walking through a curtain of"
1"glyphs that seemed to rearrange themselves when she wasn't looking directly at them"
2"looked like roots radiating outward from"
60.04% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.4
wordCount1429
matches
0"not London's grey overcast but a deep, crystalline blue scattered with stars, even though i"
1"not the faint pulse she'd grown used to but a steady, deep crimson radiance"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences112
matches
0"offered that kind"
1"reflected that alien"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean31.76
std24.3
cv0.765
sampleLengths
07
159
250
360
441
535
63
78
821
93
1080
117
127
1327
141
1511
1647
177
1810
1956
2054
2179
2277
234
2437
2520
2612
2757
284
2967
3031
3161
3270
3335
342
3529
361
3745
3852
3933
4047
4114
4228
4324
446
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"been lost"
55.07% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs184
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"weren't triggering"
2"was glowing"
3"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences112
ratio0.134
matches
0"She pressed her palm flat against it through the fabric of her jacket, feeling that deep crimson pulse — slow, steady, insistent, like a second heartbeat synced to something on the other side of the air itself."
1"She saw nothing but more parkland beyond — the skeletal shapes of winter trees, a distant bench, the orange smear of London's light pollution against the clouds."
2"Not violently — slowly, a shimmer that built from the edges inward, a distortion that made the parkland beyond waver and dissolve the way heat haze dissolved a horizon."
3"The crossing felt like walking through a curtain of warm water — pressure on every inch of her skin, a brief moment where sound vanished entirely and her ears filled with a low, resonant hum that vibrated in her molars."
4"Not London summer — not petrol and concrete and the stale exhale of eight million people."
5"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in every direction — species she recognized and species she didn't."
6"Richmond Park was behind her, through the archway that now shimmered like a soap film — still visible, still there, but already feeling distant."
7"The canopy above was dense enough to block most of the sky, but what sky she could see through the gaps was wrong — not London's grey overcast but a deep, crystalline blue scattered with stars, even though it had been nearly dawn on the other side."
8"\"The between-realm reflects what it wishes.\" Nyx's whisper carried a strange note — longing, perhaps."
9"Something small and winged darted past her ear — not an insect, not a bird."
10"The water was so clear she could see the bottom — smooth stones, pale sand, and something that looked like roots radiating outward from the spring's center in concentric circles, pulsing with a faint green-gold light."
11"Ripples spread outward, but instead of distorting the reflection, they revealed something else — images, layered and shifting."
12"The Heartstone was glowing now — not the faint pulse she'd grown used to but a steady, deep crimson radiance that threw red light across her hands and the stones beneath her."
13"Their shadow-form rippled, and for a moment Rory saw something beneath the surface of their silhouette — a hint of bone, of human structure, of the sorcerer named Aldric who had been lost between realms nearly four hundred years ago."
14"She wrapped her fingers around the pendant, feeling its heat against her palm, and watched the wildflowers turn their faces toward her — all of them, simultaneously, like a field of tiny observers."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount412
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slow, steady, insistent, like"
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.03155339805825243
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.007281553398058253
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean12.76
std9.62
cv0.754
sampleLengths
07
137
222
310
420
520
610
723
816
93
108
1126
127
138
148
1527
163
178
1810
1911
203
2110
2229
2310
243
2528
267
273
284
2914
3011
312
321
3311
3440
354
362
371
387
3910
4016
4120
4220
4315
446
4512
4621
4711
4824
491
57.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4107142857142857
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences91
matches
0"Instead, she reached up and"
1"Then the world assembled itself"
2"Then she looked down at"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences91
matches
0"She pressed her palm flat"
1"They had solidified enough to"
2"Their shadow-form rippled where it"
3"Her silver hair caught nothing"
4"She moved with the certainty"
5"She probably had."
6"She saw nothing but more"
7"She bit back the retort"
8"She looked at Nyx."
9"She stepped forward before she"
10"Her vision whited out."
11"They were ancient, these stones,"
12"Their bark was silver-white, their"
13"They stared upward."
14"She wasn't sure she wanted"
15"It hovered near her face"
16"She reached the pool and"
17"Their shadow-form rippled, and for"
18"She wrapped her fingers around"
19"She looked back at the"
ratio0.242
3.96% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences91
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant burned against"
1"She pressed her palm flat"
2"The Fae-Forged Blade hung cold"
3"Nyx's whisper scattered like leaves"
4"They had solidified enough to"
5"Their shadow-form rippled where it"
6"Isolde walked ahead, leaving no"
7"Her silver hair caught nothing"
8"She moved with the certainty"
9"She probably had."
10"Isolde stopped between two ancient"
11"Moss climbed the bark in"
12"Rory stared at the gap"
13"She saw nothing but more"
14"She bit back the retort"
15"The pendant flared."
16"The air between the oaks"
17"Colors Rory had no names"
18"The temperature shifted."
19"Isolde said, and stepped through"
ratio0.912
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Her silver hair caught nothing of the light and yet seemed to glow anyway, as though the strands carried their own faint luminescence."
1"Not violently — slowly, a shimmer that built from the edges inward, a distortion that made the parkland beyond waver and dissolve the way heat haze dissolved a …"
2"The Shade tilted their head, a gesture that was almost human in its uncertainty."
3"The crossing felt like walking through a curtain of warm water — pressure on every inch of her skin, a brief moment where sound vanished entirely and her ears f…"
4"Something tall and violet with petals that spiraled like galaxies, each one rotating on its axis in a slow, hypnotic dance."
5"They were ancient, these stones, worn smooth by time, their surfaces carved with spirals and glyphs that seemed to rearrange themselves when she wasn't looking …"
6"The shadows that composed them moved with greater definition, sharper at the edges, and their violet eyes burned brighter."
7"The water was so clear she could see the bottom — smooth stones, pale sand, and something that looked like roots radiating outward from the spring's center in c…"
8"Tables groaning under the weight of food that looked beautiful and obscene in equal measure."
9"The Heartstone was glowing now — not the faint pulse she'd grown used to but a steady, deep crimson radiance that threw red light across her hands and the stone…"
10"Their shadow-form rippled, and for a moment Rory saw something beneath the surface of their silhouette — a hint of bone, of human structure, of the sorcerer nam…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx's whisper carried, perhaps"
1"Nyx whispered, and the word carried the weight of memory"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.087
leniency0.174
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.087
74.6243%